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Hi Gauch0Man! Congratulations on finishing your Lesson 1 homework. I'm Wendy and I will be reviewing your submission.

1. Superimposed Lines:

I think you did a great job with these. Your lines are confident and smooth, with minimal fraying.

2. Ghosted Lines:

Your lines are clean and straight. Occasionally, you miss the end point by a bit, but it's good that you are prioritizing your line quality over hitting the exact end point.

3. Ghosted Planes:

Nice linework again, and your crosses tend to meet up nicely in the middle most of the time. It does look like you are not always drawing starting and ending dots on every line, and there is some fraying on both ends on some of the lines, so do be a bit more careful here.

4. Tables of Ellipses:

In the first few panels, your ellipses didn't meet up with the frame borders properly. However, you clearly got better at this with some of the later panels. Also, it's good that you are focusing on the line quality over hitting the panel borders exactly.

You drew your ellipses confidently. A bit deformed at times, but that will get better with more practice over time.

You managed to keep the angle and degree of the ellipses fairly even across each section.

Some ellipses are a bit too widely spaced, and you filled the gaps with smaller ellipses. Try to avoid this, and make one ellipse meet up with the one before it.

5. Ellipses in Planes:

Your ellipses look confident and smooth. However, they don't always meet up with the borders of the plane well. I would recommend that you put some extra focus on this in your warm-ups going forward.

6. Funnels:

Your ellipses fit within the funnels fairly well most of the time. On one of the funnels, the minor axes of the ellipses started to deviate more and more as you got away from the center. If you find that one ellipse goes askew, try to correct it on the next ellipse.

Aside from that, there are a few odd ellipses in there that are misaligned to the minor axis, and a few that are too widely spaced apart, but it looks like you are making an effort to align them properly.

I would put some extra focus on this exercise during your warm-ups, as well.

One more advanced trick you could try in your warm-ups is to have a very narrow ellipse in the middle, and gradually increase the degree as you go out from the center. This will help you to develop more control over the degree.

7. Plotted Perspective:

You did a clean job with these, no complaints here.

8. Rough Perspective:

I can see that there is the occasional waver in your lines with this exercise, now that you are more worried about accuracy. Still, it's decently clean overall.

Your perspective estimates were pretty good. Some of the boxes that are further away from the vanishing point became a little less accurate in that regard, but this is to be expected.

9. Rotated Boxes:

Your arrangement of boxes came out fairly symmetrical, and the spaces between them nice and tight. Your rotations look quite accurate, too. Excellent work on this difficult exercise!

10. Organic Perspective:

The sizing of your boxes really sell the effect of boxes moving back in space, so good job on that!

Quite a number of your boxes have diverging lines, instead of receding in perspective. This makes them look like tapered wedges instead of boxes. However, this is a very difficult exercise at this stage, so it was to be expected. You will have a lot more opportunity to practice this during the 250 Box Challenge.

hello,

i'll be handling your lesson 1 hw critic.

first of all, great job on completing the lesson.

lines

1. in the first page of superimposed line, i can see that there's fraying only at the end which is what we aim for in this part. however, on the second page fraying is visible on both end and we try to avoid this.

also, i'm noticing some sort of texture with the lines which might've been caused by board / (sth else) underneath the paper or maybe it's the paper texture. this can be avoided by adding 3-4 printer paper underneath your drawing surface and don't use texture paper in general.

[ regular printer paper or office paper is recommended. ]

2. ghosted lines: some lines have a bit of curving and wobbliness. to get straighter lines, try to rotate the paper and practice ghosting on the opposite direction (of a curve).

3. ghosted planes: try to follow the same principles mentioned in ghosted lines section.

what's standing out the most to me is the amount of blank space left on the paper. try adding as many planes as possible (of various sizes and angles) on the paper. right now, it doesn't look complete.

ellipses

1. tables of ellipses: great job on this exercise! ellipses are looking nice and snug. although, try not going over the ellipses more than 2-3 times.

2. fill out out the page of ghosted planes and add a few more ellipses in planes. keep in mind to maintain the evenness of the ellipses regardless of them touching the edges of the planes.

3. funnels: for the funnel excercise, there's too much gap between the ellipses. we try to avoid this by adding the ellipses as close to one another as possible, as well as trying to keep them within the funnel.

boxes

1. for the plotted perspective, we need to use rulers/ straight edge to draw the boxes. some of the lines seem to have been drawn over. try to avoid it.

2. rough perspective is one of the most difficult exercises. what's standing out the most to me is, you're not using ghosted lines for drawing these boxes. one more thing to keep in mind is we do not extend line to the exact vanishing point but try to make an estimation towards it.

