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    1:26 PM, Monday May 4th 2020

    This is good, though the convergences could be a little more tighter, especially on the bottom boxes. In addition, don't redo your lines, even if they're incorrect, since this only serves to draw attention to the mistake.

    That said, this is a great attempt at rotated boxes and an overall great attempt in lesson 1. I'll mark it as complete. Kudos!

    Next Steps:

    Move on to 250 boxes, don't forget to do your warmups, and good luck!

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    9:30 AM, Monday May 4th 2020

    Hello! Grats on clearing up lesson 1! Here's my critique!

    Lines: Generally, good work. Most, if not all your lines, display a large amount of confidence, and show a good understanding of the concept of ghosting. The main issue I see in your lines is that there is some arcing in your lines. Typically, this stems from the issue of mixing up your pivots, say your elbow moves a little. Take note of the movement in your joints when ghosting in the future to reduce this effect. Remember to use your shoulder!

    Ellipses: Again, good work. You do have some problems in creating some egg-shaped ellipses, but otherwise, they're nice, good and smooth. This is more or less what's wanted in students in these exercises, so good on you for hitting this objective. I'll also add that the funnels (which you posted twice) are aligned properly to the minor axis. This is also good work, keep it up!

    Boxes: Mainly, you're missing your rotated boxes. Aside from that, these are also done decently well. I see a good understanding of the concept of perspective, and a good grasp of the lessons at hand. In the rough perspective exercise, I notice that there are some diagonals in the front and back face of the boxes. Typically, this can be resolved by placing planning points, which you can place an infinite number of. Point being, take your time to plan out each box such that you can satisfy the front and back faces being perpendicular and parallel to the horizon line. This will be especially relevant in drawing boxes in 250 boxes.

    Overall, you've displayed an excellent grasp of the concepts at hand, being able to execute your strokes with relative confidence and with great skill. I won't mark this complete yet, as you still are missing your rotated boxes exercise. Just post that as a revision, I'll take a look at it, and come to my final judgement.

    Next Steps:

    As mentioned, upload your attempt at the rotated boxes.

    When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
    4:15 AM, Tuesday April 28th 2020

    I'd say this is better. Great work! There's still some issues with the boxes "floating" a little bit (so the vertices aren't adjacent). Try to make the planning points a little bit smaller in the future, too.

    But I think this is good enough. I'll mark this as complete.

    Next Steps:

    You're good to move on to 250 boxes. Remember your warmups, good luck!

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    4:45 PM, Monday April 27th 2020

    Hello! Congratulations on clearing up lesson 1! A fineliner would be ideal to get, but I get the current issue at hand. Ballpoints are fine for now, but do try to look into online retailers who provide fineliners to get the true DaB experience. That aside, I'll move on to the crit.

    Lines: Good work. I see confidence in your lines with little wobble, which is more or less the goal in these lines. There's some arcing in your lines, especially the longer ones. I suspect this could be due to mixed pivots, either due to unintentional elbow or wrist movement. Do take note of this in your warmups in the future.

    Ellipses: They start off rough, but improve quite significantly as you went through the exercises. Good job! Its still worth mentioning that you should ghost mindfully, and then execute with full confidence in your ghosting. Doing so generally results in less "jagged" edges and less deformed ellipses. Its good that you're putting confident ellipses over accurate ones, though, since this is one of the key ideas in DaB. Your ellipses in the funnels are also excellently lined up with the minor axis, so great work there!

    Boxes: As a general note, try not to sacrifice line quality in favour of creating a "proper" box. This is mostly an issue with rough perspective. In addition, note that line weight should be a single superimposed line over the original. Your line weight in the plotted perspective is too much in this regard. In organic perspective, you can use line weight to clarify dominance in the boxes. But, aside from that, I really don't have too much to say on the exercises. Rotated boxes is done excellently, as with the organic perspective. You have sold me very well on the ideas of rotation and 3D space respectively in each of the exercises. These exercises seem to be what most people stumble on, so the fact that you've done them with great finesse is deserving of much kudos. Good job!

    Overall, I think this was an outstanding attempt at the lesson. You've demonstrated a great grasp on each exercise's concepts, and executed them well. Good job. I'll clear this lesson. Don't forget about the 50/50 rule, and remember to do your warmups!

