flamingcheeto

Hi, I'll be critiquing your work.

LINES

Your superimposed lines look to be made confidently, with fraying only on one end. Good work.

It seems that you have prioritized making confident marks in your ghosted lines, with minimal arching, nice job.

ELLIPSES

I notice that your ellipses are looking a bit wobbly, I also see that they are escaping the bounds of the plane. Do take care to be patient, and take as much time as you need to ghost to create an ellipse.

I like that in your tables of ellipses you seem to have prioritized drawing more confident ellipses, however they are still escaping the bounds of the table.

The ellipses in your funnels appear to be aligned with the minor axis, good work. There are just a few cases where they escape the bounds.

BOXES

I noticed that the boxes at the end of the middle row in your rotated boxes page are not continuously rotating away, other than that small error, it looks good!

https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/5f4fef59.jpg this is an example of the boxes rotated away correctly from the rotated boxes homework page.

It looks like you have correctly used the line correction method in your rough perspective work, however, I noticed some more wobbly lines.

In your organic perspective work I noticed a lot more arching in your lines, do remember to be patient, and take your time when ghosting before you confidently execute your mark.

Thank you for critiquing my work, here is my branches exercise and the two revisions you requested.

I guess I just... somehow forgot to upload my branches exercise, lol.

https://imgur.com/a/UEEv2nG

Good work! Using your shoulder to draw takes a bit of getting used to, yeah. For what I mentioned about the funnels, I recommend going back to the homework page for it in lesson 1 and reading through it again to clarify some things.

I think you're ready to move on to the 250 box challenge, good luck!

Hi,

congrats on completing lesson one, I'll be critiquing your work.

Lines

To start, I noticed quite a bit of wobbliness when you make marks, are you using your wrist rather than your shoulder? https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/2/pivots

You want to draw from your shoulder to create smooth confident marks. You also do not need to worry so much about being accurate, as that improves over time.

I noticed a fair amount of fraying at both ends of your superimposed lines, remember- you want to try to place your pen at the same starting position each time you make a mark here.

Ellipses

Your ellipses in planes work is looking pretty good, however there were only a few instances where the ellipse escaped the bounds of the plane, or was too small and did not touch the sides of the plane. Your ellipses appear to have been drawn through multiple times, and confidently.

Your table of ellipses looks good as well, the only real issue was that in some cases your ellipses were not fitting within the bounds of the table.

In your funnels, the ellipses appear to be aligned with the minor axis, which is good, however, they are all spaced apart- not touching each other snugly. I also noticed that some of your ellipses are not fitting within the funnels.

https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/c0447c15.jpg This is how they should look.

I recommend checking out the homework page again for funnels if you found my explanation inadequate.

Boxes

Your rotated boxes are looking good! Other than the fact that only half of them are finished, the rest are rotating continuously away from the viewer, good work!

In your organic perspective work, I noticed that you redrew over some lines, don't do that. Once you make a mark, that's it, you'll just have to live with it regardless if it's good or bad.

Once again, good work on completing lesson one, before I mark the lesson as complete however, I would like for you to finish your rotated boxes page, and do 1 extra page of funnels, good luck!

Hello, I'll be critiquing your work, Good work on completing lesson 1.

Lines

Your ghosted lines are looking pretty good, however I noticed that your lines are arching, I found that arching them in the opposite direction has helped me make straighter lines. Aside from that, I noticed a bit of wobbliness too, but it looks like you're using your shoulder when you make marks, so I don't see it as too much of a problem, as that will improve over time.

Your superimposed lines are good as well, I see there was a case where you noticed when there was fraying on both ends of the line, aside from the arching in the lines, it seems you understand what is required for the exercise, and that you are using your shoulder when you make marks, good work.

Ellipses

Good work on your ellipses in planes, they appear to be drawn confidently and drawn through multiple times. There were only a few cases where they escaped the bounds of the plane, but you don't need to worry about accuracy too much as it will improve over time.

Your funnels are great too, there were only a few cases where your ellipses weren't aligned with the minor axis, however it seems that you understand what needs to be done in this exercise, good work.

Boxes

In your rough perspective work I noticed some more wobbly lines, do remember to use your shoulder when making marks.

I noticed that your boxes at the ends of your rotated boxes exercise weren't actually rotating away, and were along the same rotation as the boxes directly next to them.

https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/d73eea49.jpg here is an example from the homework page of what it should not look like.

https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/9a2db6a0.jpg and here is an example of how it should look.

Your organic perspective work looks good as well, I noticed less wobbliness and less arching in your lines here, good work.

Again, good work on completing lesson 1, and good luck on the 250 box challenge.

Those ellipses are great, Good work! I think you're ready to move on to the 250 box challenge.

Hi, I'll be critiquing your work. Congrats on completing lesson 1.

In lesson one Uncomfortable says to use your shoulder to draw for EVERYTHING done in this course, he says we're supposed to do it because it is challenging. Also, I do not recommend doing more pages of homework than you need to, Uncomfortable says to only do the amount of work he prescribes for each lesson, no more.

Lines

I see a fair amount of arching in your ghosted lines, what I found to work for me was to try to arch the line in the opposite direction.

