Swampat

I think I remember the day I was about to do 97 I looked at videos of other people doing the 250 box challenge. I realized why my boxes didn't feel like the examples the instructions showed on the assignment page after watching multiple videos on the assignment the same day.

What’s up,JARJINGBING. I’m Swampat and I’ll be doing your lesson 1 critique.

Also, next time please organize your imgur next time you submit your assignments and your camera rotated some of your images as well.

Lines

Superimposed Lines

You did decently on these, though the larger lines do arch and fray out a little more than the shorter lines. Your curved and wavy lines aren’t really required, but your curved lines are pretty well done.

I think you might need to practice moving your whole arm in your free time and focus on trying to keep lines as straight as possible.

Ghosted Lines

You didn’t do amazing on these honestly… You need to really make sure you’re confident that you’re gonna hit those dots. This is a common issue that people have and for the most part your lines are smooth.

I think you just struggle with those longer lines staying smooth, since those are the ones that miss their mark the most.

Two lines on your page have attempted fixing of missed lines/wobbly lines. You don’t need to fix lines that miss their mark or that wobble a lot. Just let the mistakes go and move on.

Make sure when you move your arm, that you’re as confident as possible before you let it rip. Also make sure you rotate your page if you’re having any trouble moving your arm. You should do some warm ups with ghosting when you’re about to do an assignment or draw, just so you can get to the point that it feels natural.

Ghosted Planes

Your planes are done very well for the most part, but some of your lines curve or wobble a little bit. For your planes, it might be because how close the planes are to one another. The ones that hit the edge of the pages suffer the most from that problem.

Your inside lines suffer to intersect correctly, but this is a common issue for most people so nothing to worry about for now.

Nothing to really add for advice aside from practicing arm movement in your free time.

Ellipses

Table of Ellipses

You did decently on these, but a few of your ellipses are a little wobbly and rushed looking. I think the quality of most ellipses you did are done well enough though. Just need to practice doing some ellipses when you do warm ups.

Aside from some of your ellipses being a little rushed looking and wobbling a bit. You did fine on these, just make sure to practice those circular arm movements in your free time.

Ellipses in Planes

Your ellipses still suffer from the rushed and wobbly look to them. Drawing larger ellipses is pretty hard and you did decent on most of your ellipses anyways.

Your ellipses should touch each side of the plane that they’re inside of, which means their shape will change to be able to fit inside of the plane. Your thinner planes and ellipses actually do a fairly good job doing that, but the wider or more angled(?) your plane gets, the more they miss touching all 4 sides.

I don’t feel like you need to redo any of these despite what I said, but I just want you to be aware of what you need to pay attention to when doing an assignment like this.

Funnels

I’m seeing that you put small arrows, checkmarks, and x’s inside your ellipses. It’s fine if your ellipses poke out a little bit from the funnels. Just like the ellipses in planes assignment, that “mistake” is common and most people accidentally undershoot or overshoot their ellipses.

Moving on to the quality of your ellipses, they are pretty wobbly and I feel that you go over them a few too many times. You did a good job keeping them aligned with the minor axis.

Speaking of the minor axis, it’s supposed to cut through the middle of the funnel so it’s easier to see where the middle of the funnel is.

This is a nitpick, but I would have liked to see your ellipses get bigger the further they get away from the minor axis (this wasn’t required to do if I remember correctly).

One last thing, that funnel on the left looks like you either tried making it wider after you did your ellipses? You didn’t have to do that, it’s fine if your ellipses overshoot from the funnel. Just acknowledge your mistake and move on. Also some of your funnels have one side that has more ellipses than the other side.

You did fine on this assignment, but remember that most of the mistakes you made are pretty minor and common. I practiced doing ellipses every time I was about to draw or do an assignment and still made the same mistakes you did.

Boxes

Plotted Perspective

You technically did this assignment correctly, but did you use a ruler or straight edge for this assignment? Some of your boxes look like you tried to freehand them because the lines are wobbly and a few boxes have lines that you tried to fix. Using a ruler would have made it so you wouldn’t have to try to redo lines.

The other issue I have with this assignment is the lines that go back to the horizon line. Using a ruler would make it so all the lines go back to the same (or almost the same) point on the horizon line.

