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    12:46 AM, Sunday June 26th 2022

    Hello Trendel103, I’ve broken down the critique below:

    1. Extending lines: For the most part, these lines converged to their VPs. However, some lines were extended in the wrong direction (box 15 and 26, blue lines).

    2. Converging VS Diverging: Most of the boxes had clear vanishing points. I noticed that at the 100-130ish boxes, the foreshortening became shallower and shallower until it was unclear where the boxes’ VPs were - this was especially prominent in the blue set of lines. Endeavour to have a clearer VP for the viewer, so that when you extend the lines, they are not parallel. Sometimes, the lines converge in pairs (box 58, top 2 and bottom 2 lines extending to the right). It appears these two pairs of lines are converging towards 2 different vanishing points when they should all be converging towards 1.

    3. Hatching: Hatching lines are good. They’re drawn through confidently and consistently. This is good to practice, as hatching is a useful tool in later lessons and art in general.

    4. Lineweight: There is lineweight on some of these boxes, but not all of them. Try to get into the habit of adding lineweight - it’s okay if it’s a bit off, as long as the lines are confident.

    5. Wobbly/Repeated Lines: The lines on the boxes themselves are smooth and confident with no visible repeats and no wobbles, which is good. This shows that you're taking the time to ghost through each mark you make.

    6. Inner Corners: The inner corners are always difficult to do so don’t sweat it if they’re a little wonky. Here’s a method you can use in the future to better predict where the inner corner should go: https://imgur.com/a/DHlA3Jh

    Overall, well done! I would recommend adding exercise this into your warmups: 1-2 boxes or so (this tip was from a fellow student) to keep your skills sharp. Hope this was helpful :)

    Next Steps:

    Move on to Lesson 2.

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    11:45 AM, Saturday June 25th 2022

    Thanks so much for this detailed critique and the tips on how to use DaB and tips in general! I'll definitely be adding 1-2 those boxes into my warmup.

    9:39 PM, Thursday June 23rd 2022

    No problem!

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    1:27 AM, Wednesday June 22nd 2022

    Hello, Fishingguppy! I’ve broken down the critique below:

    Things well done:

    You extended lines in the correct direction. They all tracked back to the general direction of the Vanishing Point.

    The hatching is neat and tidy - it appears you spent time on them instead of rushing, which is good. In the same manner, the addition of lineweight this early on is good - the lines are confident without wobbles.

    Things to improve on:

    Some of the boxes’ lines diverge from the VP (for example boxes 124’s blue lines, 142’s red lines and the whole box of 214). Keep in mind that each set of lines should travel towards the same point, not away from it.

    Most of the boxes are set at a very dramatic orientation with lots of intense foreshortening. In the future, try drawing the boxes with shallower foreshortening. In addition, some boxes (like 133) are very, very extreme and it’s a bit hard to tell which face is which. This can be because of the size at which they’re being drawn and also the initial “Y” shape you start with. A general rule of thumb is this: all the angles of the “Y” should not be less than 90 degrees.

    Lastly, the inner corners can be tough to master, so here is a process that may help with that: https://imgur.com/a/DHlA3Jh

    All in all, these boxes were well done! There is a visible improvement as you progress to the more recent boxes. The key thing to remember are that the sets of lines should converge and not diverge. Don't worry about perfection - Uncomfortable doesn't expect it and neither should you. I agree that we should set schedules that are realistic and consistent. And yes, warmups are sooo important for artists! Hope this critique helped :)

    Next Steps:

    Move on to lesson 2.

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    1:43 AM, Tuesday June 21st 2022

    I agree with Wendy. One thing that can help in the future is adopting the Ghosted Planes + Ellipses in Planes exercise into your warmups. It's a double-whammy; gets your arm moving with the ellipses and primes your muscle memory with the ghosted lines! It's become one of my go-to warmups. Even just a few will suffice, maybe 2-3. And overtime, you'll see your ellipses becoming tighter and your ghosted lines becoming smoother which is great :)

    8:45 PM, Monday June 20th 2022

    Thank you for the critique!

    12:24 AM, Thursday June 16th 2022

    Thanks for the suggestion! I'll give it a shot.

