11:39 AM, Saturday July 30th 2022
Hey, these are looking better!
It still looks like you're drawing through your ellipses a few too many times, though. Remember you only need to draw around your ellipse two or three times.
I'd move on to the 250 box challenge, now!
250 box challenge
Hi! Congrats on getting through lesson one. Here is my critique:
Your superimposed lines look good. There's some wobbling initally, but I can see improvement through both of your pages. Remember to use your shoulder when drawing each line to produce a confident, smooth line. Your ghosted lines have come out well, as have your ghosted planes - I can see your improvement at using the ghosting method to produce confident lines.
Your ellipses could improve by ghosting your lines more. At this stage, worry less about accuracy and focus on producing confident ellipses, by ghosting first and drawing with your shoulder. In some places, both in your tables of ellipses and ellipses in planes, it looks as if you are drawing through your ellipses more than 2 or 3 times. In others, it seems has if you've only drawn through once. You should draw through your ellipse 2 or 3 times only before lifting up your pen. Practice drawing confident ellipses in your warm ups, and then focus on accuracy second.
In the funnels exercise, you're starting to improve drawing confident ellipses, but you haven't drawn a minor axis line. The purpose of the funnel exercise is to begin practicing aligning ellipses to its minor axis. I'd suggest rereading the page on funnels and redoing this exercise. Ellipses should be aligned along the minor axis line, so that each ellipse is cut into equal symmetrical halves.
Your plotted perspective looks good, nothing to mention here! Your rough perspective is a good start. I can see how you are beginning to understand how boxes work in perspective. It looks have if you are overshooting on your ghosted lines, so practicing ghosted lines may help here. Your extended lines only need to be drawn to the horizon line, although I see you've done this on the second page. As you can see from your extended lines, your estimations about how lines will extend to the vanishing point are sometimes off, but that's to be expected at this stage! Your estimations will improve with practice. It helps to remember how lines will behave - horizontal lines will be parallel to the horizon line, vertical lines will perpendicular to the horizon line, and lines that extend into the distance will converge on the vanishing point.
Your rotated boxes look great! This is a really tough exercise at this stage. I like that you drew the boxes nice and big, which really helps when trying to figure out where boxes will appear in space. You've done a good job estimating the rotation of the boxes, although some are not fully rotated, just shifted along in perspective. This will be a great exercise to come back to later, to see how your spatial awareness has improved.
Your organic perspective exercise also looks pretty good! Your box constructions look fairly solid, and I see how you've begun to practise rotating them in space. However, it looks as if your lines are diverging, rather than converging on a vanishing point. All lines should be converging upon their respective vanishing points. Again, it seems as if you are overshooting your ghosted lines in places. Try lifting up your pen the second you hit that end point.
I think this is a pretty solid start! You've begun to drawing with your shoulder and ghosting your lines, and I see how you've begun to understand perspective and how lines should converge at the vanishing points.
I think you should redo the funnels excercise before you move onto the 250 box challenge. Reread the page on funnels. Each funnel should have a major and minor axis line, with ellipses aligned to the minor axis line, cutting them equally in half down their narrower dimension.
Redo the funnels exercise.
Hi! Congrats on finishing lesson one. Here is my critique:
Superimposed lines: The linework is smooth but I see fraying on both ends. The line shouldn't fray from the starting dot - make sure to place your pen carefully at the beginning of each line so this does not happen.
Your ghosted lines look pretty good, as do your ghosted planes. You're getting used to drawing confident lines. Remember to use your shoulder pivot when drawing lines.
Your tables of ellipses look really good! You've drawn through your ellipses 2 or 3 times and you've prioritised drawing confident ellipses over accuracy which is great. Your accuracy will improve with time. The next stage will be aiming to keep your ellipses within the bounds of the table, with each ellipse touching without overlapping. Likewise for your ellipses in planes, your ellipses are confident, but not accurate. They should be touching each side of the plane.
Your funnels look nice, but on some the ellipses are falling off alignment with the minor axis. Each ellipse should be cut into two equal, symmetrical halves. Try starting with a narrow ellipse in the centre and then widening them as they move outwards in the funnel.
Your plotted perspective looks good! Some hatching on one of the front facing sides might make them clearer. Your rough perspective is also nice, I can see that you understand the behaviour of the lines, remembering that lines that go off in the distance converge on the vanishing point, with your horizontal lines parallel to the horizon lines and your vertical lines perpendicular. Keeping this in mind will make one point perspective easier to grasp. You can see from the extension lines that some of your perspective estimates are way off, but this is to be expected at this stage! It'll come more intuitive with practise.
Your rotated boxes came out really well! You did a good job of drawing through your boxes, and the corners of each box are close together. Some of the boxes aren't actually rotating, just shifting in perspective, which is a common issue. These seems like it's happening on the right side, but I see rotation elsewhere. This exercise is really difficult, and will be a great one to come back to later to see the improvement of your spatial reasoning.
Your organic perspective looks good. Again, this is another difficult exercise at this stage. You've grasped the ghosting method, and your box constructions are pretty good! That said, I think there could be more rotations as the boxes extend off into the distance. I think the 250 box challenge is a good next step for practising convergance and rotation in boxes!
All in all, I think this a pretty good submission. Have fun doing the 250 box challenge!
250 Box Challenge