jinmaru25

Hi PaulDeh, Congratulations for finishing lesson 1! I'll be giving you a critique for your lesson. Always remember that the critique provided here isn't about your skill level and is meant to check your understanding of the material, so you can practice those concepts during your warmups more effectively. Also, I'm also a student that recently finished Lesson 1 and got critiqued for it and was allowed to move to the 250 box challenge, using the official critique guide for this lesson to provide you feedback. Hopefully the feedback I give you is comprehensive enough so you can make use of it, with that out of the way, let's get to the critique!

Superimposed Lines:

Your lines are smooth and executed from the shoulder prioritizing a confident stroke, although there is some wobbling from the course correction that happened in the ends of some lines, suggesting accuracy became the priority for a bit, remember that when executing a stroke, just focus on doing it confidently, even if it misses the trajectory or mark, no worries though, since most of your lines are confident ones. There's fraying present only on one end, which is what we are aiming for. Overall, great job!

Ghosted Lines

Your lines are smooth and confident with no wobbling present, which is great. There is very minor arcing on some lines, this can happen for a few reasons, one of them is drawing from the wrist, the other is a natural tendency to arc your lines while trying to draw them straight on the page. Make sure to draw using your shoulder, if you are executing your lines from the shoulder, try to consciously arc your lines a little bit to the opposite direction of the natural arcing, overtime, this will eliminate any arcing from happening. Since your arcing was very minor though, this is just a heads up of what to do in case you missed anything from the lesson material, the lines don't arc a lot and that's good. For your future warm ups, keep in mind the "levels" of the exercise so you can improve more effectively. Overall, good job!

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Arcing

"Levels" of the exercise

Ghosted Planes

Your lines are smooth and confident with no wobbling present, which is great. The arcing is still very minor and it will improve with practice, don't worry about it. Nice!

Tables of Ellipses

Your ellipses are drawn through two times, which is the ideal target we are aiming for. Your ellipses all fit snugly in their corresponding spaces, meaning that they touch their spaces borders and the ellipses are tightly compacted with each other. Most of your ellipses are confidently executed from the shoulder and are evenly shaped, there are a few ellipses which it doesn't happen, but don't worry, it's gonna get easier with practice during your warm ups. Just remember to execute the ghosting method correctly and draw from the shoulder. Overall, you did great here!

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Ghosting method

Ellipses in Planes

Your ellipses are drawn through two times, which, again, is the ideal target we are aiming for. You are also striving to hit and mostly succeed hitting all 4 edges of the planes with your ellipses. Most of your ellipses are smooth and evenly shaped, a few of them got uneven, but once again, it doesn't matter since most of your ellipses are great and it shows you understood the assignment and the idea of the exercise. As always, keep practicing these exercises in your warm ups and remember to use the ghosting method for every free handed stroke you are gonna make in your course work. Overall, you did a very nice job!

Funnels

Your ellipses are drawn through two times, which, once again, is the ideal target we are aiming for. Your ellipses fit snugly together and touch the bounds of the funnels snugly, just like in the Tables of Ellipses exercise. Most of your ellipses are in the same degree, meaning you strived to make them aligned to the Minor Axis of their corresponding funnel, which you did well, some of them miss the mark, but that's besides the point, you'll get better at it by practicing it during your warm ups. Overall, you did a great job!

Plotted Perspective

Your verticals are perpendicular to the horizon line, and you horizontals are plotted back nicely, while dealing with many lines and adding hatching correctly. Good job! In the future, make sure to use the ghosting method for your hatching, since this helps your lines come cleaner and gives you extra practice, this goes for every exercise and not Plotted Perspective in particular.

Rough Perspective

Your lines are smooth and confident with no wobbling present, which is great. Some of the boxes are not oriented in the 1 point perspective fashion (meaning the horizontal lines of the front and back face of the box are parallel to the horizon line, while the vertical lines of the front and back face are perpendicular to the horizon line), make sure you are taking your time during your planning phase of the ghosting method, while taking into account the behavior of the boxes in this particular perspective system, you've done it correctly on most boxes, that's good. The line extensions have been implemented correctly, good job!

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Guessing

Rotated Boxes

Based on the image you submitted for the Rotated Boxes exercises, not all of the boxes have been drawn, meaning I can't give you a proper critique for it, I'll put it up as a revision, send the complete exercise when you complete it and don't be afraid to ping me on discord for me to check it! My discord name is "petetheartist" as well.

