SimonP

Hello! I'm tawny_0wl and I'm critiquing your work today!

LINES

Superimposed Lines: Your lines wobble a bit, but I see improvement on the second page.

Fraying on one side of the superimposed lines is normal, so don't worry about it too much for now. If you keep practicing your accuracy will improve over time.

Don't forget to employ the ghosting method.

Ghosted Lines: Lines look more confident, nice work!

Ghosted Planes: Looking good!

ELLIPSES

Tables of Ellipses: Some ellipses are a bit wobbly/pointy, but they fit snugly enough against the borders.

There's already a visible improvement on the second page, but I'll still remind you to draw from your shoulder as it helps you draw smother shapes.

Ellipses in Planes: Your ellipses look better and more consistent with each page.

Funnels: I see one or two ellipses not aligned to the minor axis line. It's not that big of a problem; it's just something to watch out for next time you do this exercise.

Other than that, I recommend you widen the ellipses even more as you move away from the center of the funnel and don't be afraid to overlap, it's better than going off the page.

BOXES

Plotted Perspective: Some verticals are not perpendicular to the horizon, but, otherwise, solid work. Make sure you take your time and position your ruler correctly.

Rough Perspective: Line extensions are done correctly, back and front faces are rectangular for the most part.

It's a well-executed exercise, I hope you used the ghosting method through it.

Rotated Boxes: Uff, I feel your pain. I wasn't too enthusiastic about this exercise when I first started.

This looks fine for the most part except I noticed you sometimes don't use the neighbouring plane as a guide..

I drew over the boxes in question with red so you can see what I mean. (1)

Organic Perspective: It's looking good, my only suggestion is to make the boxes smaller as they move farther away from the viewer.

Hello I'm Lakshyan, a member of the Drawabox community, and I'm here to evaluate your submission for Lesson 1. Overall, you seem to have done a great job and ready to move on; there are just a few pointers I'd like to give you for the next time you use these exercises for your warm-up:

Superimposed Lines:

You traced some pretty straight lines, while managing to fix the fraying on the initial point.

Some lines, however, present some minor wobbling: to fix this, you can try focusing only on the end point from the first moment of executing stroke;

Tables of Ellipses:

You drew the ellipses, so that they fit snugly against the borders of the table. The only problem I can see is that they're a bit uneven; one way I can suggest to correct this is to, in the preparation phase (the one where you're ghosting the ellipse), continue ghosting until ellipse looks somewhat right. I know you're capable of this, since you managed to make some pretty confident ellipses in the Ellipsed in Planes exercise!;

Funnels:

You executed this exercise perfectly; if you want a bigger challenge, you can make the ellipses' minor axis gradually bigger as you get farther from the middle line;

The rest of the exercises have no apparent errors, and have errors that can only be corrected with more practice, which I hope you'll continue to do when doing the 250 boxes challenge. Congratulations on finishing Lesson 1 and good luck out there!

Good stuff. The longest superimposed lines could do with a bit more practice to improve accuracy in the future

So, I'll be grading your homework today.

Superimposed Lines: I see a lot of fraying on both sides here on the first page, but your second is better. The curving lines on both look great. Your lines aren’t wobbly either. Overall, you did a good job here.

Ghosted Lines: No arcing or wobbling to be found here. Again, good job.

Ellipses in Planes: You have some lines that wobble a bit, but they’re fine for the most part. Your ellipses don't quite touch all sides, but that's an accuracy thing that'll resolve with practice.

Tables of Ellipses: These all look good too. Drawn through twice like Uncomfortable asked, fitting snugly in the box for the most part, and none are wobbly. Some are drawn through a bit more than they need to be though. Two or three times is all we need. Otherwise, it starts to look messy. Still, good.

Funnels: Your ellipses align with the minor axis for the most part. In a few places, they overlap one another, but that’s because you draw through a lot. Besides that, they touch like they’re supposed to pretty consistently. These are also good.

Plotted Perspective: These look great. I see nothing wrong here.

Rough Perspective: Also looks really great. Your width lines are parallel with the horizon for the most part and your height lines are perpendicular with it as well. And your other lines go right back where they're supposed to. No guesswork going on here.

Rotated Boxes: This one here is amazing! Your boxes are drawn through, rotating incredibly well, and you kept them close together. You absolutely knocked it out of the park with this one, especially with how difficult this exercise is.

