mattmillerink

Overall I think you did really good here, the superimposed lines I feel you did a good job there, the follow up lesson I could tell was almost getting away from you there. The ruled perspectice looks really on point as well so you definitely understand the material, I see the rough perspective I feel was a little rough but it all seems to be going toward the direction it needs to go so that's good. The tubed elipses and the plotted perspective on the boxes are probably what I'd focus on the most and making sure your form and strokes are good and solid.

Like I said to the last person before: I'm new and not a TA, but if I were to give you advice I think you probably just need more time under your belt with using this stuff, probably keep practicing the techniques were you felt weakest and go at it with learned focus paying attention to all the things the lessons mention such as form, technique, flow, etc. The 0.3 pen may also play a small part in it, thicker lines are easier to make more satisfying appearance especially the ones we learn in drawabox.

New here but going to give this a shot, I think overall your lines elipses and boxes are pretty good as are your vanishing points for the later material, I have the sense that you understand the goals of each excercise.

There is one thing though, the tubed elipses seems like they gave you some trouble which I think that is probably very common. They don't look in sync with each other's axis, some are wobbly. I also feel like there's some inconsistency with the weight of each circle especially as they come in and out of the tubes. I do have a tip that may help you with that:

Take any lined paper and start at one end and make parallel loops all the way to the end without lifting the writing tool. The goal is to make sure they are all parallel and they fill the space up and down without going over or under. In the beginning accuracy is not important, just getting comfortable with the motion. Keep in mind I'm not a drawabox TA nor is this a drawabox specific technique, this method of practice I personally learned from handstyle lettering artists who used this as a way to map their letters freehand so they all slant in the same direction without which just happened to translate well for me in the exercise.

Here is a quick sketch example of what I mean (I haven't had lined paper in years so I rulled it out):

https://imgur.com/xQLHigh

Like I said, not a drawabox technique and only vaguely related but it did come to mind when I was looking over your assignement and I thought maybe it could help. Maybe try a page or two as a warm up before you begin again. Good luck bud!

I wasn't sure what to expect in this critique but I am very happy with the amount of feedback I got. My bad on overlooking that one assignment, when doing it again for the follow up I did it with heavy consideration of the weaknesses you pointed out and I was flabbergasted at how the convergence points turned out. I know you guys said don't overdo it but I did a second page because I felt like I got a bit of a break through with everything you said and just needed to apply it to be sure and I feel like it helped.

Here's the link to the follow up assignment

Mattmillerink follow up lesson 1 https://imgur.com/gallery/34xEbmh

And thanks for the feedback! Don't be afraid to pull any punches, I appreciate honest critiques