Thanks for so much great feedback! You can find my revisions here:

https://imgur.com/a/VxHwuo1

For the most part, I think it ended up much less cluttered compared to my original submission, since I'm using fewer contour lines and focusing on the form intersections instead. I think the elephant head in particular came out a lot better than before, building things out from the eye sockets definitely helped.

As for the legs, I find that my arm naturally wants to turn the sausages into ellipses, so I have to try and force it to make sausages instead. If I force it too much though, I start slowing down and losing the line confidence. I think most of them turned out all right, but a few still turned a bit elliptical.

I also added some cast shadows on the ground, though I wasn't sure just how much to add here. I thought too much shadow would start to detract from the animals themselves, so I tried to add just enough to show that they're on the ground and not hovering in midair.