The Indomitable (Winter 2022)

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    4:51 AM, Tuesday March 21st 2023

    Very well done!

    You've demonstrated an extreme amount of patience and dedication and have shown you understand the lesson perfectly. There is honestly not much to critique!

    Good job!

    10:18 AM, Tuesday March 14th 2023

    Good job on completing the revision!

    The construction looks much better and I can see that you patiently built it up which is exactly what I was looking for. Just a minor point about the subdivisions, If you subdivide one side of the object you generally don't need to subdivide the other side as we won't see it anyway + the lines could end up confusing you. Also I circled some parts in red where the construction is vague. You always want to make sure that you draw curves as straight lines as those are precise and give the construction more solidity. Even if the object ends up looking boxy it's still fine as these are just exercises and aren't meant to look good anyway.

    Also if you missed it uncomfortable updated the lesson 6 page https://drawabox.com/lesson/6/1/orthographics with new orthographic information. Having another perspective on orthographic plans could help your understanding of them so make sure you give it a read.

    Anyway, I'll mark this lesson as complete, so good luck with the wheel challenge!

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    1:11 AM, Wednesday March 8th 2023

    No worries!

    As for the stuff about patience and ADHD all I can recommend is to take it slow. Stuff in lesson 6 and 7 can take up to 10 hours so all you can really do is take your time and just focus on the task at hand. This may be harder for you but it's still possible. 1 last bit of advice I can give is to practice mindfulness meditation as I've seen that help for people with ADHD

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    4:20 PM, Sunday March 5th 2023

    Congrats on completing lesson 3! I'll do my best to give you useful feedback so that you can improve.

    Starting with your arrows, the first thing I notice is that they tend to be a bit wobbly especially the hatching marks for the shadows. For this I suggest focusing more on line confidence exercises for warmups (ghosted planes + superimposed lines) while drawing from the shoulder and taking the time to ghost before hand to ensure a confident mark. This comic by uncomfortable helped me understand ghosting and confident mark execution so it might help you too. This advice also applies to the line weight you've added on overlaps, however those lines seem more chicken-scratchy probably due to the increased pressure for accuracy. Even if the line is harder to draw you should avoid chicken scratching at all costs as they ruin the linework. Chicken scratching can also be avoided by ghosting and drawing confidently from the shoulder so really make sure to practice that. Another thing I wanted to point out was the width of the arrows is sometimes inconsistent which breaks the illusion of the arrow "coming in" from a direction. You always want the arrow to get bigger as it moves closer to the viewer as it looks like it moves through 3d space towards the viewer.The final thing I wanted point out was to make sure the edges of the arrows overlap. If we take a look at the top left arrow (which I've redrawn here) and the end of the bottom right arrow the edges don't overlap which makes the arrows look flat which is what we're trying to avoid.

    Moving on to your leaves, you have some with really nice fluidity while others ended up looking flat. The main issue I see with your leaves is that some tend to skip constructional steps. For example, the middle two leaves look like they've been constructed based on guesswork rather than following a set of steps. You want to make sure you draw flow lines for each aspect of the leaf before hand so that you can construct on top of it. One final thing I wanted to mention is that the bottom left leaf doesn't fill up the whole space you've designated for the construction which can undermine it's solidity in 3d space so just be careful of that. Other than that your other leaves are very fluid so keep it up.

    Your branches, other than the linework issues previously mentioned, look good. I can see you've tried your best to make sure to shoot the line past the ellipse and have for the most part done a good job at it so keep it up.

    Finally your plant constructions, for the most part they turned out pretty good. The first thing I want to point out is on page number 6, the plant on the right has leaves that have zigzagging and look carelessly rushed while the plant on the left had some missing branches and some of the flow lines on the leaves ended up stiff. This also happens on some other plants but not to the same extent and usually only on a couple of leaves but it wasn't that uncommon for it be just an outlier case so make sure you focus on flow lines and the zigzagging issue. For the potted plant on the next page, make sure you construct the pot around a minor axis to ensure the ellipses line up like you've done on other plants.

    Other than those issues, your plants are sort of a mixed bag with some being really good (pages 1, 2, 3) and others being what is to be expected at this stage of the course. Before I end this critique I wanted to discuss your use of cast shadows. Areas of solid black should only be reserved for cast shadows which typically require us to design a new shape (as seen here and here). From what I can see you've used black inside potted plants as to maybe colour the soil which should be avoided as that is akin to form shading.

    Overall this was a good submission which showed a good deal of growth in your understanding of 3d space which is why I won't assign revisions to the arrows even though they had a number of issues. I strongly recommend you focus on your linework during warmups as that is the biggest issue, then focus on the issues I pointed out on specific exercises. I don't normally critique earlier lessons so if anything was unclear or if you have any questions don't hesitate to ask. Good luck in lesson 4!