Organic Perspective: It looks like you got your line weight backwards a bit for some of these, but that’s alright. Your boxes don’t look bad and they shrink with distance. So these are good too.

I’d say you’re ready for the 250 box challenge

Hello there! My name is VnCaheo, and congratulation on completing your works! Now I'll deliver my critique.

Lines

Most of the superimposed lines wobbled a lot at first, but on the second page you got a majority of their trajectory straight, which is an improvement. Some still waver at the beginning and the end, however. Try to only focused at the end point and draw confidently. Don't let your instinct steer the line aways. Furthermore, some of your lines fray a bit on both sides. Taking a bit more time in determining the first point would fix this.

The ghosted lines also wobble. You might be hesitating in executing your lines after you put the pen down. To quote the guide:

the moment the pen touches the page, any opportunity to avoid a mistake has passed.

Don't worry about this, though. By practising, you will be able to improve the confidence in your lines. Put your effort into planning the line and executing it will help with the confidence, with accuracy coming later. I'd say you haven't quite reached level 1 here yet, but we'll see to the quality of your lines in later exercises.

Your ghosted planes have much better line quality than before. They have better trajectory and mostly only miss the mark or overshoot.

Ellipses

For ellipses in tables, you remembered to draw through them twice or thrice. However, some of the lines end before they reach two cycles, so you should revise on that. Don't worry if it overshoots, just draw through them twice. Another thing is that you should try to fit your ellipses snuggly with each other, leaving no gap in-between and with the tables. This is one of the aims of this task so you should focus on it as your next improvement the next time you do this as warm-up.

The ellipses are smooth, a bit uneven but sufficiently executed. The same can be said for ellipses in planes, where the circles are done to satisfaction. You also remembered to make them touch the corner of the planes. Some might not hit the mark, but that's the way to go

in the funnel homework, you remembered to make the ellipses touch the borders of the funnels and make them align with the central minor axis. The funnels only point in one direction so next time, you should vary their direction and length. Furthermore, you should make the two sides of the funnels equidistant, making them half and half.

Boxes

You remembered to use a ruler for the plotted perspective and make the vertical lines perpendicular. however, you seem to have trouble distinguishing between the massive number of lines and accidentally marked the wrong back lines for the boxes. This is no issue, but you should take more time determining which extension line is for which box.

For rough perspective, you followed all the steps to satisfaction. You don't hit the Vanishing point just yet, and the freehanded lines wobble as well, but you will improve as time goes on.

Rotated boxes, the most challenging task, is also done to the best of your ability. One minor suggestion is that you should finish the lines of the boxes in the very corners, and hatch the gap between boxes to make them more distinguishable. All in all, you followed the instruction and carried out the task successfully

Organic perspective was also well-executed. the ghosted lines are much more confident, and you also understood how to converge the lines without leaning into extreme foreshortening. A small proposal is that you should add more boxes that are off the given track to create more variations, as well as making the boxes vary their size more.

Hello! My name is VnCaheo. Nice to meet you and congratulations on finishing your first exercise! I will now deliver my critique of your works.

This is a minor thing but you should take photos of your works horizontally. It'd make the process of judging and feedbacking a bit easier for us. Anyway....

Superimposed lines

There is no fraying on both sides, which means you took your time with executing the lines. You varied the length of your lines a lot as well, and for a majority of short lines, you did a great job with very minor wobbling. It became more noticable with the longer ones but that is no problem.

Ghosted lines

A majority of your lines were executed with confident, as they are straight and shoot straight to the target. Many miss the mark and overshoot a bit, but it's no big deal. One issue I notice, though, is that your lines tend to curve a bit as they depart from the original points or nearly hit the target, which is something you should repress. Stick to your gun! (or line, in this case). You only need to execute your lines confidently at this point, which you can already do well. Overall, you have reached level 1 of ghosting lines and are between the threshold of level 1 and 2.

Ghosted planes

So! uh, I can't seem to find the two pages of ghosted planes. Perhaps you forgot to do them, submit them, or, I assume, you used them for the Ellipses in planes homework. In any case, you gotta submit the 2 filled pages of ghosted planes, so that'll be included in your revision.

Ellipses in tables

You did very well, as the ellipses are mostly smoothly drawn through twice or thrice (twice is preferred, though). They also try to fit snuggly with each other and leave no huge gap. Some circles that you drew seem to cause trouble, but this is greatly executed. You can improve on your ability to draw much more even ellipses next.

