ritacethapa

I spotted a few things:

1. In the sausages exercise some of the contour lines are feeling a lot flatter.

2. Your legs need a lot of work. Drawing a shadow will help. Remember that these insects use these legs to stand on the ground.

3. I can see that as you progressed gradually the quality of the forms have improved.

4. I think that you can work on the line weights a little bit more. The line weights are way more consistent.

5. In some the the drawing when you are adding details. You are losing the depth of the drawing. The housefly has retained the depth. But you have lost those in cricket.

6. Notice in the legs of the spider you have added cross hatch that has made the legs way more flatter than the front legs. If those cross hatch would have followed the contour it would have been way more solid. I noticed it was in the intruction video but he put it for design purposes. Also the way you have aligned those legs are not seeming real.

7. Notice how you have presented the legs in the spider drawing. They are should good amount of depth. But you have lost it in other drawings.

Overall nice work. Always remember that these are for warmups. We are studying form of insects here. Hope these things will help.

Also man go big. These are small. Drawing big has its own merits. I like it because the proportion errors are much clearer. And you can put much more details. Your errors will be more visible.

Personally I like it because we can go ham.

I like the worked. I can see you put a lot of effort. The line works are mostly clean but still bumpy in a few places. The forms are very well placed. I would comment a few points:

1. Work with shadows. It will help read you drawings a lot better. It will also help separate front from the back.

2. I saw so many crosshatch that you did. Aesthetically it working but just as uncomfortable says you just a single contour will work better. I will needlessly take over the space. The 3d story has vanished from the drawings. Notice how the ones with less details are the ones looking much flatter.

3. You need to put more thoughts in you marks. It will help a lot.

4. Also these exercises are meant to be used a warmup. So, I am thinking you grinded a lot. Just take it slow. I am also doing a lot of drawing like you but taking it easy. I am taking these as warmups or form study.

5. I also noticed that you are replicating light. Leave it for now. Focus on the marks. Once you control the marks properly creating values is just mark making. It will not be hard once you understand the forms. I would say try to represent the thing with less marks. That way you can have control.

I am not an expert myself. I just draw for recreational purposes but these are things I understood about drawing. So good luck.

Finally great work!!!! Keep it up.

wow nice review. Thanks mate. Will be trying to make the changes.

1. I like the way you showed depth in arrows exercise.

2. The lines are also looking solid except for a few places where I could spot some scratches.

3. The eclipse in contours are also looking solid too.

4. The texture analysis is looking great too.

5. I like the way you did the banana. It is looking cool except that the stem is little out of position.

6. I think you could have incorporated the gradient from light to dark in the cross section exercise too.

7. In the cylinder drawing part major axis of the farther end with bigger minor axes will be smaller than the nearer end. I found this out while drawing intersections. The story will hold out more. But you must read the 250 cylinder challenge description of find out what the actual thing is. I think it recommended only after lesson 6 so I am backing away from it for now.

I hope this will be helpful. Could you please critique mine too.

https://drawabox.com/community/submission/DVMYA9KI

thank you for the critique. Appreciate it.

1. In the arrow exercise I like how you showed depth with the width variation.

2. The eclipses need to be worked on a little bit. They are off. Also in the countour lines the lines a straighter. I would curve them a little.

3. I really like the lines you are drawing they are good.

4. The shadows in construction exercises are a bit off. But you will get them eventually.

5. Need to focus more on drawing the eclipses.

6. I think while drawing the cylinders drawing major and minor axis helped me a lot in understanding in 3D. You should try it too. It might be a help.

I liked the the overall work you did. I will mark the lesson as complete. My work needs review too. It would be great it you have some time.

https://drawabox.com/community/submission/DVMYA9KI

Hi there really liked you review. Could you please review my lesson 2 submission too.

https://drawabox.com/community/submission/DVMYA9KI

1. I think that in the arrows exercise, the depth is little less visible. Maybe vary the size of the arrow. It looks like it is all the same.

2. Also the curves are too steep. It will help if loosen a bit.

3. In the eclipse drawing the section. The eclipses are way off. It is not looking like contour lines by like a texture.

4. Also in contour lines second part. The eclipses are the end part need to curve a little to show some depth.

5. I think you could work on form intersections but that exercise was supposed to be hard.

I think you did good job overall. I really like the texture part of the exercise. I also need review in my work. Could you please review.

https://drawabox.com/community/submission/DVMYA9KI

1. I really like you effort in intersections exercise. I think the intersection are almost accurately (i.e. from my perspective).

2. Your line qualites are good.

3. I think the shadows in construction exercise is a little off but you will learn it.

4. You could have cross hatched a little more. It would have been easy to see.

I really like the work. I see you are trying hard. Best of luck of further exercises.

Could you please review mine too.

https://drawabox.com/community/submission/DVMYA9KI