eggoodma

Hi, good job for completing lesson 1 ! Let's dive into the three sections of this lesson !

Lines - Be sure to use a fineliner all the time ! Ballpoint pen tend to fade and it's more difficult to see mistakes ! For the superimposed lines, the lines seems to fray too much sometimes, be mindful of that. Draw your lines firmly and thoughtfully. For the ghosted lines, well done, they don't arc, they are drawn confidently.

Ellipses - Be careful, on the ellipse tables, your ellipses should touch the top and bottom of the boundaries, and should be tightly packed together. Also, some are a little wobbly, and keep in mind that you should draw through them 3 times at most, 2 times being the best. For the funnel exercise, your ellipses are well aligned with the axis, good job !

Boxes - This was the tough part. The rough perspective is looking good, but be mindful of keeping your horizontal lines parallel to the horizon and verticals perpendicular. The rotated boxes seems to be well drawn, but your hatching is distracting and is hiding your linework. Try to have a nice, tight hatching, by ghosting your lines. In addition, you should reinforce the lines of the boxes that are visible to us (in contrast of the lines that are drawn through them), in order to make the boxes pop more. You can see all of this in the example of the lesson :

https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/9a2db6a0.jpg

Also, your boxes don't rotate correctly on some extreme corners. But keep in mind that it's a difficult exercise, and it's totally normal to make mistakes at this point.

For the organic perspective, it's not very clear, and I would advise you to add lineweight to the part of lines that overlap (in order to know which box is in front and which is behind). Moreover, to convey a better sense of depth, I would advise you to draw more heavily the boxes near us, and in a lighter way the boxes far away. Like the line used to establish the boxes :

https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/3a41bccf.jpg

Be aware that I'm mostly highlighting your mistakes, but it's overall a good job. And even there are mistakes, you managed to go through the whole lesson.

Hello, Christ!

Your work overall for lesson one is superb: Your line work is clear and confident, like it should be in all of the exercises. Something I feel should be mentioned though is the Rotated Boxes exercise. In that exercise, you seem to understand that the boxes need to be rotating, which is shown in some parts of your exercise. However, a lot of the boxes don't rotate that much in comparison to some of the others. One of the goals of the exercise is to infer how boxes rotate in space and how they relate to the others around them. Other than that, you did pretty well!

Hi,

You are overall better, but still have a lot of things to improve.

Arrows : They are better and flow through space, but there is two main problems.

One : they don't compress enough as they get farther and farther away. It's not only the size of the arrow that should compress (you did that well), but also the space between the bands, until they literally overlap. Take a look at this image : https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/f875589f.jpg.

Two : The hatching and the weigh lines could really improve. I see you didn't do the hatching for the boxes on the 250 boxes challenge and that's sad because it would have helped you tremendously. For now, when you do hatching lines, ghost before doing them. It is important that they are at least strait.

Organic forms : Those with ellipses are better, since the degree varies more. But there is too many ellipses. I feel you are doing them a bit automatically, without thinking how they really cut into your form, as if you're not believing you're drawing in 3d. Also, they aren't drawn though. That's something you should have learned from lesson 1, as that will help you train to make them more precisely. Your contour line are better too since they wrap around the form. What you could really improve on those organic forms (they are sooooo important for the next lessons), is changing the degree of the ellipses even more, and do only contour lines/ellipses after thinking them though and though them necessary. Take a look at this image : https://imgur.com/vg0vy0v.

Texture analysis : this got really better. Good job.

Dissection : First, why aren't your previous organic forms drawn like this? I feel the ellipses are way better and not rushed. The degree of the ellipses could be better though. For the textures, you did improve a lot too. One thing I see is that the patterns are really repetitive and mechanic. Most objects in life have more variation too them. So I feel like overall, you didn't do enough observation.

Form intersection : They have improved a lot. Some intersection could improve but the overall picture isn't bad, and I feel that I don't need to add much on them. The thing that could really improve is your line quality. The hatchings aren't strait, the weight lines aren't precise. More ghosting! Also superimposed lines as warm ups.

Organic intersections : There is a lot of improvement too. The main problem is that not all of them are drawn through (we should see the lines of those hidden partly at the back).

Now make a list of the comments I made here. Next Some of them are repetition of those I did in the first critique, and it's all right. Sometimes it takes repetition to really sink in. Some of the exercises are coming back in the next lessons. When you do them, bring back up that list and make sure you try your best to respect them (sometimes, you need to exaggerate the instruction, only to do it as you should).

I feel my first critique was cold and harsh and you made it though, and did the homework again with a lot of improvement. Continue like that and nothing will stop you. I will make this lesson as complete.