    Next Steps:

    Move on to the 250 box challenge. Good luck!

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    4:31 PM, Monday April 27th 2020

    Hello! Good work on completing lesson 1. Here's my critique!

    Before I start the critique, do try to ensure that the pages are done in the correct order in the future in terms of the exercises, meaning superimposed lines, then ghosted lines, ghosted planes etc. This makes critting easier.

    Lines: In general, good work. I see confidence in your lines, with little wobbling, and they're relatively straight to boot. Of course, there's some arcing here and there, but I think you understand the concepts of the pivots of the arm well enough, such that this is but an occasional error. But, on your superimposed lines, I see that the lines are relatively messy. Here, I believe that you adhered too much to the accuracy of the original line. Do remember that the smooth confident line comes before an accurate one.

    Ellipses: Some of your ellipses are mishapen. You have some egg shapes, and some flat edges. Try to remember to ghost mindfully when doing your ellipses. This generally reduces the issue of the ellipse going too haywire, and allows you to make an ellipse which is more smooth. In the funnels exercise, some of your ellipses are misaligned, so do take care to ghost with the minor axis in mind.

    Boxes: Here, I see the issue of the lines becoming wobbly. As I have mentioned previously, you need to ensure that the line comes out smoothly, even at the expense of accuracy. In addition, don't redo your lines, as this only draws unwanted attention to that point. With regards to the organic perspective exercise, I think you've done a decent job in selling me the idea of the 3D space, box construction aside. In future tries of this exercise in warmups, do try to use line weight to clarify overlaps between the boxes.

    Zooming in on your rotated boxes, the main thing that stands out to me is that you've drawn way too many boxes. There should only be 25, as shown in the exercise. In addition, you've failed to draw through your forms in some of the boxes. Some of the boxes aren't even complete, missing one or more vertices. See: https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/16/notdrawingthrough. In addition, your boxes aren't converging properly in the bottom face. This fails to show the idea that the box is rotating due to the changing vps. I suggest giving this a read. It does a decent job at mentioning how the boxes work.

    Overall, I think you've done a decent job at the exercises. I don't quite think you're ready to move on (more on that later) but I think you've grasped the concept in most of the exercises. Remember to adhere to the 50/50 rule, do your warmups.

    Next Steps:

    Before you carry on to 250 boxes, I want you to try the rotated boxes exercise. Just 2 quadrants this time, not the full thing. Read through the guide I sent you, re-read the exercise thoroughly, and watch the rotated boxes video if you can. I'm not to fussy as to which 2 quadrants. They can be adjacent, opposite, or on 2 separate "+"s. I'll leave that to you. Good luck.

    When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
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    4:12 PM, Monday April 27th 2020

    Hello! Congrats on pushing through and doing away with lesson 1! Here's my critique!

    Lines: In general, you've done a pretty decent job here. I see confidence in your lines, with very little wobble, great! Seems to me that you've grasped the idea of ghosting decently. However, there is some arcing in your lines. This tells me that you're mixing pivots. In the future, as you draw, try to pay attention to your elbow, and whether or not your grip on the pen is a little too loose. Some of your lines seem to have some issues with being smooth and consistent. Try to ensure that your pen is perpendicular to the page as much as possible in execution, as this produces the smoothest and richest of lines.

    Ellipses: You're hesitating a little too much as you execute the ellipse. As a result, your ellipses appear bumpy and wobbly. In DaB, we generally focus on making ellipses smooth and confident rather than accurate. As such, do your ghosting mindfully, and then execute with confidence, regardless of the accuracy of your execution. Mindfully ghosting also prevents distortion of ellipses. In your funnels, they're relatively aligned properly, so good job there.

    Boxes: Remember that your confident lines come before accurate ones. As such, try not to sacrifice line quality in a bid to produce accurate ones. In the organic perspective exercise, you can use line weight to clarify overlaps between the boxes. Aside from that, I really don't have much to say here. Your exercises look good, and it seems as though you've gotten the idea down well. I would like to commend you on the rotated boxes. These are quite well done, and I see that you've understood and executed the instructions with skill. Great work!