I would like you to redo this assignment making sure you use a ruler or some kind of straight edge so you don’t have to try fixing any lines that wobble since a straight edge should mitigate any kind of wobbling. Make sure the lines that go back to the points you mark on the horizon line hit those points. If you don’t have a straight edge of some sort, make sure to let me know, maybe I can come up with some way you can make something that has a straight edge.

Rough Perspective

You did good on this assignment aside from the lines wobbling a little bit. Also remember you don’t have to fix your messed up lines, just move on.

Something unrelated to the assignment itself… your phone rotated the picture of your assignment so it’s a little hard to look at without me turning my laptop to the side.

Rotated Boxes This assignment is supposed to be hard so this’ll be short

You actually did good on this! Your lines are still a bit wobbly, but you still were able to draw the boxes pretty well at different angles. I do have a few things to point out, but they’re small mistakes so it’s not too much of a problem.

The second set of boxes on top going horizontally don’t rotate as well as all the other boxes you drew. The boxes on the bottom rotate fairly well and so does the set at the very top, but the second set above the middle set stays in a front facing perspective. I’ll make sure to add a picture of what I’m talking about. https://imgur.com/a/nsTflb7

I don’t feel that you need to redo this assignment despite the stuff I pointed out, but I just want to make sure you’re aware of what you made mistakes on.

Organic Perspective This one is also pretty hard, but this may be a bit longer(?)

You did really well on these too, in fact, most of my critiques for this assignment will be nitpicks.

I think you could have made the boxes that get closer a bit bigger and use darker lines.

I think a few of your boxes don’t change their angle enough, as in they lack angle variety and some boxes look like they stay in the same perspective for 3 or so boxes.

The last thing is that your phone rotated the pictures of the assignment again.

*These last two assignments are extremely difficult, but you did very well on this and the rotated boxes assignment. The mistakes you made on this are common mistakes that people make so nothing to worry about at this point. Also PLEASE make sure your phone doesn’t rotate your assignment pictures. I do not enjoy rotating my laptop.

Final Thoughts

Your main issue is that your lines are wobbly. You can just practice putting smooth and straight lines when you do warm ups.

You don’t need to fix messed up lines. Most of the time trying to fix those messed up lines just makes the mistakes worse.

Practice moving your arm as a warmup. Do ghosted lines, ellipses, and wavy lines before drawing or doing an assignment. You’ll get used to the movements much faster if you do this.

I’d like you to redo the plotted perspective assignment with a ruler or some kind of hard straight edge. Remember to make the lines that go back to the points on the horizon line hit those points so they don’t go over the horizon line and make everything look all messy.

These are much clearer, especially the rotated boxes. The only complaints I have are the table of ellipses and the organic perspective, but not because they're not done well but because it seems that your pen was struggling with those two. Those two are still kinda messy, but since they are done much better I don't think you need to redo those again.

I did see that you got a critique before mine so it's fine that you moved on to the 250 box challenge. I'll mark you as complete and I wish you luck on your 250 boxes!

What’s up, MADISONNUMBERS. I’m Swampat and I’ll be doing your lesson 1 critique.

Lines

Superimposed Lines

You did great on these honestly, the main complaint I have is that your horizontal lines unintentionally arch a bit.

I think you might need to practice moving your whole arm in your free time and focus on trying to keep lines as straight as possible.

Ghosted Lines

Your lines are pretty smooth and mostly straight. The one issue you have is that your lines missing their targeted dot, but thats

You really don’t need too much extra advice besides to make sure when you move your arm, that you’re as confident as possible before you let it rip. Also make sure you rotate your page if you’re having any trouble moving your arm.

Ghosted Planes

Your planes are done very well. There are planes that are close to the edge of the page that warp a little, but drawing near the edge is hard so that’s fine.

I suppose I’ll also mention that the lines that form your planes and the + and x lines inside the planes miss their target dots sometimes.

Nothing to really add for advice aside from practicing arm movement in your free time.

Ellipses

Table of Ellipses

You didn’t do bad with your ellipses for the most part, but some of your ellipses look a little rushed. Make sure you do a circling ghost motion as much as you need to make sure you can make confident looking ellipses.

