Koyomi

Hello Nocb, i’d be handling the critique for your lesson 3

Arrows.

Starting with your arrows, i can see that you struggle to put them in perspective, some of your arrows do look 3d but you don’t push the perspective enough so that they feel like they’re flowing through 3d space, to help with that remember to apply foreshortening (making the farther end smaller, and the closer end larger). https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/4/perspective

Also you don’t let the edges of your arrows overlap a lot of the time, which make them look very flat. https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/4/overlap

And lastly, you forgot to close your arrows on some edges and end, remember not to rush it and to take your time with it.

Leaves.

Good job! Your leaves are drawn pretty confidently and are flowing quite well,i just want you to pay more attention on the texture or the lines that you’ve drawn in your leaves, while accuracy is certainly not superior to confidence i think you should still try to get your lines to look pretty accurate at an extent, the lines that you put on your leaves looks pretty rushed, you can use the ghosting method to help with that.

Branches.

I think here the flow of your branches i too exaggerated, Start off small, try to draw your branches not with crazy flows but with a subtle curve. and remember that this is a branch you’re drawing, if you bend it too much it’s going to break. Also when you trace your line try to follow the flow, don’t go straight to the ellipses that will make your branches look really angular.

And stop drawing over your lines once a line is traced just leave it as it is.

Plants.

Here on some of your plants your leaves are pretty stiff, remember to follow the flow line that you set up before drawing each leaves.

You are drawing really small, Drawing small makes things harder for us. it limits our ability to think through spatial problems. I would recommend you to take a full page for each plants that you’re drawing.

Also you don’t use much line weight, and when you do you seem to use it to reinforce the contours of your plants, that’s not how it should be used. remember to use line weight to help you clarify what is sitting in front of what

thanks Beckerito! really good critique as always !!

no problem! on the later lessons you will inevitably get stuck not receiving critiques from the community (unless if you're reaaally lucky) so when you get stuck you can go on the discord and ask @Elodin to add your submission to the spreadsheet (list of submissions with higher priority) in exchange of 5 critiques from you in the chanel #critique-exchange

no problem! and about the community agreement, not much people actually take the time to do that unfortunately but you could ask for agreements on the discord server

and i think you can move on without agreements (... i think)

hi M5! i'm Koyomi and i'm going to review your lesson 1 submission.

1.Lines

-some of your sets of lines on the superimposed lines exercise are fraying on both ends, make sure to carefully place your pen at the starting dot before tracing your line, https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/1585f266.jpg

-same thing with your ghosted lines and ghosted planes, some lines are touching neither of the two dots, don’t rush it and make sure that your pen is on the dot

Excepted that, your lines are pretty good and looks confident, i can see that you’re using your arm so props for that!

2.Ellipses

-in the tables of ellipses and ellipses in ghosted planes, some ellipses are not reaching their bounds, that’s a common mistake no need to worry about it but maybe try to use the ghosting method more when drawing ellipses

3.Boxes

-in your plotted perspective exercise your hatching is pretty timid, try to draw confident, straight lines from one side to the other don’t just put a bunch of lines in the middle, also in this exercise i think you could’ve added more boxes maybe 5 for each. Same for your rough perspective a little more boxes would’ve been great

-on your organic perspective your lines are quite curved and wobbly, remember to always prioritize confidence over accuracy!

hi PitchBlank! i'm Koyomi and i'm going to review your lesson 1 submission.

1.Lines

-in your superimposed lines exercise some sets of lines are fraying on both ends, make sure to place your pen carefully on the starting dot so that does not happen

-on the ghosted lines and ghosted planes i can see that you’re using your arm and that’s great, your lines are quite confident. there’s some wobbles here and there but not bad, it will come with time and practice. Some of your lines are arching a bit though, to correct that you can try to arch them consciously in the other direction if that makes sense

-also in your ghosted lines exercise, some lines are touching neither two of your dots as i said for the superimposed lines, take the time to place your pen carefully on the dot before tracing your line, don’t rush it

2.Ellipses

-your ellipses on all three exercises are sticking out of their bounds a bit, make sure to use the ghosting method when you draw your ellipses, other than that they’re not bad, some are quite wobbly but overall good job on your ellipses

3.boxes

-on the rough perspective exercise your lines came out pretty wobbly, don’t forget to ghost your lines and always prioritize confidence over accuracy!

