ASpecialRaptor

The Fearless

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    12:01 PM, Friday June 18th 2021

    But that's great that you're aware of your weaknesses and use that to try and fight them.

    :D

    If you have time and are willing I'd be super happy if you'd be willing to critique my second or third lesson homework. If not that's totally fine.

    Have a good one and good luck on your future assignments! :)

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    11:20 AM, Friday June 18th 2021

    Hello!

    I want to start of by saying that your drawings are beautiful! The lines are super good and clean, you have a great handle on rendering texture and shadows and I never felt the drawings were cluttered or hard to look at.

    In fact it's so good that at my current skill level I can't really find anything about your drawings to critique.

    So instead I just really want to tell you that making mistakes is totally fine. From one super anxious person to another I know that is a lot easier said than believed. But mistakes need to be imbraced. They're part of everyones journey. We ALL do them. And we all NEED them to learn and grow not only as artists but as humans. Uncomfortable even made a comic about it. https://drawabox.com/comic/4

    But again your drawings are really good and to add to all of my previous complements I loved all your breakdowns of individual parts and I'm happy you overcame part's of your anxiety

    Hope this helps and be sure to read some of the next steps I'll be recommending :)

    Next Steps:

    Something that really helped me with perfectionism and anxiety was timed drawing. So I would pick a subject and set up a timer between 30seconds to 5minutes. And then I would draw that subject for that time and no matter what I would not touch it after. It not really helps you develop your process and become faster but it also helps you accept mistakes by having you draw lots and lots of drawings that are not "finished" and a most might even be failures. There's a super popular exercise around this very concept called figure drawing that I would really recommend if you do not already know what it is.

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    10:01 AM, Friday June 18th 2021

    Hello!

    I think it was impressive that for your first leaf exercise you drew them dynamic. A lot of other people (myself included) tend to draw them very stiff to start of.

    You seem to struggle with line confidence is some of these, especially the branches can be a bit wobbly and inconsistent relative to the circles. So it's good that you're already aware and working on that in your warm ups. For future plant drawing and studies maybe lean towards some more branch heavy ones so you can put that into practice as well.

    In some of your drawings I have a really hard time resting my eyes cause they don't know where they're supposed to go. Especially with the rose and the bell flower, the lines and shapes are fighting for attention and it's making it very cluttered and hard to look at. So I would maybe read over the potato plant again because there he mentions visual hierarchy and he refers back to how we use line weight in the 250box challange. I think the marker or brush ben you use might be a bit too much. Especially for the outline of the large parts of the piece instead of a more focused focal point.

    But I think your plants look really good. Even though I critiqued some of your drawing for having busy line I think some are really good and impressive. The mushroom has fun variation in the cracks and texture. The water lily is also really really good with nice framing of the center with the shadows and more sparing but effective lineweight on the leaves.

    Hope this was of help :) .

    Next Steps:

    As mentioned in the critique and by yourself I would say that doing the branches exrcise as a warm up is recommended. Drawing branch heavy plants can be really good too. Maybe also while doing those drawing try and keep focus in mind and not clutter too much

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    9:06 AM, Friday June 18th 2021

    Hello.

    Your arrows seem very well made and it's clear where one edge is in relation to another.

    In the "drawings as exercises" portion of lesson three it says that less than half of your submissions should be from the demos but you've used more than half, as such it's difficult for me to properly critique you. If you have difficulty finding reference here are some links that people have posted in the discord.

    https://www.pinterest.ca/aguez0156/vegetation-and-plants/

    https://imgur.com/gallery/IcrvCAb

    https://imgur.com/gallery/d53nRr2

    https://imgur.com/gallery/UxWsMHs

    alternatively you can just google image search or look at real plants.

    But from the plants I don't think are from any demos it looks promising with clear shapes and lineweight to seperate them.

    Hope this helps and good luck.

    Next Steps:

    I'm not an ofical critiquer so I won't demand anything from you (not that I could anyhow), but if you want I think it could be beneficial for you to draw some plant's that's not from the demos and if you do enough to get more than half you can re submit this homework. But if you don't want to that's totally fine.

    When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
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    8:35 AM, Friday June 18th 2021

    While reading through your description I could really relate cause I struggle with almost all those things as well haha.

    I think your plants are very clear and read easily. Except for the second one, none of them feel cluttered at all so good job. (and the second one isn't even bad, just busy).

    As someone who still stuggles with line confidence myself the best advice I have is: before you start a drawing, give yourself a goal. Goals are great to have because they give the drawing purpose and it's easier to know if you failed or succeeded. So maybe before drawing some plants you set out with the primary goal of having line confidence and moving the pen with your entire shoulder. Watching Uncomfortable draw and the pace in which he puts out his lines in the videos from lesson 1 really helped me get a better grasp as well.

