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Hey MamileShiny! I am paperhat and I will be doing your lesson 1 critique.

My critique will be divided into three sections:

Lines

• Super-imposed lines: Your lines are looking confident and not wobbly. That is great! Your shorter lines only have fraying on one end, which is desirable. Your longer lines, however, also have a little fraying on the starting end as well. Be sure to be patient and put your pen down with confidence and thought in oder to avoid fraying on two sides. The longer lines also have arch a bit. Arching might happen if you are not using your shoulder pivot. However, it might also happen if you use your shoulder pivot. In that case try to consciously arch in the opposite direction. Try to pay close attention on which pivot your are using. With more time and practice this issue will resolve itself though (:

• Ghosted Lines: Your lines are mostly not wobbly. Here and there you can see that your brain tried to "correct" the line, which results in a little wobble, arching or s-shaped line. Try to consciously work against that "urge". COnfidence is way more important than accuracy! Accuracy will automatically follow confidence over time and practice.

• Ghosted Planes: Here your lines look very confident and are quite accurate as well! You also remembered to always place a starting and an end point. Very well done!

Ellipses

• Tables Of Ellipses: Your ellipses are nicely touching and repeated two to three times, that is perfect! (For future reference: two times is preferred) Some of them are overshooting/undershooting the bounds a little, but that is perfectly fine and to be expected. There are also ellipses that look quite wobbly and not really smooth. For ellipses that same thing holds as for lines: confidence (a smooth ellipse) over accuracy (touching border perfectly)! With the bigger ellipses this problem is more prominent, but the smaller ones are also not always as confident as they should be. Be sure to include this exercise in your warm-ups and keep practicing confidence (:

• Ellipses in Planes: Those ellipses have the same problem as the ones before. Confidence gets lost in price of accuracy.

• Funnels: You placed the minor axis correctly, cutting the ellipses in two halves! Again, your ellipses quite accurate but not always smooth (although it is better here). One other thing to note: Some of your funnels have an ellipses on the middle line diving the funnel into a left and a right half. This is not how it is supposed to be, the line in the middle is an ellipses itself. The ellipses you draw into the funnel should be kind of mirrored at this axis. Look out for that in the future.

Boxes

• Plotted Perspective: You draw through all your boxes and your hatching is neat. Good job!

• Rough Perspective: You draw through all your boxes and use the line correction method. Here and there it looks like you have repeated a line, do not do this. It doesn't matter how off a line is, just keep it as is and move. This is very important. Your lines here are partially less confident as the ones before and wobble here and there. When you do this task during your warm-ups make sure that width lines are parallel to the horizon and height lines perpendicular to the horizon. You did this really well here, but I wanted to point it out again, so you do not forget (:

• Rotated Boxes: : You keep the corners between boxes close and tried to rotate the boxes. You also applied some hatching which makes your boxes stand out better. This is great! However, you have missed some boxes (all the corner ones and one more in the lower right corner). Look again at this picture to make out the ones you are missing: https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/17/step8

• Organic Perspective: : You have a variety of box sizes and angles and also tried overlapping some boxes. Here and there you have repeated some lines, I assume that is lineweight. Be sure to also ghost those lines, so it does not look like two seperate lines but like one! Also apply the lineweight only at the intersections of two overlapping boxes and not everywhere.

Firstly, congrats for sticking with the lesson and making it two the end. That is an amazing achievement! The main thing I would like you to work on before going into the 250 box challenge is confidence! This is a very crucial part of this first lessons and thus I want to empathize it. Below you can see which tasks I would like you to redo before taking the next step. Good luck!

Hey! Thank you very much for your kind words, really appreciate it!

Hey! Firstly you are very welcome (:

I will go quickly over your redone homework:

• Ghosted Lines : These look way better now! Your lines only have a bit of arching to them now, but with practice and conscious training this will go away (speaking from experience :D). Your lines are also more accurate, which shows great improvement. Overall this task now looks quite neat and nice. Well done!

• Ellipses in Planes : Your lines have also really improved here, they look confident and quite accurate as well. Your ellipses are also more confident looking and the problem of correcting yourself while drawing the ellipse seems to be gone. Good job!

