an_duh_sun

Thank you for the critique. I went ahead with the revisions. https://imgur.com/a/bazNSIV

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Thanks you for the help.I'll be sure to be more intentional with my work, I did notice I was having trouble with that lately.

Thanks for the critique I tried to be more mindful about redrawing over my mistakes this time. There were a few times I did it on the form intersection though. I also made sure to only apply line weight to where the forms intersected especially on the organic intersections.

https://imgur.com/a/sKvka02

Here's the link to the completed pages.

https://imgur.com/a/5orlA2h

Thank you for the tips, here are the extra 15 boxes. https://imgur.com/a/YTbh0hz

They still look a bit janky but not as bad as some of the ones in my initial 250.

Thanks for the critique. I will make to apply your recommendations going forward.

Hi, gonna try my hand at giving you a critique for this lesson.

On you arrow ribbons you have nice shading and most of them get smaller as they go back in space. I only saw a couple where they did not seem to so that. Good job on those.

The organic forms with countour elpses and curves look really nice. You seem to have really understood that concept and you did really well on making them feel like they have mass.

Your texture excercises look amazing especially when looking at your organic form textures. That second page was amazing . You did very good at making your textures look accurate.

The form intersection pages are goof too. I can see that you aretaking your time to lay down confident lines. Great job.

The organic intersection look good , again you really showed the objects habing mass, which is great . Toy did a good job on the shadows.

Overall, Good job.!

Thanks for the critique.

No problem. You did a great job on these repeats. Nice work.

Hi Ceasarelmoro,

Superimposed Lines: The first page wasn't bad there was one line that had fraying at both ends, but the second page showed improvement there. The lines are confident and there is minimal arching so good job here.

Plotted Lines: Everything looks great I can tell you feel confident with these as well there is minimal arching or wiggly lines. I did notice that there were a few lines that looked to stop right before the plotted point. Just make sure you are applying the ghosting method on when trying to draw a line between to dotted points.

Table of Ellipses: There is minimal overlap between your ellipses and you keep them in bounds. Some of them do tend to be a little flat in some areas but I'm sure they will improve in time as you continue to practice.

Ghosted Planes/Ellipses in Planes: The ghosted planes look good. confident lines and your plotted points all connect. The ellipses all look good as well. Some of the ellipses look like they may have been drawn through more than 3 times just be mindful of that overall they look pretty good.

Funnels: The funnels are not quite symmetrical. But I think that has to do more with some of the center lines being drawn off center. in the funnels. I would suggest doing another page of funnels.

Plotted Perspective: The plotted perspective looks phenomenal so there isn't much I can say a bout that. Great Job.

Rough Perspective Looks fines. I would just make sure to double check your lines aftr plotting our initial guess by ghosting to the vanishing point. I'm certain you will get better at this with more practice.

Rotated boxes: Looks amazing all the boxes are snug and they are rotating. They aren't always perfect but its still an amazing job.

Organic Perspective: The lines look confident but it doesn't look like your varied the line weight much and it shows on the overlapping cubes

Overall You did well on this first lesson. I am going to suggest that you do another page of Ellipses in funnel. I think I would also like to see another page of organic perspective so you can work on adding line weight to your boxes. I'm confident you will be ready to work on the box challenge and Lesson 2 after that.