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    2:35 PM, Sunday March 5th 2023

    Very nice!

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    3:27 PM, Thursday March 2nd 2023

    If you join the drawabox discord there's a channel called #critique-exchange where you essentially critique other peoples work and in return someone will critique yours. The pinned message explains how it works in depth so make sure you check it out if you want your work critiqued.

    4:49 AM, Wednesday March 1st 2023

    These intersections look much better! The only thing I should point out is that if you're going to increase line weight only do it where an intersection occurs. The way you do it now seems kind of random and makes it confusing to look at. For example on the first page you have a pyramid who's outline has increased line weight, I would just add line weight for the intersections between the cylinder and box. Other than line weight issue the intersections look good and I'm glad you used 3D paint to increase your understanding.

    Good luck for the wheel challenge!

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    4:35 PM, Monday February 27th 2023

    For your first question, I would suggest you restart as the lesson material has been updated and maybe take a look at the critique you received. Even if you got it 3 years ago it could still help you understand the material better.

    For your second question, it helps to see the lessons as puzzles to solve or goals to achieve. I finished drawabox in about 6 months and I never really felt burnt out while doing it. What really motivated me was setting the official critique cooldown as a deadline for me to finish the work. Even though uncomfortable recommends against this, as long as you do the best you can, following the instructions to the letter and incorporating the feedback you receive from official critiques it is doable. However in your case I wouldn't set the deadline for 2 weeks. Instead set it at a reasonable time which you can expect yourself to do it by. This makes deadlines a great way to stay motivated and finish the course.

    But avoiding burnout would be the total opposite of setting deadlines. You avoid burnout by going at your own pace and setting reasonable expectations. The majority of people who do drawabox give up by the box challenge and claim they're "burnt out" from doing boxes. But that's because all they did was draw boxes without doing anything else. Which is why the 50% rule is crucial to avoiding burnout and in your case you could do something like a 30/70 "rule" or spend an even greater time doing the art you want to do, as long as it's equal or more to "50%". Doing this will probably make it less likely that you will quit.

    So to avoid burnout and finish the course you have to find a balance between the deadlines you set and the amount of time you spend on your own art.

    Finally I feel like the reason you quit in 2021 was more so due to getting "negative" feedback which is the best type of feedback to get. If you got feedback that only sang your praises it would be pretty useless if you were trying to improve as you would most likely know what you're doing right (although not always the case). I would suggest going over lesson 0 again to remind yourself of how the course works and how to handle feedback. This timestamp of uncomfortables video might help you handle feedback better by changing your perspective to not take your work too seriously.

    Hope this helps, if you have anymore questions feel free to ask.

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    1:13 PM, Monday February 27th 2023

    Congrats on finishing drawabox! I'll do my best to give you feedback so that you can improve.

    Starting with your form intersections, everything looks great! You clearly understand that the intersections occur between the surfaces of forms so there isn't much else to say.

    For your boxed cylinders, everything looks good apart from the fact you forgot to check the sides of the cylinders. A good rule of thumb to follow is that there should be 6 or 7 lines extruding from each side so if you have less than that you've missed some.

    For your vehicle form intersections you've done them perfectly. This exercise is here just to remind students that what we're dealing with is just simple primitive forms at the end of the day.

    Finally for your vehicle form intersections, you've demonstrated an extreme amount of patience and care and have carefully built up your constructions line by line. To be honest there really isn't much to critique other than the fact that you've only included orthographic plans for only 3 vehicles. For this lesson I believe it's absolutely essential that you do an orthographic plan for every vehicle. I'll explain why anyway so forgive me if you have done one for every vehicle but forgot to include it. The reason why orthographic plans are essential is because they take the decision making process out of the 3D construction so that we can focus more on the construction part while doing it. If we focus both on where to put everything while also trying to construct it the exercise can become overwhelming and we might not get much out of the exercise if that happens. Also if we properly subdivide the o.plans all we have to do is copy them onto the 3D construction which you've no doubt demonstrated.

    I also appreciate that you've drawn all the curves as straight lines as it can be very tempting with these subjects to draw the curves. While this may have caused your vehicles to look "boxy" it shows that you've stayed true to the core of the lesson which is precision. It also shows that you treat these as exercises where the final result doesn't really matter much instead of trying to decorate the vehicles and make them look "good" which demonstrates that you understand the core principles of drawabox.

    And that's about it! This is certainly one of the shortest critiques I've written and that's definitely a good thing as there wasn't much to critique. If you have any questions or if anything was unclear don't hesitate to ask.

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    3:41 AM, Saturday February 25th 2023

    Good job! These are checked correctly so I'll go ahead and mark this challenge as complete.

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