Tora

Hey! I'm Tora, I'll be doing your critique today :) So, right into it

Lines - Superimposed lines look good. Ghosted lines and planes, also fairly good, there is maybe a tiny tiny bit of wobble / arcing. When you practice through your warm up, keep in mind confident and straight is priority over accurate.

Ellipses - So, your ellipses suffer quite a bit from wobbling again. Same as the lines, keep in mind that smooth curves is your tip priority, more important than accuracy -- accuracy comes later, with much practice. The same wobbly mistake is present in your tables, planes and funnels, with the funnels being the worst offender. Take these exercises and bring them in to your warmup routine for sure, and focus on smoothness. Additionally, when it comes to funnels, the degrees of your ellipses is a bit off. If you're going to vary degrees, the center has to be narrower, with the openings becoming wider degrees, whereas yours are the opposite. You can see in this section here how the center ellipses are very thin, the outer ones are more circular. Also, there is some misalignment of your ellipses, shown here. With that in mind, I think you would benefit from doing 1 more page of ellipses in funnels, keeping in mind the following: 1) ellipses must be smooth above all else, 2) ellipses must be aligned to the minor axis, 3) ellipses in the center are narrower than those at the openings.

Boxes - Correct me if I'm wrong, but you seem to be missing plotted perspective exercise here.

I'll move on to rough perspective -- your line quality suffers a tiny bit, but you clearly understood and executed the exercise well. However, there is one major mistake: going over your lines twice. It's unnecessary, even if your line is really off, just keep it, don't draw over it and try to 'correct' it. The only time you would be going over your lines is if you're adding line weight, which should still be very subtle.

Moving on, rotated boxes is looking good! You've captured rotation well, you've got all your corner boxes drawn in there. Some of them suffer from a big of warping, like elongating or squishing, but that's something you'll be practicing in the next lessons. :)

And finally, organic perspective is looking good. The sense of scale is well conveyed, the boxes flow nicely. I will note again -- don't go over your lines twice. Just keep them as you drew them the first time. Often when you try to 'correct' a poor line, you're just drawing attention to your mistake, when in the grand scheme of things it might not have been that noticeable.

Regarding your 250 boxes, you should take a picture of each page individually and post them as a separate submission for review, like you did this one. We can't see your boxes clearly from the first picture, so we couldn't give much review on them. :)

As a final note, you've done a good job here. There are a few kinks that snuck up on you, such as your line quality dropping a tiny bit, or your ellipses wobbling, but I can see you understood the majority of the lesson very well. One more page of those pesky funnels and you should be good to go. Good work, keep going and I'll be looking forward to seeing you in the future lessons!

Hello!

First off, congratulations on completing the challenge! It's a difficult feat for sure, so when I go into this critique keep in mind you've done a huge thing already, just by being dilligent enough to complete this.

So, from what I can see, overall you've understood the exercise well. There are a few times where you go over your lines, or they get a tiny bit scratchy, but for the most part your line quality is good. Your boxes may have benefitted from a tiny bit of line weight, but that's alright.

When it comes to vanishing points and congervence/divergence, it's really hard to nail them, and perfection isn't really expected of you here, though you should strive for it. That being said, I can see you had some trouble with the back lines, especially in your early boxes. Here is where multiple checking and rechecking and readjusting comes into play. A lot of people (myself included, so keep in mind I am biased) find it helpful to put a dot mark as a rough estimate of where the line would go, then check that dot with the remaining lines that would intersect, and if it's not right adjust it again, etc. I can see you've done this in some of your boxes, but seems like you stopped at some point. It might be something to play around with as you warm up.

Another thing I found particularly helpful was ghosting the line back to where I think the VP would go, even if it's off the page, while keeping the other lines that go to the same VP in mind, trying to see the "big picture", if that makes sense. Either way, there's going to be a bit of guesswork, and your convergences definitely greatly improve as the number of your boxes increases.

I also like how you started to play around with different rotations more, while keeping the boxes solid feeling, as you went on with the exercise. That was very exciting to see!

So, in conclusion, well done on the exercise! The biggest takeaway, really, is try not to go over your lines twice. Good luck on your next lessons!

Hey! I'm Tora, I'll be going over your work today :)

Right into it,

Lines - Looking good! Smooth, confidently executed. You paid attention to realign your pen to the starting point in your superimposed lines. Well done!

