brainducker

Thank you so much for your reply.

To be fair, even though this is not the outcome I was hoping for, I am glad this has come to a conclusion. I felt so bad seeing that every round of revisions came as a disappointment to you, as you listed all the remarks that were overlooked.

So. As you said, I will now start working towards the 250 cylinder challenge - taking as much time as required, and giving those a break. Then I will revisit those on my own. One way or another, the poorly stuffed animals must come to life.

Once again, thank you for going above and beyond on my submission, and thank you for your patience.

Hi

Below are the latest revisions. Fresh references, as you said.

https://imgur.com/a/E8DMSRY

A few things I'd like to mention:

• Except for the goat, several attempts were made at drawing each animal. I thought that would not come under the definition of grinding, since every redo was about correcting an issue you mentioned before (or just redrawing ellipses because I was not happy about how they came out). The time estimates account for previous attempts that are not included here.

• However, I get a feeling that the solution to most problems was to spend more time on each construction.

Regarding the badger construction, I tried to represent the abundant fur that hides the top of the legs through extra masses. On second thought, this looks very awkward to me - perhaps I should have laid the fur on top of existing masses.

Hi. Thank you so much for your extensive feedback. I am glad to hear that there was some progress already.

Below is a link to the next batch of revisions, where I tried to address your remarks.

https://imgur.com/a/JWVCmzg

Hi Dio

To begin with, I am very sorry if, at any point, reviewing my work has felt like a waste of your time. You were entirely right in assuming that I did not read the course material with enough attention, thus overlooking many of the key aspects. I took more time and made sure to apply your advice more carefully here.

https://imgur.com/a/Z3dic7g

Let's be honest. My drawings still look more like roadkill than living creatures, but I can guarantee that no animal was hurt while completing this assignment. I do hope that you can see some progress in this, and that this work better reflects your comments.

Just one question on my end.

Regarding the eagle, as you may guess I am not too happy about the wings. That's because I haven't figured out how to render their flat shape, they end up looking like solid forms. How would you go about rendering their shallowness?

Hi Dio

Thank you so much for your critique, and for addressing my issues so eloquently.

Regarding the organic forms, I mistakenly understood from Tofu's comments back in lesson 2 that those ellipses on either edges of the form were to be drawn all the time. Getting back to it I see that he, actually, called out the fact that they were never present at all.

I tried to take those into account all of your remarks, and completed the revisions you assigned. How does that look to you?

https://imgur.com/a/Nq7OcS1

Hi

First time critiquing lesson 2, so, please, don't take everything I say at face value, and seek advice from others as well.

My first remark goes towards the material. Is this a ballpoint pen you are using?

• Arrows: nicely done. There are some neat overlaps, and you are quite successful in adding line weight and hatching to accentuate the overlaps.

• Organic forms: there are a few instances of swelling and distortion that drive you away from the simple sausages, but overall, you are doing well, and I love how you overshoot those lines. Your second page looks terrific!

• Texture analysis: I see that you are struggling with this. I struggled with it too - actually I still struggle with it. What I can note, though, is that you rely mostly on lines, rather than cast shadows of certain objects. Furthermore, you may have found that filling black areas is tedious, so you have used hatching instead. Consider going implicit rather than explicit, as stated in the course. Plus there is little gradient here. Focus on the shadows, not the forms!

• Dissections: you did a fair job of breaking the structure of your sausages! Your textures have the same issues as above though.

• Your form intersections and organic form intersections look quite nice, even though some sausages have awkward shadow shapes. You may want to set a fixed source of light and be more mindful of the shadows it casts.

Overall I would regard this as a strong submission and encourage you to move on to lesson 3. Just add texture to your warm-ups.

Hi. This looks better, even though you are still struggling a lot with the ellipses. One thing you may want to try going forward, is to draw a few ellipses (and lines) with your eyes closed. Start by ghosting the thing a bit, as described in the lesson, then close your eyes and let your arm do the rest. You won't be tempted to course-correct that way.

As you build confidence in your muscle memory, the temptation to do wobbly lines will gradually disappear.

This looks good enough to me for now, but you still need more practice

Hi

Lines

You are indeed struggling with the quality of your lines. What matters in the superimposed lines is the flow, not the accuracy. You display wobbling in all pages of exercises, which means that those are not being drawn from your shoulder.

Cylinder

Same issue here, you are not using your shoulder to draw. As a result, many of your ellipses have a queer, irregular shape. On a positive note, you did a fair job of aligning and fitting them in the appropriate exercises - you have a good understanding of the utility of the minor axis.

Boxes

You did great. Plotted perspective is just right, and for the rough perspective, you are even starting to apply the ghosting method correctly.

Your rotated boxes look amazing, unlike most beginners, you manage to rotate those from the edges correctly.

Organic perspective is nicely done, too. You may need more accuracy in the end of the lines as you are overshooting a lot, and some of the convergences are a bit off. But you will fix that in the box challenge.

You need to practice a bit more the ghosting technique, as it paramount for the rest of the course. I'm assigning a few revisions for this - although this is looking quite promising already.

Hi

Are your boxes... special? You marked them as NSFW.

Regardless, this is coming along quite well imo. Just a few things to bear in mind:

• Your hatching lines. They look messy, because you do not ghost them as you should. Either use the ghosting technique for them, or do not use them at all.

• You do not need to apply several lines for the checking method. Just one will do for each edge, no need to differentiate.

• Your convergences are improving throughout the exercise - that's normal, and a pretty good thing honestly. You still display instances of convergence in pairs. That is to be avoided, make sure that all four lines converge.

• You did a fair work of varying the rates of foreshortening.

This is looking good though, and you seem to understand what this is about.

Hi

Lines

You are doing well. Nice understanding of the ghosting technique, of which your work is a great example. Your superimposed lines have very little fraying, and ghosted lines / planes show that you have great accuracy.

Ellipses

Doing well too. Some of your ellipses have a queer shape - perhaps that's what you want to insist on when doing warmups. Otherwise you do a great job of aligning them with the minor axis (as in funnels), or fitting them in the frames.

Boxes

You also have good understanding of two and three point perspective. Plotted perspective is great. Rough perspective is very nice too - some of your convergences are off, but that will improve as you gain mileage. You may also want to ghost more to make your lines look more straight. Also, you can use a ruler to draw the converging lines - that's actually what you are expected to do in the 250 boxes challenge.

Fair attempt at the rotated boxes - as in many submissions I see that the boxes farthest from the center are not rotated enough, but that's a common mistake that will, again, be fixed through mileage.

As for the organic perspective, you may want to align your boxes with the line that runs through them (1st frame), and keep the foreshortening simple - boxes grow bigger as they are closer to the observer (3rd frame). Otherwise you have some convergences that happen towards the observer - but that will be addressed with the box challenge.

All in all this is a very strong submission, and you should feel confident about moving to the box challenge.