Wyvernull

Thanks so much for the critique! I'll be able to learn and improve a lot from this feedback :D

BOXES

Drawing Through Each Box

You’ve drawn through your boxes, including the lines only seen with x-ray vision, well done!

Checking Convergences / Line extension

A few boxes are missing line extensions, particularly for the back corner (190, 229 - 234, 247 - 250). The only guidelines I noticed going the wrong direction were in box 10 - otherwise, you’ve correctly extended your boxes’ lines away from the viewer, good work!

Line Weight / Hatching

Your hatching is consistent, controlled and applied to the correct spaces, good job!

A few boxes don’t have hatching (66, 89, 96) - it isn’t explicitly required, but hatching is useful to show what sides of a box face the viewer. That being said, all the ones afterwards do, so I don’t think this is something to worry about.

I would recommend using line weight (going over a line again with a planned, confident stroke) around your boxes’ silhouettes, as it’ll reinforce their shapes and give more practice with lines.

Foreshortening / Varying Boxes

A lot of boxes have very rapid convergence (vanishing points close to the box) - while we want a mix of this and minimal convergence (boxes with vanishing points further away), I’d recommend more minimally converging boxes for two reasons:

• Dramatic foreshortening implies large objects (or things that are close up) - since most things we draw have “normal” distance/size (with shallower foreshortening), practicing those is a slightly higher priority.

• Minimal convergence requires farther out vanishing points, increasing our chance for error. It’s not always beneficial to make something harder, but here it encourages more accurate estimations, which is useful for improving both types of boxes.

Other than that, you’ve given your boxes dynamic sizes and shapes, nicely done!

OTHER

Some boxes have redrawn/crossed out lines (142, 221, 247). Speaking from experience, it’s very tempting to redraw or cross out incorrect lines - resist the urge as much as you can.

When we redraw/cross out lines to show or correct a mistake, we give that spot more line weight - this directs our eye towards it, working against the 3D illusion we want to make.

Also, if we avoid redrawing lines, it motivates our brain to ‘get it right’ the first time, so when we can undo/erase lines (like outside of the Drawabox) we’ll be able to spend less time getting an accurate mark.

Otherwise, your linework is confident, straight, and accurate, well done!

The only other thing I want to put here is that the critiques I’ve given don’t mean you did poorly. You came here to learn, and did just that. Keep moving forward!

Thank you for the critique! :D

LINES - General

Your lines are confident, straight, and you’ve set out your goals beforehand, well done!

Superimposed Lines:

Only thing I noticed was over/undershoot on some longer lines - this will improve with practice, but lifting your pen off the page right as you hit the end of the mark might help too.

Ghosted Lines:

There are some slight inaccuracies hitting points, but this will improve with practice.

Ghosted Planes:

The planes on pg. 2 (“5.jpg”) could be a little more varied - other than that they look good!

ELLIPSES - General

Your ellipses are confident, accurate, and drawn through 2 - 3 times, well done!

Tables of Ellipses

Your sizing and minor axis alignment are quite well done, good job!

Ellipses in Planes

One warped plane on pg. 1 (“8.jpg”) seems to struggle with accuracy - this will improve with practicing warped planes, so I'd recommend adding a few more when doing the ghosted planes exercise.

Funnels

A couple ellipses don’t quite align to the axis of the funnels, but other than that they look good!

BOXES - General

Your boxes make use of parallel lines and vanishing points, and are well constructed, good work!

Plotted Perspective

Your hatching is very consistent here, nice work!

Rough perspective

Looks good, only thing I noticed was you only need to take your guidelines back to the horizon line on pg. 1 (“12.jpg”).

Rotated Boxes

Your boxes are rotating correctly, and you’ve drawn out each of the required lines, well done! Only recommendations I have are to add some hatching and line weight to the proper areas.

Organic Perspective

It’s not necessary to draw boxes completely obscured by others, since adding them won’t help convey a sense of depth/space - some line weight for the boxes in front might help as well.