Once again, not much to say about these, aside from some of your ellipses being a little rushed looking. Nice job.

Ellipses in Planes

These are done very well, the only complaint I have is that some of your ellipses are a little too thin or don’t properly touch each side of the planes they’re inside of.

One last thing I'd like to note for the future, if you’re asked to keep an assignment for later use on another assignment in the future, please take a picture of the assignment before you do the assignment you saved it for. Basically, when you did the ghosted planes without the ellipses inside of them would have been nice to have.

Funnels

You did very well on these aside from a few looking a little rushed again and a few ellipses being slightly misaligned, neither of which are bad enough to be a big deal.

Some of your minor axes (line in the middle of the funnels) don’t cut all the way through some of your funnels. The smallest funnel looks like it doesn’t have a minor axis because it doesn’t cut all the way through.

This is a nitpick, but I would have liked to see your ellipses get bigger the further they get away from the minor axis (this wasn’t required to do if I remember correctly).

One last thing, the funnel on the bottom of the page and the two funnels located on the right don’t have an even amount of ellipses. I’m not sure if you did this because of a lack of space, but be aware of how much room you have so you don’t make things too large for you to fit everything.

You did great on this aside from the minor mistakes I pointed out. If you’d like to add those extra ellipses to those three funnels I mentioned then you can, but it’s not something I think is required.

Boxes

Plotted Perspective

You did good on these. No complaints about the quality of any of these boxes.

Rough Perspective

You did very well on these too, only complaint I have is the two boxes on the far left have red lines that go on infinitely, but that might be because of the angle you drew your lines at.

Rotated Boxes This assignment is supposed to be hard so this’ll be short

You did VERY GOOD on this! The only complaints I have is the top right is a little weirdly shaped and the front side of the boxes lines could be a little darker to make it easier to see.

One last thing I’ll point out is that some of the boxes look like they have a few too many redone lines, but it’s not too bad.

I’m super impressed by how well you did on these, especially those corners. The corners are super hard to do, but you did amazing on them in my opinion.

Organic Perspective This one is also pretty hard, so this will also be short

You did really well on these too, but some of the boxes are a little weirdly shaped. This is a common problem so it’s not a bad thing, especially since most of your boxes are pretty well done for being freehanded.

I think the boxes that get closer could have darker lines, but this is an optional thing and not required.

These last two assignments are extremely difficult, but you did very well on this and the rotated boxes assignment. The mistakes you made on this are common mistakes that people make so nothing to worry about at this point.

Final Thoughts

You did very well on most of your assignments. Most mistakes you make are common mistakes that can be fixed by practicing arm movements in your free time. You did great!

What’s up, AX71. I’m Swampat and I’ll be doing your lesson 1 critique.

Lines

Superimposed Lines

So, your small horizontal lines are generally fine. Most of them don’t fray too much at the beginning and fray more at the end. They’re also pretty smooth, aside from the lines you can visibly see sticking out.

Now, I’m not sure if this is something you also did with the short lines, but I’m seeing that you’re not seeming to use a ruler for the first line of each new set of your longer lines. You need to use a ruler first for each new set so you have a guide and don’t wobble as much. The first page specifically is very messy looking, like your last three sets of medium horizontal lines are VERY messy. Your second page seems to be a little better, but I’m not 100% sure if you used a ruler for the first guideline.

Your curved lines are done pretty decently honestly. They are wobbly and fray out in a noticeable way, but for the most part they’re pretty smooth. That one wavy line isn’t great, but curves are hard to do at this level anyways so it’s not a big deal.

I think you might need to practice moving your whole arm to build more confidence and move your arm a little faster. I would like you to redo the first page using a ruler this time to create a guideline when you attempt to draw each set of lines. Here’s a visual example of what I mean by using a ruler for your first line of each new set: https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lessonimages/7f550dbb.jpg. You can also just look back at the video YouTube of Superimposed Lines.

Ghosted Lines

Your lines are pretty smooth for the most part, some lines do miss their mark, but that’s not a big deal at this point. You do have some curved and wobbly lines, though it’s normal to have this happen when you start ghosting lines.