    Overall, I think you've done a great job on these exercises. Keep this up, and remember to do your warmups. I'll mark this as complete.

    Next Steps:

    Time for 250 boxes. Good luck, and press on!

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    3:38 PM, Monday April 27th 2020

    Hello! Congrats on clearing up lesson 1! Here's my crit for the lesson!

    Before we get into specifics, I want to stress an important concept in DaB: Not redoing lines that are incorrect. Whenever you draw a line that is incorrect, say it wobbles or arcs, or any number of mistakes, do not try to redo the lines. This only serves to draw unwanted attention to the point, and so make the line look of a lower quality than it should. Instead, try to work with your mistake, and move on. I won't mention this again in this critique, so keep it in the back of your mind as I go through this critique.

    Lines: Overall, not a bad attempt. In general, I think you should strive to make longer lines. Doing so would allow you to test yourself on not only your ghosting, but also the ability to utilise your shoulder. Thus, mistakes would be easily pointed out and you can work towards them better. In addition, some of your lines seem to arc. This, in my experience, tends to come from mixing up your pivots unintentionally, so try to pay attention to your elbow and wrist, especially if you're not gripping the pen tight enough. Finally, there is a point or two I see that you undershot the line, then you tried to extend it (which resulted in wobble). In DaB, focus on making a straight confident line first. Worry about accuracy later, that comes with practice. On a more minor point, try to make your "planning points" smaller.

    Ellipses: One of the things to keep note with ellipses in DaB is that they are to be drawn through twice, thrice maximum. In your ellipses, I see several ellipses that are drawn through more than that, so keep that in mind. As with lines, the main focus of ellipses is to create a smooth, confident ellipse over an accurate one. Thus, after your ghosting, trust your ghosting in execution, even if the ellipse appears inaccurate. I see that some of your ellipses are nice and confident, though there are still some with jagged edges. Remember to ghost mindfully. That said, most of your ellipses in the funnels exercise are well aligned, so good job there.

    Boxes: You've done a great attempt here. Mostly, I think you've grasped the concepts behind the exercises at hand. Do remember not to sacrifice line quality here, even if the lines you draw are less arbritrary. In the organic perspective exercise, I think you can further push the relationship between size and proximity to the viewer. The change in size isn't very significant, so keep that in mind. You can also use line weight to clarify overlaps in the future.

    With regards to your rotated boxes, I can see some boxes, particularly the boxes not on the "+" with issues of guessing, as in https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/16/guessing. Having the lines be close to each other helps prevent this issue, and makes things more orderly. I understand that its quite messy doing things like this, but this is one of the benefits of drawing larger, makes it easier to deal with these things. Another thing I noticed is that some of your boxes aren't drawn through, as in https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/16/notdrawingthrough. This could lead to a worsening of the point mentioned above, as you can't really judge the lines well. Finally, you should also make sure that the lines for each box converges at a different point. I find that this guide tends to help out those that struggle with the concept. Give it a read!

    Overall, I think you've made a good attempt at the exercises. Though not perfect, you can make good progress by doing your warmups. Remember not to grind and to bear the 50/50 rule in mind. I'll mark this as complete.

    Next Steps:

    You've 250 boxes to work through. Remember not to redo your lines, and do your lines with confidence. Good luck!

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    5:33 PM, Sunday April 26th 2020

    Firstly, grats on clearing lesson 1! Good on you for pushing through to the end to get it done! And now for my crit.

    Lines: In general, good work. A good majority of your lines are straight and confident. A couple of your lines are a little bit wobbly, but I'd attribute that to getting used to ghosting. In future warmups though, do try to create longer lines, as this would further test your ability to ghost confidently with your shoulder. That aside, good work here!

    Ellipses: Again, wonderful job here. I can see the shape of the ellipse without much mishaping, and they're done mostly with great confidence. In your funnels, though, there are some ellipses that are a little tilted, and so not aligned to the minor axis. Try to watch out for that.

    Boxes: They're fine. I'll note that in general, you can make several planning points before executing your lines. I recommend placing a point and ghosting a little, and in doing so, you can estimate if the line is correctly angled and/or of the correct size. This can potentially prevent the diagonals as in your rough perspective, as planning would generally allow you to iron out the obvious diagonals.

