shortsnsherbert

Starting with your arrows, you are doing a good job having them turn in space. You are also doing a good job of having them go from larger to smaller as. they go back in space. The way you have tapered them towards the back helps to sell the illusion. Make sure to draw your lines confidently, for each line make one confident, smooth, and fluid mark. There are a few spots where your lines get a big wobly. Also, there are a few spots where you added line weight and it wasn't needed. Try to add line weight subtly and very intentionally, only on areas where you are trying to mark out which line is in front, so for this exercise that would be on all the spots where the ribbon crosses over itself, at the curves.

For the organic forms and contour elipses, you did a great job making confident marks on this one. In general you also did a good job angling your elipses, so that the edge of the elipse and the edge of the organic form hit at the right spot, or in other words, the elipse is centered well. One thing to work on would be the size of your elipses. There are a few spots where the size of the elipse is a bit off and it breaks the illusion of a 3D mass on the page. Like in the lesson, think about a coin in space and how it get bigger or smaller depending on your vantage point.

For the organic forms and contour lines you did a good job making confident marks and in placing the center line. You also did great at curving your contour lines at the ends. One thing to work on would be that your contour lines get flat in the middle, so the form doesn't look rounded in those areas but flat.

Your texture analysis looks good. For your textures on organic forms, you did a good job on most of them in leaving some areas lighter and implying the texture there. I would recommend when looking at the reference, look very closely and observe the shapes and details of the cast shadows. Don't draw more than a few seconds before you look back at the reference photo.

On your intersecting boxes and shapes, your boxes are looking good and believable, they appear as if the lines are aimed towards the same vanishing points. Your other 3D forms are also looking good. You did a good job placing the intersection lines within the area that the boxes and forms overlap each other, but within that area they seem to be placed randomly. Think about the different planes on the forms and how they intersect with each other.

Your intersecting organic forms look good. You seem to have gotten the idea down. Most of them look good as far as selling illusion that they are wrapped over the forms beneath them. One thing to work on would be the shadow placement. On a few of them, where the shadow lands would cross multiple different forms, but you have one straight shadow line, as if it were just one flat surface that the shadow is cast onto. Consider how the shadow would change as it landed on different forms that are at different angles to and distance from the form that is casting the shadow.

Hi,

The lines exercise looks great. It seems like you get the concept well. With time and practice, eventually it'll get easier to hit the mark, but for now they look good. One thing to note is to start your mark while you are in motion and to end the park, pick up your pen instead of stopping, so that the ends of the line aren't thicker than the middle. It looks like you have done that for most of them, but there are a few that look like at the end the ink piled up a bit. The other line exercises look great, good job!

The elpises in the boxes looks good too. The only thing I notice is sometimes the elipse goes past the box boundary, but with time and practice that'll improve. The elipses look very confident though. Great mark making!

The table of elpises looks great. The first three rows are a little choppy and you didn't draw through your elipses twice, but the rest of them look great. The second page looks good, great job trying out different angles and elipse sizes.

The elipse tunnels look good, it seems you really got the concept. I don't really have any critique on that one.

Perspective-wise the cube exercises look good. You understood the concept well, and by doing the 250 box challenge that'll help you with accuracy. The only ting is the lines aren't as confident as your previous work.

For the cubes in a sphere exercise, the first row around look good, then that last row flares out a bit and doesn't curve in.

In the cubes in space exercise you did a great job making some boxes seem closer and some further away. That exercise looks pretty good. With the 250 box exercise you're boxes will improve.

I think you've got the concepts from this lesson down really well.

Hi,

So this is my first critique and I'm going to try my best based on the official critique I received for this lesson.

On the arrows ribbons, the shading at the curves looks nice to me. One thing to note is the ribbon/arrow is supposed to get smaller as it goes further back in space, helping the illusion of 3D space. The ones that bend over themselves look really nice and I think give the impression of going back into space. The ones that didn't quite give the illusion were the ones that didn't bend over themselves. Also, something to consider is instead of going over the lines more than once, try to just get one fluid line for each mark you make and leave it at that.

The organic forms with the contour elipses and curves look really nice, especially the second one. You seem to have really understood that concept and in my opinion you've done super well on making them feel like they have mass.

The texture exercise looks good too. The only thing is that from the lesson he talked about implying the texture, which you did really well on the first page of texture, where it goes from dark to light, but on the organic forms I only see you using that technique a few times. Other than that, I think they do look accurate to the texture they are supposed to represent.

The form intersections look good. One thing I found helpful was when adding the line that shows where the intersection happens, make sure that line goes with the other lines on that plane/side of the box, as if it would lead to the same vanishing point. Most of them look great, but the one on the bottom right of the box intersections is a bit off on that.

The other form intersection pages look great. It seems you have really gotten the concept down. The only thing I would recommend is trying to have just one confident mark for each line you want to make, instead of going over it a few times. When adding line weight to make the intersection clear, use it subtly.

The organic intersection looks good, again, you really showed the objects having mass, which is great. The shadows also make sense and look great. The lines are a bit messy, but I already mentioned that before.

Great job!

Thank you!