3:11 PM, Friday November 26th 2021
Hello! I'll be taking a look at your submission. Please be aware that I am no expert, nor I am a Drawabox assistant. Matter of fact, I finished this lesson a week ago. Nevertheless, I hope my feedback can be of use for you.
First of all,congratulations on completing Lesson 2! It can be a grindy one.
Your arrows are looking great, both sides are the same size, and that helps a lot in conveying the 3D turns. Lineweight is subtle and the arrow head is nicely even in both sides.
Organic forms are looking nice and even, maybe your contour spheres could use a bit more of varying in degrees. You get the idea that in the center the degree is smaller, but then you jump to a much higher degree on the adjacent sphere.
Contour lines wrap around the sausage nice and confidently, and it conveys the 3D form well.
Texture is probably my favorite part of your submission. You did very well capturing the shadows, and it shows you took a long time analyzing each texture. Very solid work!
Form intersections are very well done, there are very few issues here and there, but that's completely normal when you have so much forms grouping against each other. Your work is great. If you haven't, you should read these diagrams and messages done by Optimus, a member of the Discord Channel. Here's the link to the message. It personally helped me a lot when going through this exercise:
https://discord.com/channels/365036548820959242/368871002584907776/911974220651720744
You organic intersections exercise has some nice shape overlapping, but the sausages can look just a bit stiff. It can help thinking of them as a water balloon, really imagining in your head how it would wrap. Also lineweight plays a big part in conveying overlaps and what's in front and what's not. I think your exercise could have used a bit more lineweight. As far as cast shadows, they are done nicely, and they land where they should. Very good c:
Overall, this is a really good submission, I see you grasped all the concepts really nicely, and I'm sure you'll have no problems advancing to Lesson 3.Once again, I am no expert, so take my advice with a grain of salt. Sorry if this was too extensive! I wish you the best of luck in the latter lessons.
Cheers,
-Ioma
Next Steps:
Please take note of stuff I’ve mentioned, with the intention of improving it through the course. Move onto Lesson 3, Best of luck to you!
