lopsidedflan

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    11:31 PM, Thursday December 10th 2020

    Hi Optimuserik, nice to meet you.

    Like you, I just finished my 250 box challenge, it was tough, like the current times, so I understand that you stumbled.

    First, I'd like to say that you sense of perspective y really nice. Although you seem to correct your lines, is clear that you understand how perspective works.

    I suggest you two things. First, try to add some shadow to you drawing, it is really helpfull for give the sense of depth. And the other thing is that you can add more wight, make the outline edges a little more thicker to give the sense of solidity.

    I´m just adding a little things because I totally agree on Raulillos's review. Specially on attempting the same line or trying to correct the stroke and the projection of the lines that you already drew.

    I will no repeat the things that raulillo already said but I would add more work on the boxes. I siggest that, in your warmups, try to do a pair of boxes and projected with the correction that we have writed.

    Good luck and keep the good work

    Next Steps:

    Warmups of two or more boxes with projetion.

    Keep to the second lesson.

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    5:20 PM, Thursday December 10th 2020

    Hello, Optimuserik:

    I am not that ahead of you so take this feedback with a grain of salt. It's based on elodin guidelines to critique this challenge.

    Congratulations, it's a tough challenge and you made it. It would be great if instead of rushing through it you would have completed this with a more calm and constant pace. One of the goals of this challenge is teaching us patience and resilence. Try to stick to a daily routine and make it small enough so you can keep with it. I made 5 boxes a day during all days of the challenge (took me about a month) and that was 1 hour every day. If I would have done more, I'm sure the burnout would have been achieved so I prefered to take more time in the long run but being constant. That's why I improved a lot on my first hundred boxes, because I let a lot of time to let the basics sink in. If you have to take something out of this critique is find out a way to create a routine that works for you.

    I see that there are multiple times where you attempted the same line. I don't know if this was to correct a missed stroke (in which case, stop trying to correct your failures it's a waste of time, learn from them and move on) or if it was to draw thicker lines to add weight to the contour. In the last case, try to do the second pass without stopping after the first so you can use the short term muscular memory accumulated after ghosting.

    Another thing to keep in mind, all the pages are a bit overflowed with lines of the same colour crossing with each other. Try to avoid it because it's confusing at the moment of tell you some feedback. I have seen some extension lines curving at the end, I don't know if it's because of the camera or that you didn't use a ruler on those. If it the first try to fix it using a scanner or an app that fixes that effect. If it is the second, use a ruler.

    Also while extending the lines, you did extend the "ideal" line instead of the drawn one. I had the same doubt while doing the challenge but after reading some similar questions I got to the conclusion that the line that should be extended is the one that is drawn. I think it is nothing too wrong but keep it in mind because the extensions on this exercise should show your progression overall and not only on your estimations with your marks.

    I haven't seen too many boxes with dramatic convergence. It could be interesting if you play around with that concept with a couple of boxes. Also playing with the different lengths of the axis is interesting too but I've already see that you did it with some boxes already.

    You have improved a lot with the inner corner too. The thing that worked for me was to mark it early, before joining the other marks, so I could make corrections without messing up the whole drawing.

    I think your progression overall is good enough to continue with lesson 2.

    Next Steps:

    Continue with lesson 2

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    10:40 PM, Friday November 13th 2020
    • When drawing ghosted planes, I've noticed how you get the inner diagonal lines correct (corner to corner, but then draw a cross right in the middle of the planes, which is incorrect due to perspective. The way you can fix it is by having this cross run through where the diagonals meet, inside the plane. This spot actually marks the true middle lines of the plane, in perspective.

    • Your elipses are pretty good and fit nicely next to each other, except that some of them are running at a different angle. Try to keep that angle consistent throughout.

    • Rough perspective shows that you can definitely work more on converging lines. A lot of them are way off the VP.

    • I think that you're ready for the 250 boxes, just based on how well you did the rotated boxes exercise. You could always improve the linework as some of them are wonky, but that can be done throughout the challenge.

    Next Steps:

    Mark the center lines of the planes correctly, not in the middle but instead where the diagonals meet. Apart from that, move onto the 250 box challenge. You can always come back to these exercises as warm ups before you start a session of drawing your boxes, so you don't need to "perfect" any of them at all.

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    10:00 PM, Friday November 13th 2020

    Hello friend, in general your strokes in the lines part are smooth and reliable, in the ellipses part only some of the ellipses table do not touch the edge but you kept the smoothness and confidence of the stroke in most so it is fine and in the part of boxes, in approximate perspective some of the horizontal lines were inclined a little and remember that they must be kept horizontal

    Next Steps:

    It is a very good job and I think you are ready to go on to the challenge of the 250 boxes, remember to choose 3 exercises from lesson 1 and practice them for 5 minutes each each you start a drawing session

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    12:31 PM, Friday September 18th 2020

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