keylimecheescake

Hi,

Thanks for the critique! Much appreciated and very helpful.

I'm really not understanding however regarding "pre-planning the amount of constructions on a page." What does that mean exactly? Because to me, I don't think I pre-planned on this revision submission.

I will also admit that for the rose, another reason why I abandoned it is because the flower was just really hard to construct. I was too scared too try it, and I did not know how to approach it.

Hi!

I finally got my revisions completed! Like last time, I have taken two pics of the same page for a better angle of my plant constructions. My last plant construction page with the half rose was the result of college course work affecting my dedication to draw the entire rose. I had to move on to another plant and leave the rose incomplete or else I would never get this revision completed.

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1OxiENR2cyuRt5z02TljSbCzLOYGryhAK?usp=sharing

Hi!!

Thank you so much for this critique! I truly appreciate this.

Life has been pretty crazy lately, and I have been working on my revisions these past few weeks. I do not have it ready, but I just wanted to give this message so you don't get the impression that I just disappeared.

I will submit it soon.

Keylimecheesecake

Okay. Thank you!

Hello!

Thank you so much for your time!

Apologies for the late response. I've been traveling.

One question:

In the texture analysis exercise, when I am doing the transition from dense to sparse (the third square in the row), do I look at the reference photo like I did with the study (first square)?

Hi! Yeah Uncomfortable highly recommends you use printing paper (A4 8.5"x11"): https://drawabox.com/lesson/0/4/paper. I'd following his recommendation if I were you before continuing, plus I can imagine how annoying it is to draw on paper that isn't flat on the desk.

Anyway congratz on completing your first challenge at Drawabox, which proves that you have determination and strive for excellence! I applaud you. Now, let's see how you did shall we?

Things you did well on:

• Extensions lines are extending in the right directions. Check!

• All your lines have a confident, straight flow. Nice job at maintaining these lesson 1 fundamentals.

• Although not perfect (no one can be perfect at freehanding boxes), you understood that your lines needed to converge. I'm just gonna reiterate that ideally, your lines should converge into one point.

• Fantastic work on varying the orientation of your boxes. Experimentation is so important, so please continue to nurture this skill!

• Your back corners look pretty decent!

• And nice work for doing the optional cross hatching.

Things you can improve on:

• Line weight. For some reason, a lot of your lines are randomly faint, such as your cross hatching lines. This could indicate to me that you are drawing with your pen pretty tilted. Try and reflect to see why a lot of your lines are faint, and if it is because you hold your pen tilted, start holding it more upwards next time. And sometimes I see the lines that are instructed to have added subtle line weight look like they have been skipped entirely. Please draw your line weight with more care and consistency next time. Example here: https://imgur.com/a/IJkQIlO

• Again, no one can be perfect trying to freehand boxes. But a way to improve is by them is to start thinking about the relationships between lines instead of just thinking about the lines in pairs. When drawing the lines of the boxes, you should keep in mind all the other lines in the set, comparing their angles and making a guess based on them. This diagram explain this more clearly: https://i.imgur.com/8PqQLE0.png. The diagram can be pretty hard to understand at first, so if you don't understand it, don't get frustrated, keep reading it from time to time while practicing regularly, and it will click eventually. (These sentences are from the critique guide I am using, not my own words)

All in all, good job at following the instructions of this challenge to the best of your current ability. It's not about executing everything perfectly; it's about understanding what to aim for in your future practices. And I feel you do.

Before you move on to lesson 2, please trying getting printing paper before continuing this course.

Hi, there! Congratz on completely the dreadful but so-worth-it 250 box challenge! Completion on this first basic challenge shows that you strive for excellence and are dedicated to learning how to draw. I applaud you! Now let's see how you did:

What you did great on

• All lines have a straight, confident flow. Great job at not forgetting this fundamental step!

• Extension lines are in the right direction.

• Boxes have different orientations, indicating you are not afraid to experiment.

• Throughout the challenge, all your lines are eventually converging.

• Inner corners look pretty decent.

• Followed all instructions, even the optional cross-hatching!

Great work!

What you can improve on

• Your cross-hatching lines are overshooting or undershooting a lot. This indicates to me you have not plotted your points and followed the ghosted method before executing. If so, do not ever ignore this crucial, fundamental step, and please do your cross-hatching with more care from now on.

• Your line weight is inconsistent, even until the end of the challenge. All your lines around the silhouette of the boxes have one or two lines that's thicker than the rest. Some lines look like they were skipped entirely while you were adding line weight. And some of your executions on light weight look like they go off course and create a second line, instead of going completely on top of the initial line. Please do your line weight with more care from now on.

