Tawny_0wl

Thank you!

I love the way you used color in the first painting! The glow makes me feel warm despite it being a winter piece.

Thank you!

Thank you!

It's what I was going for. New king, new responsibilities >_o

Hi, Fable!

You got me, I did get a bit lazy at one point and used less construction geometry, it clearly didn't help lmao. I'll also try to me more mindful of how I use hatching.

Thank you for the feedback!

Hello, I'm tawny_0wl and I'll be critiquing your work today!

Lines and Planes

I see some fraying on both ends of the superimposed lines, I recommend you take your time and place the pen in the correct location before proceeding.

Fraying on the far side is normal and is expected if you're executing the marks confidently and maintaing trajectory.

Besides that, your lines look fairly confident.

Ellipses

You drew through them twice and kept the shape fairly even. I'm assuming you used the ghosting method.

Your ellipses are snug enough in my opinion. Yes there are some gaps and it's good to identify mistakes and areas you can improve on, but don't get too hung up on the ellipses not fitting perfectly, accuracy comes with time and practice.

Good funnels. Ellipses are aligned to the minor axis line. I like that you tried to vary them too.

All in all, well-executed exercises.

Boxes

Plotted perspective looks clean. In the Rough Perspective exercise, I see some wobbly lines/hesitation. I suggest that you ghost through the motion more, engaging your shoulder, as many times as you need to get used to the motion and draw a single, confident line. Line extensions were done correctly, remember to also keep the back and front planes of the boxes rectangular.

Another thing, for this exercise, the vanishing point should be positioned more towards the center of the frame, you tend to stray a bit too far from the center.

The Rotated boxes exercise is tough, but you are consistent in your work and the boxes don't diverge that much. Props for completing it and not giving up.

Nice rotations in the Organic Perspective exercise. Well done!

Organic arrows

Your arrows have a nice flow. The fact that they get bigger as they approach the viewer plus the difference in line weight sells the idea that they're 3d and travelling through space.

Leaves

The leaves look beautiful. Love the detail on them. Solid work!

Branches

Solid work once more. I like that you vary the degrees of your ellipses. A few tails are showing on a couple of segments, but it's not a big deal.

The forking was also done correctly.

Well done!

Constriction on your plants and fungi looks great. I don't think I'd change much besides maybe the texture of the cactus.

Drawing every spike clump makes it look very busy, I'd maybe focus on the silhouette of the plant and draw just a few spikes/bumps here and there on the surface to suggest texture.

I like the way you drew the chanterelle cap turning, looks just like the real deal.

The pitcher plant is lovely, the stem flows nicely through space and the details are well done.

Organic Arrows

Lines look confident, arrows get bigger the closer they get to the viewer.

They look 3d, nice variety, good job!

Organic forms

Nice, even sausage forms, no pinching or excessive swelling. I like how you varied the angle of the ellipses.

Remember though that the angle change is relative to the viewer (we see less of the ellipses that are perpendicular to the viewer's line of sight - I'm referring to this image from the lesson)

Texture Analysis

Nice work, it looks great. :)

Dissections

A little blurry, but the dissections look good. I don't see any random lines/scribbling and the textures wrap around the forms. I like the fact that you let the texture come outside of the border or the sausage; it helps sell the idea of a 3d form in space.

One thing you can practice in the future is to try and gradate the texture around the form, darker towards the edges and lighter, it would make it look even more 3d (hope the way I worded it makes sense)

Intersections

The forms are well done, they look like they belong in the same space. While drawing the actual intersections is optional, I will give my two cents since you added them.

Without a difference in line weight, it's a bit hard to distinguish which form is in front of the other. I have, however, drawn a bit over your work (sorry!) to show how I would've approached it. It's not the only correct way, merely one solution.

here are the few I looked at

Something to note: Intersections between two curved surfaces or between a sphere and other forms cannot be a straight line. Also, intersections between shapes without curves cannot be curvy. (referring to page two, the intersection between a pyramid and the flat edge of the cylinder)

Organic intersections

Great job here, forms look like they are laying on top of each other. The cast shadow looks correctly drawn too.

That's better, I can see them now :)

Organic arrows, Leaves & Branches

The arrows look amazing and feel 3D, well done.

The leaves look good to me. I like that you made the spines also change direction on the twisted leaves, nice attention to detail.

Branches have a few tails sticking out, but that's normal. With more practice

Your construction drawings look solid, but I do have some notes:

• on the second page, I would approach drawing this node differently. (Correct me if I'm wrong, but to me, it seems like you tried to draw the two halves of the node directly on the branch, and it makes it look a bit flat.) To add bulk to the branch, I'd draw an ellipse, similar to the second step from the forking branches part of the lesson, and then add details on top. Kinda like this.

• when I draw petals that turn, I try to apply the same principles I use for organic arrows. The edges of the petal follow the initial line that establishes the flow, similar to how the second curve of the arrow follows the first. I drew the lines with red, hope this helps you visualize it.

• if you feel like the pistil looks too stiff, you can try drawing with a slight curve. Having it bend down slightly due to gravity will make it look more realistic.

• for the lotus flowers, I think it's better to ditch the circle and approach drawing the lotus similarly to the daisy demo.

• on the second to last page, I'd suggest against filling up the entire leaf with black. That much black draws the eye from the flowers, which I'd argue are much more interesting :) Instead, I suggest drawing just a few thin cast shadows to show off the leaf's veins.

I focused on the mistakes, but you did great! Give yourself a pat on the back :)

If you have any questions or need help, let me know.

Hi! I'm willing to take a look at your submission, but I cannot see any of the files you've shared.