joxmarf

hello! Thank you so much for your thoughtful critique. Here are the revisions, i hope they are better: https://imgur.com/a/e0hgIU4

I'm glad it helped! You will be able to refine the exercise when you do it for your warmups :)

Hello! I'm Joxmarf and I will be reviewing your Lesson 1 :)

Superimposed Lines

I notice that many of your lines have fraying. Drawabox encourages to think of every mark we put on the page. That begins with thinking where to place the pen. Also, some of your lines arc. Remember to, when you start executing the stroke, focus only on the end point and draw confidently enough not to allow your brain to steer the stroke. Make sure you are doing the stroke fast enough.

Ghosted Lines

Some of your marks wobble. Time and practice will make your lines more accurate. Also, once again, some of your lines arc. Some of your marks wobble. Remember not to focus on accuracy, but on the confidence of your marks. Time and practice will make your lines more accurate. Also, once again, some of your lines arc. Remember to consider from which pivot you are drawing from. If you are engaging your whole arm from the shoulder, you could try to intentionally arc your stroke a little in the opposite direction to counteract the natural curve. I notice that many of your lines don’t reach the other point, I take this as a sign that you are trying to focus on the confidence of your marks and not the accuracy. Well done.

Ghosted Planes

These are good! Well done.

Table of Ellipses

I see you are drawing through your ellipses two full times, which is great. However, many of them are not evenly shaped. There could be many reasons for this. Remember to ghost mindfully and thoroughly before making the mark with confidence. Remember to try to touch the corners and sides of the plane and keep the ellipses tight. Overall, these are well done!

Ellipses in Planes

Good job! Your ellipses are drawn with confidence and most of them are touching all the 4 edges of the plane. Also, you are doing two passes.

Funnels

It is quite difficult, but I would like to note that some of your ellipses are not aligned to the central minor axis line. Also, some ellipses are not touching each other. In one of them, you left a lot of space which could have been filled with ellipses.

Plotted Perspective

Awesome. Though stick with the same fine liner unless otherwise stated.

Rough Perspective

Well done! Remember what I said about arcing.

Rotated boxes

Well done.

Organic Perspective

Well done. You could complete the back corner before moving to the box challenge if you want the extra practice

Hello! You're welcome :) For your question, it is a matter of what to prioritise: confidence should go over accuracy. We know where we want our marks to go, but we must prioritise doing the mark with confidence. If we get there, great, but that's not the purpose. Also feel free to ask any question :)

Good job! Marking this lesson as complete :) Remember to add these to your warmups ^^

Hello! I'm Joxmarf and I will be reviewing your Lesson 1 :)

Superimposed Lines

There's some frying. Remember to not only think about ghosting and doing your stroke confidently, but also where you place your pen.

Ghosted Lines

Remember not to focus on accuracy, but on the confidence of your marks. Time and practice will make your lines more accurate. Also, once again, some of your lines arc. Remember to, when you start executing the stroke, focus only on the end point and draw confidently enough not to allow your brain to steer the stroke. There's some overshooting, but you will be able to control it as time goes on and you get more mileage, confidence is the focus on DAB.

Ghosted Planes

Well done.

Table of Ellipses

I see you are drawing through your ellipses two full times, which is great. They are also tight and even. Wow.

Ellipses in Planes

Your ellipses are drawn with confidence and they are touching all the 4 edges of the plane. Once again,many of them are woobly. I recommend using the same pen for every exercise unless instructed otherwise.

Funnels

It is quite difficult, but I would like to note that some of your ellipses are not aligned to the central minor axis line. Also, some ellipses are not touching touching the lines enclosing them or each other. Remember to respect the boundaries you established.

Plotted Perspective

Well done.

Rough Perspective

Good job, you are working with one vanishing point, as the exercise states.

Rotated boxes

Woahh, well done.

Organic Perspective

Well done.

Honestly, this is an extremely good submission. Congratulations! You are ready for the 250 challenge :D

Hello, I'm Joxmarf and I will be reviewing your lesson :)

First, huge congrats! The box challenge requires discipline, patience and consistency. Its repetitive nature can make it a bit of a drag, so good job for pushing through! Especially with college responsibilities...