So all in all this looks very nice and you have shown great improvement. I will mark this lesson as complete now. 250 boxes are waiting for you!

Hey!

This looks way better! You did a really good job here keeping the corners close to each other and rotating the boxes in space. Your hatching also looks neat and makes your boxes stand out even better!

I am going to mark this submission as complete now. The next step for you is the 250 box challenge, good luck!

Oh, and if you want to receive your badge for this lesson make sure to get two agrees on a critique.

Hey Beckerito!

First of all thank you very much for this detailed critique!

Reading through it while looking at my submission has shown me things I was either not aware of before, or I knew it didn't look quite right but could not pinpoint down why. Now I understand my problems a lot better which will definitely help me improve my work during the warm-ups session and in general as well.

Your tips and suggestions at which material I should look again has also helped me a ton to understand some issues and I am sure that they will help me to improve my work.

So thank you again for taking time out of your day in order to critique my work! Means a lot!

Now I am excited to draw some plants! (:

Hey Cughes! I am paperhat and I will be doing your lesson 1 critique.

My critique will be divided into three sections:

Lines

• Super-imposed lines: Your lines are looking confident and not wobbly. That is great! There is also only fraying on one end which shows me that you take your time doing the exercises and think about where to put done your pen at the beginning. Your lines are also not arching or curving, this is great as well!

• Ghosted Lines: Very confident lines again! Your accuracy is also very good already! Here I can see a tiny bit of arching with the longer lines. Arching might happen if you are not using your shoulder pivot. However, it might also happen if you use your shoulder pivot. In that case try to consciously arch in the opposite direction. Try to pay close attention on which pivot your are using. Here it also seems like you are correcting yourself in order to hit the end point. Be sure to not do this. Confidence and straight lines are way more important than accuracy. Accuracy will come over time.

• Ghosted Planes: Again, confident lines, and very accurate as well, good job! Furthermore you made very great use out of the paper space and tried different sizes and angles. One thing to note: It is very important to always place start and end points in order to use the ghosting method properly. Here it sometimes seems like you have not done that and you have either placed no points or only one.

Ellipses

• Tables Of Ellipses: Your ellipses are nicely touching and repeated two to three times, that is perfect! (For future reference: two times is preferred) Some of them are overshooting/undershooting the bounds a little, but that is perfectly fine and to be expected. On thing I can see here is that your "rounds" are not really on the same ellipse shape, it seems like you are correcting the accuracy of the ellipse while you are drawing it. Be sure to try to get the multiple lines as close together as you can, but this is also something that comes with more practice.

• Ellipses in Planes: The majority of these ellipses is looking confident as well. The ones that have a little wobble to it are also the ones that were undershooting a lot. Again confidence over accuracy! Some of your ellipses are not touching all 4 sides of the plane, but that is fine. Overall your ellipses seem to have already improved since the Tables of Ellipses exercise. Good job!

• Funnels: You placed the minor axis correctly, cutting the ellipses in two halves! Most of your ellipses also look confident and do not overshoot too much. One thing to note: Some of your funnels have an ellipses on the middle line diving the funnel into a left and a right half. This is not how it is supposed to be, the line in the middle is an ellipses itself. The ellipses you draw into the funnel should be kind of mirrored at this axis. Look out for that in the future.

Boxes

• Plotted Perspective: You draw through your boxes which is very good. You also have tried to apply some hatching, however, it is not really hatching and not really neat. This makes your boxes look less neat and nice. Look again at how the hatching is done here: https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/15/step8

• Rough Perspective: You draw through all your boxes and use the line correction method. Here and there it looks like you have repeated a line, do not do this. It doesn't matter how off a line is, just keep it as is and move. This is very important. If you do this task during your warm-ups make sure that width lines are parallel to the horizon and height lines perpendicular to the horizon. You did this really well here, but I wanted to point it out again, so you do not forget (:

• Rotated Boxes: : You keep the corners between boxes close and tried to rotate the boxes. It looks like the lower left corener is the last one you did, becuase here it is rotated correctly (especially the right side is not really rotated). You could have tried to apply some hatching to make your boxes pop more, lineweight can also help with that. I am sure that with those two things this would look even better.

