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thank you so much for taking time to critique my submission! your suggestions are very useful. have a good day!

Hi Ahmet_13,

I will be critiquing your homework today. First of all, congrats on completing lesson 1!

As a general comment overall:

You followed the instructions as given across all exercises so unless specifically mentioned otherwise, there are no issues there.

1. Superimposed lines

There is hardly any wobbling in the lines. Your curved lines are pretty good, and there is impressively little fraying at the starting point. While your curves and shorter lines have minimal fraying, the longer lines have a great degree of fraying. This is fixable with warm-ups. Overall, this looks good.

2. Ghosted lines

You are very accurate in hitting both the start and end points-- there are only a few instances of overshooting and undershooting in your lines. Some lines lines show occasional wobbling, https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/ghostedlines/wobbling (this link should help you trace back the issue). Overall, this page seems rushed so make sure you practice ghosting straight lines in your warm-ups and throughout the entirety of this course.

3. Ghosted planes

Really good. Generally, your lines connect neatly, and the diagonals and bisectors meet properly in the center of each plane. You have ghosted the lines well here!

4. Tables of ellipses

These are some neatly and snugly packed ellipses! However, in some places, it seems you have not drawn over the initial ellipse the second time completely (please ignore this if it was a scanning issue). I can see that bigger, rounder ellipses are sometimes misshapen, but that can be fixed with warm-ups of this exercise. Overall, this is a solid page.

5. Ellipses in planes

Overall, excellent pages with snug ellipses. Your ellipses connect nicely with all 4 edges of the planes in general. One problem I noticed here is that sometimes your ellipses undershoot a little, so I’d suggest ghosting and having a bit looser control to counteract that.

6. Funnels

This is a solid page. Your ellipses fit snuggly in the funnels and are nicely drawn through again. They overall line up pretty well along the minor axis and are smoothly executed.

7. Plotted perspective

The only thing to watch out for is some of your vertical lines being off sometimes (which is not something most people can get right in the first submission, so don't worry). The rest of the construction is solid.

8. Rough perspectives

Overall, this is a good sheet. Some of your lines are a bit more wobbly or curved than in earlier exercises (ghosted lines / ghosted planes) – maybe check whether this is the result of focusing a bit less on ghosting and more on placing corners? Convergences towards the vanishing point can be improved with warm-ups eventually.

9. Rotated boxes

Very solid page. A few minor things I noted:

• A lot of your lines seem to not be ghosted and are breaking. Make sure to not neglect ghosting.

• Some of your “outer boxes” along the axes tend to have non-uniform degrees of rotations, following the rotation: watch out about this and concentrate on keeping those lines straight and spatially equal by looking at the overall shape of the exercise.

These errors will be corrected over time with 250 boxes and regular warm-ups.

10. Organic perspective

Let me start by saying you did an excellent job of creating a sense of depth along the path by making the boxes bigger or smaller depending on where they fall on the path. While there may be a lack of shallow foreshortening in most of the boxes, you have not gone for dramatic foreshortening, which is good. Your understanding of foreshortening will only improve when you tackle 250 boxes. There seems to be an occasional neglect of ghosted lines so make sure you keep this in mind during your warm-ups. I know first-hand how tempting it can be to rush these lines juuust a bit in these later exercises since there is so much to draw. Still, you did a great job at the ghosted planes exercise so I think you will benefit greatly if you take some time to ghost your lines and draw with your shoulder consciously. Make sure to draw the back face of the boxes next time you pick up this exercise for warm-ups to improve your spatial reasoning and rotation of boxes in free space.

I think you have a good enough grasp of the material to continue working on your own in your warm-ups. You have great potential. Good Luck!

Hi Vernalancient, it seems that your complete homework submission is not showing up on the imgur permalink. Perhaps, there was some technical error. Please reupload the submission with a fresh link for the feedback.

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This exercise is extremely well executed, your boxes are very well rotated in space. I did notice a slight difference in the degrees of rotation between the extreme right and extreme left boxes. But this is something that can be fixed with gradual practice in the warm ups. Overall, this is a very solid page, good job!

You can start 250 boxes whenever you feel ready! Congratulations on finishing lesson 1.

Hi Tozen,

I will be critiquing your homework today.

1. Superimposed lines

There is hardly any wobbling in the lines. Your curved lines are pretty good, and there is impressively little fraying at the starting point. While your shorter lines have minimal fraying, the longer lines have a great degree of fraying. This is fixable with warm-ups. Overall, this looks good.