Ellipses - Again, fine job on this one too. It is clear you understood the exercises well - your tables of ellipses have varying degrees, varying angles, but they meet their mark of the confining box. Ellipses in planes, very good job here too, even on the largest ellipses which I would assume were the most difficult to put down. Well done on funnels, too! I especially like that you employed the wider degrees as the funnel opens up. The only thing I could maybe see here is that you were a bit looser, and therefore less accurate with some of your ellipses. But that would absolutely be splitting hairs, the accuracy will come with time and practice and you're fairly accurate as is already. The main purpose of the exercise was smoothness in the ellipses, which you've completely nailed. Great job!

Boxes - Great job on the rough perspective exercise! This is likely one of the cleanest looking attempts, in terms of line quality, that I've seen so far. One thing I will note, however -- At times you went over your lines twice, I assume you did so instinctually after not being satisfied with the first mark you've made. I get this, sometimes it slips and you forget to stop yourself, old habits die hard etc., but try to be mindful of this as you go into 250 boxes. You definitely don't want to be going over any lines. Moving on, well done with rotated boxes too! They're rotating nicely, some of them are a little squished, but you got all of them in their place.

Finally, organic perspective. First off, I love the sense of scale, they're rotating, they're flowing nicely. Overall, the sense of scale is clearly readable, well done on that! However, here is where a bit of that confidence and quality escapes you, understandably so! But, I will reinforce my advice -- don't go over your lines twice or more times. Even if it's the worst line you've ever seen, just keep it there. The only time you're going over your lines is if you're adding line weight, but even that should not be used everywhere, and should not look like there are 2 lines. Lastly, when hatching one of your box planes, try to do it neatly. Yeah, it's boring and a bit grueling, but you want to produce clean work.

So, I think that's it! Overall, great work on this lesson. I'm looking forward to seeing how you employ the beautiful line quality you've established here in your future exercises! :)

These are looking much much better! Great job!

I don't think repeating the entire lesson is necessary, so long as you understand the concepts and come back to the exercises for your warmups. Good luck going forward! :)

Hey! My name's Tora and I'll be going over your homework today. So, right into it:

Lines - Starting off with superimposed lines. I'm not fully certain, but you seem to be missing the first line you are meant to be tracing -- the straight line that is to be drawn out with a ruler, which you then try to trace correctly and confidently. Since your original line is missing, your lines fray at both ends instead of only on the tail end, and they arc quite a bit. I suspect the cause of the errors is going too fast in order to achieve smoothness -- try to work on the balance between going fast enough to achieve smooth, straight lines, but being patient with realigning your pen back to the start and not rushing through the exercise. Your lines don't wobble and are fairly confident, so well done on that, but I do think it would be beneficial to do one more page of this exercise, including squiggly and straight lines, while applying the correct steps.

Moving into ghosted lines, you've done a fairly good job on this. The lines are straight, there is some minor arcing present, but all in all I'd call this one well executed. Finally, ghosted planes: You show great improvement as you go through this exercise and I'd say very well done with this one too.

Ellipses - So table of ellipses: The ellipses are smooth, drawn-through properly. It looks to me like you've rushed a little on this exercise as well, as they are improperly spaced on the 2nd page of the exercise. Moving into ellipses in planes, they are still smooth, but you hadn't drawn through them properly on the first page. You do, however, correct this issue on the 2nd page, so well done. I will note that your lines in this exercise start to arc again, so be mindful of this as you go on. Finally, ellipses in funnels: All in all I'd say well done here too, though there are a few mistakes to note, namely spacing issues and some looseness.

Boxes - Plotted perspective should be done with a ruler in it's entirety. I'm not certain what happened with the 3rd panel, but I see chicken scratching and scribbled hatching. Try to keep everything neat as it will make for a better learning experience. When it comes to rough perspective, try to keep in mind that your horizontal lines have to be parallel to the horizon line, as this is 1P perspective. Your accuracy isn't completely perfect, but with practice it'll get much better, so long as you keep it in mind. Also, on the 2nd page, do extend your lines as you've done on the first page to better see how far off you were from the VP.

Finally, rotated boxes. This is a difficult exercise, and it was meant to be difficult, so keep this in mind as you read my critique. Your line quality suffers a tad bit, but that will get sorted out with practice. Your boxes, for the most part, rotate well. Keep in mind your back face of the box will be similar and only a little distorted compared to the front face. You are missing 8 corner boxes, the most rotated ones, they'd go in the crevices between the ones you've got down. Finally, I can suggest adding hatching on the side planes of the boxes to better show which face is the front one.

You seem to be missing the Organic perspective exercise.