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Example of the finished exercise

Organic Perspective

Your lines are smooth and confident with no wobbling present, which is great. There are cases of your boxes diverging, make sure to take your time and plan your lines as much as needed, also, as stated in the exercise page, the points on the page leave a very negligible footprint on the page compared to a whole line, making the planning phase of the ghosting method a very good tool to leverage for determining where to draw your lines, of course, you'll get better with practice. Your foreshortening is shallow, which is what we are aiming for in this exercise. Overall, good job!

The great thing about these points is that they're so small. Mine has been drawn a little bigger than I normally would so it can be visible in the example, but these points can be quite tiny. This also means that unlike a whole drawn line, they don't really carry a lot of weight and are very easy to ignore.

So, using these points, we can consider certain trajectories, mark them out on the page, and then consider other edges to see if our idea is going to work out.

Negotiating a Corner

Conclusion

Overall, a very good effort! The only thing missing before you can move on is the finished Rotated Boxes exercise, reply to this critique with your revisions once you are ready so I can take a look at them.

Hi PeteTheArtist, welcome to Drawabox! Here is a critique for your lesson 1 submission:

Superimposed Lines

Your lines are confident and not wobbly, and they start at a consistent starting point without fraying at both ends. Good job!

Ghosted Lines

Still no wobbling, which is good! You are executing the lines confidently. There is some minor arcing in some of the lines, but they are mostly straight as well. Try to consistently execute the lines from your shoulder. Also, remember the importance of starting the execution phase of ghosting with accuracy; Keep in mind starting at the first point you make for future warm ups, but you also did a great job correcting this for the ghosted planes exercise! In the future, you can also keep the levels of ghosted lines in mind and work on stopping and starting at the exact points.

Ghosted Planes

You corrected the issue of starting your lines imprecisely, great! I see a little bit of wobbling and arcing on the longer lines of the planes. Remember to focus on confident execution and drawing a straight line from your shoulder, rather than focusing on accurately hitting point B.

Tables of Ellipses

Wonderful job! The ellipses are at similar angles and degrees in most of the boxes, and you did a good job filling up each box with the ellipses touching the edges. You also consistently drew through each ellipse twice. Keep it up in future warmups!

Funnels

Well done! Your ellipses are all drawn through twice, and you aligned them well with the major axis in the center. You also kept most of them touching both edges of the funnel which is good! For future warmups, you can also try increasing the degree of your ellipses as you move away from the middle of the funnel.

Plotted Perspective

Nicely done! You kept your verticals mostly parallel to the horizon line, and accurately connected the back corners of each box. You also plotted the lines back to the vanishing points pretty well!

Rough Perspective

You worked correctly with all lines converging towards one vanishing point. You also consistently used the points you made as a reference for the line extensions. However, remember that both the front and back faces of each box for this exercise should be rectangular, with two lines parallel to the horizon and two lines perpendicular to it. You executed your lines confidently, but remember step 1 of the ghosting method: preparation. Carefully mark out the points for each box, trying to keep them parallel or perpendicular to the horizon, before executing the line.

Rotated Boxes

Good job. You set up the exercise correctly, with axes and squares at each end. You also kept the boxes close together and consistently spaced them out, and drew through them showing the back sides of each rotated box. Keep it up!

Organic Perspective

Well done! Most of your boxes converge slowly towards a faraway vanishing point. You did a good job with all the elements of the ghosting method here, including the preparation!

This indicates that you are ready for taking on the 250 Box Challenge. Good work and keep it up!

Hello Maggie,

I will be reviewing your work, giving praise, and maybe give some suggestions so you can move onto the 250 box challenge. TLDR: I think you're more than ready!

1. Superimposed Lines

Really well done and seems to have been well practiced. There is a little sign of elbow dominance in your medium sized lines, but I believe you are well-equipped to work and smooth it out. Giving your shoulder movement a bit more attention would do this fine!

3. Ghosted Lines

As an exercise I praise personally to compliment the first one, this would be an excellent warmup to practice some of the medium and long lines I recommend you brush up on. The result itself? chefs kiss, perfect!

5. Planes and Plane of Elipses

Love how deliberate and confident these ellipses came out, having observed how smooth their edges are. One thing I will recommend is to try having your first ellipse around adhere/connect/overlap the edges of the planes. I have been tempted myself to have my first arc around be smaller than its frame and catching its shortcomings with my second/third loops -- but it isn't effective in building true confidence/mechanical skill.

I have no comment on the planes themselves. They're peak...