2. Ghosted lines

You are very confident in your markmaking. However, there is visible overshooting in these lines. A few lines show a tiny bit of curving (that may be an odd reverting to drawing from the wrist/elbow). Overall, you seem to be hitting level 2 consistently on this. Including this exercise in your warm-ups frequently should help you level up.

3. Ghosted planes

Really good. Generally, your lines connect neatly, and the diagonals and bisectors meet properly in the center of each plane. However, the carry-over problem of overshooting is visible. Improving on ghosted lines exercise should help you with this.

4. Tables of ellipses

These are some neatly and snugly packed ellipses! Your ability to draw over the initial ellipse a second time is also excellent. Overall, these are great sheets.

5. Ellipses in planes

The first sheet of this exercise shows promise; snugly ellipses fitting into the 4 edges. However, I noticed here that your ellipses undershoot in the second sheet with larger planes, so I’d suggest ghosting and having a bit looser control to counteract that. It seems that while you can tackle small and medium-sized planes, you struggle with larger planes. I suggest you take up this exercise frequently in your warm-ups with larger planes to get more practice.

6. Funnels

These are some neatly and snugly packed ellipses! Your ability to draw over the initial ellipse a second time is also excellent. There is a lack of variety in the boundaries of the funnel; try making broader, more tapering, less tapering borders, and so on for different types of ellipses in your warm-up sessions.

7. Plotted perspective

The only thing to watch out for is some of your vertical lines being off sometimes (which is not something most people can get right in the first submission, so don't worry). The rest of the construction is solid.

8. Rough perspectives

While you have executed all the basic instructions of this exercise, there is a lack of variety and size of boxes. All the boxes seem conveniently close to the vanishing point and could use some boxes at varying positions, such as, near the extremes of the plane, on the horizon, and so on. This should be kept in mind for future warm-ups.

9. Rotated boxes

Sheet incomplete.

10. Organic perspective

Let me start by saying you did an excellent job of creating a sense of depth along the path by making the boxes bigger or smaller depending on where they fall on the path. You have skillfully applied shallow foreshortening in most of the boxes. This will only improve when you tackle 250 boxes. Make sure to draw the back face of the boxes next time you pick up this exercise for warm-ups to improve your spatial reasoning and rotation of boxes in free space.

I think you definitely have a good enough grasp of the material to continue working on your own in your warm-ups. However, I can not give you the green light for 250 boxes until you submit a sheet for the Rotated Boxes assignment. Do not worry about how bad it looks, just try it. You will have plenty of time to practice it again with warm-ups. You have great potential. Good Luck!

Hi Paradosso,

I will be critiquing your homework today. First of all, congrats on completing lesson 1!

As a general comment overall:

You followed the instructions as given across all exercises so unless specifically mentioned otherwise, there are no issues there.

1. Superimposed lines

There is hardly any wobbling in the lines. Your curved lines are pretty good, and there is impressively little fraying at the starting point. While your curves and shorter lines have minimal fraying, the longer lines have a great degree of fraying. This is fixable with warm-ups. Overall, this looks good.

2. Ghosted lines

It's another excellent page. You are very accurate in hitting both the start and end points-- there are only a few instances of overshooting and undershooting in your lines. A few lines show a tiny bit of curving (that may be an odd reverting to drawing from the wrist / elbow). Overall, you seem to be hitting level 3 consistently on this.

3. Ghosted planes

Really good. Generally, your lines connect neatly, and the diagonals and bisectors meet properly in the centre of each plane. You have ghosted the lines well!

4. Tables of ellipses

These are some neatly and snugly packed ellipses! Your ability to draw over the initial ellipse a second time is also excellent. I can see that bigger, more rounder ellipses are sometimes misshapened, but that can be fixed with warm-ups of this exercise.

5. Ellipses in planes

Overall, a good page with snug ellipses. One problem i noticed here is that your ellipses undershoot, so I’d suggest ghosting and having a bit looser control to counteract that. Also, it seems that in some cases, you've repeatedly drawn over the ellipses more than twice or thrice. Try to minimize that to 2-3 times. There are very few instances of your ellipses being deformed, and you are again showing a lot of skill in drawing through them. I'd suggest you take up this exercise frequently in your warm-ups.

6. Funnels

This is a solid page. Your ellipses fit really snuggly in the funnels and are nicely drawn through again. They overall line up pretty well along the minor axis and are smoothly executed.