Overall, I can see you understood many of the concepts -- in particular you prioritized line/ellipse smoothness and have achieved this to a great degree. But, I do think you'd benefit from going back on a few parts, and adding the missing exercise, to really get it down before you move on to the 250 boxes challenge. Well done and good luck! :)

Hey! I'm Tora, I'll be reviewing your homework today. :) I'll be sectioning off the review as they are in the lessons, so right off in to the critique:

Lines - Superimposed lines are looking great. Confident, straight, feathering only on one end. Great work! I can see you took the same confidence in to the ghosted lines and ghosted planes exercise. Not much I can say other than very well done.

Ellipses - Moving on to ellipses, you demonstrate the same confidence in your ellipses as they are all smooth, properly drawn through, there is a decent variety in degrees and angles. You hit full marks on ellipses in planes as well. Occasionally your ellipses in planes miss one side -- I believe this is just your arm getting used to the motion, but I will leave this here just as a reminder. Ellipses in funnels are looking good here as well, you've prioritize ellipse quality and smoothness over accuracy, which is the point of the exercise so well done! Some of the ellipses become ever so slightly misaligned to the minor axis, but that's okay for now. As you warm up, add this exercise to your repertoire and with time you'll get the accuracy perfectly there too. :)

Boxes - Finally, boxes. Line quality is looking great in rough perspective. I'm not sure if you did, but again a reminder -- remember to plot your start/end points for your lines. When it comes to rotated boxes, good job with this too. The only note I can say on this is to try and refrain from re-tracing your lines or drawing over them more than once, as this can only bring attention to any potential mistakes. As far as organic perspective goes, I'd say you did a great job! It's a really really solid starting point to the 250 boxes challenge, which I recommend you do next. :)

All in all, great submission. Keep up the great work as you go through the next lessons and challenges.

Hey there! I'm Tora, I'll be going over your submission today :) So right into the critique, I'll break it down by sections:

Lines - Your superimposed lines are looking great! You've got the clean, crisp, confident lines down well, and there's a good amount of variety. Now, you seem to be missing your ghosted lines page. I see that in later exercises you have applied the concepts from ghosted lines, you've plotted your start/end points of your lines and they're fairly clean, so well done with that. When it comes to your ghosted planes, the lines themselves look well executed, but each plane is supposed to have diagonal and mid-point lines striking through the plane, like this. So 8 lines in total, whereas yours are missing the mid-point lines. Keep this in mind for the future.

Ellipses - Overall, your tables of ellipses looks good -- the ellipses are a tiny bit deformed, as are the ellipses in the ellipses in planes exercise. When it comes to ellipses in planes, you've misunderstood the exercise. You put more than one ellipse in each plane, and the ellipse doesn't touch every side of the plane. You were meant to have only one ellipse per plane, with the ellipse touching each of the 4 sides of the inside of the plane. See here and here. With this said, I'd recommend you redo the ellipses in planes exercise. Moving onto funnels, they're looking really good! I would note to try and keep your ellipses smooth as smoothness is your top priority, it is more important than accuracy. You can read more on that in the 'deformed' link I've provided earlier. :)

Boxes - Finally, boxes! I will say you've done a very good job with the rough perspective exercise. You demonstrated understanding of all the concepts, you've tried to keep your line quality up there, the extension is correct. Hitting all the marks, great job! When it comes to rotated boxes, they don't rotate quite properly but this is a very difficult exercise and you've done well. Finally, organic perspective. Overall, I'd say well done with this exercise as well. The only thing I could really note is that you can check out these: foreshortening and distortion, as quite a few of your boxes are either distorted or foreshortened, but that's okay.

All in all, great job with the exercises. Once again, I recommend you revisit ellipses in planes before moving on to the 250 boxes. :) Good luck!

Hey there!

I'll jump right in to the critique --

Superimposed lines -- right off the bat, well done with the improvement as you went through the exercise! Your lines started off wobbly, but I can see your confidence grew as you kept practicing. Great job!

Ghosted lines and planes -- there's the tiniest bit of wobble, but overall you understand the concepts well.

Ellipses - When it comes to ellipses, you're doing very well on drawing through them and keeping them within their boundaries, but they are quite a bit bumpy and deformed. You seem to have prioritized accuracy over smoothness. Overall, you've done well for all the exercises - tables, ellipses in planes and funnels - but for the future, keep in mind that a smooth ellipse is your top priority. Additionally, your ellipses in funnels become slightly misaligned, but most of them are quite good.