Ellipses in planes

You drew through the ellipses twice. the planes don't have recurring problems from the ghosted lines exercises, and you also tried to make the ellipses touch the four corners of the planes, which meets the requirement of the exercise.

Funnels

Most ellipses you drew touch the corner of the corner, and some align with the central minor axis. It doesn't seem like you tried to correct those that didn't align though, which is something you should keep in mind while doing this exercise.

Plotted perspective

You used a ruler to do this exercise, and plotted the lines back to the vanishing points. However, you should remember that you gotta draw the vertical edges perpendicularly. Most of your vertical lines don't seem to be perpendicular, which could cause problems as you get into drawing the backline and plot things back. This exercise is sufficiently done but remind yourself of taking your time and planning your lines

Rough perspective

You ghosted your boxes. and it didn't look like you struggled with the two faces of the boxes. You also extended your lines back to the Vanishing point. At first you extended you lines through the horizon line, which made it look really messy, but you corrected it later, which is grealy appreciated. Overall, there were attempts to hit the Vanishing point, which is the main target of the exercise

Rotated boxes

The most challenging homework of all. You went through all the steps and also tried to draw all the boxes available. The boxes in the very corner were missing some lines, though, so you could remind yourself to add these.

Organic perspective

For this exercise, you ghosted your boxes and also tried to make them converge. One detail I commend is you not making the foreshortening too drastic (something a LOT of people do, including me, for this task), which means you understood the assignment. Two things to note, however. Firstly, some of your lines converge were parallel. see Here. Although less dramatic convergence is recommended, you should determine whether this is the case or not. Secondly, you should never repeatedly draw many lines for one corner of the box. There should only be one ghosted line. One decisive line, no more, no less.

Hello, I will only tell you possible things to improve, if I do not mention it it is because I consider that you tried to meet the requirements of the task.

By the way, English is not my native language, forgive the grammatical errors.

ellipse table: I think you lack smoothness, with more planning time with the ghost method and drawing from the shoulder you could improve, maybe you are going too slow because you are trying to be perfect, but don't sacrifice smoothness for that.

ellipses in planes: here you improved the smoothness, I suppose because you do it with more confidence, I would tell you to make the stroke faster so that it is smoother.

rotated boxes: I think you only drew 3 boxes per corner, there are 4 boxes, so you would need to draw those last 4 boxes, one for each corner. No need to repeat the page, just complete it.

That's it, I think you understand the main idea of this pretty well. I suppose you lack fluidity in your stroke but it is something that you will develop over time, in my opinion you are ready to take the next step, good luck with that :D

Looks good, feel free to move on.

Nice job getting through all these, it's quite a task. Your lines look smooth and you're perspective may not be perfect yet, nobody's is, but the work in the boxes show improvement and conscious thought into getting it right.

One small critique I do have though; I know it was optional to do so, but I like the visual of the crosshatching on one side to show front vs back. You don't need to redo anything but I figured I'd mention it.

Again, great work and good luck with the next lessons!

I think you're really close to moving on, but you may want to consider doing a few more pages and finishing the pages you didn't quite finish.

First and foremost, I can see great improvement in your understanding of depth, as well as your control on creating straight lines as the challenge progressed. Good work.

In several of the first 50 boxes though, you're missing the back corner. Drawing that back corner helps to get more practice with perspective as well as create the illusion of 3D space.

Also, all throughout the lesson you only trace with color three sides of each dimension of the box, not four. Maybe this stemmed from not drawing all four sides for a while? This could be why some of you back corners doen't always look in the right place; you didn't trace the lines off the back corner.

So again, there is more than enough work here to see a clear improvement of both control and understanding. But really nailing down how the back corner of the box should be drawn, by doing a few more pages, tracing in color the back corner of your existing work, and adding the back corner to some of your existing work, I think should be done before moving on.

Nice job, and congrats on finishing all those boxes!

Hi Marb, I'm Serkas and I would like to give a critique to your homework. Since this will be my first critique in Drawabox, feel free to ask me anything, if you've questions about my comments. So let's begin:

Superimposed Lines

There is quite a bit of progress visible, over the course of your exercise. Some of your lines show a lot of fraying on both ends, which could be a sign that you try to rush through them. Remember to take your time, as the goal of this exercise is to create a confident and accurate line. A fraying endpoint is completely understandable, as no one can hit the same line perfectly in succession, right from the start. But take your time to place your pen and then pull through with confidence, like you did with the shorter lines on your first page. These look very good. The wobbling will improve over time, as you get a feel for the movement and train to draw from your shoulder.