7. Ellipses Exercise

This would have the same suggestion as the first one. In your future warmups, focus on having all two/three loops meet the edges of the frame. As a matter of fact, try making mistakes of extending your ellipses outside its borders and tone it down as you practice more so they fit snugly inside.

9. Funnels

Very clean and intentional. The ellipse orientation is there, and the instructions have been followed appropriately. Great job!

11. Plotted Perspective

Well done! The vertical lines are a great addition to make your exercise look 3D, however it is a little disorienting to find that back edge of each box. To truly knitpick, that front box on your bottom frame is missing its see-through back edges. Color coding the depth of your boxes is a creative liberty you took that I appreciate (must have been a lot of work!).

13. Rough Perspective

Peak. Continue working on creating those small lines with your shoulder and you'll be executing clean boxes in no time. Those inaccuracies do NOT take anything away from the work. Good job :thumbs_up:.

15. Y-Method Boxes

Cinema.

17. Rotated Boxes

Very compressed and I can tell you know what's up. The Box challenge is yours.

Hi Ritik, congrats on completing the first lesson! I'm Roadkill and here to give community critique on your submission :)

Lines

Your superimposed lines look good - confident and lines staying close together. There are a bit fraying at the end but this is expected so don't fret too much. Your ghosted lines look confident without too much wavering and not much arching. You could use longer lines though - add them in as you incorporate this exercise as part of your warm up routine. Your lines do start to arch a little as you move on to ghosted planes - don't rush lines to finish the exercise but show as much diligence as you showed for ghosted lines. Keep using that shoulder for that straight confident lines. Your line quality already improved from superimposed to ghost planes!

Ellipses

In table of ellipses, your ellipses are mostly touching the borders and their neighbors pretty snug. You are also able to draw them with angles consistently and a variety of them, so great job! But do aim to have them touch the borders. For ellipses in planes, some of your ellipses are not touching all four sides of the planes. It may be beneficial for you to plot all four points where your ellipses are touching the planes and do ghosting based on them. But great variety of ellipses drawn with confidence!

Your ellipses fit snugly against the funnels and are generally aligned to the central minor axis line. Be sure to make them snug against their neighbors too. Keep drawing them with confidence and they will get better with practice. Optionally, you can try to get the degree of your ellipses to increase as you move outwards from the center when you do this exercise as a warm up.

Boxes

The plotted perspective looks good and you've clearly demonstrated you understand how to make boxes in 2 point perspectives. In this perspective, the vertical lines will always be perpendicular to the horizon. Of course there may be slight misalignment but try to draw vertical lines as perpendicular as possible.

Rough perspective is great as well. However I'm also seeing some minor wobbling - be sure to employ ghost method in all your free hand lines and to use your shoulder for that confident and straight line.

Rotated box is a notoriously difficult exercise that stumps many students. You did a good job showing the rotation of the boxes overall, with all boxes converging to different vanishing points. Try to keep the gaps between boxes are tight and consistent as well. This will help with deducing the position of adjacent boxes.

In organic perspective, your lines are generally converging as they move farther away from the viewer which is great. There are a couple of them with parallel or divergence that results in skewed boxes but you did a pretty solid job overall.

Overall

Regarding hatching, it is optional but when you do, be sure to use ghost method and aim to fill a side of box consistent spacing. It will make your box look cleaner and well, more practice never hurts!

One last thing is to not go over your lines again or redraw when you make mistakes. It is generally against the concept of executing planned and confident lines through out the course. Unless it's waaaaay off the trajectory, accept the mistake and trust your muscle memory that it will get better with time and practice.

Anyways, you did a good job and demonstrated that you've grasped the concepts in Lesson 1 so I'm marking it as complete. Add these exercises as a part of your regular warm up routine for all DaB related works. To get the badge of completion or the role in discord, you need 2 agrees from other members but that is not necessary to move onto the next stage. On to the box challenge you go!

Hi Cowboy, congrats on completing the first lesson! I'm Roadkill and here to give community critique on your submission :)

Lines

Your superimposed lines look good - confident and lines staying close together. There are a bit fraying at the end but this is expected so don't fret too much. Your ghosted lines have some wavering but not much arching. Keep using that shoulder for that straight confident lines. You could use longer lines though - add them in as you incorporate this exercise as part of your warm up routine. Your lines do start to arch a little as you move on to ghosted planes - don't rush lines to finish the exercise but show as much diligence as you showed for ghosted lines. But I can tell that your lines are becoming more confident.