I also noticed there is wobbliness in some your lines, and you mentioned in your post that you were using your wrist or elbow. Don't do that, use your shoulder- and remember to prioritize making a smooth confident line. Your accuracy will improve over time, so there's no need to worry about having super accurate lines.

Your superimposed lines are looking pretty good, there were only a few cases where there was some fraying on both ends. As a reminder, remember to place your pen at the same starting position each time you make a mark.

Ellipses

Your ellipses in planes are looking pretty good. There were only a few cases where they escaped the bounds of the plane.

Your funnels are looking good too. Getting them aligned with the minor axis will improve with time.

It looks like you didn't draw through some of your ellipses in your table of ellipses. Remember to draw through your ellipses two or three times, confidently.

Boxes

In rough perspective the only real issue I noticed was that your lines were wobbly.

Your rotated boxes look great! They're all spaced out, and rotate away continuously. Good job!

Your organic perspective boxes look good too! The only mistake I saw was with how you used line weight. You only want to darken the parts of the line that are overlapping another form, you do not want to make the whole line darker. However, there isn't much need to worry about that, as you'll have plenty of time to improve that in the 250 box challenge!

Before I mark the lesson as complete, I would like for you to do just 2 rows of ellipses, with the ellipses at two varying angles in each row.

https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/f4181ea2.jpg See in the example homework, how Uncomfortable had the ellipses angled to the left in one row, and then angled to the right in another.

Ohhhh you used scans! I feel like an idiot, lol. And yes, you will want to use lesson one exercises as warm ups going forward.

Good luck!

Hello, I'll be critiquing your work, congrats on completing lesson 1.

First thing I'd like to get out of the way, it looks like you're working digitally. For anything submitted to Drawabox you are required to use a fineliner pen (even those cheap sharpie ultrafine pens work) and, y'know paper. I'll excuse it for now, just make sure for everything following this you submit is done traditionally with a fineliner.(It's ok to work digitally for your 50% rule, since in that time you can do whatever you want)

Lines

I noticed that there is fraying on both ends on some of your superimposed lines, do take care to place your pen in the same starting position each time before you make your mark.

Your ghosted lines are looking pretty good, I noticed very little arching. Although, on some lines there is some wobbliness, remember- first you ghost your mark, then execute smoothly and confidently using your shoulder.

Ellipses

I like that you've prioritized executing each ellipse with confidence, but in some cases they are going outside of the bounds you have set for them, and are even overlapping with each other. Your accuracy will improve over time, so I don't think there is much of a reason to worry about it.

Your ellipses in planes are also looking good, they are executed confidently, and are only escaping their bounds in some cases.

Your funnels are also looking good, all of the ellipses seem to be aligned with the minor axis, good job!

Boxes

It looks like in rough perspective that you extended their lines past the horizon or into the vanishing point. For this exercise (using a ruler) you only need to extend your lines to where they meet with the horizon.

Your rotated boxes look good, they are spaced apart, and continuously rotate away.

Your organic perspective boxes are looking good too. However, I noticed that when you tried to apply line weight, you tried to make the whole line darker. When you're adding line weight, you only want to darken the part of the line that is overlapping with the other form.

Once again, good job on completing lesson one, you'll have plenty of time to practice using tools such as line weight in the 250 box challenge.

Hi,

Congrats on completing Lesson 1.

Superimposed Lines

Some of your lines here are looking pretty good, it looks like you used one nice confident stroke for each of your lines, however I noticed that there is some "fraying" on both ends of your superimposed lines, remember to take the time to position your pen correctly at the same starting position. Take care to plan and prepare before you make a mark. https://drawabox.com/comic/1

I also noticed a little bit arcing in your lines as well, remember to use your whole shoulder when you make a mark. It may also help to consciously arc your lines in the other direction.

https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/2/pivots

Ghosted Lines

Good job on these, I like that you prioritized making confident lines over accuracy. Your accuracy will improve over time.

Tables Of Ellipses

You did a good job on these as well, and made sure to draw through each ellipse two times prioritizing making a confident line over having it accurate. However, I saw that your ellipses escaped the bounds of your table. Try to keep your ellipses within the barrier that contains it.

Ghosted planes/ Ellipses in planes

Your planes here are looking good, and your ellipses confident too, with very little wobbliness. However like in your Tables of Ellipses, there are many cases when your ellipses escaped the bounds of the plane.

Funnels

Your funnels are also looking pretty decent as well, confident ellipses and aligned to the minor axis for the most part. Although there were still a few cases where your elipses were misaligned, it's tricky, but do take care to make sure they stay aligned.

Plotted Perspective

I saw quite a bit of wobbliness in the hatching lines you used. Remember to apply the ghosting method for every mark you make, so there is no hesitation when you go to make a line.

https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/ghostedlines

Rough Perspective

It looks like you applied the line correction method properly, extending the lines of your boxes back to the horizon.

I saw more wobbliness in your lines here, remember to ghost every mark you make. I also noticed in some cases your horizontal lines weren't parallel with the horizon.

Rotated Boxes

You did good on making rotated boxes, smooth confident lines, except for a few cases, and each box was spaced apart pretty well. However, I noticed that the boxes on the very edge were not rotated, and were parallel with the boxes directly adjacent to them.

https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/rotatedboxes

Organic perspective

Your organic perspective boxes are looking good too. You'll have plenty of time to practice your boxes in the 250 box challenge!