• Organic Perspective: : Your lines are confident and quite accurate as well! You have a variety of box sizes and angles and also tried overlapping some boxes. In the future you could also try to apply lineweight to the silhouettes to make it even clrearer which box is in front.

You have done a really good job here and can be proud of yourself for making it through! I would like seeing you try the rotated boxes exercise again, because I think at the end of the task you started to understand way better how the boxes behave in 3d space and I'd like you to deepen this starting understanding before diving into the 250 box challenge. Good luck!

Thank you! Colored pencils are my favorite!

Hey ASYL7FIDY! I am paperhat and I will be doing your lesson 1 critique.

My critique will be divided into three sections:

Lines

• Super-imposed lines: Your lines are looking confident and not wobbly. That is great! There is also only fraying on one end which shows me that you take your time doing the exercises and think about where to put done your pen at the beginning. A lot of your lines, especially the longer ones, have quite some arching to them. Arching might happen if you are not using your shoulder pivot. However, it might also happen if you use your shoulder pivot. In that case try to consciously arch in the opposite direction. Try to pay close attention on which pivot your are using. Here it sometimes also looks like your are trying to correct your line in order to stay on the first line, which gives them a bit of a S-shape. Try to actively not correct your lines while drawing. Accuracy is not as important as confidence.

• Ghosted Lines: Here I can see the same problems as with the first exercise, arching and trying to correct the lines in order to hit the end point. One other thing to note: Do not make your ghosting points to large, the are supposed to be points and not spheres. Other than that your lines look mainly confident and not wobbly!

• Ghosted Planes: Here your lines are getting more accurate and a little less archy. Arching now mainly appears in your longer lines, before I could also see it on shorter one. So you have already improved! Your accuracy is still off, however, that will get better over time. Furthermore you made very great use out of the paper space and tried different sizes and angles.

Ellipses

• Tables Of Ellipses: Your ellipses are nicely touching and repeated two to three times, that is perfect! (For future reference: two times is preferred) Some of them are overshooting/undershooting the bounds a little, but that is perfectly fine and to be expected. Here and there you might have added some more small ellipses to fill up the free space.

• Ellipses in Planes: The majority of these ellipses is looking confident as well. Some of your ellipses are not touching all 4 sides of the plane, but that is fine. Your confidence and accuracy seems to have already improved since the Tables of Ellipses exercise. However, with this exercise it looks like you are sometimes correcting yourself in order to be more accurate. The "first round" of the ellipses looks very confident (but undershoots) and the "second round" does not (but is not undershooting as much). Remember: Confidence over accuracy!

• Funnels: You placed the minor axis correctly, cutting the ellipses in two halves! Your ellipses are drawn confidently and are not overshooting or undershooting a lot. One thing to note: Your funnels have an ellipses on the middle line diving the funnel into a left and a right half. This is not how it is supposed to be, the line in the middle is an ellipses itself. The ellipses you draw into the funnel should be kind of mirrored at this axis. Look out for that in the future. Another thing you might want to during you warm-ups is to make your ellipses more narrower the closer they are to the middle.

Boxes

• Plotted Perspective: You draw through your boxes (one is missing at the top right) which is very good. One thing you might want to add in the future is some hatching, this would make your boxes look even better!

• Rough Perspective: You draw through all your boxes and use the line correction method. Your lines look not as confident as before, this is probably because you tried to be more accurate this time. Again, accuracy comes over time, so just be confident. If you do this task during your warm-ups make sure that width lines are parallel to the horizon and height lines perpendicular to the horizon. You did this really well here, but I wanted to point it out again, so you do not forget (:

• Rotated Boxes: : You keep the corners between boxes close and draw through all the boxes. Within this task I can see a lot of improvement, your left half is nearly not rotated. But your right half looks fine and rotated! Well done! I can see that you tried to apply some lineweight, in the future be sure to use the ghosting method for the lineweight as well. At the moment I can see that you did not quite add the second line over the first, this makes your boxes look a bit messy. Other than that you did this frustrating task very well!

