redrapious

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    2:42 PM, Wednesday May 13th 2020

    Hi! I just finished the 25 boxes you asked for. I'm kinda proud of theses ones, definitely feels the improvements. Some of them still have extend lines trouble, but at least I realized it. What do you think?

    6:00 PM, Monday May 11th 2020

    I added the shallow foreshortening page here. Thanks for taking all this time to guide me

    11:01 AM, Friday May 8th 2020

    Thanks for this good critique - I've done the 1 more page you've asked for, what do you think about it?

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    11:01 AM, Saturday May 2nd 2020

    You didn't post neither the Plotted Perspective neither the Rough Perspective exercise. Please add these exercises to the imgur post, or if you haven't already done it, draw them before getting reviewed. Good luck!

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    10:55 AM, Saturday May 2nd 2020

    You haven't done any error checking, which is as important for you and for the reviewer. It's already late, but could you do the error checking for all your boxes and re-submit it? Thanks

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    10:51 AM, Saturday May 2nd 2020

    Have you done the demos too? If you do, please had them to the post before getting reviewed.

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    1:58 PM, Friday May 1st 2020

    First, your organic arrows don't give the feeling of depth that's needed. Watching closely, we can see that you tried, but that's not convincing at the first look. Try to make more regulars and flowing ribbon, like int the examples on the exercise page. Also, the shadows must be in the inside of the fold, not outside: it's the shadow of the part of the arrow who's behind.

    Your organic shapes can be improved a lot: the ellipses aren't centered on the minor axes, they often never touches the edge of the form, and they're sometimes wobbling. Contour lines is what will give the feeling of 3D, so they're even more important than the shape itself.

    The texture analysis part is half understood: the left square is good, even thought you could focus a bit more on the shadows. However, you've done the black to white gradient in the right rectangle too fast. The transition between full black and texture black is way too strong, and the 3 rectangles didn't look like the original texture you've drawn. Take more time to do it, and keep watching the reference. Also, try to fill the space more, the rectangles are too empty, especially on the dark part.

    Same thing for texture dissection. First, focus on cast shadows and little bumps, not lines. Second, try to wrap your texture around the form, it's not a flat surface. Third, be more patient, take your time. You looks kinda hurry when you've drawn this: it's hard and it takes time, so don't rush it.

    Forms intersection: I'm sorry, but your boxes are really bad. Once again, take your time, think about vanishing points etc for each box. A box isn't some random lines connected to each others, its the representation of something who exists and has right angles, think about it when you draw a box. Then, when you'll understood and applied that, think about the intersections of the forms between each others, but that's the next step.

    Your organic intersection are pretty hesitating too. Your lines are woobling, you didn't drawn the shadows. The second one is way better, but put more shadows, not only at the end of each form.

    Next Steps:

    I'm sorry but I can't mark the lesson has complete, you've made too many big mistakes. However, don't worry, but learn from this mistakes, read the advices I told you and try to apply them, exercises by exercises.

    To mark the lesson has complete, submit at least one page of:

    • Form intersection, with intersection drawn

    • Texture analysis, at least 2 different textures

    • Texture dissection

    I strongly encourage you to redo some of the others exercises too, as well as the ones from the Lesson 1. The only way you'll get better is by practicing, and correcting your mistakes.

    Good luck and keep going!

    When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
    11:55 AM, Friday May 1st 2020

    Thanks for this great detailed and explanatory review, I'll work on it!

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    8:50 AM, Friday May 1st 2020

    First, what pen did you use? Don't use a pencil, but a fineliner.

    Second, and that's the logical consequence of the first point, don't draw over your straight lines. In exercises like perspective, and organic perspective, only draw each line once. That's the main reason why a fineliner is recommended. Take your time to draw The perfect line, with the ghosted method, but don't go over and over until you find the good one.

    Third, draw trough your ellipses. In Table of ellipses, you should always pass 2 or 3 times on them.

    I'll mark lesson as complete, but take your time to do some of these exercises, applying the advices we give.

    Next Steps:

    Move forward to Lesson 2, and 250 boxes challenge

    This community member feels the lesson should be marked as complete. In order for the student to receive their completion badge, this critique will need 2 agreements from other members of the community.
    2 users agree
    8:38 AM, Friday May 1st 2020

    The depth and compression of your arrows is good, but don't shade them randomly: always shade in the center of the fold.

    Pretty good organic shapes, don't hesitate to make bigger ones, you'll need it for next lessons.

    Great texture analysis, you perfectly understood the cast shadow concept.

    In the same way, texture dissection is almost perfect.

    Generally, the forms intersection is good, but sometimes your pyramids seems to have a strange foreshooting.

    Organic intersection is really good too, but don't go for too longs shapes, like on page 2. Nice shadows too.

    So, really good work!

    Next Steps:

    Move forward to Lesson 3, and 25 Textures challenge.

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