3. the rotated box section has 25 boxes in total (5in each line and 5 in each row). i recommend adding the missing boxes.

4. in the organic perspective excercise, some of the previous issues are noticable. the lines here needs to be drawn using the ghosted method. you can rotate the paper to get the best / straightest possible line.

and don't keep so much space in between the boxes. i recommend adding a few more boxes in between (varying in sizes and rotations).

Hi!

The Superimposed Lines : No wobble lines but there are some fraying lines at the start point which should have not been.

The Ghosted Lines : They seems pretty clean. However there are quite few lines which doesn't stop at the end point. They go over. Not only draw the confident and straight line but stop at the point. Therefore we see this kind of line in the ghost planes as well.

Your Table of Ellipses are more tight and connected to each other than the ghost planes of ellipses. Your ellipses in planes are quite loose. Try to attach the line of ellipsis to the line of plane.

Funnel: They are quite symmetrical.

All kind of your boxes are so nice.

Hi Kukamu, I'll critique this.

Lines

Your Superimposed Lines are looking very confident. I do see a bit of fraying on both ends (or something similar), so you might want to pay close attention to where you put your pen before you start making a mark.

From what I can see, your Ghosted Lines got better as you went. I'd suggest that you work on confidence first (making a smooth, near-straight stroke), and then work on hitting both points. You might want to ghost a bit more, trying to get comfortable with one specific motion, and then executing your mark.

The lines of your Ghosted Planes look wobbly. Again, you should try to get familiar with one motion for the mark you're going to make. Once you got a motion down, execute that mark with the same motion. Any and all opportunity to fail that mark passes as you make the mark. So just ghost, get comfy with one smooth motion, and then do the same motion, trusting your arm to do the rest. I'm sure you'll nail it with time and practice.

Ellipses

Your Tables of Ellipses got decently better over time. Again, after ghosting for a good amount, let your arm do the motion again to the best of its ability. We're aiming for confident, smooth ellipses first. Once you have confidence down, you can start to work on fitting them snugly.

Your funnels look pretty good. I can see you got more confident with certain ellipses. When you plan to go back to this exercise, just be sure to prepare/ghost more.

Your Ellipses in Planes look wonky. There are some that were smoothly executed, but a lot of them try to reach the edges instead of being even. Though we try to hit the four edges, it's not our first priority. Keep in mind we prioritize getting the ellipses smoothly first, then hitting all four edges. I think its best to think of it as though the planes aren't actually there. That way, it gives better peace of mind when ghosting and executing.

Boxes

You did Plotted Perspective well. No real issue there aside from a couple weird vertical lines here and there.

You followed the steps of Rough Perspective well. Though you should go back and check the convergences of the depth lines with a different-colored pen.

For Rotated Boxes, the outer boxes of the plus/axis don't have any real rotation in comparison the the box next to them. Some gaps weren't really narrow enough. As a result, the boxes on the corners look rough. I'd say you should make these boxes a tad bit smaller, and keep your gaps narrow.

For Organic Perspective, you did follow each step correctly. And you played around with the smaller-and-bigger boxes idea of far and near boxes very well. Nice job.

Conclusion

You were pretty half-and-half when it came to either prioritizing confidence or accuracy. Work on confidence, then accuracy. I can tell you have a good idea as to how ghosting benefits, so just ghost until you're comfortable making the motion for the mark. It looks like you knew what you were doing for the boxes exercises for the most part. On the whole though, there is a lot of room for improvement. And I'm sure you can improve once you put your mind to it. I think there should be some revisions. Try your best, and don't be too hard on yourself. If anything, really great job on your first time with these concepts.

First thing learned and the most important is to draw confident lines. Now that i got that out of the way, we need to ask "what's the purpose of 250 box challange?" and that it is to visualise the box in 3D, we learn early on in the "Ploted perspective lesson" what it means if the 4 lines converge to the same point of perspective, and that is: the lines are paralel. Now try to visualise what it mean when they are not converging to the same point. A perfect box is a box that all 3 set of lines converge to the same point, so if they don't it means it's not a perfect box. This is useful when you draw things that you already know the size and their distance of the viewer. Drawing by instinct will come handy after you understand perfectly 3D positioning. i would not say to draw more boxes, i'd say to go back and as an exercise try to visualise the shape of the boxes. I'm also waiting for box review and this is what info i gathered till now. Idk if i have the authority to aprove you to go on but i aprove. Also i think you need 2 aprovals. I'll mark the box challange as complete. (side note: the goal is to visualise an object in space, it's not to draw a perfect box; you draw a perfect box as a result of good visualisation) i think it's safe to move to lesson 2.