ShyPenguin

Dimensional Dominator

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    1:49 PM, Sunday April 23rd 2023

    Firstly: Please do not use lined paper for drawabox!!!!!

    Lines:

    For superimposed lines, your lines do fray a bit more on both ends than I would expect, but otherwise things look good here.

    Your lines are very straight, with little wobbling.

    It does look like you went over some lines more than once, which is not something you're supposed to do in drawabox.

    Ellipses:

    Looks good overall.

    Sometimes you miss one side of the container you're trying to draw the ellipse in, but you're good about hitting the other three. Your ellipses are very smooth.

    Your ellipses should be touching in funnels, and they are not. I think it's also helpful and fun to increase the degree of your ellipses as they move away from the center. This was optional in the homework, so I'm not going to say you needed to do this.

    Boxes:

    The lines you traced back in rough perspective go WAY further than they need to. Stop plotting them when you get to the horizon, and the image becomes so much more readable. Looks like you did better on this on the second page.

    Your rotated boxes are quite good, although there are no guides on the outside of the spokes and your boxes are a bit far away from each other (the gaps should be narrower). It's also important to the exercise to use the sides of neighboring boxes as guides, and place the vertices of your new box close to the vertices of the old box. This would help with how some boxes (like that one in the top left) look out of place.

    In organic perspective, your boxes themselves look good, but you're redoing lines like CRAZY. That's no good for this course. You could also stand to vary your scale more from the start of your liune to the finish.

    Overall good, but the lined paper is a real problem that needs to go before you do more stuff. Keep ghosting lines, and don't repeat them.

    Next Steps:

    -Get different paper

    -Optionally, one more sheet of organic perspective without redrawing lines (and on different paper!)

    -250 box challenge

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    12:30 AM, Friday June 4th 2021

    Grats on getting started!

    The two most glaring things were that you didn't cover much of the second page for the funnel exercise and drew a few hovering ellipses in part of the empty space, and that you redid lines you didn't like many times throughout the exercises, sometimes the same line over and over again.

    Next Steps:

    I would say redo Rotated Boxes and Organic Perspective because there's a lot of scratchiness. plot and ghost your lines, then hit them once and stick with what you get. Draw boxes as part of your warmups focusing on one-and-done lines and confidence. And a complete second page of funnels with ellipses, no floating ones, and then post here when complete :)

    When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
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