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Hi there, I’ll be critiquing your work today!

SuperImposed Lines

I think you did a great job here! For the most part, your lines look confidently executed. Your lines are also frayed on only one end, meaning you took your time and made sure that your starting point was accurate. As you continue to practice this exercise in your warmups, the fraying should lessen overtime.

I did notice that some of your lines were unintentionally arching a little bit. Make sure you’re using your shoulder to draw. If you are using your shoulder and the lines are still curving, you can try to arch in the opposite direction to compensate.

Ghosted Lines

Most of your lines look confidently executed here! I did notice that a few lines curve towards the end in order to try and compensate for the line being off. Remember, it’s ok if the line is off. Here, we’re practicing how to commit to a stroke. Overall, good job though! The majority of lines look great!

Ghosted Planes

Your lines look great here! Good job on making planes with varying sizes and angles.

Ellipses

You are really good at confident execution of lines! I am noticing some deformed ellipses (that may suggest a lack of ghosting or some hesitation while drawing), but your ellipses look really smooth for the most part. You are drawing through the ellipses twice, which is a good thing! The main issue I’m noticing is that you sometimes have gaps in between ellipses or between ellipses and the border. It seems you understood what to do though, so good job!

Ellipses in Planes

You are still drawing through ellipses twice, and I’m not seeing much wobble here. However, I am noticing that many of your ellipses are more deformed in this exercise. Remember to continue ghosting and prioritize creating even shapes rather than having the ellipses touch all the sides.

Funnels

It does look like you’re trying to align the ellipses with the minor axis, so good job with that! You are still drawing through your ellipses twice, and all the ellipses are touching the funnels. Remember to make sure that your ellipses are snug with each other too!

Plotted Perspective

Amazing job with this exercise! Your verticals are all perpendicular to the horizon line, and you are plotting the back edges to the vanishing points. Great work!

Rough Perspective

This exercise is properly done! For most boxes, your front and back faces are rectangles (meaning the horizontals are parallel to the horizon line and the verticals are perpendicular to it). The line extensions are applied correctly, and you are using the ghosting method to create your boxes. Make sure you’re using the ghosting method between the box points and the vanishing points as well for more precision in your line extensions. Nice work!

Rotated Boxes

Here, the gaps between the boxes are tight and pretty consistent. The boxes are rotated properly, and you have drawn all the boxes in the set. This is a tough exercise, and you did amazing!

Organic Perspective

I see that you’ve used the ghosting method for these boxes. Also, for the most part, your sets of edges are converging as they move away from the viewer, so great job with that! I think you could try some more dramatic scale changes, especially with boxes that are huge and only have a part of them are in view.

Conclusion

Finishing Lesson 1 is a huge task, and you did it!!! I think you’re ready to move on to the 250 box challenge. Remember to add all these exercises to your warmup pool. As a reminder, you should try to do 10-15 minutes of warmup everyday.

The next task is a huge one, but you got this!

Hi Nyxession! I'll be critiquing your work today

superimposed lines-- good

ghosted lines -- overall good, though one or two lines are wobbly, indicating that they weren't confident or you weren't drawing with your shoulder. always draw from your shoulder for every lesson!

ghosted planes -- overall good, same critique as the ghosted lines, some of the lines are a bit wobbly, though i suspect its because its close to the edge of the page. still, important to keep in mind is that even if you miss the mark quite badly the line should be straight and confident

tables of ellipses-- ok. many of your ellipses are overlapping and crossing the borders, indicating a lack of ghosting the ellipses beforehand

ellipses in planes -- overall good, though some ellipses are not touching the borders of your boxes

funnels -- good

plotted perspective -- good

rough perspective -- good attempt, though i notice some of the boxes' lines are wobbly, indicating a lack of ghosting for the initial squares drawing. it also seems like your pen sort of failed during this section so ill excuse it.

rotated boxes - good

organic perspective -- ok. many boxes are similar, and again some lines are wobbly. but you will learn to draw different boxes soon

overall good, but you still seem to have some trouble drawing confident lines. I don't think it is a prevalent enough problem to repeat an exercise, it just shows up occasionally. just be very careful during the 250 boxes challenge to draw confident, non wobbly lines and draw with your shoulder as much as possible, by the end of the 250 boxes challenge you will probably be better.

Firstly, congratulations on getting through the first lesson and thanks for submitting all the assigned coursework. I'll go through it piece by piece.

The longer lines, in particular, show a bit of waving. So make sure that you're drawing in a single confident motion from beginning to end. I'm only seeing fraying at the far end of the lines (which is perfectly normal at this stage) and not at the near end, which implies good care making your marks. I notice you've chosen to put little lines across the beginning and end of each superimposed line. I don't recall seeing that in the instructions or the examples. It's probably best to stick as closely to the instructions for each homework as you can.

