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Hi Baozi, I'm gonna go over your submission,

Starting out by your organic arrows, I really like how you are making them flow confidently through space, remember that you can make a more solid illusion of the arrows getting closer by making them bigger as they get closer and making the space in between turns smaller as they get further away; you are already doing this but sometimes you are mixing them a bit, so try to exagerate this and have fun with it! Also, I'm seeing that you started trying to add line weight focusing on confidence, though then you started doing a slow wobbly line. Keep striving to apply your line weight confidently by ghosting them, you will get better at accuracy with millage, so push through!

Moving on to your organic forms, they are very close to the characteristics of the simple sausage, though try to make both ends more rounder and the same size! On your contour curves, you are doing a good job on them, however, I would advice you push their roundness a little more since they are falling a little flat and this sausages are round. One thing that you can do to sell a better illusion of depth is changing the degrees of your ellipses- The ellipses and contour cuves of this exercise represent how the cross sections along the sausage face towards de viewer, if they start moving towards the viewer, we'll be able to see more of them (higher degree), though if it starts moving away from the viewer, we'll see less (lower degree). Here is a diagram that explains it more visually.

On to your textures, overall you are doing a good job at them, this is a difficult exercise. However there are a few things I want to point out so you keep on the right track.

• First, you are almost doing the perfect job, because although you are using cast shadows to implicitly showing the viewer how that texture is feels (because remember that that's why we use texture here, not to create pretty pictures), you are still sometimes falling into using lines to describe those textures. I'd recommend you go back to the implicit vs explicit video on the lesson, where Uncomfy explains why is it important that we don't just jump into exactly everything we see (which you are not doing, don't worry).

• On the same note, the reasons we use a gradient from dark to light on the dissections is so we can use cast shadows, though I'm seing that you've use one in cases like your textured glass and your pelican back, in which you did a great job!

Your form intersections look pretty solid, the major thing that I'm seeing is that you are sometimes getting a little messy with the line weight, remember that is supposed to be added subtly and as a super imposed line that we ghost beforehand (like every mark we put down in this course; it should be ghosted), so keep that in mind moving forward! Also, you can use paint 3d after you are done with your exercises, to check how the intersections really are!

So, on your organic intersections you are doing a good job making them sit in top of each other, though you are doing a lot of scratchy lines, remember that our priority with every line is making them as confident as we can, so always ghost your lines and strive for that. Also, when you are doing cast shadows, I'd recommend you get a brush pen to fill them in with black, though if you cannot get one, you should take your time to slowly fill them up as solid as you can, since leaving them how they are now, they are too scratchy and end up fighting against what you did on the exercise.

Overall, you did a solid work on this lesson, remember to ghost all of your lines though. I'm gonna go ahead and mark it as completed! Keep it up.

Hello,

I think you did great!

Good luck in your art journey

Hi Fehsalamander, I've checked your submission.

Starting out by your arrows, you are doing a good job maintaining consistent and confident lines, while also making them flow. One thing that caught my eye is that while you are applying cast shadows, you are not applying line weight- Remember that line weight is a key tool we have to clarify how our forms overlap on localized areas, so check this part of the lesson and this demo on how to apply it! As I have already said, you are doing a good job making these arrows flow, though currently they look like they are just flowing through the 2d space of the page, which is a good step, though I advice you try to make them more dynamic and try making as they flow through 3d space- This can be done by using both thw width of the arrows themselves and the negative spaces between arrows turns, check this part of the lesson where it is explained.

Moving on to your organic forms, you are getting pretty close to the characteristics of the regular sausage, though not there yet, try making both sides the same size! Also, try pushing your contour curves a bit more since right now your forms look a little flatter than what they should be. Good job on maintaining your lines confident, though whenever you are doing ellipses remember to go through them just two times since more than this it will look messy. One thing that you can do to improve the illusion of 3d of your forms would be to change the degrees of the ellipses and contour curves as they move through space- The degree of a contour represents the orientation of that cross section of the form in relation to the viewer, so as we slide along the sausage, it will either become wider (meaning it will face us more), or it will become thiner as it turns away from us. Check this demo for a more visual explanation.