    I feel the shadows can sometimes be really confusing, especially if they're cast on an object that's a bit further away. In the same drawing some shadows say that the light source is straight above and some say the light source is above and to the right. The shadows don't always follow the form of the object it's on either or look like the shape that's casting the shadow. But it's very hard and I think for this reason Uncomfortable only really draws shadows on forms that are close to each other, they're not really meant to convey accurate light and shadow, but rather to make a clear drawing and seperate forms from each other.

    But ultimately I think your end product is very impressive and you plants look great. I think you picked a good variety of plants but still managed to excute it. I especially love the flower with the thorns. Very cute.

    Hope this helps. :D

    Next Steps:

    Set out a primary goal of better line confidence in some of your future practice. And although not talked about in my critique if you struggle with leaves and branches I would recommend doing leaf, arrow and branch practices as warm ups. They can also help you with line confidence as well I feel.

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    7:44 AM, Friday June 18th 2021

    Glad to be of help. I just wanted to add that I dug up some of these resources that people made in the discord that show how forms intersect that definitely help me.

    https://imgur.com/a/6Inx5Bz

    https://gyazo.com/b9b21ce61d85811f8fc48b329df79c7c

    If you have the time and/or energy I'd love some critique on my lesson 2 or 3. If not that's totally okay. You don't owe me.

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    11:22 AM, Thursday June 17th 2021

    These look very good!

    It looks like you're doing this digitally and some of these look really clean. So I just want to remind you it's probably best not to use undo or eraser to best mimic the ink format this course was made for. If I'm wrong and you're just that good then great! :D

    I feel like your textures on the sausages some time to follow the form enough. Like when things turn away from us I feel like we're still seeing too much those forms and textures sometimes. For example I don't think we would be able to see the top of the farther away tentacle suckers. Their sides would probably have completely turned to us by that point.

    With the intersections the round on round forms looks a bit off to me sometimes. Like when you put a cylinder into a form into a ball it doesn't just follow the form of the cylinder. Its more like the form of the ball consumes the cylinder. much like it does with a box. He has an example of that scenario on the homework page even though the cylinder only skimms the ball

    But having said all that you lines are very clean, your rendering of texture and shadow is great as well. keep it up!

    Hope this was of help :)

    Next Steps:

    Just try and keep in mind how forms are affected by turning away from us. Maybe do some easy dissection exercises as warm up. You can do this for intersections as well.

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    9:19 AM, Monday April 5th 2021

    Regarding Lines:

    You seem to have some very good and confident lines. You have some slight arcs on your ghosted lines but you're plains are very straight and very on the mark, both in terms of hitting the dots and hitting the center of the X. Very impressive.

    You do seem to still have some very slight overshoots and arched lines but I feel like that's nitpicking.

    Regarding Ellipses:

    You seem to undershoot sometimes, not hitting both walls and the ceiling and the floor and theres a bit more of a wobble to the lines than before. Still you seem to have good control and go over your first lines well.

    Regarding boxes:

    Your plotted perspective and rotated boxes were both very clear and I could easily tell what was going on. No obvious critiques from me there.

    You seem to struggle a bit more with rough perspective. Some of the boxes were leaning and some sides were smaller than others, making them a bit crocked.

    The Organic boxes looked good too. In some of the panels the boxes barely seem to be shrinking at all, but when you look at Uncomfortables drawings he starts them of very big and ends small. But the boxes themselves seem good.

    Hope this helps :D

    Next Steps:

    I'd say the highest priority is to try and work in some of the rough perspective exercises into the warm ups. Work on the planning a bit so the boxes become more even and less crocked. Maybe some organic box exercises as well where you really try to go from big to small.

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    8:42 AM, Monday April 5th 2021

    Regarding the linesection:

    To me you seem to have good control over your lines already. Even though you sometimes overshoot, a lot of the time you don't and come close to the dot you're aiming for, so thats great.

    Some of your lines (especially on the plains section) have a slight "S-like" curve to them. Maybe something worth looking out for.

    Regarding ellipses:

    You seem to loose a lot of that control with your ellipses and they often seem to go outside of their designated bounds. (so do I so no shame of course)

    They also seem to have a pretty aggressive tail.

    But you do get a lot better with time and you did good with the funnels. It feels like most of the circles can be split in half there.

    Regarding boxes

    With rough perspective you seem to undershoot a lot of the boxes that are far away from the VP. Meaning that they don't go nearly far enough towards the VP.

    With rotated boxes, the upper line of a box should be a bit more dramatic than the lower line since it is farther away from the VP.

    I was very impressed with your Organic boxes, you seem to have a good understanding of them and your lines are nice and clean. Just try to watch out for those dramatic overshoots.

    Hope this helps! Have a good day :D

    (also side note some of your photos were really blurry. WHich was fine now but might become a problem for future courses and critiques)

    Next Steps:

    I'd mostly work on those ellipses. As Uncomfortable mentions in some of the videos: "A confident line does not equal a fast line. Just one without hesitation." and if you look at him draw you can see that he could go a lot faster than he does.

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