8:55 AM, Wednesday July 31st 2024
Hi, I'm Laura, I'll do your critique.
Lines
Superimposed lines have some wobble, try looking only at the end point once you have your pen down, it can help reduce wobble, as well as some fraying on both sides, give yourself the time to properly put down the pen, rushing will make it harder.
Ghosted lines&planes are pretty good, though again there are times where you didn't put your pen down on the point, and theres a tiny bit of arcing, consciously use your should more to do the strokes, and try to arc the line in the opposite direction if that helps, also the little "hooks" where at the end of the stroke it curves, try lifting the pen instead of trying to stop.
Ellipses
Table ellipses are good, fit into their sorroundings, can bit lumpy at first but they become smoother, are drawn through 3 times as expected.
Using your shoulder more will help get them smoother, minimizing movement from the wrist and elbow, also try to closely follow the first rotation you made to reduce the gaps.
Ghosted planes are good, same tips as the last one.
The ellipses in funnels are aligned to the minor axis, touch the sides of the funnels, and are relatively smooth, there are some gaps petween them, but practice should help tighten those.
Boxes
Plotted perspective was done well, some slanting in the bach edges(give yourself more time to align your ruler), and the hatching can be a bit wobbly at times, try to ghost those lines too.
Rough perspective is good, first page has some wobbly lines, which reduces in the second, rememeber to ghost your lines and use your shoulder.
Rotated boxes are really good, consistent gaps, good rotation, and all drawn through, good job.
Organic perspective shows a cohesive scene with good depth and converging boxes, somes wobbly lines but it's alright.
Summary
You understood all the concepts taught, applied them well, and did all the assigned homework, I think you're good to go to the 250 box challenge.
Remember the tips mentioned and apply them in your warmups.
And only when I finished writing all of this I noticed you reposted your homework for official critique, and got it, welp, I'll submit it anyway, hopefully it helps with another perspective.
Next Steps:
Add all lesson 1 exercises to your warmups and move onto the 250 box challenge.