-on the organic perspective exercise you’re repeating some of your lines, no matter how off a line is try to keep it as if it were correct and move on

hi J159! i'm Koyomi and i'm going to review your lesson 1 submission.

1.Lines

-i honestly don’t need to say much about the lines section, your lines are quite good, they are confident and i really see that you’re using your arm. There might be some wobbles here and there and it will get better with time and practice. but i think you got this so good job!

2.Ellipses

-on your tables of ellipses, some ellipses are overlapping each other and some are not touching with the others. It seems to me that you noticed that and tried to correct it in your second page so props for that!

-in the funnels exercise, some ellipses are not centered with the minor axis and you tend to draw ellipses outside of your funnels, don’t go this far even if the line continue try to keep them in

3.boxes

-you’re repeating some lines on the rough perspective exercise, no matter how off a line is try to keep it as if it were correct and move on

-on the rotating boxes exercise some boxes aren’t rotating like in this exemple: https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/d73eea49.jpg (especially the two middle left ones)

hi Dragle! i'm Koyomi and i'm going to review your lesson 1 submission.

1.Lines

-some of your superimposed lines seems to fray on both ends, i’m especially looking at those two arching ones so take the time to put your pen on the starting dot before tracing your lines, it doesn’t seem to be a big problem though just try to keep that in mind

-i think you did a pretty good job with your line confidence on the ghosted lines exercise, they came out wobblier on your ghosted planes though so i’m going to mention it but remember to always prioritize confidence over accuracy

2.Ellipses

-in your table of ellipses, some ellipses are not touching each other as they should so try to keep that in mind

-as for lines, ellipses must be drawn confidently. try to draw ellipses on a blank piece of paper without bounds, make sure to use your arm and move your pen freely on the paper, then try to replicate that within bounds, doing that really helped me to draw more confident ellipses, it might not work for everyone though

3.Boxes

-on your rotated boxes some boxes aren’t rotating as in this exemple: https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/d73eea49.jpg

hi Cold! i'm Koyomi and i'm going to review your lesson 1 submission.

1.Lines

-the first thing that i notice is the wobble in your lines, make sure to always prioritize confidence over accuracy, a wobbly line will always be a mistake and a confident line, no matter how accurate will always be correct, don’t worry about it too much though it’s something that develops over time and practice

-in your ghosted lines and ghosted planes exercise some lines aren’t starting from the dot, as for the superimposed lines, make sure to place your pen carefully on the dot before tracing your line

2.Ellipses

-in your table of ellipses some ellipses are overlapping, that’s a hard task but try to keep them within their bounds

-as for the lines, ellipses must be drawn confidently. try to draw ellipses on a blank piece of paper without bounds, make sure to use your arm and move your pencil freely on the paper, then try to replicate that within bounds, doing that really helped me to draw more confident ellipses, it might not work for everyone though

-i think you did a pretty good job with your funnels, your ellipses are pretty well cut in half by the minor axis, just try to squish them in the funnels, they’re sticking out a little bit

3.Boxes

-on your rough perspective exercise you place dots that you don’t seem to use, make sure to place your pen on the starting dot

-on the rotating boxes exercise, some boxes are missing in the corners, this is not a huge mistake and i think you did the exercise pretty well, just to mention

-on the organic perspective exercise you are going over your lines, no matter how off a line is you should never repeat it, keep the line as if it were correct and move on

Right I’m done with this critique i just wanted to mention, try to take better photos, just try to take them right upfront the page so it appears cleaner, you will be more likely to receive critique with a good presentation and it will be easier for the person that critique your work !

i appreciate that you took the time to write this critique, but looking at your profile you don't have this lesson marked as completed, you should only give feedback on lessons you have done and received feedback for