7. Plotted perspective

The only thing to watch out for is some of your vertical lines being off sometimes (which is not something most people can get right in the first submission, so dont worry). The rest of the construction is solid. My only suggestion (based on the third part of your sheet) would be to hatch the front face of every box in every section of this exercise to make it easier to understand at a glance without making the lines look complicated.

8. Rough perspectives

Overall, this is a good sheet. Some of your lines are a bit more wobbly or curved than in earlier exercises (ghosted lines / ghosted planes) – maybe check whether this is the result of focusing a bit less on ghosting and more on placing corners? Convergences towards the vanishing point can be improved with warm-ups eventually.

9. Rotated boxes

A few things I noted:

• The size of boxes and the work space in general is small and can be made larger to accomodate better rotation of the boxes. When tackling this exercise next time as a part of your warm-ups, try drawing larger boxes.

• The rotation of the boxes along the axes is not at the same degree as that of the boxes between the axes, which makes the overall shape more like a curved structure than a sphere as noted in the sample homework. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/rotatedboxes/notrotating

• Some of your “corner boxes” tend to have slightly bendy lines, following the rotation: watch out about this and concentrate on keeping those lines straight, even if you intuitively want to curve them to make the rotations smoother.

While most of these errors should fix themselves after 250 boxes, I suggest you practice this sheet with a bigger work space for warm-ups in the next lessons for more practice.

10. Organic perspective

Let me start by saying you did an excellent job on creating a sense of depth along the path by making the boxes bigger or smaller depending on where they fall on the path. While there may be a lack in shallow foreshortening in most of the boxes, you have not gone for dramatic foreshortneing, which is good. Your understanding of foreshortening will only improve when you tackle 250 boxes. Make sure to draw the back face of the boxes next time you pick up this exercise for warm-ups to improve your spacial reasoning and rotation of boxes in free space.

I think you definitely have a good enough grasp of the material to continue working on your own in your warm-ups . You have great potential. Good Luck!

Hi Chazeyrain,

I will be critiquing your homework today. First of all, congrats on completing lesson 1! And thank you for setting everything up everything for an easy critique. As a general comment overall: you followed the instructions as given across all exercises so unless specifically mentioned otherwise, there are no issues there.

1. Superimposed lines

There is hardly any wobbling in the lines. Your curved lines are pretty good, and there is impressively little fraying at the starting point. Overall, this looks very good.

2. Ghosted lines

It's another excellent page. You are very accurate in hitting both the start and end points-- there are only a few instances of overshooting and undershooting in your lines. A few lines show a tiny bit of curving (that may be an odd reverting to drawing from the wrist / fingers). Overall, you seem to be hitting level 3 consistently on this.

3. Ghosted planes

Really good. Your lines connect neatly, and the diagonals and bisectors meet properly in the centre of each plane. You have ghosted the lines well!

4. Tables of ellipses

These are some neatly and snugly packed ellipses! Your ability to draw over the initial ellipse a second time is also excellent. There are occasional misshapen ellipses, but that can be fixed with warm-ups of this exercise.

5. Ellipses in planes

Another very good couple of sheets again, overall. Your ellipses connect really nicely with all 4 edges of the planes in general. When you don’t hit the edges 100%, you seem to overshoot and sometimes undershoot, so I’d suggest ghosting a bit more to tackle that. There are very few instances of your ellipses being deformed, and you are again showing a lot of skill in drawing through them.

6. Funnels

Your ellipses fit really snuggly in the funnels and are nicely drawn through again. They overall line up pretty well along the minor axis and are smoothly executed.

7. Plotted perspective

This is a solid page. The only thing to watch out for is some of your vertical lines being off sometimes. The rest of the construction is solid. My only suggestion would be to hatch the front face of every box in every section of this exercise to make it easier to understand at a glance.

8. Rough perspectives

Overall, this is a good sheet. Some of your lines are a bit more wobbly or curved than in earlier exercises (ghosted lines / ghosted planes) – maybe check whether this is the result of focusing a bit less on ghosting and more on placing corners?

9. Rotated boxes

This is a job well done on a tough exercise! A few things I noted:

• The size of boxes and the work space in general is rather small. when tackling this exercise next time as a part of your warm-ups, try drawing larger boxes.

• Some of your “corner boxes” tend to have slightly bendy lines, following the rotation: watch out about this and try to concentrate on keeping those lines straight, even if you intuitively want to curve them to make the rotations smoother.