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    7:01 PM, Saturday June 11th 2022

    Hello, Deep_eyes! I’ve broken down the critique below:

    Lines

    Superimposed Lines: Good. Slight fraying on both ends for a few of the lines; this is a result of not starting the line from the exact same point every time. Otherwise, well done.

    Ghosted Lines: Good.

    Ghosted Planes: Good.

    Ellipses

    Tables of Ellipses: Good.

    Ellipses in Planes: Good; strokes are confident and ellipses aren’t drawn through more than the appropriate amount of times. Some of them aren’t touching all 4 sides of the planes, though.

    Funnels Exercise: Good.

    Boxes

    Plotted Perspective: Good.

    Rough Perspective: Some of the lines were drawn over more than once - try to avoid that in the future. It’s ok if the lines don’t turn out as planned. Other than that, well done.

    Rotated Boxes: Pretty decent.

    Organic Perspective: Take advantage of the lineweight when drawing the big swoopy line to help further the idea of perspective. In addition, it may be helpful to bring the line to the edge of the frame instead of leaving it hanging in mid-air (first page, frame 1). The perspective is pretty good, too, so overall, this was solid work.

    Well done! The ellipses and lines were drawn through confidently and smoothly and the perspective on the boxes was done pretty decently as well. Just not remember to redraw lines for the homework unless called for (like for lineweight or something). Hope this helped :)

    Next Steps:

    Move on to the 250 box challenge.

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    1:15 PM, Saturday June 11th 2022

    Hello, Ruby! I’ve broken down the critique below:

    Lines:

    Superimposed Lines: Good - confident and no major wobbles.

    Ghosted Lines: Good - take care not to redraw lines. It’s ok if the line doesn’t turn out as planned.

    Ghosted Planes: Lines are confident and straight. However, some planes have been drawn over twice. Try to avoid redrawing lines in the future for these lessons/

    Ellipses:

    Table of Ellipses: The larger, more circular ellipses are pretty good; confident, which is what we’re aiming for. However, quite a few of the ellipses have been drawn through more than 3 times (they should be drawn through 2-3 times). There’s some minor deforming of ellipses which is probably a result of hesitation and trying to actively course-correct, which results in small wobbles.

    Ellipses in Planes: The ellipses here are a bit more confident than the ones in the previous exercise. However, there are still some that have wobbles and have been drawn through over 3 times.

    Funnels Exercise: Here, the ellipses have been drawn through the appropriate amount of times which is good! For the most part, this looks fine. The minor axis (the straight line) doesn’t cut the ellipses in 2 symmetrical halves, though, so watch out for that next time if you do this exercise again.

    Boxes

    Plotted Perspective: Good.

    Rough Perspective: Good. The width lines (horizontal) are parallel to the horizon line and the height lines (vertical) are perpendicular to the horizon line.

    Rotated Boxes: Good effort. Some of the boxes’ corners aren’t consistent with each other: https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/9a16c189.jpg. In addition, some of the boxes aren’t really rotating, like the one in the top right corner. It’s more like the viewer has moved themselves down to see the bottom of the box, instead of the box actually rotating. Don’t sweat it too much, though, this exercise is a rough one.

    Organic Perspective: The general perspective, when boxes go from big to small, is good. The individual boxes’ perspectives are a bit wonky, but don’t worry because there’ll be a chance to practice that in the 250 box challenge. Lineweight was added to the parts of the boxes that overlap, which is good.

    All in all, solid work! The ghosted lines are good and the ellipses are coming along. Just remember not to redo lines unless it’s called for (to add lineweight or something) and to not be hesitant when executing the ellipses. In fact, I would suggest incorporating the Ellipses in Planes into your warmup routine, they're a great way to get your shoulder moving before a drawing session. Hope this critique helps :)

    Next Steps:

    Move onto the 250 Box Challenge! Once you complete that, or at least sometime in the future, give the Rotated Boxes another shot, keeping in mind that they should rotate, and not just shift in perspective.

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    1:32 AM, Wednesday June 8th 2022

    Oh dear, I didn't realize this had been submitted for official critique. My bad, please ignore this critique

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