redartist23

Hello, I'll take a look at your assignment. The superimposed lines are good. I recomend taking a little more time lining up your initial points. The strokes are a little shaky but that's likely the result of drawing from the shoulder for the first time. For the ghosted lines, I recommend drawing a few longer strokes in the future to help practice. Overall they look good though. Likewise the planes are good.

Moving onto the ellipses, the confidence that you draw most of them with is good. You also manage to hit a good variety of shapes. However, many of your edges overlap with the neighbor which seems to be a deliberate decision in many spots. You should try to hit the edges of each neighbor and edges of the boxes to practice drawing the ellipse. I recommend ghosting them a few times beforehand to get better at that. The funnels are pretty good besides the aforementioned issues.

Finally, the boxes. Your hatched lines in the plotted perspectives are a little rushed at time. If you're going to hatch you should apply the same level of ghosting that you do for other lines. Your rough perspective does a good job of starting to hone in on the VP. It's true that your rotated boxes aren't perfect but this exercise is intentionally hard. I can see that you're making progress on understanding the perspective. Just remember to focus on the edge boxes continuing to curl. Your top right one has the right orientation, it just extends too much. Your organic perspective is not bad. Just take your time a little on the boxes and don't be afraid to aim for larger scales (i.e. bigger boxes in the foreground and even smaller in the background).

I think you did well on this assignment. You should do the 250 box challenge to practice further before hitting Lesson 2.

Hello, I'll take a look at your work. Your superimposed lines look good but be sure to properly allign the starting location each time. In some of your superimposed lines you attempt to adjust the trajectory but for the most part you resist the temptation so that's good. The planes also look good. Your ellipses are off to a good start as well. They're usually drawn with confidence which is always what you should first focus on. Sometimes they miss the edges so that should be the next area you try to improve. There are a few moments on the ellipses drawn onto your plane where your hand appears to waver. Focus on just moving the shoulder to avoid those wobbles. The funnels occasionally are shifted from the semiminor axis but otherwise good. The first perspective exercise looks good. I appreciate that you took your time with the hatch lines. Your rotated perspective does a good job of continuously turning, something that usually causes new artists trouble. Your organic perspective is good though don't be afraid to try more variation in size and longer lines.

All in all I think you did very well with this first assignment.

Hello, I'll take a look at your work.

The superimposed lines are fairly confident so that's good. I can tell you draw from the shoulder. However, the starting points are poorly defined. Always take your time to line up your start so that it emerges from a single point. Some of the lines also show signs of attempted adjusting as you go. Just focus on the end point and draw the stroke. If it doesn't quite hit it that's fine.

The ghosted lines look pretty good as are the planes.

Your ellipses are also good. Occasionally they wobble as you come around a turn. This will take time but as you practice you should be able to remove that wobble and nail a consistent stroke.

On some of your ellipses drawn onto the planes you forgot to draw through the ellipses. Keep drawing through in mind for the future. The funnels look good.

Moving onto the box related exercises, the rotated perspective has a curving issue. Many of the blocks at the edges aren't rotated as much as they should be. The goal is to have the shape look like it's about to become complete edge on to the viewer. But overall it looks good. For the organic perspective, some of your boxes don't shift in size appropriately. For instance there are occasionally big ones followed by small ones followed by big ones. We want to make it look like they're getting farther away.

Overall this was really good. You have confident lines and did well on most of the exercises.

Hello Sasha, I'll take a look at your work. Your super imposed lines are fine. You exhibit a a slight wobble when drawing, particularly as you approach the end point. Focus on keeping your arm moving in a smooth motion. This possible through consistent drawing from the shoulder. I would also recommend trying more complicated superimposed lines, such as longer ones or curves. Don't be afraid to push yourself.

A similar comment applies for the ghosted lines. Prioritize a straight line, then hitting the end point.

The planes are good.

Your ellipses are pretty good. They are confident which is good. Next I would start to focus on hitting the edges of the grid and neighboring ellipses each time. Also feel free to try some circles.

On your funnels, some of the ellipses aren't very well aligned with the semiminor axis. Be very careful to ensure that allignment is achieved as it is essential to the illusion of the funnel. As an additional note (and this applies to the other exercises), don't be afraid to try mixing it up a little. Your three funnels here are nearly identical in curvature and size. Challenging yourself with different variants will help you improve faster.

In the box related exercises, it seems you weren't taking as much time. Your lines are notably more wobbly than they were at the start of this lesson. Always give your 100% for these homeworks. In particular the plotted perspective should have more boxes. Your placement of the boxes relative to the VPs also causes distortion which makes it hard to interpret. The rotated boxes also don't rotate enough at the far edges. Take a look at the common pitfalls in that assignment page and you'll see an example. You want the boxes to continue to curve as they go around rather than staying at a single angle.

Hello, I'll take a look at your assignment. I'm just going to go through chronologically.

