6:59 PM, Thursday June 15th 2023
Hello, I’ll be doing your critique today!
Organic Arrows
Very nice sense of perspective and depth; in some of the arrows you’ve drawn the hatched lines on the outside, we’re trying to indicate a shadow that helps add to the depth like so:
https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/f875589f.jpg
Organic forms with contour lines
The ellipses are pretty good, they curve along with the sausage well. But some of them don’t rotate like I’d expect them to. This might help:
https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/dc19ce85.jpg
The contours seem like a bit of a miss, you aren’t confident or not ghosting enough and that’s making the curves shaky and flat, try to ghost the curves as you do with an ellipse and then draw an overshooting curve.
Texture
The analysis is really good! the cast shadows are properly drawn, the dark-to-light gradient is pretty good too. I can see a few outlines on the last texture but that might just be the part of the texture itself.
Dissections
Amazing work here! you’ve broken the silhouette perfectly and the textures look great and curve with the form, I love the variety too!
Form Intersections
It seems like you understand the concept, good work!
Organic Intersections
Nice, clean sausages, I really feel like that’s how they’d stack up! You’ve even managed to make complex forms look like they belong, great work here! you’ll do well in Lesson 5.
I hope this helped and good luck!
Next Steps:
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Keep practising your ellipses
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Move on to Lesson 3