My main issue with this assignment is that I feel like you drew TOO many lines. I’m having a little bit of trouble seeing some of your lines because there are so many on the page. I don’t think you need to redo this, but remember to keep your assignments less cluttered so it’s easier to critique.

Aside from the page being cluttered you didn’t do terribly here, but I’ll give you some advice. When you’re ghosting try to move your arm as many times as you need to until you feel like you’re ready to let it rip and you can rotate your paper if ghosting is uncomfortable. The more comfortable you are, the easier it is to make straight smooth lines and you can even practice ghosting as a warmup.

Ghosted Planes

I’m not sure if you used dots for your squares at all, if you did it’s hard for me to tell. If you didn’t use dots before ghosting your lines, you need to put those down to use as a guide to make wobbling less likely to happen.

Speaking of those guide dots, you need to put dots down the 4 lines of the square plane for those lines that make a + and x. You look like you put a few dots down, but on the outside of the planes.

On your first page, a lot of your planes overlap each other and the lines that form a + and x go into other planes because they’re too long. Having those guide dots for ghosting would help this not to happen as much. Two of your planes on the first page are missing the lines that form a +.

Your second page is once again better than your first attempt, but still has overshooting + and x lines because you didn’t add those dots to help guide you while you ghost.

This last thing isn’t too big of a deal, but you tried to redo some of the lines you messed up on. This isn’t a huge deal (yet), but you should remember to just move on when you mess up on a line. Ignoring those mistakes can help build confidence and it also keeps the page cleaner.

I’d like you to redo the first page and use dots as a guide for ALL your lines. Remember not to try fixing messed up lines and make sure to stay aware of your line placement so you don’t have planes and lines overlapping onto another plane.

Ellipses

Table of Ellipses

The first thing I’m noticing with your ellipses is that they have no real… goal or pattern set (not sure if this is the correct wording). You seem to have just drawn random ellipses and random positions with no real goal in each frame. Here’s an example of what I mean by a pattern/goal for each frame: https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/7abc3920.jpg.

I feel like you’re making too many small ellipses, which is probably why a lot of your ellipses are a bit too tightly packed into each frame. You don’t need to place as many ellipses into each frame as possible, you just need to have your ellipses touch the lines of the frame you put them in. If you have enough room for some smaller ellipses, then that’s fine, but don’t make most of your frames just small ellipses.

The last thing I can point out is the heaviness of your marks, but it looks like your pen might be failing with this assignment.

I would like you to redo both pages, but this time try to make more organized frames and larger ellipses. When you decide what kind of ellipse you’re going to draw, then stick to that shape of ellipse for that frame and don’t just draw random ellipses, in random positions, with a bunch of small ellipses taking up most of the frames.

Ellipses in Planes

You seem to have redone the planes from your originals. The planes are less messy but you still put some planes too close together which is making certain spots messy looking. Not as bad as before though, so it’s fine I suppose.

As for your ellipses, they’re not done horribly for the most part. Some of your ellipses don’t touch the 4 sides of your planes, but that’s a common mistake for me and others as well. Because some of your planes are too close to each other you seem to have a hard time drawing your ellipses. There is one ellipse on that first page that’s slanted too, but that might be because of the way the plane is shaped.

Some of your ellipses aren’t drawn through, what I mean by this is that the line you draw is a little too spaced out. This is fine, but remember to practice ghosting ellipses as a warmup to make them smoother.

You need to practice doing ghosting ellipses, I’d say to just practice ghosting as a warmup before drawing or doing an assignment until it feels more comfortable. I would still like you to redo the Ghosted Planes assignment from earlier, if you’d like to redo this assignment with the improved planes that’s fine.

Funnels

A few of your funnels look like you tried to redo the curved lines? I’m not sure if you’re rushing those curves, but if you’re using a round object as a tool to create your funnels then you shouldn’t have to try to redraw those lines. You don’t need to rush these at all, if that’s what happened.

Some of your minor axes (line in the middle of the funnels) don’t cut all the way through some of your funnels. It’s a bit hard to see if your ellipses position themselves in the same direction of your minor axes because you didn’t draw them all the way through your funnels.

Try to widen the ellipses the further from the middle you get inside your funnels. You kept some of your ellipses thin no matter how far from the middle you got. Also some two of your funnels have the opposite problem, they stay wide no matter how far from the middle they are.