The superimposed lines are very good. You do experience some wobbling which is likely because you're not used to drawing from the shoulder. Keep at it and that will disappear as you go. On some of the superimposed lines you don't start from the same spot. Always take your time lining up the starting point before drawing. On some of the ghosted lines it's obvious where you start to curve to hit the end goal. It's better to aim for a straight, confident line that misses the end point than one that curves or wobbles to achieve the end.

Your ellipses are pretty good. They're mostly confident and you usually nail the shape. Nice work. With your funnels, be sure to stay alligned with the semi-minor axis. Otherwise it can throw off the whole image.

Most of your perspective stuff is pretty good. The organic perspective could be improved though. There's not a lot of variation in the sizes of most of the boxes as they travel along the lines. I think for this exercise it's okay but for future assignments be sure to do what the instructions are asking.

Hello, I'll take a look at your homework. I'm just going to go down the exercises chronologically. For the superimposed lines, I must stress that you take your time lining up the start of your stroke. It's alright if the end is not right at the moment. But you must take your time and ensure that you always start from the same spot. I notice a lot of your strokes just started haphazardly. Don't do that. Your ghosted lines wobble quite a bit. This is expected since you're getting used to drawing from your shoulder. But keep in mind that it's most important to get a confident, straight stroke first. Then you can worry about the endpoint.

Moving onto the planes and ellipses I think your ellipses show smooth curves. With more practice they'll start to line up so that's good. On the sheet that's all ellipses there is notable improvement as you go. Just remember to take your time starting and ending; some of the ellipses have the final line in the middle of them. And like the lines, the ellipses really benefit from a confident and consistent stroke.

Your rotated perspective shows excellent turning as your proceed. Many new artists struggle with keeping the rotation going but you did that well. Your organic perspective is also good.

Overall I would say your biggest issue seems to be not taking enough time ghosting your lines. Focus on always starting from the same spot and following a smooth, confident stroke. This holds for lines, curves, and whatever else you wish to draw. I definitely think you should take the time to do the 250 box challenge to really improve those skills. And remember while doing it that even the hatch lines for each cube should be drawn with care.

Hello, I'll take a look at your homework. Just proceeding through the lesson chronologically, your superimposed line and then ghosted lines are pretty good. The only thing I think you need to lookout for are the slight curves some of your lines exhibit. Remember, it's more important to have a straight and confident line than one that actually reaches the original point. You can salvage the former, not the latter. The planes and ellipses are also good. I appreciate that many of your ellipses are drawn with confidence. Be careful with the funnels, a few of the ellipses tilt a bit away from their alignment with the minor axis.

Moving onto the boxes, the first exercises are fine. In the rotated boxes, make sure to continue to rotate as you reach the edges of your "sphere." Take a look at some of your edge cases and you'll notice that they have nearly the same orientation as their neighbors. Although the orientation should be close, we still want to rotate further as we reach the edges to give the feeling of rounding the sphere. Your organic boxes exercise looks good.

Also I wrote all of this and somehow didn't notice that Willy already critiqued as well. I agree with his commentary too.

Congratulations on getting through the 250 box challenge. This is probably one of the most ardous moments of the course, particularly since it comes so early on. As you mentioned you improved a lot as you went. You also managed to hit a good amount of variety in shapes and depths. The hatching lines were good, it looks like you took your time on them. It looks like your strategy for getting the back corner correct really helped out you. Multiple passes at ghosting are essential to lining up the point. Near the end it looks like the main thing that caused your back corner trouble were the front pieces. This happens to everyone; if one of the front lines isn't pointed properly towards the VP it can result in a situation where there's nowhere to correctly place the back corner. But fortunately you got better and better at preventing that situation.

Hello, I'll take a look at your lesson. The superimposed lines look good but don't be afraid to try things like curves or waves. These will help you improve your shoulder's control, even if they don't come out well. For the ghosted lines, you do occasionally suffer from wobbling or curving lines. The wobbling is a more serious issue but continued shoulder practice should help you to maintain confident strokes. One tip I can offer for reaching your endpoints without going past is to lift the pen while continuing the stroke. You'll keep your confident movement without running past the endpoint. The ghosted planes are good. The ellipses are good. You show improvement with your confidence drawing them as you go. Your perspective exercises are also fine. There's some difficulty in nailing the boxes but once you do the 250 box challenge that will work out.

So overall good work. Just remember to keep practicing with the shoulder even for small strokes. Don't be afraid to leave your comfort zone.

Super imposed lines and the ghosting look good. With the ellipse exercises a major thing to look out for is maintaining confident strokes, particularly for the directions where your shoulder is less experienced at moving in. But you showed improvement as you went. This will continue to improve as you move forward. For the rough perspectives, take your time lining up the initial horizontal and vertical dots. You want those to be parallel or perpendicular to the horizon, respectively. It can throw off the rest of the exercise otherwise. The rotated boxes exercise is good. The organic perspective is also good. Don't be afraid to extend the foreground line off of the page and draw some boxes really close!