Ellipses

In table of ellipses, your ellipses are mostly touching the borders and their neighbors pretty snug. You are also able to draw them with angles consistently and a variety of them, so great job! But do aim to have them touch the borders. For ellipses in planes, some of your ellipses are not touching all four sides of the planes. It may be beneficial for you to plot all four points where your ellipses are touching the planes and do ghosting based on them. I still see some wobbling in your lines - use your shoulder and draw confidently even if a little less accurate.

Your ellipses fit snugly against the funnels and are generally aligned to the central minor axis line. They are a little shakey but remember to draw them with confidence! And they will get better with practice. Optionally, you can try to get the degree of your ellipses to increase as you move outwards from the center when you do this exercise as a warm up.

Boxes

The plotted perspective looks good and you've clearly demonstrated you understand how to make boxes in 2 point perspectives. In this perspective, the vertical lines will always be perpendicular to the horizon. Of course there may be slight misalignment but try to draw vertical lines as perpendicular as possible.

In rough perspective, I've noticed that some of your front and back faces aren't rectangular. In 1 point perspective, all your vertical lines are perpendicular to the horizon line and all your horizontal lines are parallel to it. Of course it's often caused by inaccuracy which will get better over time. I'm also seeing some minor wobbling - be sure to employ ghost method in all your free hand lines and to use your shoulder for that confident and straight line.

Rotated box is a notoriously difficult exercise that stumps many students. I think you are starting to get a hang of it but wanted to point something out. https://imgur.com/a/KxisOS7 here we have center box (1) which we know is facing us straight because the lines are parallel. You successfully showed showed that box 2 is rotating because the lines are converging. Since box 3 is rotating more than box 2, we should show that convergence for box 3 is more than box 2. You can see in box 4 and 5 the rate of convergence is more severe as they are further along in the rotation. I'm going to assign revision because I think you are starting to get the feel of it but concretely. And if you have any questions, feel free to ask me or discord server has some very helpful people. Try to keep the gaps between boxes are tight and consistent as well. This will help with deducing the position of adjacent boxes.

I also didn't quite understand organic perspective when I did this in Lesson 1 so don't feel too bad! In organic perspective, what we are looking for is that from viewer's perspective, what we see is closer and the unseen part, or the back of the box, is further. To show that, we apply the convergence we discussed above. Once you do your Y, the next edges of the box you draw should show convergence. I'm going to assign revision on this as well.

Overall

Regarding hatching, it is optional but when you do, be sure to use ghost method and aim to fill a side of box consistent spacing. It will make your box look cleaner and well, more practice never hurts!

One last thing is to not go over your lines again when you make mistakes. It is generally against the concept of executing planned and confident lines through out the course. Unless it's waaaaay off the trajectory, accept the mistake and trust your muscle memory that it will get better with time and practice.

Anyways, you did a good job overall. As for revisions, for rotated box, you only need to redo one quadrant and for organic perspective, just do one page. If you have any questions or need clarification, let me know and I'd be happy to explain.

First of all brother congratulations for completing the 250 box challenge. Now, let's talk about your work submission :-)

First 50

1. All of your lines looks good and it gets better as you progress. The lines in boxes like 50,49,48,47 are wobbly you have done a lot of chicken-scratching but after like 55th box your line quality gets way better. You have stopped chicken-scratching, Lines have been ghosted properly and looks good. soo good job for that :).

2. All the line extensions are looking good you have extended the lines in correct direction and they are meeting at the end.

50 to 150

1. Line quality in these 100 boxes are good there are some mistakes, Like in boxes 69,66,67,116. There is line overlapping no other mistakes.

2. it seems like you are using ball pens to make these boxes i will suggest you to not use them in the feature because it is not recommended. It has been specifically told in the lessen 0 that we have to use fineliners to do our HW work. Keep this in mind moving forward.

Last 100

1. This is perfection boxes are nearly perfect and i can tell you re using ghosting to draw them.

2. Every thing looks good you have marked the vanishing points out of the page boxes are rotating fine :-)

3. I think you have understood the basic principles of this exercise great job.

congratulation again for completing the 250 box challenge. :-) you need 2 agrees to make this exercise as complete so ask about it in the critique exchange section of the discord server.

