# mermanomania

## mermanomania's Sketchbook

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##### 3:11 PM, Saturday March 11th 2023

Congratulations on getting through this challenge! You've improved over the course of these boxes and there's very little mistake in these boxes. There are some things I would like to point out.

One thing I've noticed is that near the end, the convergences get steeper and are more frequently on the page than off. If going forward you could practice more shallow convergences in warm ups as it would be beneficial for this course.

Another thing is that even later on, your inner corner isn't lining up with the other convergences. It's impossible to be perfect 100% of the time but if you are struggling try to place down the inner corner before your final outer corner so that you are thinking about it in the same terms as all the other points you are placing down.

Other than that it's fine, good luck.

Next Steps:

Move onto Lesson 2, remember to add boxes to your pool of warm ups.

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##### 2:52 PM, Saturday March 11th 2023

Hi, I'll critique your lesson for you today.

Lines:

Not much to say other than that there is some slight wobble to your lines. That's to be expected at this stage but remember to use your arm as a pivot and ghost as much as needed to make a smooth stroke with your pen. Also in the ghosted lines exercise you shouldn't connect each line to form one big web, it's expectedthat you just make a lot of free floating lines instead.

Ellipses:

It seems you're doing fine, however I would say to fill in more of the empty space in your table with smaller ellipses.

Boxes:

Nothing much, just line wobbliness. Issues with this and also with perspective will be worked on in the coming lessons.

Next Steps:

The 250 box challenge as well as warm ups using these exercises.

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##### 2:37 PM, Saturday March 11th 2023

Hello, I'll be critiquing your first drawabox lesson today.

Lines:

1. Ghosted lines: Some of your lines are missing both the start and the end point. Whilst it's normal to miss the end point at this stage, your line should always come from the start poin. As such, I would recommend that right before making your line you should rest you pen for a split second on the start point. Another thing is that some of your lines have a slight wobble to them. This could be because you are going to slow or that you are unused to using your arm as a pivot. Make sure to ghost as much as needed before making your mark. Smooth confident line > accuracy.

2. Ghosted planes: The major stand out is that you seem to be repeating some of your lines after a mistake. Don't do this. It's much better to move on after making a mistake in this course.

Ellipses:

1. Table of Ellipses: The ellipses themselves are fine but in this exercise the aim is for the ellipses to touch other, forming tangents with each other and the edges of their compartment.

2. Funnels: Same as the table, the ellipses ought to be touching each other.

Boxes: Mostly just the same problem with the lines, in that they are wobbly but this will be worked on further into the course.

Next Steps:

The 250 Box Challenge. Remember to do exercises from this lesson as warm ups. Good luck and have fun!

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##### 12:44 PM, Saturday March 11th 2023

Hello, I'll be critiquing your lesson 2 submission today.

Arrows: The arrows are mostly fine, you've understood how to give them the illusion of depth. However, it would be nice if you added lineweight to the parts of the arrow that overlap when twisting, as this would give more clarity to how the arrow moves.

Organic forms: The degree of your ellipses are fine, but it seems you have trouble changing the degree of the contour lines. It should follow the same pattern as the ellipses. To help with this, try ghosting an ellipse in the sausage before placing down a hooked contour line.

Textures: Nothing to say, it's all fine.

Form Intersections: Again, no glaring issues, it's alright for now.

Organic Intersections: Only real issue is that some the sausages seem to be unsupported, and a little floaty. Try to imagine each sausage with a mass that will weigh it down on the sausages below, like a water baloon. Other than that, your shadows and contours are all ok.

That's it for now, keep what I said in mind for future warmups

Next Steps:

Lesson 3

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##### 12:11 PM, Saturday March 11th 2023

Hello, congratulations on finishing the challenge, I'll be the one doing critique today.

Here are some things to consider going forward in the future:

Hatching: As I'm sure you are aware, hatching is optional but it's still recommended to do them as they are a good way to clarify to the viewer what side is facing them.

Lineweight: It's a little difficult to tell, but I'm not sure you are adding lineweight to the outline of your box. After finishing a box, please draw an extra line over the lines that make up the silhouette of the box, using the ghosting method. Again this is to help clarify the perspective to the viewer.

Extended Lines: Please extend lines in a different colored pen, you not doing so is partially the reason i can't tell whether or not you added lineweight as instructed.

Other than all that, you've done exceeding well at this challenge with no other glaring issues, just keep what I said in mind for future warmups.

Next Steps:

Lesson 2

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##### 11:39 AM, Friday March 10th 2023

https://imgur.com/a/JJStP1T

Here you go, thanks for the feedback

##### 10:05 AM, Wednesday March 8th 2023

https://imgur.com/a/XGpT3F6

here you go sorry for the mess

##### 11:50 AM, Sunday February 26th 2023

Hello! This looks really good, you're getting it now. No the edges don't have to be parallel, they still have to converge but only slightly, which means the boxes you've drawn are fine. You can now move on to lthe next lesson.

Next Steps:

Move onto lesson 2

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##### 2:38 PM, Tuesday February 21st 2023

Hello, sorry for the delay in reply. I've looked over your boxes and I think you might be confused by what I mean when I say "shallow convergences" vs dramatic. Here are two diagrams representing what I mean: 1 and 2. A lot of your boxes are still very dramatic. Not to repeat myself, but try to envision the vanishing point off the page, and away from the edges of the page.

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##### 2:37 PM, Tuesday February 14th 2023

Hello, and well done for finishing the first step of drawabox. I will be doing your critique today.

Lines:

Not much to say other than some slightly wonky lines. This will get better with practice, just remember to ghost as much as you need, use your shoulder as a pivot and confidence>accuracy.

Boxes:

Your rotated boxes have some placements that feel odd and make it difficult to see. Also your vanishing points seem to be sliding closer to the box, as opposed to further. In organic perspective, your change in perspective should be more dramatic so the sense of objects getting closer is more obvious to the viewer.

That's all for now.

Next Steps:

Move onto the 250 box challenge. Remember to do these lessons as quick warm-ups. Good luck!

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