2:45 AM, Sunday September 25th 2022
Hi Bruh! I'll be critiquing your homework:
- Form Intersections: You have the forms, and most of the intersections look fine, especially the ones on boxes, but you struggle with the ones that involve spheres. Think that, when a sphere intersects with a box, for example, the intersection should follow the direction of the box, but it also should be a bit round, since it's intersecting with a sphere.
You can look at this album, where every type of intersection possible is laid down. You'll notice that whenever a sphere, a cone or a cylinder is involved, part of or the whole intersection will involve some degree of curvature.
Be careful too, because there are forms that are laid too far apart, and don't intersect at all. And the last page has a lot of space for more forms, remember that for this exercise we try to fill the entire page with forms.
- Object Drawings: It's advisable to include the reference photos on the submission. On this lesson, it's recommended to work on ballpoint pen too. I highly advice you to use a ruler, or a straight edge of any type for your lines. While your freehand lines are pretty good, what we're looking for on this lesson is precision, and the ruler is ideal for making our lives easier in that regard.
So, as we said, we're looking for precision on this lesson. This means, more than capturing everything exactly as it is, we're focusing on planning every step of our construction. A good example of precision would be the ghosting method: when going through the planning of a straight line we can place an initial and ending dot, this will increase the precision of our drawing by declaring what we want to do. Once that is in place we can draw the mark: it may nail those points, it may overshoot or undershoot, etc.
The important thing is that prior to any of that we have used the ghosting method to think about each mark's purpose and how we are going to achieve it best rather than figuring everything as we go. This kind of approach is more useful for the kind of geometric forms that we are working with as they have different planes, sharp corners, and clearly defined proportions.
This leads us to the following problem: a lot of forms on your construction were made without considering the subdivisions and proportions, instead, working by observation and compromising our precision. For example, on the big speaker, you subdivided the box, but when it came to drawing the handles, you eyed it instead of making a clear division on the plane, and considering that that kind of handle will be kind of sunken into the speaker's box; that generates another type of problem, similar to the ones you saw on the barrel demo.
On the big table with buttons for example, you subdivided the box and had a good framework for the space where the rows of buttons would be, but then you eyeballed them, when it would've been easier and more precise to subdivide the plane even more, so that every button was aligned and proportional with each other. Something similar happens on the cologne bottle. The long bottle was made without any subdivision: it would've been good to put that into a box, subdivide it, and then making the ellipses and constructing the bottle that way; like you did on the weights (I think they're weights).
So, I think you should go for three more objects. Try to work with a ruler and ballpoint pen, subdivide the forms as much as necesary and draw your construction around those subdivisions. You'll have to measure some things by eye when deciding where to make the subdivisions, but working on that is the point. If you encounter curves, remember that it's more practical to handle them first as straight edges, and round them at the end.
Try not to repeat lines, construct all the necessary ellipses inside planes. Go for precision, don't try to eyeball things. If a form is too complicated, remember that we can use ortographic studies as a way of working around that.
It will get messy, and that's part of it. If you can, work with a light lineweight first and go for a heavier one when you're sure of your construction. Two of your objects can be whatever you want; but I want one of them to be a more complex form; think of the mouse demo, something that forces you to use orthographic studies. And as always, take your time with it. Good luck, and if you have any questions, feel free to ask.
- Three more objects, one of which has to be a complex form that requires orthographic studies.