Hi, I will be the one critiquing your artwork for the day! Overall, I think you did a good job. I suggest opening this imgur gallery where I have made some visual notes and look at it as you read along so you understand what I meant! Imgur links: https://imgur.com/a/hXYr7IV

Organic Arrow

I think you have applied perspective and hatching quite well, the only mistake I have seen was that some of the hatching were placed on the opposite side where it was supposed to be. Hatching should be done on the side where the the surface of the arrow would get covered by another surface. I think it's just a small mistake and I think overall you demonstrated that you understand this.

I think the only small feedback is that you shouldn't draw the other side further from the viewer too small, as it is hard to make the curves and it give the feeling to the viewer that it perspective felt too exaggerated. I think as long as you have made sure that the further end is smaller than the closer one, you have applied perspective. While the example had done this, I think it shouldn't be the majority of the arrow.

Organic Forms with Contour

I think overall you understand the degree shift of the ellipses, where the ellipses looked wider as it faces the viewer and smaller as it faces further away from the viewer. The ellipses and form that you have created are confident and I'm happy with it. My feedback was that some of the forms seems to have extreme curves that threw me off, as the form seems to bend one way in one ellipses, then the other way, only to return to the original direction. The form had this extreme bend that was a bit hard to communicate. You can see this on the narrow - wide - narrow feedback I have written on the image. I think that while you can communicate that the object had this extreme curve (similar to a " C " ), I think that at times it just ended up making the viewer a bit confused. Especially when we are drawing the skeleton, which didn't have texture or shadow to help communicate which side is which. So try to keep the curve a bit more consistent!

Texture Analysis and Dissection

Overall, you have once again did a good job on the texture! There were clear transition from sparse to dense and you have used cast shadow to communicate your form. I think a small nitpick would be that the crumpled paper seems to have a lot more curvature on your recreation (right side) while on the left side it had a bit more sharp blocky shadow.

For the dissection, I think the only feedback I could give is that some of the texture should have had a bit more depth on it. There are two in particular, which was the pinecone and the tire. While I understand that pinecone had sharp edges, I think you might have overused the cast shadow to the point where I could not not what was the form that was in there. As for the tire, there should be a slight depth on the marks of the tire as it isn't just a flat surface.

I do appreicate that you have made sure that all surface curve around the form and that you have demonstrated clear understanding of the sparse to dense transition.

Form Intersection

This would be my biggest critique, as I myself is still a bit inexperienced when it comes to doing this homework myself, even as I am doing lesson 6. For the box intersection, some of the one I circled looked a bit confusing on my end due to the zigzagging. I personally prefer to highlight the overall shape that the intersection has taken, but I couldn't comment on this much because I'm not that experienced on this.

As for the other intersections, I think the only confusion I had was the when a ball shaped object intersect with another. I have highlighted some of my interpretation of the object, but I think the intersection should probably follow the circular shape of the ball or just took a chunk out of the ball. I think that overall you understood the task and have tried your best! Just keep an eye on the ball intersection with another object is my advice.

Organic Intersection

This is one of the harder exercise that I still have problem tackling at times, but I think the first thing you should do is to decide where the light source should be coming from. I personally drew a tiny light bulb or sun according to the shadow when I was checking the drawing to make it easier for me to understand where a shadow should be. I suggest you do the same, just a tiny one might help! Because from what I see, there seems to be an overcorrection on the cast shadows. Some of the forms shadow contradicts one another, making it hard to decide where the light source is / where they are facing. I have circled some areas where shadows shouldn't be there. I also have shaded some areas where I think the shadow woul wrap around the form underneath it.

First of all, the form shouldn't exactly stick to other form as if there was a glue. Some of the way the forms are placed defied gravity in a way, they should have been a bit more slump from their weight. This applies to the vertical forms that seems to just stick out. It's probably better to not do a super vertical form from under the main form, because then you would need to put a bit of weight on the vertical form as if the main form laid on top of the vertical one. It's the one with the "small lift" feedback.

Conclusion

Overall, I think you have done a great job on the forms. The texture was detailed and you did follow the instructions as close as possible! Just a small revision on the organic intersections and I think you should be good!

Hi Gadesenha. Congratulations on finishing Lesson 1, and welcome to the Draw a Box community! I'm Kaili, I'm one of the other students in the course, so this won't be official critique but hopefully it helps you out. Please feel free to reply with any questions regarding the critique, or give me a ping in the official DaB discord server if you need anything answered urgently.

You've done an excellent job getting through Lesson 1 but there are a few things I want to point out that will hopefully help you as you get further along in the Draw a Box lessons.