Ghosted Lines

Most of your ghosted lines look very good and are well executed. They hit both points and are straight and clear. A few on the second page are curving, which hints at a line made from your elbow or wrist, rather than your shoulder, but you seem to understand the point of this exercise quite well.

Ghosted Planes

I don't have a lot to add here, as your planes are nicely executed and show a variety of shapes and angles. Nice work. The slight wobble of some of the lines will improve, once you do these warm-ups more frequently and take your time with the drawing process.

Tables of Ellipses

You distributed your ellipses perfectly and used the space in your boxes to its fullest. Most of them are drawn through multiple times, however, I noticed a few smaller ones on the second page are only one layer, especially the smaller "filler" circles at the edges. Keep in mind that the goal of this exercise isn't to get a page full of shapes, but rather to train the process of forming them. So take a little time to do those extra laps around each ellipses, to get the movements into your muscle memory.

Ellipses in Planes

Not a lot to add here, these are wonderfully done. Almost all of them touch the edges of the planes, they are drawn through multiple times and you took care to allign them properly. Amazing work.

Funnels

You took care to place your ellipses evenly and let them touch the confines of their funnels nice and snug, but a few of them are drawn through only once. Again, the repetition is part of the learning process and shouldn't be ignored, even if it seems tedious at times. But they are also nicely arranged around your central axis, so I would say your grasped the core of this exercise.

Plotted Perspective

All of these are wonderfully done: Your vertical lines are all perpendicular to the horizon, you varied the shapes and sizes, and your plotted all of their edges back to their vanishing points. Great job. The only thing that I noticed here is a minor one. Your cross hatching looks quite rushed and aimless. As mentioned in one of the videos to this segment, the point of the cross hatching is to highlight one of the sides, that is visible by the viewer, and to show the visible surface of the box it belongs to, so that you get a better understanding of what boxes are in the foreground, and which ones are layered behind them. IF your want to do the cross hatching (it isn't mandatory in most exercises), you should give it the time and effort it needs.

Rough Perspective

Now these seem to vary a bit in their quality and accuracy. All in all, you got the point of this section and kept to the criteria of the exercise. But many of your lines here are curved and wobbly, which results in some skewed edges and boxes (Second page, middle segment, the three boxes above the VP are a good example of this). This in turn leads to some faces of the boxes turning into trapezoids or different shapes, adding to the inaccuracies later on. A few ghosting warm-ups could help you improve on the line making, which would aid in the later formation of your boxes. But thats nothing that can't be improved with a bit more practice, so I'd say this ones a success as well.

Rotated Boxes

The lone boxes to the side should be done with a ruler and form a complete square. It may be a nitpick, I'm not sure, but I figured I'd mention it here, as they are supposed to help you with the rest of your boxes, as a point of reference for the size of your boxes. As stated in the video to this exercise, these are supposed to be boxes, that are rotated 90°, so that their respective sides are facing you, instead of the front from the central box.

The spaces in between your boxes are tight and consistent, well done. However, I noticed one issue: the outer, diagonal boxes on the edges of the whole structure (as in: top left, top right, bottom left, bottom right) seem to be missing their "inner" edges. I'm talking about the edges, that are located on the side opposite of the viewer, which should be drawn through the box. The overall result is still very well done, and one has to consider, that this is possibly the hardest challenge so far. You understood what you were supposed to do and improved upon the earlier tasks, thats the most important aspect.

Organic Perspective

Again, as with some of your earlier works, your ghosting could use a little more training. Some of the lines overshoot/undershoot their end points, and some are wobbly or even curved. But there is also a clear trend of improvement visible, in perspective to some earlier exercises. The foreshortening is very nice, and your boxes display a good progression in their sizes and rotations. The exercise is a success as a whole, but I can't help but notice the cross hatching again, which gives your boxes a certain "prison cell" look.

In the end, I'd say that you proved with your exercises that you learned quite a bit, and I don't see a reason why you shouldn't continue on to the next lesson. Keep in mind to add these trainings to your pool of warm-ups, as they will help you in the sections ahead. You can move on to the 250 box challenge, which will test many of the skills you've learned so far, and add a good chunk of new ones on top. Oh, and don't forget your 50% artworks as well, have fun.