Your pen seems to really be dying on you or it’s just not great at drawing ellipses. This isn’t really your fault, but you should probably try getting a new pen so you don’t have to attempt to go over your funnels so often.

I don’t think it's required for you to redo this assignment, but if you decide to, remember to use a round object as a tool to create your curves and you shouldn’t have to redraw those curves for your funnels. You need to draw your minor axes through your funnels so you can see what position your ellipses should be. Lastly, remember to keep your ellipses that are closer to the minor axis thin, while getting wider the further you get. You don’t have to do that last thing for all your funnels by the way, just one or two is good.

Boxes

Plotted Perspective

You did good on these. I don't really have any big issues with these, aside from a few of your boxes having lines that overshoot somehow. You don’t really need to add dots for these, but if they help you then it’s fine to use them. You can also add hatching to front faces of your boxes to show what side is facing the viewer.

Rough Perspective

You did good on this too for the most part. The only complaints I have is that you don’t need to try and redraw your messed up lines (your first page on the last frame has this problem the most) and your lines that lead back to the horizon line don’t have to go through the horizon line, they just have to stop on the horizon line.

Rotated Boxes This assignment is supposed to be hard so this’ll be short

I’m gonna be completely honest, because your lines are so dark, with lots of (what looks like?) hatching, and redrawn lines I can’t really see what you messed up on at all.

I really don’t want to have to say this, but I’d like for you to redo this assignment. Don’t make your lines too dark unless it’s the front facing side of a box, your hatching is messy and needs to stay inside of the box you’re drawing them on, and try your best not to redraw messed up lines because messed up lines are better than very messy lines.

Organic Perspective This one is also pretty hard, but this may be a bit longer(?)

It’s hard to tell what’s going on in this one too, but it’s a little better so I’ll just tell you what issues I have with the ones I can see. I’ll reiterate that you don’t need to redo messed up lines, it makes things very hard to see.

The boxes that are getting close to the viewer are too light in line weight and because you tried to redo your lines on a lot of boxes I can’t see the closest boxes that much in some frames, like the second frame and third frame of the first page. Your closer boxes should have darker lines to show that they’re in front of the smaller boxes in space and so it’s easier to see those boxes.

I think you’re overlapping your boxes TOO MUCH. On both pages of your boxes, they’re so overlapped that I can’t see anything in certain spots. Combined with you trying to fix messed up lines and the inconsistent line weight basically makes things almost impossible to see.

*You’re going to have to redo this assignment as well. You need to make sure you don’t try to redraw messed up lines like you’ve done here. Make boxes that are getting closer to the viewer have darker lines to help show where they are in space. You can have boxes overlapping each other, but don’t put too many boxes on top of each other. Basically, most of your mistakes are related to visibility and messiness of your lines. I want to give you more tips, but it’s really difficult for me to even see what I’m looking at. I hope I’m not being too harsh by the way, I’m trying to be as clear as possible.

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Final Thoughts

You really struggle with feeling that you have to fix your messed up lines. You don’t need to fix your lines when you mess up. Accept your mistakes and move on, that’s how you build more confidence as you get better at doing these assignments and improving in art in general.

Don’t overlap or clutter your assignment pages. It’s going to make mistakes more likely to happen because you can’t see that well and people trying to give you critiques are going to struggle to help you if your assignments are just messy.

Practice moving your arm as a warmup. Do ghosted lines, ellipses, and wavy lines before drawing or doing an assignment. You’ll get used to the movements much faster if you do this.

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What’s up, PAMDA. I’m Swampat and I’ll be doing your lesson 1 critique.

Lines

Superimposed Lines

So, I’m noticing that a majority of your lines are very wobbly and fray out at the beginning and end of your lines. Your vertical lines are better than all the other lines, but they still fray on both ends. The S shaped lines aren’t really too big of a deal since those are harder to align with each other, but you really should work on that fraying issue.

You need to start each new set of lines with a straight line to use as a guide. It looks like you forgot to do that and just free handed all the horizontal, diagonal, and vertical lines. The first line for each set should use a ruler (or the straight line tool) so you have a guide, then you free hand the rest.