Lines:

Superimposed lines

Overall you did a very good job! The only thing I'm seeing is that on some of your shorter lines, you had fraying at both ends. Make sure, regardless of how long the line is, you're starting from the same spot everytime. Every step of this exercise must be done with intent as you incorporate it into your warm up routine. Otherwise, your starts are done with purpose and as a result you only have fraying on one side (just like the lesson said) and you don't have wobbles in your lines. Each one was executed with confidence, so good job!

Ghosted Lines

Great execution here! I'm not seeing any wobbling or arcing. Your starts and stops are pretty dead on, I would consider you at level three for this exercise! Nice job!

Ghosted planes

Not much to give feedback on here! Just remember to keep employing the Ghosting method as you are. Ghosting is the corner stone of Lesson 1 and the 250 box challenge, so it is imperative you give this step the attention it deserves. Great job!

Elipses:

Tables of Elipses

The only thing I feel the need to point out is there were some floating elipses in a few spots. The goal is to have your elipse touch all sides of the box given and the elipses next to it. This will be fixed over time as you continue to practice, but I just wanted to point that out (It is a nitpick so don't feel negatively about it). This exercise was very well done! You've drawn through your elipses at least twice, and, other than a few places, each elipse fits snuggly in the space it was given. Keep up the good work!

Elipses in Planes

Very well executed! I'm not seeing any wobbles, inconsistent shapes, or floating. You've drawn through each elipse at least twice, and each elipse touches all four sides of the plane. Great job!

Funnels

Great job! These look really good: you've drawn through all your elipses at least twice. The two things I feel the need to point out though are the alignment of the minor axis and the spacing.

There were a few spots where your elipses did not match the minor axis of your funnel. This is something many will struggle with, so don't feel too bad! It's just something I wanted to bring to your attention so you are aware of it and can continue to try to correct as you use this exercise in your warm ups. For more information on that, check out this part of the homework.

As for spacing, much like our tables of elipses exercise, our goal here is to have all edges of the elipses touching each other or the edges of the funnel. Make sure when doing this exercise, that you are allowing yourself enough time to plan your execution, and ghost as many times as is necessary. We're all about the journey here, not the destination ^-^

Otherwise, these were very well done! Keep drawing through your elipses at least twice. This is a great foundation to build off of for your warm up routine.

Boxes:

Plotted Perspective

These came out amazingly. It's very clear you have a good understanding of two point perspective based on this. One thing I'm noticing is there are a few spots where your back vertical line came out quite crooked. This is to be expected, as there can be human error during this exercise. If the back corner is tricky to read, do your best to make that line as perpendicular to the horizon as you can. The other is it seems on your first panel you may have missed a box. Remember, the goal is to draw 5-6 boxes in that space. Other than that, good job!

Rough Perspective

Very well done. The backs of most of your boxes are actually rectangular/square (There's just a few with that wonky tilt, but it will get easier to execute out as you practice). You've plotted back to the VP and it's clear you were able to analyze your mistakes and adjust as you went through the exercise. You've definitely been employing the ghosting method correctly here, so excellent job. The only thing I need to point out is that it seems you missed a box again in this exercise in the first panel of your second page. Just like the Plotted Perspective exercise, we're looking to have 5-6 boxes filling this space. Other than that, though, great work!

Rotated Boxes

Amazing job! You clearly rotated the boxes and didn't rely on a vanishing point for them as the lesson said. The lines are very clear, and for the most part each box looks like a rotated box. The only thing I'm seeing is that, at the bottom right corner, you've missed a box. This is a really common mistake with this exercise (there is a lot going on here), but going forward and as you incorporate this into your warm up routine, make sure you're drawing all the boxes. This is a great starting point for this exercise, being as complicated as it is. You're already off to such a good start here, so keep moving forward!

Organic Perspective

Great work! You have not used dramatic foreshortening nor did your lines diverge as they got further away from the viewer, and your understanding of the application of the ghosting method has really come across in this exercise. That's awesome! Keep it up!

Overall, this Lesson was very well done! Make sure to really focus on ghosting moving forward and being more intentional in your elipses. I'd recommend adding the last box to your Rotated Boxes exercise, Plotted Perspective, and Rough Perspective exercises, and then you'll be ready to get into the 250 box challenge! Congratulations on finishing Lesson 1, and good luck taking on the challenge! I hope to see more of your work in the future.

Hi Untimed0763. Congratulations on finishing Lesson 1, and welcome to the Draw a Box community! I'm Kaili, I'm one of the other students in the course, so this won't be official critique, but hopefully it helps you out. Please feel free to reply with any questions regarding the critique, or give me a ping in the official DaB discord server if you need anything answered urgently.

