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Thank you for the feedback!!

Hi Keisari!

https://imgur.com/a/oAejppv

Here's my HW.

I did the exercises twice because I wanted to practice a bit more. (Plus, I kind of got the hang of the arrows exercice once I finished the first page, that's why I wrote myself a few corrections. The reason why I re-did it because I didn't want to hand in a self-corrected HW, when it's supposed to be corrected by others.)

Anyway that's all. Hope you have a great day and thanks for taking a look at it :D

Okay great!! Thank you!!

Hi Keisari! Thank you so much for providing such great feedback. It helped me a lot and I very much appreciate it :D

I'll be working on my HW throughout the next days. But before that, I've got a few questions to ask you:

"I'd like to note you shouldn't be doing waves for your minor axes and they should have a consistent width"

What do you mean by waves? Do you mean those lines that go throughout the middle of the sausage? They're wavy and I should keep them straight? And by a consistent width-- I changed the width of my ellipses on purpouse because I thought that depending on how the sausage would turn in space, the degree of the ellipse would change-- (Seems like I applied the concept wrong, is that the case?)

And thank you so much for providing those extra links for me to check out- they look very helpful :D!

All in all, Thank you so much and I hope that you have a great day :)

Hey there, I've got my HW ready!

https://imgur.com/a/9KENZGw

Thanks for giving me feedback! and have a good day you too!!

Great! I'll be looking forward to them! :D

Hello Catab! My name is Piapal and I'll be reviewing your work!

First of all, congratulations on trying Drawabox again and finishing lesson one!

Your honesty is very much appreciated, and at the same time, a good observation to take in mind. Since patience is one of Drawabox keys, it is essential that you don't rush through your assignments so that you can achieve the best of what you can do in each homework.

Let's move onto the critique:

LINES

Congratulations on having no fraying beginnings in the Superimposed Exercise. This is remarkable because it shows that you've been carefully placing your pen in the beginning of the lines and then executing the action. This, in fact, is patience! And you delivered good results so that's great.

However, in this exercise and in the ghosted lines one, I can see that your lines aren't that smooth and straight yet. In the ghosted lines exercise I saw that you focused on accurately drawing a line that could meet both dots. Yet, you delivered "curvy" lines, in order to nail that accuracy. I wouldn't focus on that just yet, rather on keeping your lines straight and confidently done.

It will improve with practice, though. So keep doing it in your warm ups.

In fact, I can see improvement in the Planes exercise. Smoothly, accurately, and straight lines, so congrats on that!

Only a few aren't straight or in their end, they look a bit wobbly. But since you've shown improvement very quickly, I'd say that it will also keep improving with practice (and patience) and also using the ghosting method as much as you need.

ELLIPSES

Many of your ellipses conserve their form and look inside the plane, so congrats on that! My only remark for that exercise is that they overshooted a bit sometimes, and they were drawn over more than two times. If you ghost them enough, you won't need to go over them that much. So remember to be patient and ghost enough in order to deliver smooth, confidently drawn ellipses.

Yet again, you've shown improvement quickly as you moved onto the funnels exercise. Your ellipses look more smooth, not redrwan over more than two times, and they conserve their form, they don't overshoot, and they're well bunched up together. Congratulations. It's a difficult exercise and you've done very well!!

As you experimented with different kinds of forms of ellipses in the Table of Ellipses, it is expected for your ellipses to turn out a bit "sloppier" but I'll remark what I said in the previous exercise. Only a bit of them overshoot or look a bit redrawn, yet the rest look great. I'd only work on ghost them enough times until you feel confident enough to draw your ellipse in the shape you desire and also to avoid to redraw them more than two times. (Drawabox asks for you to go over them two times only)

BOXES

Your boxes look neat and smooth. You also nailed the perspective in the Rough Perspective exercise and you also managed to maintain the form of each box. Your exercise looks great. My only remark here is that a few lines wobble a bit or look just a bit curvy but that will improve with practice and patience as you ghost over your lines as much as you need.