Boxes - Your line quality falls slightly at the start of Rough perspective, but I can see you've plotted your points for your lines and as you progressed you definitely showed a lot of improvement. Well done with that too! The rotated boxes exercise you've done overall well, the corner boxes don't quite rotate properly but they're the hardest ones to get right. The only thing I would really note is that it isn't necessary to go over your lines more than once, as that can end up harming you versus hurting you where if you don't nail it completely it draws attention to potential mistakes. But aside from that, great job here too. And finally, your organic perspective is looking great too.

Overall, great job with the exercises! I'll be looking forward to seeing your 250 boxes.

Hi there!

So to start with the review: Superimposed lines are looking great! I would've liked to see some wavy or squiggly lines in there in addition to the straight lines, but all in all they're looking good. Ghosted lines look very clean as well, straight and smooth, excellent work there! The same goes for ghosted planes. I can see you've plotted the start/end points of all your lines as well, good work!

You also understood the table of ellipses exercise very well too. They're drawn through the correct amount of times, and are fairly smooth. They don't exactly touch the borders, but that is to be expected when you're getting used to the motion. Well done with the ellipses in planes as well.

Funnels are looking good, but there are a few things I would like to mention here. First, you run into the issue of misaligning your minor axis. You can read up on this here. Additionally, you seem to sort of scribble in your funnel arcs, as well as some of the ellipses. I'm not certain if this was due to your fineliner running out of ink (it seems that way in some of your ellipses), or hesitation -- try to make one confident arc for your funnel arc and stick with it, rather than scribble in trying to get the position perfect. Draw through your boxes confidently here too, as you did in your table of ellipses, and try not to have your 2nd draw through fade out. Also keep in mind this section, though it is only a minor issue in my opinion.

In rough perspective, your lines start to wobble, but this is to be expected as you're thrown in to the deep end quite suddenly. You've done well, still this is something to keep in mind. Also, when you're extending your lines that go back to the vanishing point, extend the ones you've drawn out, rather than the ones that you should have drawn out, so as to really see how far off you were from the VP.

Your rotated boxes exercise looks fairly decent. Your boxes don't rotate quite as they should, but again this is to be expected. I will only note that clean line work is especially important in this exercise.

Organic perspective looks very good as well! I will note again the importance of line quality. Additionally, it looks as though in some of your boxes you attempted to rotate them, but ended up with a more flat looking box -- this is something you should find you will improve with greatly as you go through your 250 boxes. :)

All in all, good submission. Good luck with your 250 boxes!

Hello there!

Getting right into the review -- your superimposed lines are looking good, maybe a tad bit wobbly. You do seem to be missing 1 page in the superimposed lines part of the exercise, it may have gotten misplaced. Ghosted lines are looking great as well, there is only a tiny amount of arcing. The arcing continues into ghosted planes, so I do recommend you revisit these as warm ups down the road with that in mind. I want to also mention that there is no need for going over your lines. I know how tempting it is to fix the line that just didn't go as you wanted it to, but in the end you're just drawing more attention to your 'mistake'. But, all in all, good work!

When it comes to table of ellipses, draw through your ellipses preferrably 2 times, 3 is acceptable. You've drawn through yours many times more than that. You can read more on that here, this bit of text in particular:

That is, draw around the ellipse two or three times before lifting your pen. Two is ideal in my opinion, but three is also acceptable.

Additionally, in some of your frames your ellipses 'float' inside the frame, not quite touching the edges of the frame, and seem to be placed randomly (specifically 2nd page, bottom right-most and left-most frames). Try to keep to the borders you've drawn out for yourself -- either the frame, or an additional line cutting through the frame -- as your guideline for where the ellipse should be placed. More on that here. Aside from that, the ellipses look clean and smooth, so good job with that. :) Ellipses in planes have the same drawthrough issue as previously mentioned, but they also turn a bit wobbly and deformed. See here -- you prioritized touching the borders over drawing a smooth ellipse. Just another bit to keep in mind in the future. :) Funnels look good (aside from drawing through too many times), the minor axis looks well aligned in all but one of your funnels (top right side). You can read up on this here, but since the rest of your funnels are good I'd say you've done very well here too.

Moving on to rough perspective, your line quality deteriorates a little bit here. This is to be expected and is okay, but do try to not draw over your lines again after the first one is down. Put your line down and stick with it. Rotated boxes look good, but once again, in this exercise especially, you want to keep your lines clean. The exercise is very busy with lines as is, and adding more than necessary makes it even more confusing. Same for organic perspective. Aside from the lines, it's very well executed.

All in all, solid submission! I'd recommend doing a bit of the exercises you went through as warm up to reinforce your line quality, and then moving on to the 250 box challenge. Great job and good luck! :)