Now, I'm seeing that you are kind of there with your textures- In the first exercise I see that you making an effort to keep your textures in an implicit way using just cast shadows, which is great! Though, whenever you are doing textures that look too much like lines (like in you wooden texture), try this approach where we draw a thin space and fill it up, creating a more dynamic texture. The problem came in your dissections, where your focus turned from cast shadows to the negative spaces and the outlines of your textures. I know how hard this exercise is, though remember that whenever approaching texture it has to be like you did it in your texture analysis- This is, with the use of cast shadows so we can create an implicit texture where we don't need to add all that is there, instead we can just let the viewer believe it for itself.

On to your form intersections, you are doing a solid work at it, this is a hard exercise meant to start making you think about how different forms relate within each other, so don't get frustrated if you fail at it, though as I've already said, you did a good job. Remember that no matter what exercise we are doing, we should be still applying the ghosting method and trying to make your lines as confident as you can.

Last one, your organic intersections show a good understanding of how those forms relate to each other, though looking at the contour curves you are applying I go back to the correction I did on your organic forms; Remember to maintain your forms consistent, and try to push your contours to make them look more round, since right now they are a little flat.

Overall, you did a good job on the lesson, So I'm gonna go ahead and mark it as completed! Keep it up.

Hello,

Most exercises are done well, good job!

Here's some tips:

• For cylinders the side facing away from viewer always have a larger degree

• I see you have trouble with some intersection types, here's a great resource by fellow drawaboxer how they should look like - https://imgur.com/a/6Inx5Bz

• For organic intersections your shadows fall flat - they should curve around the surface they fall on

• Your box hidden corners are off for a lot of them

I suggest practicing both static/organic intersections some more before moving on.

Good luck on your art journey!

overall you did a good job! but your lines are a bit wobbly try realxing your shoulder, wrist and arm!

Hello,

here's critique:

• Arrows: OK, though lines where you went over to indicate line weight are kinda sketchy, in future just ghost a bit before applying them

• Contour forms: then ones with ellipses look OK, for the ones with curves it looks like they do not change in degree much

• Textures: OK

• Intersections: your boxes hidden corner is misplaces in a lot of boxes, cylinders are kinda bad too (the side farther away should always has a wider degree ellipse, also they are kinda flattened). Though this one is tough.

• Organic intersections: OK, some shadows are wrong though, shadow should fallow the form they fall on - so they should change direction and become more flat when they hit the floor

I suggest spending some time to practice area I mentioned before moving on to the next lesson.

Good luck in your art journey!

Hello,

here's the review:

Arrows: OK

Contours on organic forms: OK, could also try varying degree of ellipse more when practicing in the future

Texture: OK

Dissections: some are rushed, but overall OK, could break from contours more (for example fur one is great, but in feather one feathers are too large and barely move from sausage form)

Intersections: OK

Organic intersections: OK

Overall you did great,

good job and good luck in the future lessons

Overall you're making a good attempt! but there are a few important issues I've catched:

Starting with your arrows, the main issue with them is that they're a bit wobbly. Remember you should be drawing them with a confident ghosted line line any of the other lines. It's hard but make sure the line it's at least confident.

Second issue is that the spaces between folds and the size of the arrows aren't growing.

The organic forms are confident, which is great, and you got some there that are pretty good like the on on the bottom right on the first page, but you're making them pretty complex; some bulge, others take several turns and others pinch a bit. All the forms you draw should be as described here.

In textures you're doing a good job observing, but you have a tendency to rely on lines, so give a shot to [this technique](

https://i.imgur.com/M9JJfr4.png) from now on, it should you fix it.

Form intersections is a good attempt, but some of your boxes have clear divergences on them, make sure you plan them enough so it doesn't happen. If you aren't sure about how to avoid it follow this step by step, it should help.