• The back corners of a lot of your boxes are wobbly. Try ghosting your lines for this. This problem will easily fix itself when you tackle 250 boxes next. I'd suggest you to practice this sheet with a bigger work space for warm-ups in the next lessons.

10. Organic perspective

Let me start by saying you did an excellent job on creating a sense of depth along the path by making the boxes bigger or smaller depending on where they fall on the path. You have skillfully applied shallow foreshortening in most of the boxes. This will only improve when you tackle 250 boxes. Make sure to draw the back face of the boxes next time you pick up this exercise for warm-ups to improve your spacial reasoning and rotation of boxes in free space.

I think you definitely have a good enough grasp of the material to continue working on your own in your warm-ups . You have great potential. Good Luck!

Hi Langetal,

I will be critiquing your homework today.

Lines

1. Superimposed Lines: Overall, good attempt. There is less fraying in the beginning so that part is covered. But in some instances, I see wobbly mark-making. This suggests that you're hesitating and not giving up your urge to control and refusing to commit to mark-making. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/superimposedlines/wobbling Here, Uncomfortable explains how your mark-making should look and what might be the root cause of your mistake. Overall, these are acceptable sheets and you can improve your lines in the warm-ups for later sections.

2. Ghosted Lines: This sheet has a lot of errors. The lines are wobbly, arching, and in many spaces, you have superimposed your ghosted lines. Wobbling is usually a result of one or both of these cases --- you might be drawing from your wrist or elbow and not your shoulder/ or you may be second-guessing your strokes even after ghosting. I suggest you go over the lines section of the course again and then look at the instructions for this exercise. After you've gone through the lines section in its entirety, https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/ghostedlines/wobbling these may help you to understand how ghosting works and how your homework should at least reach Level 1 of the exercise to be considered complete. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/ghostedlines/levels

3. Ghosted Planes: I see a continued problem from the Ghosted Lines exercise. The lines are still wobbly. Engage your shoulder and try to make confident marks, accuracy comes later. Also, overwriting your already-drawn lines makes it harder to analyze the mistakes. You may have rushed this due to the quantity of work, but Drawabox requires you to do the work to the best of your current ability; how much time you have, or how much time you'd like to take, is not a factor here. Work on a single exercise or page can be spread out across multiple sittings if necessary. The only thing dictating how much time one should be spending is how much time the specific tasks you need to perform demand. Another minor problem is visible on the second page of this exercise where there is not much variety in the shape of the planes. Try to experiment with trapezoids and other quadrilateral planes too. This part can be easily tackled in warm-ups later.

Ellipses

4. Table of Ellipses: This exercise sheet is an improvement. You have drawn through each ellipse twice and your ellipses fit snugly against the borders of their table, the wobbling has reduced to a good extent. some ellipses may be tapering on the ends but that can be handled eventually in warm-ups.

5. Ellipses in Planes: Your ellipses generally touch the four edges of the plane properly. However, in some cases, you've repeatedly drawn over the ellipses more than twice or thrice. Try to minimize that to 2-3. Another mistake is that there are deformed ellipses in your sheet. Remember, the use of the ghosting method is applicable throughout the course, unless specified otherwise. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/ellipsesinplanes/deformed

6. Funnels: Your ellipses are less wobbly here. However, the ellipses are not aligned properly, which is a very common error and will take time to improve. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/funnels/notaligned

Boxes

7. Plotted Perspective: This page looks pretty good. You have followed the instructions well and most of your back corners are well placed. My only suggestion would be to hatch the front face of every box in every section of this exercise to make it easier to understand at a glance.

8. Rough Perspective: This exercise is mostly done right; you have drawn the front and back faces of the boxes and extended the lines back correctly. However, the boxes themselves have wobbly edges which again points to the lack of ghosting. While most of your edges extend to the vanishing point, your extreme boxes could use more ghosting for better results.

9. Rotated Boxes: This exercise is well executed but lacks ghosting again. It appears you may have missed a peripheral box each on the diagonal sides; nothing that can't be fixed with warm-ups. The 250-boxes challenge will help you fix these minor errors later.

10. Organic Perspective: While the foreshortening and perspective in the boxes are a bit wonky, they can be fixed with 250 boxes. My major concern in this exercise as well as all the other exercises is that your lines are wobbly/shaky, the reasons for which I have discussed in detail with links.

I hope you keep in mind the importance of confident markmaking in future exercises. For now, I will suggest some revisions and put all of the Lesson 1 exercises in your warm-up pool to practice for challenges and other lessons in the future.

Have a good day!

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