canoe, hello! first of all, thank you so much for taking the time to write an in-depth critique (and sorry for the late reply, i didn't get a notification for it). it was so helpful and i really appreciate it :)) i will kept all of your comments in mind as i move forward. once again, thank you !
you’re welcome! and yeah, on your warmups you will have plenty of opportunity to practice
hello! congrats for finishing this lesson.
some quick pointers: your lines are still wobbly; remember to follow the ghosting method and always plan your lines. on the branches exercise, remember to think of the degree of your ellipses, and try to keep them alligned (except shen you want the branch to curve, but even then be very mindful). the shadows... be mindful of them too, remember about cast shadows. some of your shadows break the illusion of 3d space. there are some orchids you didn't finish. also, remember your petals have to follow the flow lines, there are some discrepancies in the petals of the corpse flower
Hello :) Congrats for finishing this lesson. I will give you some pointers
Hello! I'm Joxmarf and I will be reviewing your Lesson 1 :)
Superimposed Lines
There's some frying. Remember to not only think about ghosting and doing your stroke confidently, but also where you place your pen. Confidence over accuracy. Prioritizing the latter may be causing your lines to wobble. Remember
Ghosted Lines
Once again: Remember not to focus on accuracy, but on the confidence of your marks. Time and practice will make your lines more accurate. Also, once again, some of your lines arc. Remember to, when you start executing the stroke, focus only on the end point and draw confidently enough not to allow your brain to steer the stroke. Overall good job!
Ghosted Planes
Well done.
Table of Ellipses
I see you are drawing through your ellipses two full times, which is great. Remember to do them fast and light. They are not very tight but that’s okay, it’ll come with time.
Ellipses in Planes
Your ellipses are drawn with confidence and they are touching all the 4 edges of the plane. Once again,many of them are woobly.
Funnels
It is quite difficult, but I would like to note that some of your ellipses are not aligned to the central minor axis line. Also, some ellipses are not touching touching the lines enclosing them or each other. Remember to respect the boundaries you established.
Plotted Perspective
Well done.
Rough Perspective
Good job, you are working with one vanishing point, as the exercise states.
Rotated boxes
Well done, but you are missing some boxes on the corners.
Organic Perspective
Well done. You could vary the size and angles on the boxes
Hello! I'm Joxmarf and I will be reviewing your Lesson 1 :)
Superimposed Lines
There's some frying. Remember to not only think about ghosting and doing your stroke confidently, but also where you place your pen. Also, your lines are curving. Try to focus only on the end point and draw confidently enough not to allow your brain to steer the stroke.
Ghosted Lines
You are doing a good job focusing on the confidence of your strokes. There's some overshooting, but you will be able to control it as time goes on and you get more mileage, confidence is the focus on DAB.
Ghosted Planes
Well done.
Table of Ellipses
I see you are drawing through your ellipses two full times, which is great. I think you may be applying too much force when doing the ellipse. Remember to do them light and fast and not to let empty space between the ellipses.
Ellipses in Planes
Good job. Though many of them are woobly. As I said before, light and fast :]
Funnels
It is quite difficult, but I would like to note that some of your ellipses are not aligned to the central minor axis line. Also, some ellipses are not touching touching the lines enclosing them or each other. Remember to respect the boundaries you established.
Plotted Perspective
Well done :OO
Rough Perspective
Good job, you are working with one vanishing point, as the exercise states. Remember to prioritize confidence over accuracy for your lines.
Rotated boxes
Woahh, well done. You are missing the boxes on the corners. I recommend doing them before moving on:)
Organic Perspective
Well done.
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Ahh these are so awesome! Well done :D my only comments are to not overuse contour lines (the more you add, the less effective each individual contour line is) and to not forget the intersection between the sausages for the legs, as they convey how the leg is folding.
Next Steps:
:) Congrats.
hello :)) im willing to take a look, but i was wondering if you had the references you used?
Hello, I'm Joxmarf and I will be reviewing your lesson 4!
I want to start by saying that your submission is really well done. There's nothing to comment regarding the quality of your lines. I can see that you are adhering to the principles of lesson 1. Regarding the textures, you didn't adhere to an important rule, which is to capture only cast shadows, but texture isn't the priority at all in this lesson, and that may have been added at a later point than when you did lesson 4 since... it was three years ago. Now, these are my comments on what could have been improved:
Some of your forms don't look 3D. On some cases you recur to flat shapes (example: spikes in your haverstman construction). Remember that all of what we are capturing exists in 3D, so we must construct it. Using 2D shapes breaks the illusion we are trying to create. Your owlfly larva feels particularly flat (but to be honest, that's not on you... that insect is just like that) and one of the reasons is that instead of an additive construction for the head, you cut into your forms.
There are forms that could have started out simpler. For example, in your construction #4, you used a conic shape for the head and the thorax. You could started with a ball and added forms until getting the desired shape.
In your sausage with ontours exercise, the sausages should be uniform. They also should have been uniform for the legs of your insects.
Overall, your constructions are very well done! Congratulations :) You had suggested to give you revisions given that your submission is old, but I'm hesitant to do so given their quality! Still, I will assign two constructions so you can apply my feedback.
Next Steps:
2 insect constructions please :)
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The reason this book is close to my heart is because of its introduction, where Brom goes explains in detail just how he went from being an army brat to one of the most highly respected dark fantasy artists in the world today. I believe that one's work is flavoured by their life's experiences, and discovering the roots from which other artists hail can help give one perspective on their own beginnings, and perhaps their eventual destination as well.
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