I think you might need to practice moving your whole arm to build more confidence and move your arm a little faster. Your lines will also fray naturally, but the beginning of your lines shouldn’t fray out similarly to the ends of your lines.

I would like you to redo the diagonal, horizontal, and vertical lines, but this time use the straight line tool as your first line for each set, that way freehanding the rest of your lines in each set will be easier.

Ghosted Lines

You did a pretty good job getting your lines to hit/almost hit their points, but there’s one big problem I’m noticing. Your vertical and horizontal lines are wobbly, arc and tend to slightly overshoot pretty often. The few diagonal lines you did are actually fairly smooth and straight.

Your dots don't need to be that big and spiraled(?), just apply some pressure with your drawing tool and that should be enough to create a small dot.

Make sure when you start ghosting, to move your arm as many times as you need to until you truly feel confident to put those lines down. The wobbly and arched feel like they were rushed and caused you to wobble. I think you did a good job at only doing one line and moving on to the next even after making mistakes, I struggled with trying to redo my messed up lines.

Ghosted Planes

These are done pretty well honestly. Your lines are less wobbly and more arched, but that shows some improvement.

Your X lines do overshoot outside of the planes often (not a big deal especially since this is the first lesson), though your vertical and horizontal lines do a good job hitting their points despite the arching.

One other thing you need to add are the dots for the lines that make a +.

You did pretty good on these, just need to do some practicing on your own to improve on getting less of those arches.

Ellipses

Table of Ellipses

The first thing I’m noticing with your ellipses is that they all seem to be rushed. When I say they look rushed, I’m not sure if you remember to try your best not to make a spiral. The lines are supposed to overlap to make your ellipses look as smooth as possible, instead it looks like you’re either ghosting too fast or not ghosting enough and it makes your ellipses look messy.

The second issue is not using the table as a boundary and your ellipses are supposed to touch each other, not cross into one another. This issue is a little hard for me to give advice on, but try to remember to be aware of the table and the ellipses when you’re ghosting. If you can keep that in mind, you might be able to make them more organized looking.

Your ellipses some time get wider or thinner on one end instead of keeping the same consistent size. The rounder ellipses should stay round and smooth and your thin ellipses should stay thin, not get rounder on one end.

The last thing I can point out is the heaviness of your marks, but that might be a pressure issue since you did these digitally.

Ellipses in Planes

You basically have the same problem of not being aware of the surrounding boundary of the planes.

One thing I can say you’ve done better at is keeping your ellipses a lot cleaner this time. Even though they don’t touch all 4 sides of the planes, your ellipses don’t spiral as much as the ones in your tables.

You need to practice doing ghosting ellipses, I’d say to do your tables of ellipses again, but your planes are at least passable. Ellipses are pretty hard to get used to, so don’t feel too bad about not doing amazing on these.

Funnels

You did a good job of getting the ellipses to touch the edges of each other rather than them crossing into one another. You also did a decent job of keeping them inside your funnels too.

You’ve done better at avoiding spiraling with these, you still have some that spiral instead of being smooth, but you’re obviously improving. Good job on these!

Try to widen the ellipses the further from the middle you get inside your funnels. You kept all the ellipses thin regardless of how far from the middle you got.

Your minor axis (the line in the middle of your funnels) should cut through the whole funnel to make them easier to see. Also, some of your ellipses don't line up with the minor axis, they turn in a different direction instead of alligning with the minor axis.

One last thing, make sure you use some kind of tool to make sure your curves for the funnels stay smooth. Some of your funnel curves look like they were freehanded instead of using a tool, at least thats what I get from some of the wobbly curves.

You did a lot better on the smoothness of your ellipses, but the variety in ellipse wideness and narrowness is lacking. You still do make spirals, but they don’t seem rushed like your other ellipses, maybe a lack of confidence after you ghosted. Make sure to practice ghosting ellipses to improve your confidence.

Boxes

Plotted Perspective

Biggest issue here is the wobbly lines. It looks like you used the straight line tool for the lines that go back to the horizon line, but for some reason not for the actual boxes? You're supposed to use a ruler (or in your case, the straight line tool) for all the boxes. You should also use a blank paper/canvas instead of that lined paper(?).

