erdem2231

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    9:15 PM, Friday September 11th 2020

    I don't think your work is that bad. And it seems like you've improved as you moved along. First couple of four legged animal drawings seem a bit flat (especially the tiger). And you've kinda did the sticker method for additional with the wolf. I'd suggest you to believe the lie you're telling - think of your reference as a 3d mass in space rather than a flat image, and also your lines as 3d structures. You can further support this "lie" with contour lines. (you didn't use much contour lines for your primary masses, I think it could help.) You can re-read the article about the subject of 3d and convincing yourself from the lesson 2. Also adding shadow to edges of the form with some texture can also support the 3d feeling. This last suggestion could improve your drawing of deer.

    For your detail and texture work, you do overboard with details. You don't have to cover the form with details - in fact, don't do that cause it's unnecessary and definitely not good for your wrist health. And you didn't imply any density to your texture, which make your forms seem flat (this goes for the early drawings like the hedgehog, you seem to improve on this as well). I suggest you to start with breaking the silhouette (adding texture to the edges) then going in for the texture on the mass. But still, don't cover it with texture, add texture strategically. You did a good job in this aspect in your hybrid drawing. The buffalo is also good but the density could be manipulated better on the legs of the animal.

    I really don't have an issue with your animals, I think you're good t continue to the 250 cylinder challenge. But I have an issue with the fact that you didn't submit your 2 pages of organic intersections. As that is an important work of this lesson. I'll request a revision for those pages.

    Next Steps:

    I'm requesting you to do 2 pages of organic intersections. You can re-read the instrucition of the homework as there is some key points to be careful about. Other than that, believe your lie, wrap your textures around, use density, be strategic with texture, and keep up the good work!!

    When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
    9:37 PM, Tuesday July 7th 2020

    Revisions look very good as well. As I said before, your drawings look really good, and I cannot suggest anything other than that you should keep on doing what you're doing. Have fun drawing plants and more beatiful things!

    Next Steps:

    Keep your lines clean and confident. Wrap your textures around. And enjoy!!

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    10:50 AM, Tuesday July 7th 2020

    Congratulation on finishing this challenge. I personally think that you did a pretty good job overall. Also I think that you're boxes improved. Especially from the first page, where your lines are more wobbly. There are minor things, like you're boxes are a bit repetitive and you put more boxes than requested in one page. But I must say your boxes look crisp as hel. Good job!

    For your concerns, I'd like to address some things

    -I don't think you should put too much effort into your boxes, double or triple checking everything. We're trying to learn to draw compositions and scenes, and you're boxes will be only scaffolding for your objects. Yes scaffolding is so important but they will be under other objects and textures anyways. Trying to make them perfect is pointless in my opinion. There is an article in lesson 0 on overworking yourself which might be helpful.

    -If you feel like you're starting to lose some points of lesson 1, build yourself a 10-15 mins warm-up routine. You can also do just this routine in busier days to keep the muscle memory.

    -For your experiments, I really didn't see much difference. You're free to experiment and find the best way to work for yourself. Don't stop yourself from doing that.

    Enjoy lesson 2 and keep up the good work.

    Next Steps:

    Keep your lines and boxes crisp. Let yourself experiment. Enjoy.

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    10:26 AM, Tuesday July 7th 2020

    Congragulations! Enjoy the course and keep up the good work!

    Your line work looks pretty good, and they're mostly consistent in boxes as well. They're straight and crisp. But in boxes I think you can improve your line quality a bit more. Always remember to draw confident lines from your shoulders, even the smallest ones.

    Your ellipses look a bit wobbly. For this I suggest that you do a few rounds of ghosting and then draw a confident ellipse. Don't draw too fast or too slow, controled lines here. Also always draw over your ellipses 2-3 times. Don't try to draw a perfect ellipse in one go.

    Other than the line quality of your boxes, they're a bit repetitive, especially in organic perspective homework. Also you definitely under rotated your boxes in rotating boxes exercise. But nothing major I would say.

    Overall your works look pretty good. Good job!! Good luck with 250 box challenge!!

