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Hi, thanks for the crit!

Regarding the lineweight, I tried to ghost and do another line on top properly, however I feel that it doesn't make a huge difference. That is to say, the line doesn't get that much darker when I draw over it again with my .5 ink pen. Maybe I just need to press the tip down harder, or do the movement slower so more ink gets dispersed? I have a brush pen as well, but I don't think you're allowed to use it for lineweight so I avoided it.

I will try to do some textures in my warmups. Its hard to add details that wrap around the form properly, so doing some texture sausage might help.

Hi, congrats on finishing L1.

Looking at your circles, I noticed that many of your ovals are floating. Make sure that they're touching each other and not just floating around.

I also noticed that you're redrawing some of the lines on your boxes. When making a line, have confidence and do it in one clean stroke. Even if its wrong, you shouldn't go back and try to fix it. Just continue on the box even if some of the lines uneven or have a bad angle.

Congrats on finishing, here is my critique:

On the ghosted lines, you shouldn't really deviate from the starting point. Make sure your pen tip lines up with the dot you're drawing from. Its fine if you deviate from your destination, but not your starting point.

You didn't need to make 2 new pages of ghosted planes to put the circles in, but no big deal.

I notice that you have a lot of uneven/squiggly lines on your planes and boxes in general. Make sure you're taking the time to use the ghosting method for every line. I know its hard to get used to, but take the time you need and do not rush.

I am going to mark this as complete, but I suggest either doing another page or 2 of ghosted lines, or doing them during most of your warmups, for now.

Hi, congrats on finishing lesson 1.

Looking at your superimposed lines, you've made a good effort, but I can see you are having trouble with the longer lines. I would suggest working your way up and trying to get down shorter lines before trying really long ones. Your ghosted lines are a bit curved, but keep practising drawing from your shoulder and you should improve.

Your ellipses look good, just remember that on the funnels exercise, make sure that the centerline cuts the ellipses in half.

On your rough perspective boxes, some you seem to have gone over some lines multiple times, however the organic perspective does not have this problem. This suggests that you figured it out, but I'll mention it anyway; do not redo your lines, just draw them confidently once and move on even if you made a mistake.

Overall good work, keep practicing through warmups and move on to 250 boxes.

Hiya, good job finishing, here is my critique.

Your lines look confident, which is good, however they are arched. This means that you should be careful about drawing with your shoulder, as mentioned in lesson 0, make sure you're using your shoulder as the pivot point when making lines.

Your ellipses look fine, you're drawing through them 2-3 times and trying to make sure they connect snuggly to their surroundings.

On your boxes I can see that you're drawing your lines multiple times, trying to fix your mistake from the first try. Don't do that, just make a confident line the first time and even if it isn't angled correctly, don't go back and try to fix it. Make sure to ghost your lines when you're adding lineweight as well.

Your rotated boxes exercise is not done the way it should. Look at how its done in the homework page. The boxes should be rotating more sharply in a way that makes it appear behind the previous box. I would advise you to reread the part about rotated boxes.

Hi, here is my critique:

Ghosted lines: Looking a little wobbly. You should prioritize confident lines over accuracy, so try to do them a little faster so that they are more even, even if you miss more often.

Ellipses are looking good mostly, however on the funnels, remember that the centerline of the funnel should cut each circle in half. Try to keep that in mind.

Your boxes look ok, though they have the same problem with wobbly lines, as mentioned. Not all of your lines converge towards the vanishing point, but this isn't easy and you will get more practice when doing the 250 box challenge.

Good job and good luck going forwards!

https://imgur.com/a/O9Hzuig

Thanks for the critique, here is the extra pages. I find it a bit hard to make smooth branches, since I have to draw them segmented, but I think I improved somewhat

Hi, sorry for the late reply. Her are the new pages: https://imgur.com/a/O9Hzuig

I find it a bit difficult to keep my branches smooth since I have to draw them segmented, but I think it improved somewhat.

Thanks, I will keep these critiques in mind when I practice these exercises during warmups.

Hi, so the key with ellipses is really just to do them over and over again. With lesson 1 finished make sure to take some time before drawing each day to practice these exercises and you'll improve over time. You'll get more mileage out of each ellipse by drawing through once or twice. Don't worry about the organic perspective as its a difficult exercise that you're not expected to get right the 1st time. About turning boxes in space, it can be helpful to start with an "Y" to determine the 3 axes. This'll make it easier to plan your box the way you want it. Don't be afraid to reread the theory (often takes a few rereads to really get it) and you'll get more practice through the 250box challenge.