You should also have three frames to put your boxes in like how they're shown in the assignment https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/19/example.

I would like you redo these on a blank canvas and use your straight line too for the whole assignment. Nothing in this specific assignment needs to be freehanded.

Rough Perspective

You did better on these, but in your first page you should use your straight line tool for the rectangular frames you put your boxes in. The horizon line should also use a straight line tool and not be freehanded. You also forgot to put those lines for your boxes that lead back to the horizon line on your first two frames.

I think you should label your assignments to make it a little easier for me to tell which assignment is which. I thought your plotted perspective was your rough perspective until I saw the dots on the rough perspective assignment. Also, all the different colors in your plotted perspective are a little hard to see.

Your width and height lines should remain perpendicular to the horizon line. Basically what I'm trying to say is that a lot of your lines are pretty slanted.

Since you did these digitally, could you use the straight line tool to fix the first two rectangular frames to have straight lines along with their horizon lines (they should look like the frames here https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/19/example). You need put those red lines that lead back to the horizon line for those first two frames on the first page as well.

Rotated Boxes This assignment is supposed to be hard so this’ll be short

Your box's perspective warps a lot when you get to the corners, this is normal since this is super hard to do.

You struggle with actually changing the angle of your boxes. A lot of your boxes don’t look like they’re turning in perspective or turned at a really weird angle. The boxes in the middle going vertically are decent, but everything else either doesn’t turn in a way to show perspective correctly or they’re just drawn very janky. This is a pretty common issue for me and many others so this isn't something to get too caught up on.

I would like for you to redo the boxes I've circled in red here https://imgur.com/a/Rbl6F1J and the blue ones are just boxes that don't need to be there. They don't have to be perfect, but try your best to make them look a little better.

Organic Perspective This one is also pretty hard, but this may be a bit longer(?)

It’s a little hard to tell what boxes are supposed to be closer in space. The small boxes are fine, but as you try to make the boxes look closer they don’t really get all that much bigger in size in comparison to the box that’s supposed to be behind the larger box.

You’re going over your lines a lot and it’s making judging where some of the boxes are supposed to be in space. Going over your lines multiple times also makes your lines look a bit messy as well.

The shape of your boxes are a bit wonky at times. This is a common mistake, but try to be aware of the placement of your points and lines when drawing your boxes.

Your heavy line weight should be saved for the boxes that are supposed to be getting closer in space to the viewer. You should also make boxes that are in front of another box have darker lines, this way you can tell that one box is in front of the box behind it.

I’m sorry I don’t have many tips on how to fix your mistakes on these last two assignments, I struggled with these too and the best way I was able to get them don’t decently was by rewatching the instruction videos. I don’t think it’s completely necessary to redo this one, but if you did that would be nice.

Final Thoughts

You need to practice ghosting to improve your confidence. This will lessen the chance of wobbling and feeling the need to fix mistakes.

I can't edit the "Next Steps" section so I'll put the assignments I want you to redo here.

Superimposed Lines: I would like you to redo the diagonal, horizontal, and vertical lines, but this time use the straight line tool as your first line for each set, that way freehanding the rest of your lines in each set will be easier.

Plotted Perspective: I would like you redo these on a blank canvas and use your straight line too for the whole assignment. Nothing in this specific assignment needs to be freehanded. You should also have three frames to put your boxes in like how they're shown in the assignment https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/19/example.

Rough Perspective: Since you did these digitally, could you use the straight line tool to fix the first two rectangular frames to have straight lines along with their horizon lines (they should look like the frames here https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/19/example). You need put those red lines that lead back to the horizon line for those first two frames on the first page as well.

Rotated Boxes: I would like for you to redo the boxes I've circled in red here https://imgur.com/a/Rbl6F1J and the blue ones are just boxes that don't need to be there. They don't have to be perfect, but try your best to make them look a little better.

Optional

Organic Perspective: I'd like you to fix the box sizes for the ones that are supposed to be getting closer to the viewer. They don't get big enough to feel like they're getting closer.

Try not to rush these, it’s really frustrating to do these assignments, but if you just try your best you’ll notice improvements pretty quickly.