Many of the ghosted lines are really quite wobbly. Remember to draw from the shoulder and try not to worry about accuracy. Commit to the line as soon as the pen touches the page - at that point any opportunity to avoid a mistake has passed. Wobbling aside, there doesn't seem to be any bowing, which is good. Most of your shorter lines begin and end near to the marks although, as the lines get longer, there is a fair amount of overshooting, but I wouldn't worry about that for now - instead focus on a single confident motion.

In the ghosted planes exercise that you've marked 5.9, the lines appear to be much more confident and with much less overshoot. On the page marked 6.9, it's mostly the same story but everything appears a little more rushed. Make sure you're giving yourself plenty of time for these exercises.

For the table of ellipses, you've gone through each ellipse twice and they're all up against the borders of the table. However, the ellipses aren't very evenly shaped. There are a couple of likely causes for this, so remember to use ghosting and then draw in a confident motion and make sure you're drawing from your shoulder (rather than the wrist/elbow).

Similarly for the ellipses in planes, you're drawing through them and clearly getting your ellipses to touch all for edges, but they're still appear uneven, so check the ideas in the last paragraph.

In the funnels, some of the ellipses are starting to become more even (although many are still lumpy). However, you've done of great job of fitting them into the funnel and ensuring that they're aligned to the central axis.

In the plotted perspective exercise, you've kept your verticals vertical and plotted your horizontal edges back to the vanishing points. Spot on.

In the rough perspective, many of the back faces of the boxes have random angles. It looks like you're ghosting these lines, but remember during planing that, for the front and back faces, the verticals should be vertical and the horizontals horizontal.

For the rotated boxes, you appear to have followed all the steps carefully. The gaps between your boxes are fairly tight and consistent, the boxes are rotated, you've drawn the x-ray vision back surfaces and you've drawn all the boxes.

Finally, for the organic perspective exercise, you've clearly followed the instructions again, using ghosting for the lines and mostly good perspective. A few of the smaller boxes (further from the viewer) aren't quite right, but it's clear that you know what you're aiming for here. Just remember to take as much time planning your small boxes as you do for the larger ones.

hello Udder! congrats on finishing ur first lesson on DAB. i'll be revisioning it and giving all the insight i can and telling you what will your next steps. doing poorly or great you did it till the end and whatever we get here will be worked on and improved as you progress through the course. let's start

Lines

-Superimposed lines

these are pretty nice lines isee little fraying and little deviation. you have done a good variety of sizes too. the only advice i can give is to try some curving lines and using the page horizontally to get even longer lines. nothing wrong here tho you did a good job

-Ghosted Lines

again. little wobble and deviation. you seem to be able to connect them well and you did a good diversity of sizes. just again try to draw on the page horizontally so you can try even longer lines. good work

-Ghosted Planes

good diversity of sizes and shapes,little deviation,little wobble you seem to have marked and ghosted them properly.

once again this is pretty good work

Ellipses

-Table of Ellipses

ellipses can be hard, you seem to have a good grasp on it tho. good diversity of sizes,they seem to fit snuggly between each other and be mostly pretty even. looks like you properly drew through your ellipses. aside from some small spots you could fit some and some uneven here and there this exercise was done incredibly. good job

-Ellipses in Planes

they seem to fit snuggly inside the plane and reach for the corners. aside from some uneveness which can be seen in some and we always gotta watch out for it. this is pretty nice

-Funnels

you seem to be trying allign the ellipses properly,they are properly fitting inside the funnel and there is some uneveness but you clearly are doing a good effort in keeping them consistent. good work

Boxes

-Plotted Perspective

you seem to have used the ruler and connected the boxes properly to the VPs (vanishing Points).you have drawn through them and even done some hatching. your vanishing points and horizon line could be more diverse tho. and the bigger problem is that it seems you have used colored pens on this exercise to make it easier. it is a normal mistake it isn't uncommon to people to go over it and i will not ask a revision out of this as you seem to have done the exercise properly. but unless asked or advised by the exercise do not use multiple colored pens. in plotted perspective you are supposed to also learn how to navigate through a maze of lines and by using different colored pens you are avoiding that challenge of the exercise. overall this is a good work just in the future try to use only one pen and change up the VPs and horizon lines.

-Rough Perspective.

you have done the proper amount of boxes,the line extensions seem proper, you got aa good diversity of angles and some nice amount of different sized boxes. as with plotted perspective you have not changed your vanishing point or horizon line between each frame which is highly recommended.you have picked a single way of doing the  line extensions and even tho some lines wobble or curve it looks liek you are doing a big effort of keeping them straight and properly using the ghosting method. good work just try to change up those VPs and Horizon lines more next time.

