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Thanks for your review! It was very thorough. I appreciate you taking the time :)

I've completed the following:

One page of Arrows

One page of Organic Forms (contour ellipses)

One page of Organic Intersections

I think I understand the contour lines a lot more now - I wasn't really using these effectively or changing the degree of the ellipses much. I'm still struggling with organic intersections - I know my cast shadows aren't exactly right. I was trying to wrap them around the form contours but I can see I didn't do this quite right in some places.

Re-submitted exercises: https://imgur.com/a/djYkMBN

Previous lesson 2 submission: https://imgur.com/a/IVzWYN5

Let me know if there's anything else I should do.

You have improved a lot with these. Keep it up!

Hi Kioki,

No problem.

You can submit your 250 box challenge if you like. Just click submit homework for review here: https://drawabox.com/lesson/250boxes

Just keep in mind some critiquers may again point out the fact you are doing the exercises digitally (and so may not want to critique).

I'd say keep pushing ahead though. Your goal is to get more comfortable using your cintiq, so just use the exercises going forward as a way to do that.

Also don't forget the 50/50 rule and do some fun/non-drawabox art on your tablet as well :)

Hey Kioki,

I can appreciate that :)

I've put my critique below, hopefully it helps! Thanks for being patient.

1. Lines

• It looks like you are plotting your lines for all of the exercises before drawing. Keep this up.

• I can see you aren't repeating/correcting/redoing any lines. Keep this up.

• Your lines do look wobbly in some places, but I'm not sure if this is a wobbly line or just as a result of this being digital (or maybe you don't have enough room to use your shoulder when using your tablet). Since I'm not able to tell, I'll just say some general advice: make sure you're drawing from your shoulder for every line, plot your line and ghost so that it ends up as confident and as straight as possible.

2. Ellipses

• I see a bit of overlapping in your tables of ellipses, but mostly these look OK.

• I think some of your ellipses aren't drawn through enough (see your ellipses in tables exercise). Draw through 2 times preferrably (like you've done in the ghosted planes with ellipses), practice this and you'll get really clean ellipses over time. See this example: https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/a76a8906.jpg

• Your best ellipses in my opinion are in the ghosted planes with ellipses exercise.

• Once again there's some obvious line wobble here. See your funnels exercise in particular (specifically the smaller ellipses in the center of the funnels). This usually comes down to confidently drawing from the shoulder.

3. Boxes

• In rough perspective your width lines are parallel to horizon and height lines perpendicular to horizon. Keep this up.

• On rotated boxes, you've drawn this quite small. I think this exercise would be a lot easier if you started a bit bigger, just something to keep in mind for the future. However, I can see you've drawn your corners close together and each box is rotating. Keep this up.

• I think your organic perspective is really well done. You've obviously learnt a lot from lesson one. The perspective is good, and you'll get even better at this when you do the 250 box challenge!

Another comment not related to your exercises:

• Next time try to rearrange your imgur photos in order of the exercises (it just makes it a bit easier for ctitiquers to go through).

Hi plantsonhead,

Thanks for submitting your homework for lesson 1!

Here's my critique:

Overall I think the main thing you need to improve upon is confident lines. This is especially evident in your ellipses. I hope my notes below can help.

1. Lines

• I'm noticing quite a bit of wobble in your lines. Prioritise confidence over accuracy when it comes to lines.

See this example: https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/5bcda336.jpg

A wobbly line can mean you've tried to draw the line accurately, going slow. It could also be that your drawing surface is uneven, or you're not drawing from your shoulder.

• In superimposed lines you aren't fraying the line at the starting dot, this is good. It means you're placing your pen carefully to start the line. Keep this up.

• I'm seeing a little bit of arching in your lines - in ghosted planes particularly. This might be because you're not using your shoulder.

• You are plotting your lines with points first before drawing the line. Keep this up.

2. Ellipses

• You've done a good job with placing the ellipses, there's not much overlapping or going outside of the bounds of the tables. Keep this up.

• In funnels, the minor axis (middle line) cuts the ellipses in 2 symetrical halves. Keep this up.

• Overall though your ellipses look quite wobbly and I think you need to work on this - the lines could be much more confident.

3. Boxes

• In rough perspective your width lines are parallel to the horizon and your height lines are perpendicular - good work.

• In rotated boxes some of the outer boxes look like you maybe gave up, and the line quality here starts to get a bit worse (wobbly).

• In general I think your boxes could use some work. Your lines in ghosted lines and ghosted planes are pretty good - I'd love to see the lines of your boxes like this as well.

Hi Kioki,

I'm not 100% sure how to critique this, as the drawabox exercises are supposed to be done with pen and paper as per lesson 0: https://drawabox.com/lesson/0/5.

Give this a read from the FAQ - 'Why not digital?': https://drawabox.com/article/ink/notdigital

There's this in the community thread: https://drawabox.com/community/submission/GYDR6YDB

So of course it's not that you CAN'T do these lessons digitally (you can do whatever you want!) I'm just unsure how to critique your submission.

Perhaps get another opinion on the discord or start a discussion on this site as to whether or not this can be critiqued in the same way we critique pen and paper submissions. I had a look on the FAQs and couldn't find an obvious answer.

Hi DCP,

Lines:

• Your lines look confident and I can see you haven't gone over any to try to correct them/re-do them. This is good.

• You're obviously plotting your lines (as opposed to just freehanding it) so keep this up and always remember to ghost the line.

• I do see some slight arching of your lines in ghosted lines and ghosted planes -> make sure you are drawing from the shoulder to get a clean, confident straight line.

Ellipses

• Your ellipses don't look as confident as your other lines -> perhaps try drawing through the ellipse 3 times at first to get comfortable with it, then restrict yourself to drawing through 2 times.

• Once again make sure you're ghosting and drawing with your shoulder to get more confident ellipses.

• For some general advice I recommend doing the funnels exercise as part of warmups as you progress with drawabox. You'll get better at these over time.

Boxes

• In rotated boxes, some of your boxes could use some more rotation, but I can see you've applied this to most of them. Here's a reminder (https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/d73eea49.jpg)

• There's some wobbly/arching lines in your boxes for rough perspective, yet in organic perspective your lines there look really nice and confident - try to apply this to any box you draw.

• Your perspective on boxes has some mistakes, but that's normal - this is waht the 250 boxes challenge is for!

No worries Konstantin!

Thanks for checking :)

Thanks!

I find the dramatic foreshortening really fun so that's probably why I did that.

Much appreciated.

Hi Konstantin, I've re-done the rough perspective exercise:

https://imgur.com/a/NLRMs43