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AzureBlazes
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The Indomitable (Winter 2022)
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8:19 PM, Monday February 13th 2023
I actually did split it between two days, but I understand where you're coming from, thanks!
7:32 AM, Monday February 13th 2023
Hello, thanks for critiquing my work! I regret not asking for help earlier, though I wished to finish beforehand. I took in what you said about making better convergences, and decided to draw less boxes in almost every page in an effort to make them breathe.
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3:16 AM, Saturday February 11th 2023
Congratulations on completing Lesson 1, I'll be critiquing this.
Your Superimposed lines are fine and barely fray, which is very good to keep in mind, knowing that you take the time to keep the pen at the start of the line before making it.
Your Ghosted Lines are the same as well, though some arch a bit.
For your Planes, they have ample space and are equally divided, which means you are using the ghosting method.
Regarding your Tables of Ellipses, they are filled to the brim and don't overshoot too much with the table they're in, and towards each ellipse, which is good.
The Funnels are similar, with each ellipse touching each other without any overlap, and in tandem with the axis of the funnel.
Your Rough Perspective is good, as there are many boxes in each table comverging to the point.
Your Rotated Boxes show a lot of promise as each box has it's own rotation and has hatching, showing that you took the time.
Your Organic Perspective is also filled to the brim with boxes of varying sizes which is good, and it flows well with the lines you have drawn.
Next Steps:
250 Box Challenge
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3:10 AM, Saturday February 11th 2023
Congrats on completing Lesson 1, I'll be critiquing your work.
Your Superimposed Lines are good as they rarely fray at the start, though your tendency to curve is there, most noticable on the longer lines, as well as some wobbling.
Your Ghosted Lines are fine as well, just know that it's okay to overshoot since you are prioritizing your speed over the accuracy of your line, as some wobbling can be seen.
Your Ghosted Planes are very well done, most planes have ample space and has been divided equally, showing that you have used the ghosting method easily.
Your Tables in Ellipses are good, though they could be filled up more with little ellipses. Only an small amount, however, so it isn't too serious.
Your Funnels are nicely done as well, each ellipse works in tandem with the axis of which is started from.
Your Ellipses in Planes have done well in touching the sides of the plane, though youu tend to wobble with some of them.
Regarding your Rough Perspective, you've done well in being able to plot those lines, though the wobbling is still there to some degree.
Organic Perspective is packed with boxes, which is a good thing.
And finally, your Rotated Boxes challenge is tough, but you managed to push through it. Despite some of the boxes being stretched out more, there are also some boxes that have not rotated further either.
Next Steps:
Another page of Rotated Boxes while keeping in mind the shape and the rotation of the boxes.
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2:57 AM, Saturday February 11th 2023
Congrats on completeing Lesson 1, I'll be critiquing your work.
Lines
Some of your Superimposed Lines fray at the beginning and wobble at the beginning, be sure not to do that.
Your Ghosted Lines wobble slightly but that's fine, just remember it's okay to overshoot in this case.
Some of your Ghosted Planes wobble as well, I would also recommend that you take the time to space them out a bit. Be sure to accurately divide them as best you can as well, going slower and using the ghosting method in this case would help.
Ellipses
Your Ellipses in Planes are quite good as most of your ellipses do fit in and touch the corners of the space of the plane, and each ellipse is drawn about twice.
Your Tables of Ellipses are filled in without much space left behind, which is a good job.
The Ellipses in your Funnels are mostly symmetrical and are in tandem of the axis.
Boxes
Youur Rough Perspective is good enough, though many of them suffer from wobbliness.
The Rotated Boxes challenge is tough so it's good that you have completed it to the best of your ability. Some of your boxes stretch out a bit too much but they are rotated well, though some boxes have the same rotation.
Your Organic Perspective is also very good, densely packed with boxes and are overlapping as well, which is necessary sometimes.
Next Steps:
Despite the shortcomings, you've done well for this Lesson. Just remember to do these exercises before you do each session of the 250 Box Challenge to further improve them.
11:10 PM, Tuesday December 27th 2022
I think you're confused, you're supposed to submit the challenge for homework seperately. https://drawabox.com/community/submit/homework
Also, it's only been two days since then, I would advise you to take your time with it. Normally the exercise takes around 30-45 days, or around 5-10 boxes each day.
11:17 PM, Sunday December 25th 2022
The Planes are much better this time, though I would've recommended drawing smaller ones that gradually fill up the page to make sure you're doing more in repetition, but it isn't too important.
Your Superimposed lines still do fray away a little at the beginning, but I believe you get the gist. When you repeat this exercise inevitably when you reach across Lesson 2 (or even during the 250 Box Challenge) as a warmup, remember to take your time.
Next Steps:
250 Box Challenge
10:06 PM, Friday December 23rd 2022
This page is much better, and while I feel the last box could have been filled with some smaller ellipses, it's fine, as you've understood what I meant. I'll mark this as complete.
Next Steps:
250 Box Challenge
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9:32 AM, Friday December 23rd 2022
Hello, congratulations on finishing Lesson 1, I'll be critiquing your work.
Lines
Your Superimposed Lines are very good, though there is slight fraying at the beginning of each mark for some lines. Remember to take the time to set your pen near where the beginning of the line begins before executing your confident mark.
Your Ghosted lines have slight wobbling to it, showing a bit of hesitation. Remember that it's okay to shoot over the mark, so long as the mark stays confident. The ghosting method should help heavily with this if you take more time with it.
Your Planes are filled up quite nicely and most of them are dissected evenly, which shows that you are taking the time to plan and execute those marks.
Ellipses
Regarding your Tables of Ellipses pages, you have done well to fit your ellipses within the tables and next to each other. While some of your ellipses do overlap, it is not an frequent occurence.
Your Planes of Ellipses are very good. Some are a bit distorted, but they fit quite well within the planes.
Your Funnels have symmetrical ellipses and are drawn snugly against each other very well, and work well with the axis' you have made.
Boxes
Your Rough Perspective has an good amount of boxes for each segment, and most of them are quite good in aligning the lines towards the horizon, as most are perpendicular to each other.
That Rotated Boxes challenge is definitely an difficult one, but I can see that you have taken your time to make it clear. Your boxes are shown to be rotated well and each fit around the same length, without any wide gaps.
Your Organic Perspective pages are packed with boxes while some overlap. You will benefit from learning how to rotate these boxes more accurately during the 250 box challenge.
Next Steps:
250 Box Challenge
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