10:45 AM, Tuesday January 2nd 2024
Thank you! I'm glad you like it :D
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RRose
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The Indomitable (Winter 2023)
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How the forms interact with each other (Imagine tetris but with sausages)
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How the contours curve around each form and how they change their angle based on that (try to ghost and overshoot the contours)
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How the shadows interact with what's under it (Line weight is fine but focus on the shadows for now)
10:44 AM, Tuesday January 2nd 2024
Thank you!
5:51 PM, Monday September 25th 2023
Thank you very much!
9:56 PM, Sunday September 24th 2023
Hello again!
Thanks for the reply and the correction images, they're really helpful. I'm glad you gave me such a thorough review because this lesson was hard to understand.
The first two images were taken from the demos:
https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/826c1a46.jpg
https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/990761dd.jpg
And these are the last two:
I didn't draw the other leaves for the sunflower because i wasn't quite sure how to approach that, should I have drawn a heart shape from the get go?
Anyway, thanks again!
11:24 AM, Saturday September 23rd 2023
Hello!
Thank you for such an in-depth critique, the tips you gave have been a big help during the revisions; drawing bigger is really useful to understand what I'm trying to do and how I'm doing it, and I tried to take my time with the branch construction, while it wasn't perfect I do think that it went a lot better than last time I tried these.
https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1AcOfyzG_MIxXDHHIRh47-EFScdi9LOGP?usp=sharing
Please let me know if any other tips can help me improve further!
9:59 PM, Thursday June 29th 2023
The revision seems better, they stack more naturally now and the perspective is nice too.
The intersections are fine as well.
Remember to keep practising the completed lessons and good luck on your journey!
Next Steps:
Move on to the next Lesson, and don't forget about the 50-50 rule
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9:40 PM, Saturday June 17th 2023
This looks like it will be very useful, thank you for sharing!
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10:02 AM, Friday June 16th 2023
Hello, I’ll be doing your critique today!
Organic Arrows
Good sense of depth and variety of arrows. Nice and smooth lines, the hatching is done well too.
Organic forms with contour lines
The ellipses rotate very well and follow the motion of the sausage great work here!
The contours look a little flat, try to ghost them like you would an ellipse and then when you are ready, draw an overshooting curve.
Texture
These textures… wow
Perfect transition from dark to light, great use of shadows!
Dissections
More amazing textures! They wrap around the forms like they belong there!
Form Intersections
Excellent work! great hatching and intersections!
Organic Intersections
This too is great! You would do great in future lessons!
Next Steps:
Move on to Lesson 3 and keep it up!
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9:50 AM, Friday June 16th 2023
Hello, I’ll be doing your critique today!
Organic Arrows
Good sense of depth, especially on the second page. the hatching is done quite well too.
Organic forms with contour lines
The ellipses rotate although some of them (mainly the ones at the edge) could use more rotation based on the line
The contours aren’t confident, did you try to ghost an ellipse before drawing it? some of them don’t rotate as they should and a lot of them aren’t overshooting so that might be contributing to the issue. This might help you understand my point:
https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/77f2ca1c.jpg
Texture
The texture analysis is very nicely done! I really like how you handled the brick and the scales.
The dark side seems to be a bit too thick for your gradation making it appear like the texture should be darker there, but the light side is perfect
Dissections
More good looking textures here, I love how some of them interact with each other.
Form Intersections
Good variety of shapes, but it isn’t clear where the intersections are, if there are any. The linework is really light.
https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/8d4a68c8.jpg
Organic Intersections
You’re not supposed to put shadows on the form that is creating them and some shadows look a bit awkward
https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/516f8d4f.jpg
You'll get better as you go on, but intersections, ellipses, and organic forms are really important in the later lessons so i just want to know if you understand the concept and you can move on
Next Steps:
I'd like you do do another page of the organic intersections, keep these things in mind:
Can you also send a more clear picture of your form intersections? I really can't where the intersections are.
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7:27 PM, Thursday June 15th 2023
Hello, I’ll be doing your critique today!
Organic Arrows
Extremely nice sense of perspective and depth; in some of the arrows you’ve drawn the hatched lines on the outside, we’re trying to indicate a shadow that helps add to the depth like so:
https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/f875589f.jpg
Organic forms with contour lines
The ellipses are drawn well and they curve along with the sausage well. But they don’t rotate like I’d expect them to. This might help:
https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/dc19ce85.jpg
Remember that the angle of the ellipse changes depending on the view:
https://i.imgur.com/rXLBxSg.png
The contours have less of an issue with the angles but can be improved still.
Texture
Good analysis, I the last analysis the darkness is starting from left, yet the texture is darkening on the right, but it's fine.
Dissections
Good textures, they wrap around the form well and break the silhouette well.
Form Intersections
It seems like you understand the concept, but some of them (mainly the third page) don’t have the intersections drawn on them.
Organic Intersections
Great sausages, they feel almost real on the first page! Nice shadows on the first page, they seem a little too thin on the second page though.
I hope this helped!
Next Steps:
Redo the 2 pages of Organic Forms with Contour lines (keep the angles in mind and ghost the lines until you are ready)
Complete the missing intersections on the Form Intersections exercise
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