You've done a good job so far on Lesson 1, but there are a few things I want to point out that will hopefully help you as you get further along in the Draw a Box lessons.

Lines:

Superimposed lines

The first thing I noticed was that only one page of Superimposed Lines was in your gallery. For the Superimposed Lines exercise, two pages are assigned. I understand Imgur can be a pain (I've fought with it many times myself), if this is a glitch please update you post accordingly. Homework cannot be marked as complete until all assignments are completed, so please keep this in mind going forward.

As for the page posted: The only issue I'm seeing is frayed starts. As mentioned in the lesson material, frayed ends are to be expected, but your starts should be done with intention. Other than that, your lines are confident, there is a good amount of variation in length and shape, and I'm not seeing a lot of deviation. As you add these to your warm up routine, make sure to be intentional about those starts. Otherwise, keep up the good work!

Ghosted Lines

Good execution, but there's two things I want to bring to your attention: slight wobbling and the amount of pages submitted. Wobbling can be an indication of hesitation. When you're doing this exercise, make sure you're committing to the stroke and remember: once the pen touches the page, any opportunity to avoid a mistake has passed. This gets explored more in the lesson here. As for the amount of pages submitted, this assignment only calls for one page. This may seem nitpicky, however, I'm only mentioning this because it is important to read and execute the homework as written. Lesson 1 is a good place to make mistakes like this, and I'd like to help prevent mistakes like these being made in future lessons.

Ghosted planes

The first thing I noticed was that there is only one page of Ghosted Planes was in your gallery. For the Ghosted Planes exercise, two pages are assigned. Homework cannot be marked as complete until all assignments are completed, so please keep this in mind going forward.

As for the page you posted though: very good execution. It is evident you are getting more comfortable in the ghosting method, and there is much less wobbliness in your lines compared to the page of Ghosted Lines you had done. Great job!

Elipses:

Tables of Elipses

A few things to remember here: you must draw through your circles 2-3 times and drawing an elipse/circle within an elipse/circle is not the point of this excercise. . I see for one page your execution was very well done: you drew through your circles at least twice, there was no wobbling, and you had no issues with getting those elipses to fit snuggly in their given space. The second page, however, should be like the first ie. draw through your elipses at least twice, and draw with a clear intention/goal. It may be useful to review the lesson material before adding this to your warm up routine.

Elipses in Planes

There has been no submission of Elipses in Planes. Please keep in mind, For the Elipses in Planes exercise, two pages are assigned. Homework cannot be marked as complete until all assignments are completed.

Funnels

There has been no submission of Funnels. Please keep in mind, For the Funnels exercise, one page is assigned. Homework cannot be marked as complete until all assignments are completed.

Boxes:

Plotted Perspective

These came out amazingly. It's very clear you have a good understanding of two point perspective based on this. You've cleary used a ruler, have defined VPs, and your back lines came out nice and perpendicular to the horizon line. Nice job, keep up the good work!

Rough Perspective

Very well done. The backs of most of your boxes are actually rectangular/square (There's just a few with that wonky tilt, but it will get better to figure out as you practice) You've plotted back to the VP and it's clear you were able to analyze your mistakes and adjust as you went through the exercise. There was just a bit of minor wobbling and drawing over "mistake lines", so just be mindful and continue to put the ghosting method into practice. Making sure you're ghosting and drawing from your shoulder as you practice is imperitave to making sure you're correctly executing this exercise.

Rotated Boxes

Amazing job! You clearly rotated the boxes and didn't rely on a vanishing point for them as the lesson said. The lines are very clear, and for the most part each box looks like a rotated box. This is a great starting point for this exercise, being as complicated as it is. My only critique is that you did not draw the last row of corner boxes. Before moving onto the next step of DaB, I would strongly encourage you to finish that set and draw those last 4 boxes. Don't restart this exercise, but draw what you've missed, and don't fear "ruining" the page. You're already off to such a good start here, so keep moving forward!

Organic Perspective

It is evident that as you got to this exercise you have become a lot more confident with ghosting. There's still some slight wobbling going on, but this will be corrected as you continue to employ the ghosting method, and practice these exercises routinely. There isn't much (if any) diverging lines, so well done there, and I'm not seeing any dramatic foreshortening. Great job on your execution of this one, just really make sure to ghost those lines and plan as much as you need to in order to prevent those wobbles.