-Rotated Boxes

it seems like you have followed all the steps to set up the exercise,the gaps seem to tight and consistent with you even adding hatching properly to help with visibility. the boxes seem to be rotating properly mostly but some principally at the outer area could be rotating more as they seem almost to be converging on the same point. anyway i will say this is a good job.

-organic perspective

you have done a nice job changing up the sizes of the boxes and keeping them on track but i do have some stuff to point out. you seem to have gotten a bit lost on how to do the hatching. the hatching is normally done on the face closest to the viewer while you seem to have always done hatching on the same side for all boxes inside the panel. the line on the 6th panel also seems to go outside and back in a way it doesn't point properly where it is going or where it ends. although not obligatory i would recommend marking a arrow on your lines to indicate what direction the line is going. i also would avise to change up the boxes angle and rotation as some seem a bit repetitive

I'm SoupSmoke, a current lesson 3 student, and I'll be taking a stab at giving you critique!

Lines

Nicely done with your superimposed lines, you're properly placing your pen at the start of marks, maintaining an even trajectory. Ghosted lines are much the same, though I do see some arcing, which is completely normal, and which I'll address at the end. Your ghosted planes are well done! You seem to be taking an adequate amount of time to plan and prepare your marks.

Ellipses

Your tables of ellipses look great, confidently executed and drawn twice before lifting the pen. Funnels are also looking great, with ellipses placed snugly together and aligned to the minor axis lines. Ellipses in planes are confident, and aiming to touch all four sides.

Boxes

Your plotted perspective has clean, straight-edge lines, showing that you're clearly following the directions. I see some skewed back vertical lines, particularly in the first and third panels, which is caused by the accumulation of mistakes we make as we plot our lines. Just as a reminder, every vertical line is straight in 2 point perspective.

Rough perspective looks good, the only note I'd make is to ensure that the vanishing point is close to the center of the horizon line for this exercise as I see many cases where it's offset to the left.

Your rotated boxes are mostly snug, with only one real issue to note. From what I can tell, you didn't draw the top right and bottom right boxes, which I'd encourage finishing before continuing on- I assume this was simply missed as they're by far the easiest to forget about.

Organic perspective is nicely done as well, though I see some cases of vanishing points diverging as they move into the depth of the scene. Ultimately, this is something that you're going to get a lot of practice with in the 250 Box Challenge, so I'm not particularly worried about it.

Other Notes

There are a few things I like to consider when drawing my lines. One is to really emphasize that I'm drawing from the shoulder. Sometimes, I like to lift the pen, and ghost some huge, over-exaggerated lines in the air, imagining that the shoulder is what's truly driving that motion. The mark originates from the shoulder, with the elbow along for the ride, and wrist basically locked. The shoulder almost throws the rest of the arm through the motion.

In my experience, arcing happens when I'm not properly emphasizing the movement of my shoulder, I'm not being fully confident, or despite looking at where I want the line to go, I'm subtly steering it toward the end, as I detect I'm a little off. To the last point, I sometimes like to close my eyes to check whether I'm steering it so I can be conscious of the problem. Remember, we're aiming for a smooth, even line before ANYTHING else.

It can also be helpful to consciously arc your line in the direction opposite of the way you tend to do it, if even after being aware of the three points I just mentioned, arcing persists.

I'll also mention that earlier into the course, even as I ghosted my lines, I'd sometimes feel nervous and would spend excessive time ghosting when I already knew I had the motion down.

Sometimes, you've just gotta let it fly, be confident, and get the line done.

Keep in mind, you're going to improve with practice—I mention all of this simply to give you some approaches to evaluate and correct your own lines as you continue to get more practice through warm-ups and through the completion of future coursework, which:

onto the 250 Box Challenge! All in all, this is great work. Good job, and congratulations on finishing Lesson 1!

Hello Boug! My name is Armoo. I will try to give you some feedback on your submission.

Really good job on your line work. Occasionally, your lines bow slightly, like with the top line of 241, so maybe you can try consciously curving them in the opposite direction to compensate for that natural curve. But for the most part, the majority of your lines are drawn very confidently and straight. You followed all of the instructions for each of the three parts of the challenge, so no mistakes there. I like how for the last 150 you varied the sizes and foreshortenings of your boxes. You've also done a very good job of trying to get the inner corner to converge with the rest of the lines, which is really difficult. A good example is the red set of lines in 216. Sometimes I see the back corner start to diverge, like with the red lines in 214. One thing you can try is to maybe draw the inner lines first, like in this diagram: https://imgur.com/a/DHlA3Jh, and then build the outer lines around them. Other than that, I don't really have any critiques. Good work and good luck with lesson 2!