• Organic Perspective: : Here your lines look more confident and at the same time accurate as in the tasks before. Well done improving! You have a variety of box sizes and angles and also tried overlapping some boxes. With this exercise you have either tried adding some lineweight, which looks messy. Or your have repeated some lines that were not as accurate as you wanted them to be. If this was the case be sure to not do that in the future. A confident, inaccurate line is way better than two semi-confident wierdly overlapping lines.

You have done agreat job with sticken to the exercises and following the instructions. Within your exercises it seems like you have already learned and improved a bunch, this is great! However, I am still given you a little bit of homework to work on your confidence even more. Good luck!

Oh, I didn't see that because I filtered by community submissions.

But more critique is always better I guess (:

Hey Cjshaf! I am paperhat and I will be doing your lesson 1 critique.

My critique will be divided into three sections:

Lines

• Super-imposed lines: Your lines are looking confident and not wobbly. That is great! There is also only fraying on one end which shows me that you take your time doing the exercises and think about where to put done your pen at the beginning. Very well done!

• Ghosted Lines: Very confident lines again! Your accuracy is also very good already! Here and there it looks like you were correcting your lines in order to be that accurate (does not have to be consciously, this is just something that the brain does). If you catch yourself trying to correct the movement into the right direction, try to allow yourself to not do that. It does not matter if you hit the end point perfectly, what matters is that you draw your line confidently and without any curvature. Confidence > accuracy. Overall this task looks great as well though!

• Ghosted Planes: Again, confident lines, and very accurate as well, good job! Furthermore you made very great use out of the paper space and tried different sizes and angles. One thing to note: It is very important to always place start and end points in order to use the ghosting method properly. I cannot see all of those in your planes, specifically for the inner lines. When you use this task during your warm-up be sure to make all the points. Other that that, this looks nice!

Ellipses

• Tables Of Ellipses: Your ellipses are nicely touching and repeated two to three times, that is perfect! (For future reference: two times is preferred) Some of them are overshooting/undershooting the bounds a little, but that is perfectly fine and to be expected. With this exercise it again looks like you are sometimes correcting yourself in order to be more accurate. The "first round" of the ellipses looks very confident (but undershoots) and the "second round" does not (but is not undershooting as much). Again, confidence over accuracy! Overall this look great though!

• Ellipses in Planes: The majority of these ellipses is looking confident as well. Some of your ellipses are not touching all 4 sides of the plane, but that is fine. YOur confidence and accuracy seems to have already improved since the Tables of Ellipses exercise. Good job!

• Funnels: You placed the minor axis correctly, cutting the ellipses in two halves! Your ellipses are drawn confidently and are not overhooting or undershooting a lot. Very well done!

Boxes

• Plotted Perspective: You draw through your boxes and also use hatching to show which planes are facing the viewer. Your hatching is also very neat and makes your boxes look very nice!

• Rough Perspective: You draw through all your boxes and use the line correction method. Your lines look confident and not wobbly or arching. If you do this task during your warm-ups make sure that width lines are parallel to the horizon and height lines perpendicular to the horizon. You did this really well here, but I wanted to point it out again, so you do not forget (:

• Rotated Boxes: : This looks really nice! You keep the corners between boxes close and rotate the boxes extremely well, especially for this point in the course. You also draw through all the boxes. Your hatching is nice and neat again and makes your boxes stand out better. One thing you could have done to make your boxes stand out even more is to add some lineweight to the silhouette . This is a hard and frustrating task and you still followed through very well, good gob!

• Organic Perspective: : As with all the task your lines are confident. You have a variety of box sizes and angles and also tried overlapping some boxes. I can see that you tried applying lineweight to one of the rectangles. However, it does not really do the trick here, because it is a bit too bold and inaccurate. When applying lineweight be sure to use the ghosting method as well and do not overdo it. Overall this looks good!

You have done a really good job here and can be proud of yourself for making it through this well! I think you are ready to face the next challenge! Good luck with all those boxes!