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Well done I don't have much to say aside from that you did a good job improving on your mistakes

Thanks for the critique https://imgur.com/a/9rco4PL

Well done, I will mark your submission as finished.

I will also point out that it seems that you didn't draw through your Ellipses and that you you left a lot of empty space on your bread texture. They aren't worth having a revision over but it is important to note

Hi there:)

I see that you did an amazing job with the organic arrows and the organic forms exercises.

also I see that I for some reason didn't give you tips on how to improve the texture analysis exercise, I don't have much to say about the crumbled paper, and Leaves are objects with texture inside them, and while it is possible for them to be used as texture in of them selves but these kinds of textures are kind of more appropriate for the dissections exercise where you can see the leaves wrap around the form, rather than feeling like stickers glued onto a flat surface if this makes sense, for the rocks texture, your texture feels scribbled and rushed, and while you don't seem to draw too much information but you seem to draw too little information, where it can be hard to tell what the viewer is looking at without directly informing them of what the texture is supposed to be, also the transition from dark to light is not gradual, you can start drawing from the middle of the raw or even start from the light section of the raw and move towards the dark end, this way you can control the density of the texture more flexibility, I am going to ask you to do this exercise again and I hope that you take your time and if you want to, you can change the textures that you draw for this exercise .

For the dissections exercise, some of the textures are still a bit noisy but you seem to follow the shadows well.

For the forms intersection exercise, you didn't have the forms intersection exercise in your revision, so I will need to ask you for at least too pages for the next revision (one being only boxes and the other including other shapes.

For the organic intersection exercise, some of the shapes are stacked on each others in a way that makes them feel flat, and also you have drawn the forms a bit small which isn't a mistake but you could have drawn them bigger, other than that I can say that your shadows have improved.

Hello there I am quat and I am going to critique your submission today.

So first of all the organic arrows exercise: at first your lines were quiet wobbly and you seemed confused about the shading at first but it seems like you corrected the mistakes in the next page.

Secondly the organic forms with counter lines exercise: for the counter Ellipses, you did a good job aligning your Ellipses and changing their degrees, although some of them seem to be floating and even though it isn't common enough for you to redo this exercise but it is worth pointing out.

For the counter curves, you over-shot your curves pretty well for the most part, there is also some curves that are planned poorly and some that are floating so I might want you to do this part of the exercise again.

Thirdly texture: for the texture analysis exercise, at the beginning your transition from dark to light isn't gradual meaning that you started at the dark and immediately jumped into the light for the paper, and for the rock although it is kind of better than the paper texture but you sticked for a certain density for the texture for most of it, the gravel is the best texture so far in terms of transitioning from dark to light, but you ran into the issue of drawing forms rather than the cast shadow.

For the dissections exercise, you seem to follow the curvature of the forms and you also broke the silhouettes which is good, but also you ran into the same problem of not transitioning well from dark to light for a lot of the textures and to fix this I recommend making the dark segments darker and making the transition to the light segments smother by drawing less details around the lighter segments, also you have repeated some textures, which I will assume is to show that you improved at them, but it would be better if there was more diversity in your textures.

Fourthly form intersection exercise: I noticed that you didn't start with a page full of only boxes, so I might request this for revision, your lines are pretty confident and your forms are pretty solid, and aside from minor hiccups here and there in terms of foreshortening, you did a fantastic job with this exercise.

Lastly organic intersection exercise: you seem to run into the common problem of having your shadows stuck to the form in a lot of the forms so I might need request revision on that, aside from that really solid forms.

Hello there I am QUAT but you can call me Quat, and I am going to critique your submission today.

So first of all lines: for the super imposed lines exercise, your lines don't look wobbly and they only fray on one side which is good.

For the ghosted lines exercise, your lines are quiet confident and they don't seem to arch, so good job on that.

For the ghosted panels your lines are fairly confident and even though there are some arching lines, they aren't common.

Next Ellipses: for the tables of Ellipses exercise, your ellipses look fairly confident but some of them are not very planned out so you should plan out better in the future.

For the Ellipses in planes exercise, some of your Ellipses are floating, which again you should plan better for the future, other than that you did a good job.