But I must admit that this critique I said it is because I have a perfectionist eye- It seems that you understand how Vanishing Points and Perspective works, and you are also able to portray it in these exercises.

These critiques I'm giving you are only for you to know in what you have to keep working on.

Rotated Box Exercise: It looks very neat. Your lines have improved because they look straighter and confidently done.

My only remark here, is that it seems that you struggled to keep the perspective of your boxes right as they turn in space.

(Hence why you feel that the exercise turned out stiff) which is normal because it's one of your first attempts at this exercise. In order for you to know what I'm talking about, I'll talk to you about the first box to the right of the centered one. If you take a ruler and extend the four set of lines that are meeting in a VP to the right, you'll see that the lines on the foreground will likely meet in a point, but the ones behind will diverge from them and never meet the same VP they are supposed to meet at. This happened in many of your boxes. If I were you, I'd take a ruler and extend lines from your boxes like in the Rough Perspective exercise, for you to see what I'm talking about and so that you can keep track of your mistakes and know where to focus next. (this is what I mean when I say that your lines are diverging: https://imgur.com/KSHwTwo ) However, you've delivered very good results!! Congratulations!!

The form of your boxes looks conserved though, which is remarkable. All in all, a very good submission.

Organic Perspective: You drew different kinds of boxes (in shape and form) which is great, and in my opinion, you're nailing that perspective, even though you're a beginner in this course, which is very remarkable. When your boxes become smaller, they turn out a bit wobblier. Remember to put just as much effort to those tiny boxes, to the big ones. I know it is difficult because they're smaller, but your skills have shown that you could achieve straighter lines for those tiny boxes. So it's a matter of patience.

In conclusion: you have delivered a very good homework submission. I can see that you've understood the fundamentals teached in this lesson. You are trying to keep your lines smooth and straight, and the more you practiced, the better they became. I can see that you're engaging your shoulder, that you're ghosting your lines, too. You even nailed the perspective of your boxes many times, which means that you're thinking while you're ghosting. I won't ask for revisions, since I believe that the points in which you struggled are facts to keep in mind and correct while you re-do these exercises as your warm-ups. In fact, re-do the ones (in your warm-ups) that turned out to be the most difficult to you. (I'd recommend you to do the Rotated box one, and to keep in mind what I've told you.)

Last thing: after reviewing your whole work, I believe that you've been very patient because you delivered very good results compared to other people I have reviewed. So, if you still think that you haven't been patient enough, I must admit that you are on a very good track. Keep being patient, and if you feel that you could be more patient, then do so in order to deliver results to the best of your current ability. (Which is already great!)

In my opinion, you're totally capable of moving onto the 250 Box Challenge. I'm happy to mark this lesson as complete. Congrats!!

Okay, thanks. I'll hand it in once I have it ready.

Okay, thank you for your critique!

I was wondering if you could tell me what I should next. Should I draw more boxes? If so, how many? Of course, taking into account what you told me.

Or am I able to move onto Lesson two?

Thanks!

Hi there! This is PiaPal and I'll be reviewing your work! Congrats on finishing the first lesson.

LINES

The farther you went throughout the exercises, the straighter and smoother your lines became, congrats on achieving that!

Superimposed lines: I can see no fraying beginnings, which means that you've been carefully placing your pen in the beginning and then executing your action. There are also straight lines to be seen (with no wobbliness!), even though it was the first exercise. Congrats on that! However, I can see fraying ends, and a few lines denote a curviness that can be expected to happen. Which makes me believe that you have been executing your line-making a bit too fast. I would take more time in-between your line-making, (hence, more patience), in order to execute smooth, and confident lines. I also believe that you haven't been engaging your shoulder that much. All this will improve with practice, so I'd include this exercise in your warm ups. Plus, I'd include the ghosting method before executing each actions in order to improve your confidence in your line making and thus getting better results.