General Observations

Your lines mostly converge. You were clearly mindful of avoiding parallel or divergent lines. It still happened sometimes, of course, but I could really see the improvement as the challenge went on. Regarding the line extensions, they are done on the right direction, going away from the central point of the Y. Later on the challenge, you didn't extend your lines to the end of the page.I recommend to extend them as it will give you a better idea of how your lines converged.

You varied your boxes. Not only from the orientation, but also with the length of the Y line. I saw boxes with the shape of cubes, bricks, rods, books, etc. However, the size of many was rather small. Doing bigger boxes will make the exercise more comfortable.

Regarding your hatching, it is good, especially in the later boxes, but remember to ghost before making a line on the page, thinking of where the line starts and where it ends. On one of your boxes, you divided the hatching lines.

Your notes say that for the first boxes you were ghosting from the VP. Honestly, I think it robs away from the exercise, even though it may feel easier. After all, the first 50 were to prepare you for estimating your lines by convergence. Your later note: "Focusing more on convergence over VP is actually making me hit the VP more" makes me think that you realised this by yourself, but I still wanted to note it.

Overall, a very solid submission.

Good luck with the rest! :D

Hello! First of all, congrats for finishing the lesson. This lesson is our first introduction to construction, which aims to give our drawing subjects solidity and place them in 3D space.

Starting with your arrows, remember to always be mindful when putting down a mark. This includes hatching. Also, while most of the time you are placing the hatching in the correct place, there’s an instance in which that doesn’t happen. Remember to always think about how the arrows flows in 3D space.

Good job on your leaves. Remember to always respect the footprint your established. In one of them (upper corner left) you cut through your footprint. Remember that it is very important to think about how this line moves through three dimensions, not across a flat page, and to really drive home how it flows. Also, you zigzagged the edge details of many of your leaves. This is a mistake Uncomfortable directly addresses on the instructions. Remember to always be very mindful when doing these exercises. Rushing is not encouraged.

For the branches exercises, remember you should be using compound strokes and overshooting the second ellipse, trying to follow the path towards the third one and stopping fully halfway there. It doesn’t seem like you were doing that (at least to what I can see from the exercise). Also you are leaving some of your tubes open ended. This is discouraged on the instructions. Regarding your lines, please keep in mind the principles we saw on lesson 1. All lines must be done with the ghosting method. Regarding the degrees of your ellipses, they are something we must keep in mind when doing the branches exercise. The degree of the ellipse will vary depending on the viewers eye level and the position of the ellipse in 3D. You don’t respect the boundaries established by the ellipse for your branches, something that comes up on your plant constructions.

Moving onto your plant constructions, they present the issues I mentioned before. I see you used some contour lines for some of your forms. This is very good! I encourage you to add the necessary contour lines to make your forms feel 3D. On the corpse flower, you could have added some contour lines to help the illusion of 3D space. Something I notice is that you seem to cut onto the forms you establish or leave forms floating. Remember you should be thinking about how your forms connect with each other and interact.

Overall, you are on the right track, but I would like to leave some revisions so you can work on the feedback I gave you. Work slowly and mindfully. Also do one plant construction per page and give it enough space. Well done!

Hello! I’m Joxmarf and I will be reviewing your lesson 4.

First of all, congrats for finishing this lesson. The purpose of the insect constructions is to create the illusion, through the use of forms and contour lines. I would say you achieved this!

For your sausages with contours, remember to keep them uniform and to draw the contours mindfully respecting the minor axis, taking into account how the sausage turns in 3D space. Please keep this in mind when doing them for warmups.

One thing that diminishes the illusion, is that you don’t use enough contour lines. A notable example is your tick. You added a center line and a few texture lines, but the lack of contour lines makes it look flat. Now, the solution isn’t to add contour forms thoughtlessly. Remember to always be extremely mindful of every mark you put down on the page. Regarding your lea, there are some additional forms that look flat. Don’t worry, as you will see it better in lesson 5. About the legs, remember that the sausage forms should intersect. This will help you better understand how they are positioned in 3D space. It may be more challenging to add forms onto a simpler one, but it is more adequate to convey a sense of 3D sense. When you modify the silhouette, always do so keeping in mind that it must be 3D.

Also, remember to avoid chicken scratch. I recommend you to review the informal lesson 4 demos nefore moving onto the 5 one, many concepts explained there will be of help for lesson 5.

https://imgur.com/a/1W1SjcD Here are some drawings I made, I hope they help understand my review :)

Good job!

Hellooo i would like to critique but could you upload your references also? Thx