OTHER

There's a very tiny amount of lines which are redrawn - you're doing very good keeping this in check, this is just a reminder to keep it up!

Not much else to put here, except the critiques I’ve given don’t mean you did badly - you came to learn what Lesson 1 teaches and you’ve done exactly that - keep moving forward!

If you have any questions/concerns, let me know, and I'll do my best to answer them!

LINES / General

Your lines look confident and quite straight, good work!

Superimposed Lines:

I’d recommend having some lines go fully across the page. Some longer lines have a little arc/wobble - to counter arcing, it might be helpful to think of arcing the opposite way just a bit.

Ghosted Lines:

Your ghosted lines are confident, straight, and accurate, well done! Only thing I’d say is it’s fine to let them overlap.

Ghosted Planes:

I can’t tell if this was done, but make sure to plot out points for each line beforehand including the second dividing lines (if you did this and I just couldn't tell, good work!). I’d also recommend putting the planes closer together.

ELLIPSES - General

Your ellipses are drawn through 2 - 3 times and are accurate, good work! Some ellipses do wobble - we want to prioritize smooth and confident ellipses over accurate ones. Ellipses in the correct bounds won’t do much good if they’re wobbly.

Tables of Ellipses

Your ellipses’ minor axis are quite well aligned, and there is less wobble here, good work! There are some minor inaccuracies with sizing and spacing, but these will improve with practice + more confident ellipses.

Ellipses in Planes

Just the general critique applies here.

Funnels

Your alignment here is quite good! Make sure to have ellipses on either side of the funnel's shorter centerline, not one directly on it. The top/bottom left sections of the exercise don’t have curved lines - while this is interesting in itself, it won’t prepare us as much for the more organic forms of Lesson 2.

BOXES

Your boxes are well constructed, and make use of parallel lines and vanishing points, good work!

Plotted Perspective

You’ve set out your vanishing points, used careful hatching, and your boxes are well constructed, good job! I’d only recommend 1 - 2 more boxes per scene, and to push the middle scene’s vanishing points out more.

Rough perspective

You’ve taken your guidelines to the horizon and set out your points beforehand, good work! There’s one box with a bisected face, which isn't necessary for this exercise.

Rotated Boxes

Pretty much all your boxes are rotating correctly, good work! There are two boxes on the bottom right which aren’t drawn, as well as a few lines throughout. Hatching is also missing - it might help to make the exercise larger, to give you more space between lines (making it easier to add hatching and see which lines are/aren't drawn).

Organic Perspective

The swoopy lines have some wobble to them, and a couple boxes have quick foreshortening. Only other thing I’d recommend is a few more boxes per scene.

OTHER

A couple marks are redrawn/give line weight when unnecessary - speaking from experience, it’s hard to resist the urge to redraw lines, but it’s worth it. Your work will look much cleaner, and it's faster as well.

Not much else to put here, except that the critiques I’ve given here don’t mean you’ve done badly/failed the exercises. You came here to learn, and you’ve done just that - you’ve gained a solid understanding of the core concepts Lesson 1 teaches, well done!

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No problem! I'm glad I was able to help :D

Like Uncomfortable said, I won't get notified unless you reply to the original critique - luckily enough, I didn't see the first notification until now, so I saw both messages.

LINES

Your lines look confident and straight, well done!

Superimposed Lines:

Same as above, good work! If you’re working with A4/similar size paper, you may want to draw some lines across the wider section of the page.

Ghosted Lines:

You’re correctly lining up at each starting point, well done! I’d only recommend throwing a few more lines in and not worrying about overlap.

Ghosted Planes:

Your planes look accurate and you’ve set out points for each line beforehand, they look good! The only (albeit small) thing I noticed was that the bottom right plane on one page wasn’t fully done.

ELLIPSES

Your ellipses are drawn through 2 - 3 times and look confident, well done!

Tables of Ellipses

Some sections of this exercise have ellipses which don’t quite hit their boundaries, and I’d recommend less tiny ellipses - it’s okay to just have space in some places!