Ghosting lines: In my opinion, I would have done more of those to improve your current abilities. Your lines in there still show a curviness, which in the future should diminish. I guess that you've rushed through this exercise. And remember that patience is one of Drawabox keys and will also be helpful for you to get better results. Take your time between each line, and also ghost them as much as you need to avoid the curviness. Train your arm muscles, warm them up, in order to gain enough confidence to execute your action.

Planes: Lines look indeed much straighter! Congrats! Your accuracy is still a bit off but it will improve with practice AND applying the ghosting method as much as you need. And given the fact that a few lines look overshooted, I also guess that you've rushed here too.

ELLIPSES

Good job in trying to fit your Ellipses where you're drawing them. It needs patience to be done, and lots and lots of ghosting and engaging your shoulder. Which seems done, so great!! I can see that you've gone over the ellipses more than two times, which isn't necessary if you've ghosted the ellipses enough to gain the confidence you require to execute your ellipses. I may have contradicted myself with what I previously said, but I don't think so: I guess that you're applying the ghosting method correctly but maybe you have to execute that action and be confident of what you're making, loosing the fear of executing a "bad" ellipse. Mistakes will happen because they're natural, so don't worry about that. Important is that you hand in homework that proves the best of your current abilities, and if you need to do revisions, that won't be bad because you'll learn from your mistakes and keep improving. So apply the ghosting, be patient, loose the fear, and execute the action confidently. Trust in yourself and you won't be needing to go over your ellipses more than 2 times, which is what Drawabox aims for.

The volume of your ellipses looks mostly conserved, so congrats on that, too.

Ellipses in planes: I really like their roundiness. That's a great achievement, considering that students sometimes tend to struggle with keeping their form. Yet, a few ellipses overshoot, but only in the second time you go over them. That makes me think if you've gone fast over them, too.

Funnels: I liked that you tried to experiment and test if you could achieve this change in degree in your ellipses. In my opinion, it even looks pretty good. Which is remarkable, but for now, I'd recommend you to stick to the first level of the assignment: achieving smooth, confident ellipses within the funnel. In my opinion, that's something you should aim for, now: drawing smooth ellipses and keeping them well bunched up together, without overshooting. Then, move onto the next step. Drawabox is a slow process, I wouldn't recommend you to rush, but to improve your current abilities until you're able to tackle that one exercise, which is difficult.

BOXES

Regarding the first exercise, I can see that you've gone over your boxes a few times, "correcting" mistakes. Plus, they look rushed, even though you were using a ruler.

Same goes to the second exercise, adding the fact that your lines turned out sloppier, curvy, and doesn't seem like you've been ghosting your actions nor engaging your shoulder enough times.

Rotated Boxes is a really difficult exercise. I can see the same rush, plus, I can also denote that you haven't fully grasped the perspective concept. I'd recommend you to re-read the material about it, and take your time to comprehend it.

Same goes to the organic perspective exercise.

I will request revisions, in which I want you to aim for the following:

1. Patience: you've rushed a lot, therefore achieving sloppy results. So Ghost your lines, gain confidence, be patient, and then, execute your actions. Only then, your line-making will improve.

2. Aim for straight and smooth lines. Don't focus on accuracy at the moment.

3. A few tips for tackling perspective:

   There is a set of parallel lines that will eventually meet at a Vanishing point. These must converge in there, not diverge from one another (https://imgur.com/KSHwTwo) Therefore, I always recommend that while you're ghosting your lines, you extend them a bit to where your desired VP is. Train your arm muscles and then execute the action in that direction but don't draw all the way through. That's what's been helping me to achieve these exercises.

   https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/6/video Re-Reading this material will help you greatly.

4. I wouldn't try the highest levels of exercises if you're still struggling with the first levels. Go one by one, so that you also don't get frustrated in the end. Art is hard, and you'll get eventually better with practice. Doing these exercises as warm-ups will help you greatly.

Lastly, I still want to congratulate you for finishing this lesson and compromising with this course! It's tough, yet packed with knowledge that will indeed improve your art. Keep drawing and congratulations again!