9:53 PM, Wednesday June 1st 2022
Hello Sky! I have come...To deliver Judg-...I mean, Critique for your work!
Hopefully it is aleast a little helpful!
Lines
Superimposed Lines - Looks pretty good to me! It looks like by the 2nd page you had gotten it down pretty well. I would suggest trying to do some more extreme curves for this in the future.
Ghosted Lines - Looks good! One thing i found suggested in the Discord server was to do lines of more varying length the next time you do this, from fairly short to fairly long, as it helps break any potential pattern.
Ghosted Lines - Nearly perfect, looks like, at least to me. There certainly seems to be a little overshooting but the cross sections of the diagonal and vertial/horizontal lines inside the planes look well aligned and fairly straight.
Ellipses
Tables of Ellipses - As you mentioned on the discord when you first posted your lesson, you said that you struggled a little on the ellipses. Namely in regards to overshooting the bounds of the box.I see some instances of them also not touching the sides. As you yourself mentioned, this is sure to get better with more practice and is probably something best kept in mind when next attempting this during future warmups.
Ellipses in Planes - Other than a few instances of a few of them not touching the sides, these look good! I would suggest, however, that you try and only draw through each ellipse only twice as many of these have been drawn through many times and if one of those lines happened to go awry, it may leave it looking messy. As i understand it, the "Go through it twice" is mostly there to train your brain and your hand in to maintaining a constant motion of the hand.
Funnels - I noticed some issues in regards to the Funnels. Namely, looking at the bottom right funnel, the bottom ellipse is squashed and flat where as the ones in the middle are more rounded. Assuming you're following the first method shown in the video, this is fine but it might be a good idea to try and attain some symetry within the same funnel. For example, while the mentioned ellipse is flat at the bottom, the one at the top of the funnel is more rounded. That's just me, though. Other than that, there is a few fairly minor cases of the ellipses themselves lacking symetry along the minor axis but nothing that would spell disaster.
Boxes
Plotted Perspective - Really, Really good. I struggle to believe this was freehand with how near perfectly straight some of these lines art. Of course, a few of them are a little wobbly but its barely noticable.
Rough Perspective - They're all in the same general area which is as far as im concerned, the important bit. Keep practicing with the warmups, and it'll only get better.
Rotated Boxes - Pretty good. The only things i would mention would be to maybe apply some hatching to the sides to better define where each box begins and ends. The spacing between each box looks exceptionally consistent which i'm very much impressed by. In the future, You should aim to bring those outer "2D" boxes in to act as the sides of the spherical shape. Perhaps you could bring them in a bit at a time each time you do it, until you find the sweet spot?
Organic Perspective - I believe it was mentioned in Lesson 0, though i could be mistaken, but it's best not to cross out your work even if you are frustrated with it or if its very obviously wrong. Someone, when reviewing your work, may have noticed something you could have done to correct it that you may not have noticed yourself. Unfortunately i do not have much more to say about this one, as you were the one to help me the most on my OWN Organic perspective. One thing i would suggest though, is perhaps attempting to have the line loop back behind or in front of itself to help you practice occlusion at the same time.
Hopefully this was helpful, even if just a little!
Next Steps:
As, in our discord conversation the other day, you seem to understand your shortfalls in terms of Ellipses, in so far as i myself understand them i will not say you NEED to do another page, simply to spend a bit more of your focus on Ellipses on your warmups in the following week(s).
I believe the next reccomended step was the 250 Box challenge, so if you believe yourself ready (I certainly do), that may be your next port of call and i am confident that you will nail it by the end!
Good luck!