    Next Steps:

    Draw confident ellipses. Work on your box perspectives and rotations - you'll do that in 250 box challenge anyways so don't worry. And most importantly, enjoy!!

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    10:13 AM, Tuesday July 7th 2020

    I think you did pretty good overall. However there are some things I'd like to point out

    -Your intersecition homeworks look a bit flat, I must say. I think this comes from the line quality - some of the lines are wobbly therefore they break the illusion. Draw confident lines from your shoulder, even the small lines for boxes. Also you're drawing over your ellipses way too many times. 2-3 times is enough, more will make your drawings look messy.

    -I think you did a good job putting textures on organic forms. You could add dense areas to the edges of the forms, and always put textures parallel to the contour lines. Also you're prone to making closed shapes for textures, instead put lines where the texture would cast a shadow.

    -You could've alligned your ellipses better in organic forms with contours homework.

    -One last minor thing, your cast shadows could be more fluid, they kinda stick out. Let the shadow follow the surface of the form underneath.

    Other than that, I think you're good to go. If you haven't done 250 box challenge, I suggest you to do that next. If you have, feel free to move on with the third lesson. Keep up the good work!!

    Next Steps:

    Be confident with your lines. Wrap textures and shadows around. Draw shadows for texture, not full shapes. And enjoy!

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    6:37 AM, Tuesday July 7th 2020

    These are a lot more better. My suggestion moving forward is that you make a warm up routine with some line and ellipse work. You'll also have plenty of opportunities for improvement in 250 box challenge. Good luck!!

    -One minor thing. I know it can be hard to find things with the world ecents going on, but try to stick to black liners. There is an article on the subject if you want to learn why.

    Next Steps:

    Keep practicing your lines and ellipses moving forwards. Good luck with 250 box challenge!

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    1:01 PM, Monday July 6th 2020

    Other than what others said, I think there is some wobble in your ellipses and boxes as well. And some of the ellipses could be more snug in ellipse tables exercise. These all relate to confidence in your drawing, which I think you'll get down in 250 box challenge. Put all marks with confidence, drawn from the shoulder - small lines for boxes. Get this and accuracy will come overtime. Another minor thing - your dots are too big. Try to put dots that'll disappear in your lines.

    Congratulations!! Good luck with 250 box challenge.

    Next Steps:

    Be conident with your lines and keep practicing. Good luck!!

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    12:52 PM, Monday July 6th 2020

    Some other minor things I'd like to point

    -There could be more variations of degrees of ellipses in organic forms with ellipses exercise. They look very similar overall.

    -In dissections, you could use density and contour lines to wrap the texture around. Remember, texture will go around a form and edges will be darker than the center. Same goes for organic intersections, as cast shadow would wrap around the form underneath.

    Congratulations!!

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    12:45 PM, Monday July 6th 2020

    Congragulations on finishing this challenge. And I must say, youdid a pretty good job! Lines look good, there is a variety of box rotations, perspective lines are great. I really don't have much to say - it's a proper homework.

    Next Steps:

    Congratulations!! Keep up the good work. Have fun in lesson 2!!

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    12:35 PM, Monday July 6th 2020

    Congratulations on finishing the first lesson. I hope you enjoy lessons to come.

    Overall you did a pretty good job. Lines look crisp, ellipses look good, boxes look solid. But there are some minor things I'd like to point out

    -You drew over your lines way too much in ellipses and boxes. 2-3 times is enough for ellipses, don't put more than 2 additional lines to add line weight in your boxes. This will make your work look cleaner. Also don't do clean-up passes if your lines doesn't look good in the first place, because clean-up passes will end more wobbly most of the time.

    -Your dots are too big. Try to put dots that will blend into your lines. Bigger they are, messier your work looks.

    Some other things - your ellipses could alligned better in funnel exercise, some of them look slantes, and your boxes could rotate more in rotating boxes exercise. Other than that, pretty good.

    I'm marking this lesson complete. So good luck with 250 boxes challenge.

    Next Steps:

    Don't draw over your lines too much. And keep practicing. Good luck!!

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