    Your rotated boxes look not bad. Though you need to also consider that the bottom faces should also converge, so the bottom faces don't look too "flat".

    Organic perspective is done pretty well. While box construction isn't perfect, you'll be able to iron that out soon in the upcoming challenge. In addition, you can use line weight in the future to clarify overlaps between the boxes.

    Overall, I think you've done a pretty good job here. You've shown understanding of the main learning points of each exercise, and executed them with pretty good compentency. Give yourself a pat on the back, and prepare to work in the box mines for a while.

    Next Steps:

    Its time for 250 boxes! Good luck, and don't forget to do your warmups!

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    4:26 AM, Saturday April 25th 2020

    Hello! Grats on clearing up L1! Crits are a lil slow these days. Here's mine!

    Lines: You've done a great job on these. I see confidence in your lines, with little wobble. Great job! There's a little bit of arcing. This is, from my experience, due to mixing up your pivots, so try to pay attention to your elbow and wrist movement in the future. That aside, I think this is quite clean, nice work!

    Ellipses: As you mentioned, you're having some trouble with this. Generally, the trick is to ghost, and then execute, all with confidence, as you've done for the lines. Important to note is to not let your sight autocorrect inaccuracies. As with lines, you wanna aim to make confident, clean ellipses first, then worry about accuracy. Do also take note of your ghosting, since some of the ellipses are a little mishapen. On the funnels, also take note of the ellipse alignment, some of the ellipses are tilted.

    Boxes: While generally not bad, as a general note, don't try to correct your lines, even if they're incorrect. Instead, try to work with the mistake, as making corrections may draw unwanted attention to that point. Also, while box construction isn't perfect, you can get used to that in the upcoming challenge. In the rotated boxes exercise, its worth noting that the bottom faces converge as well, and so will appear to converge to different points, as with the top face. Organic perspective isn't bad. It decently sells the idea of size and distance. Though, I think you could go smaller on the smallest boxes.

    Overall, a pretty good try at lesson 1. I'll mark this as complete. Do remember to do your warmups, and adhere to the 50/50 rule. Good luck in your endavours!

    Next Steps:

    250 boxes come next. Good luck!

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    3:47 AM, Saturday April 25th 2020

    Hello! Grats on clearing L1! Crits are a lil slow in these days, so here's mine!

    Lines: You'd need some more confidence in your lines moving forward. This means that you should try to aim for a smooth, clean line first and foremost, even if this would mean that the line would become inaccurate. Remember to apply the motion of the shoulder for all your lines, as this would ensure the widest range of movement and thus give a straight line more easily. Where your lines are confident, I sometimes see some arcing, telling me that you may be using some of your elbow and/or you're not gripping the pen well enough. Do take note for the future.

    Ellipses: Try to note your ghosting: some of your ellipses are a little mishapen. Make your motion smooth and uniform to ensure that the ellipse would come out nicely. And, for that matter, remember to trust your ghosting. This prevents "jagged" edges in your stuff, smoothening the ellipse and making it come out better. Even if this would result in the ellipse leaving the border, just push on. Don't try to correct it, just trust your ghosting in execution. In the funnels, your ellipses are fairly aligned, so that's good. But, I think its once again worth noting the jagged edges thing. In a bid to get your ellipses to fit in the funnel, some of them are really sharp. Try to avoid this.

    Boxes: Overall, not bad. As a general note, do try not to correct lines, even if they're incorrect. Doing so would only bring unwanted attention to the correction, which would not be desired. Instead, move on from the error and treat it as though it were correct. In addition, I will comment that box construction isn't perfect, but you'll get familliar with box construction real soon, so not to worry too much about that.

    In the rough persepctive exercise, you can make the boxes a little bigger, and, you can have the box be much more spread out. Even if it would mean that the box would be on the other side of the page, that's fine. You don't have to be limited to close to the vp.

    Rotated boxes are a little thin, but from what I can see, they're fine. Keep at it!

    Organic perspective: I think you've captured the main idea of the exercise, and I'm quite satisfied with the differing sizes of the boxes.

    Overall, not a bad job! Keep at it, not forgetting the 50/50 rule. With that, I think you're good to move on.

    Next Steps:

    250 boxes are next, good luck!

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