For the funnels exercise, a lot of your Ellipses are not aligned to the minor axis properly and I think that if you organized the page a bit better you could have added one or two more funnels.

Finally boxes: for the plotted perspective exercise, you seem to follow the instructions pretty well and there aren't any distortions.

For the rough perspective exercise, you made the mistake of guessing where the boxes should be rather than using the ghosting method to draw them roughly, also a lot of your lines are wobbly and you might need to redo this exercise.

For the rotated boxes exercise, your boxes don't rotate for the most part, and also the page is pretty messy and your lines are very wobbly, so yeah you are redoing this exercise too.

For the organic perspective exercise, your lines are quite wobbly and for a panel you leterally drew four boxes, so yeah I think that you are redoing this one too.

Hello there I am QUAT but you can call me Quat and even though it has almost been 2 years since you have submitted lesson one I am going to critique your submission.

First of all lines: for the super imposed lines exercise, your lines don't seem wobbly and they only fray on one side, well done.

For the ghosted lines exercise, your lines seem pretty confident and I don't see any wobbliness, although there are some arching lines, they aren't worth redoing the exercise over.

For the ghosted planes exercise, you did a good job, the lines feel confident and it seems that you were following the instructions up to this point pretty well.

Now The Ellipses section of lesson one: for the table of Ellipses exercise you made the mistake of not planning some of your Ellipses it isn't worth doing the exercise all over but it is worth pointing out.

For the ellipses in planes exercise, your ellipses are neither deformed nor floating for the most part, although some of the Ellipses don't seem to be planned very well.

For the funnels, you seem to align the ellipses well to the minor axis for the most part, and your spacing is well done, and you don't seem to be loose with most of the Ellipses, also I don't think that the things on the top left count as funnels, I wonder why you drew them.

Lastly Boxes: for the plotted perspective exercise, there is not much to be said here, the boxes aren't distorted and there isn't much else to talk about.

For the rough perspective exercise, your lines look fairly confident and you followed the instructions pretty well.

For the rotated boxes exercise, you followed the instructions pretty well and there isn't much to comment on, although it is worth pointing out that you drew your boxes quite attached to each others, which isn't considered as a mistake but you could have given the boxes more breathing room.

For the organic perspective, some of the boxes aren't well prepared, and I hope that you fix this in the 250 boxes challenge.

Hello there I am quat and I am going to critique your submission

First of all organic arrows exercise: although your lines are fairly confident and you seem to handle perspective really well but you should have drawn through your forms and I might need you to redo this part but try to follow the steps carefully next time.

Secondly organic forms with counter lines: to start with, some of your shapes both in counter Ellipses and the counter curves are complex, meaning that they have a side noticeably bigger than the other, for the counter ellipses the degree on a lot of the ellipses don't change and that is a mistake as shown here and for the counter curves, some of the curves are shallow but I am debating on whether you should redo them or not.

Thirdly texture: for the texture analysis I don't know what are the materials that you drew are exactly but the lesson specify that you should draw crumbled paper as your first texture, as for the dissections exercise you also didn't specify the textures but I see that you followed the curvature of the forms and you also broke the silhouette which is a good thing, I should point out that your detailing is explicit rather than implicit which makes it overwhelming to look at and very distracting.

Fourthly the form intersection exercise: every page of this exercise have the problem of having small groups they should be just one big group, aside from that this exercise was done well.

Lastly the organic intersection exercise: the shadows are sticking to the form a lot of the time, check here and some of the forms don't have shadows where they should, I recommend that you think of the light source and it's brightness when doing the exercise for the next time.

I hope that I wasn't very harsh on you in my critique and I hope that you keep checking back on the critique when you redo the lesson

Hello there, thank you for the critique and I don't think that it was harsh at all, I know that you wanted only the texture analysis and the dissections but after seeing my past submission I couldn't not redo the lesson in it's entirety https://imgur.com/a/rbutFY6 sorry for taking an eternity and a half to reply school kind of got in the way

Hello there, sorry for the late reply, (well and the poorly done revision), here is another revision https://imgur.com/uPzmZ0f

Thank you again for the critique