• Although we are freehanding these boxes, please do keep in mind that your lines should converge into one point, and not pairs. But I know no one can be perfect at this.

You weren't perfect, but that is totally okay! No one is perfect. What's important is now you have gained a big piece of the puzzle when it comes to 3D space. I will mark your submission as complete. Please wait for 2 agrees to earn your 250 box challenge completion badge.

Nice, this is an improvement! Well done.

I can now gladly mark your submission as complete. Please wait for 2 agrees on this critique to earn your lesson 1 completion badge. You are now ready to conquer the 250 box challenge! Like I reiterate in all of my critiques, it's not about making perfect work or executing marks perfectly in the very beginning; it's about understanding what to aim for in your future practices. And I feel you do.

Hellooo to you to! I will be handling your critique, which will be divided into 3 sections:

Lines

1. Your superimposed lines have a smooth flow, which indicates that you understood to push forward with confidence in this lines exercise. There is a tiny bit of fraying on both ends of your lines in one of your pages, but the other page shows some improvement. Keep in mind next time you do this, place the pen carefully at the beginning of each line so this does not happen. Nice attempt at the curves as well.

2. Ghosted lines are definitely on the right track. You are still consistent with that nice, smooth flow which means you understood to prioritize flow > accuracy in this exercise. Well done. The accuracy is something you will achieve over time. Your plotted points also indicate that you understand to think before making a mark and that it is important to plot points when applying the ghosting method, though next time make your points just a tad bit tinier. Your lines should completely cover the plotted point.

3. Planes also look great with that nice, confident flow in your lines. I'm gonna be a bit nitpicky here, but it looks to me like you did not plot your points with a line here: https://imgur.com/a/8xEyGXs. I know it's only a very short line, but please do not ever skip this first essential step when doing this course. But the rest of your lines have plotted points, so good job!

   Ellipses

   1. Tables of ellipses are mostly good. You understood that your ellipses needed to be drawn 2-3 times (2 preferrably), and snug against each other. But I say mostly because this exercise requires experimentation and variation with the angle, degree, and size of your ellipses. The variation of size and degree is there, but it looks all your ellipses lean towards the right. I will request a revision of 1 additional page of this exercise, and ask of you to try ellipses with an angle leaning towards the left. I would also like to encourage you to vary the degree of your ellipses even more since most of them are roughly 30 degrees. Try more 15, 45, and 90 degrees (see this link: https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/5/degree). Your ellipses also are just a bit loose, and a some don't exactly touch the border of the table, but your execution on this will get better over time.

   2. Ellipses on planes look good, nice job at attempting to make sure your ellipses touch all 4 sides of the plane. A few of the lines in your ellipses do get a bit faint, which could indicate that you were running out of ink that moment, or your pen is tilting a bit too much, or you are drawing a bit too fast. Try to reflect on what happen, and if you think it's because of your pen tilting too much, hold your pen more upwards next time. If it's because you are drawing too fast, slow down to a moderate speed that will still give you that nice, smooth flow in your lines.

   3. In funnels, your ellipses here get very loose, but that's okay for now, it is a harder exercise. Aligning your ellipses and making sure they are perfectly snug at the same time is tricky, so use the minor axis as a guide and make sure to ghost from your shoulder like you do in your lines. Your execution on this will get better over time.

Boxes. Here is where things get tricky, so I applaud you for pushing through.

1. Plotted perspective is well done. Your cross hatching is decent, but you will have plenty of chances to practice at the 250 box challenge.

2. Nice attempt at the rough perspective! Horizontal lines run parallel to the horizon line, and vertical lines run perpendicular to the horizon line. Although it's not perfect, I can tell you understood that they needed to be like that. Your extension lines should've been a different color though, try to get one before the 250 box challenge. And they only needed to extend to the horizon line, yours go beyond it. Boxes look awkward, which is expected if this is your first time, but you will have so much time to improve in the 250 box challenge.

3. The front planes of your rotated box don't look too bad! It's the back planes and corners that are always tricky when doing the first time. That's okay, this challenge is purposefully meant to be beyond a beginner's skill level; throwing you to the deep end and expose you to think of 3D space in a new way. Hopefully, you gained a piece of the puzzle on this, even if it is just a small piece for now.

4. Organic perspective looks good. I can tell you have a good sense of scale and depth.

All in all, you are in the right direction. Your lines are overshooting and undershooting a lot, even until the end. But I believe you can so improve this. Pls do keep this in mind in your future lines practice: https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/10/levels and https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/10/lifthand. Like I said earlier, I do have a revision to request of you:

u r welcome