Organic intersections have the same issue as the organic forms, they're confident, but you're doing some squished forms and some pretty long and complex forms, so remember to stick to simple ones. And remember you can add lineweight to overlaps, it will make the picture much more easier to understand.

Before moving on I want you to do:

-1 page of organic arrows

-1 page of organic forms with contour ellipses

-1 page of boxes (3-4 boxes will be enough)

-and 1 page of organic intersections

Good luck and keep it up! You're almost there!

Hi! Congratulations on finishing lesson 2, you're now officially done with the basics!

I'll be going over every exercise and give some feedback, if for any reason at all you're left with questions, please go ahead and ask.

Arrows

In general these look fine, but there's a few things which I'd like to point out.

• Quite a number of your lines still look hesitant. It also looks like you repeated lines in order to hide your mistakes, which in this case is wobbly lines. Keep in mind that you want to ghost these lines and make them as confident as possible.

• The compression on some of your arrows is not entirely correct. Remember that as your arrows sit back further in space the space between the folds is smaller, and gradually increases as your arrow moves toward the viewer.

Organic forms

Your organic forms are fairly well done. Something which is very evident from your ellipses is that these are drawn with accuracy valued over confidence. It's okay for your ellipses to go a bit out of bounds, and is preferred to stiff-looking ellipses that do fit. Your ellipses do vary a bit in degrees, but not much, and some are done incorrectly. It's good to see you experimenting with varying degrees. The degrees of these ellipses show the orientations of these cross-sections in space which would either be more open or narrow. So when you make an ellipse more open, it shows more, and if it's more narrow, it would, naturally, show less. Using this, you can make your sausages appear as if they turn towards/away from us (the viewer.) Here's an image which really helped me understand this concept.

Texture analysis

The main thing in this exercise is having to draw cast shadows, I'm glad to see that's what you're doing. Remember not to fall back on random stippling here, which shows in your moon texture (the rightmost one.) You want to think about every mark you put down.

Dissections

In some of these dissections you're focusing more on form shadows instead of cast shadows (e.g. beehive, corn.) You want to make sure you only draw the cast shadows. Don't forget that cast shadows are shadows that occur when a form block the light. The form shading in this case is on the form itself, while the cast shadows are the shadows projected on another surface. For your beehives you drew and enclosed the form shadows, while you only want to draw the cast shadows (the "inside" in this case.) You're also not really breaking the silhouette. I encourage you for further attempts to experiment with it more. (you can make outlines here.)

From intersections

This exercise is all about getting to know how 3D space works and how these forms relate to eachother. There's some boxes with extreme foreshortening but most boxes have somewhat similar foreshortening which helps make it look more cohesive. Make sure to take your time ghosting circles as it's imperative that they don't look uneven, if they are, they won't look like spheres.

Organic intersections

Remember that for this exercise you want to keep the forms simple, so two connected identical balls would be ideal. Something to also remember is to keep drawing through your forms. Apart from some oddly-shaped sausages they look fine, but the shadows don't quite work. Usually people tend to have their shadows stick to the form, which is something I also see you doing a bit, but there's also spots where there's too much shadow. If you look at the two sausages sitting on top of the bottom sausage (first page,) you'll see that the shadow is a bit too large. Your sausages don't always look stable. There's a bit of floating here and there and also a gap.For this exercise you really want to make sure the whole drawing feels solid.

All in all you did well, good luck with lesson 3!

Arrows: you got the concept yet your lines are too sketchy & wobbly do try drawing from shoulder and drawing lines in one smooth motion (if too scary ghost a lot first)

Contour curves: once again sketchy lines

Contour ellipses: sketchy lines, also all ellipses have same degree, try varying them as the form turns

Textures: OK

Form intersections: sketchy/wobbly lines

Organic intersections: sketchy/wobbly lines

Overall you did quite well: you understood the concepts taught in this lesson, yet your line quality is very bad, I suggest setting aside some time to focus on line quality daily & keep reminding yourself to draw from shoulder without going over lines