Overall, these were very well done! Make sure to really focus on ghosting moving forward and drawing from your shoulder.

Due to this submission being incomplete, I cannot recommend that you move onto the 250 box challenge just yet. If you could please provide:

1. A second page of superimposed lines

2. A second page of ghosted planes

3. Two pages of Elipses in Planes

4. 1 Page of funnels

5. Finish the Rotated Boxes Exercise

Once you have responded to this critique with your revisions, we can work on getting you that completion badge and get you onto those 250 boxes. Best of luck, and thank you for your submission! I can't wait to see more of your work :D

Hi Ryuga_Stark, congratulations on finishing Lesson 1, and welcome to the Draw a Box community! I'm Kaili, I'm one of the other students in the course so this won't be official critique but hopefully it helps you out. Please feel free to reply with any questions regarding the critique, or give me a ping in the official DaB discord server if you need anything answered urgently.

You've done an excellent job getting through Lesson 1 but there are a few things I want to point out that will hopefully help you as you get further along in the Draw a Box lessons.

Lines:

Superimposed lines

Overall you did a very good job! No fraying and no wobbles, keep up the good work!

Ghosted Lines

Your starts and stops were, for the most part, very impressive! You did miss your mark a few times, however this will become easier as you practice this more. You're hardly wobbling and I can see very limited arcing going on here, so excellent execution of this exercise. The only thing I would recommend as you add this to your warm up routine would be to experiment with more length variation. Other than that, keep up the good work!

Ghosted planes

No notes! Keep up the good work!

Elipses:

Tables of Elipses

This is a great first attempt, but there are a few things I'd like to point out. The biggest thing I'm noticing here is you're running through your elipses multiple times. This isn't the worst thing you could be doing, but try to keep it to 2-3 through lines max as mentioned in the lesson material. There's nothing explicitly prohibiting more than 2-3 times in the lesson material, but your elipses are already very well done, any more and you're starting to waste time and ink, while also losing control. The other thing I wanted to point out was there is a few instances where you're not maximizing your use of space in the exercise. Ie. your elipses are not touching each other's edges or the edges of the given space. Considering the rest of the work you did on this exercise, I believe you still have a good handle on it, but just be mindful of it in the future. Make sure to take your time, properly ghost, and give every individual piece of the puzzle the time it deserves! You got this!

Elipses in Planes

These are very well done. Very consistent, and you were able to get majority of your elipses to touch all four edges of the planes, while still drawing through your elipse twice. There's a few spots where you wobbled (mostly on your larger elipses) but this spatial recognition will become better as you practice more. Great foundation to work off of, just make sure you're being mindful and implementing the ghosting method.

Funnels

The only thing I'm noticing here is as there are a few spots in which your elipses are not touching the edges of the funnel, and you are drawing through too much/having a bit of wobblele Try to be conscious of it when you do this in your warm up, and really focus on ghosting before execution. It will make a world of difference.

Boxes

Plotted perspective

These came out amazingly. It's very clear you have a good understanding of two point perspective based on this. Nice job!

Rough Perspective

Very well done. The backs of most of your boxes are actually rectangular/square (There's just a few with that wonky tilt, but it will get better to figure out as you practice) You've plotted back to the VP and it's clear you were able to analyze your mistakes and adjust as you went through the exercise. There was just a bit of minor wobbling and drawing over "mistake lines", so just be mindful and continue to put the ghosting method into practice. Overtime, this will come much more naturally.

Rotated Boxes

Amazing job! You clearly rotated the boxes and didn't rely on a vanishing point for them as the lesson said. The lines are very clear, and for the most part each box looks like a rotated box. This is a great starting point for this exercise, being as complicated as it is. The next time you give it a go in your warm ups, try to make the perspective shift/rotation a little more dramatic (like we see in the homework example). You're already off to such a good start here, so keep moving forward!

Organic Perspective

These were all very well done! It looks like you have a good understanding of this exercise as well. A small nitpick but, it is pointed out in the lesson material, so I will bring it up here: try to ghost your hatching lines as well. Neat hatch lines can make a world of difference, so keep that in mind when you add this to your warm up pool!

Overall, these were very well done! Make sure to really focus on ghosting moving forward and being more confident in your elipses (you're already doing great here, don't keep doubting yourself). I think you're ready to get into the 250 box challenge! Congratulations on finishing Lesson 1, and good luck taking on the challenge! I hope to see more of your work in the future.