Ellipses in Planes

Some ellipses hit their boundaries width/height wise but don’t hit both - it might be useful to try making your ellipses wider or more “circular" when ghosting.

Funnels

The lines separating funnel sides are missing, which can make proper spacing at the center difficult. There’s also inconsistency in minor axis alignment / degrees - for this exercise, we want the alignment of our ellipses' axes to stay the same, and their degrees to stay the same or consistently get larger moving outwards.

BOXES

Your boxes use parallel lines which converge at a single vanishing point, use clean hatching, and are well constructed - good work!

Plotted Perspective

You’ve done well applying the concepts of perspective to each box, good work!

Rough perspective

Each box should be drawn through (like the plotted perspective exercise) - we also only need to take our perspective guidelines back to the horizon line.

The only other thing I noticed were some vertical lines which weren’t going straight up (which for this exercise all of them should).

Rotated Boxes

The top/bottom sections’ boxes don’t get "compressed" (look shorter) as they rotate - this makes them look taller/wider than they should. Other than that, your boxes are rotating, drawn through, and are put close together, well done!

Organic Perspective

You need to complete two full pages of the organic perspective exercise - you’re almost there, you just need to finish up that second page.

You’ve avoided dramatic foreshortening on smaller/far away boxes, and scaled them as they move back, well done!

OTHER

Not much else to put here, except this: the critiques I’ve given don’t mean you’ve done badly/failed the exercises. You’ve gained a very thorough understanding of Lesson 1’s concepts - you came here to learn, and you’ve done just that. Keep moving forward!

LINES

Superimposed Lines:

Your lines go off of the page, so there’s no way to identify over/undershoot. It’s important to see the whole mark, otherwise I can only review a portion of your work! There’s also some wobble, which is usually a sign of not drawing confidently.

Ghosted Lines:

You've taken the time to find your starting points, and have heavily reduced wobbling, well done! There is some overshoot, which will reduce with practice, but you can also try lifting your pen off the page as soon as you reach an endpoint.

Ghosted Planes:

Several planes merge / share points - we’ll get more practice if they’re separate. This is done correctly at several spots, so it’s just applying that to the rest. I’d also recommend varying your planes’ sizes and point positions more.

ELLIPSES

Tables of Ellipses

Your tables of ellipses look good! You’ve drawn through your ellipses 2 - 3 times, and their minor axes are quite well aligned.

Ellipses in Planes

Your ellipses are drawn through 2 - 3 times - you’re placing your ellipses in the proper boundaries, and they look confident, well done!

Funnels

The alignment of ellipses to the funnel’s minor axis is off in some places, but overall they look good - remember you only need to submit one page of the funnels exercise though!

BOXES

Plotted Perspective

The boxes themselves look good, but your perspective guidelines shouldn’t overshoot their vanishing points - since we’re using a ruler it's something we can control.

Rough perspective

There may have been some confusion here - you’ve correctly submitted one plotted perspective page, but only one full page (out of two) of the rough perspective exercise. The other is half plotted, half rough perspective. For the full page of rough perspective, the top section doesn’t have perspective guidelines - it’s important to do this for every section, so we can gather information about mistakes.

Rotated Boxes

Some boxes haven’t been drawn in, and some line sections merge with each other - we also only need to draw 2 boxes on either size of our center one. Your boxes are rotating correctly, which is a very difficult concept to grasp - well done!

Organic Perspective

I’d recommend a few more boxes per scene - also, you don’t have to worry about hatching/drawing through boxes with this particular exercise. You've done very well tackling the depth/spatial reasoning concepts involved with this exercise!

OTHER

There are sections of lines which are redrawn multiple times - there’s just a couple, but it’s important to keep it in check! Lastly, certain sections of hatching don’t fully cover the face they’re supposed to.

Not much else to put here except this: the critiques I’ve given here don’t mean you’ve failed/done poorly, and I’ve seen a ton of improvement looking at your work - keep moving forward!

The way you drew the mask is well done, the rat looks very ready for war!