# flingking4267

## flingking4267's Sketchbook

##### 2:44 PM, Tuesday November 3rd 2020

Thanks for critiquing my work. Here's the re-do:

https://imgur.com/a/58x3f2z

Yeah I really did struggle with rotated boxes. It was mostly visualizing the moving of different vanishing points. Do you think the exercise can be repeated to help with that, and visualizing in 3D space in general, or does the 250 Box Challenge do that better? Also, what do you think is the best exercise to practice among each of the following sections: Lines, Ellipses, and Boxes? Thanks in advance for critiquing my re-do and answering my questions.

##### 10:08 PM, Saturday October 24th 2020

If I'm correct, you said if someone's been waiting for Lesson 1 to be critiqued for more than a week then you'll give theirs a critique if they reply to message, right? Well, if so, I submitted my Lesson 1 exercises on October 7th and in addition I've also done 2 reviews so far on other Lesson 1 exercises. I'd highly appreciate it if you critique my work; and if you need to do more reviews before doing so, I'd be glad to. Thanks in advance.

##### 9:09 PM, Thursday October 22nd 2020

No problem

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##### 9:02 PM, Thursday October 22nd 2020

Hello eden. I'll try my best to give some helpful critique on your work. Keep in mind however that I've only completed Lesson 1.

``LINES``

Superimposed Lines: Your lines were straight and confident, weren't fraying, or wobbling, which is good. Some of your lines arc in one direction, however.

Ghosted Lines: Same thing here and also you often fall short of one point. Be more confident with your markmaking and, if it helps, take your pen off the paper as soon as you reach the end point.

Ghosted Planes: Same thing here again.

``ELLIPSES``

Tables of Ellipses: Good job drawing through your ellipses, drawing them confidently, keeping them within their bounds and touching each other, making sure they don't overlap. If you want to make them more tight and clean however, I suggest you stiffen your entire arm after you draw the first ellipse and then try to draw the second one right on top of it; all in one continuous motion, at the same speed. Please let me know if this worked for you so that I can learn as well. :)

Ghosted Planes: Good job getting your ellipses to touch all edges of the planes most of the time.

Funnels: You alligned you ellipses to the central minor axis and kept them inside the funnels, which is good.

``BOXES``

Plotted Perspective: Good.

Rough Perspective: Your vertical lines were often parallel to the horizon and your horizontal lines were perpendicular to the horizon, which is good. Some of your lines are still wobbly though, need to work on that.

Rotated Boxes: Good! (I did poorly on this exercise...) Your boxes share the same vanishing point, meaning you rotated them (only slightly, however) and you kept the corners close together.

Organic Perspective: Good job here as well. Can't see much wrong with your boxes; they're not distorted at the least. Also your lines have improved; they're less wobbly in this exercise.

Next Steps:

I think you can go on to 250 box challenge. Continue practicing the Ghosted Planes exercises to keep working on your lines, and then you can just draw ellipses in them afterwards to work on that.

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##### 9:57 PM, Thursday October 15th 2020

Hello, alittlemad. Although I've really only done Lesson 1, I've repeated the exercises a couple of times since I last submitted so I think I can give you some helpful critique.

``**LINES**``

Superimposed Lines: There's a bit of fraying on both ends up your superimposed lines, which is not good. This means you're not markmaking from your starting point and may not be putting much thought into each stroke you make. Also, your lines sometimes arc in one direction. Try to correct this by only using your shoulder to draw each line. You don't have any wobbly lines, however, which is really good.

Ghosted Lines: You often fall short of one point in this exercise. If you can recall the three levels stated on the page where this exercise is introduced, I'd say you're on Level 2: your line trajectory is consistent (line isn't wobbly) but you miss one or both points (in this case one). But it seems you no longer have this problem on the later exercises (Boxes), which is good.

Ghosted Planes: Your diagonals don't always bisect the plane. And your lines arc sometimes. Your accuracy in markmaking has improved though.

``````If you are concerned about improving your lines specifically I suggest repeating the Ghosted Planes exercise. Remember to take breaks.

**ELLIPSES**``````

Tables of Ellipses: Good job drawing through ellipses and drawing them with confidence. Your ellipses didn't stay within the bounds all the time and they often overlapped with one another.

Ellipses in Planes: Your ellipses aren't deformed nor do they float but they often don't touch all four edges of the plane.

Funnels: Your ellipses fit inside the funnel but often are not aligned to central minor axis; the minor axis should cut each ellipse into two equal, symmetrical halves. This is very important, especially for construction. Your ellipses were properly spaced though, which is good.

``````All of these exercises are useful when trying to get better at drawing ellipses but they way I see it Tables of Ellipses is more for engraining muscle memory while the others are more for practical use like constructing 3D forms. That's just my opinion though.

**BOXES**``````

Rough Perspective: Good.

Plotted Perspective: Horizontal lines were not consistently parallel to the horizon line and vertical lines were not consistently perpendicular to the horizon line.

Rotated Boxes: You did not attempt to rotate your boxes at all. There are sets of boxes that seem to have the same vanishing point. (I also struggled with this exercise, though.)

Organic Perspective: A lot of your boxes are distorted. If you're intentionally using dramatic forshortening, I advise you refrain from doing so in this exercise.

``Overall, you did a good job.``

Next Steps:

Go onto the 250 box challenge; it should help you get better at drawing boxes. Also, practice drawing ellipses, you may need to do so on the upcoming lessons. And don't forget to take breaks and review old lessons and exercises you've already completed. Have a good day. :)

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