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What’s up, ARATORI. I’m Swampat and I’ll be doing your lesson 1 critique. This is my first time doing one so hopefully I make this easy to understand.

Lines

Superimposed Lines

• For the really short lines you did are actually pretty good. There’s some fraying at the end of them, but that’s pretty normal.

• The longer your lines get the more you seem to arc your lines and the less they actually stay straight. The best advice I can give on that is to keep practicing moving your whole arm. I’d say the same for your curvy and purposefully arched lines.

Ghosted Lines

• You did a pretty good job getting your lines to hit/almost hit their points. There is a slight curve to a few lines near their end of their trajectory, but they’re pretty minor.

**You did pretty good here, I’d say that you should probably vary your line sizes to make it easier not to curve them. Just keep using the ghosting method as you continue the course, you’ll be able to hit those points and have less curves in no time.

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Ghosted Planes

• These are REALLY well done! You did an amazing job getting those inside lines to almost hit or completely hit the corners of those planes.

• Your lines do slightly end up on the outside of your planes, but it’s fine for the most part. You’ll probably still end up doing that regardless of how much you practice, but if you want to practice on your own that is fine.

• Your lines also wobble a bit, but from what I’m looking at, you mostly do it when you have very little room to fit the plane you’re drawing.

  **You did really well on these, I’m extremely impressed with these. I don’t really have anything else to add outside of the slight wobble on the lines for the planes. Great job!

**

Ellipses

Table of Ellipses

• These are done pretty well for the most part, but it looks like you went over these maybe 4 or 5 times. This is a guess considering how dark these ellipses are.

• Because you go over these more than 2 to 3 times there are more lines on the inside of your ellipses. Going over your ellipses only about 2 to 3 times might lessen this.

• A lot of your ellipses overlap each other instead of just touching the edge of one another. Try to focus a little harder while you ghost your ellipses in the future, but don’t worry if they overlap too much since this can happen to even someone that practices this a lot.

Ellipses in Planes

• You did better here with the amount of times you go over your ellipses. There are a few that look like they had 4 tries, but that’s fine.

• These ellipses look like they were rushed a little more than the table of ellipses. I do see you got a decent amount pretty smooth, but a lot of these have some wobbling and a lot of space when you went over them multiple times. Make sure to keep practicing the ghosting method in your free time.

• Your ellipses miss the edges of the boxes a lot, this looks like you could have been having trouble with the positioning of your paper. When you’re ghosting make sure you rotate your paper to the most comfortable position for your arm to move.

You didn’t do a bad job on these, these just look like they needed to be at a better position for you to ghost and draw them better. The position of your paper really can improve your focus and ability to draw clean ellipses in my experience.

Funnels

• You did great getting the ellipses to touch the edges of each other consistently.

• Most of these have been gone over multiple times which make them less smooth looking. I’ll just say to remember to practice (I know I’ve said this a lot) ghosting ellipses in your free time or warmups.

• Try to widen the ellipses the further from the middle you get in your funnels and make the ones closer to the middle a more narrow.

You did a decent job on these, but the variety in ellipse wideness and narrowness is a little lacking. The ellipses are also a bit wobbly, but I’m sure you know what advice I’d give you for that, so I’ll move on.

Boxes

Plotted Perspective

• These are done well, but the inside lines and the lines that touch the horizon don’t need to be super dark, it makes things a little hard to see. The first part of your table is probably the sweet spot for these.

Rough Perspective

• A lot of your lines are far off from their target, but that’s to be expected with this. You’ll get better at seeing the target as you improve at drawing in perspective.

• Your lines wobble a few times on some of these boxes. Make sure you’re ghosting as much as you need to so you can be a bit more confident when drawing your lines.

• On the first page, on the second and third panel it looks like you tried to redraw a few of your lines. You did this a lot of the third panel of your second page too. You don’t need to do that, if you mess up on the trajectory of a line just move on. You have way more opportunities with other boxes and as long as you recognize you messed up you can remember to try not to make that same mistake again.

Rotated Boxes This assignment is supposed to be hard so this’ll be short

• You did a pretty good job on this for the most part, you still have those wobbly lines on a lot of your boxes.

• Some of your boxes, specifically nearing the bottom, become unaligned with the boxes above them.

• The boxes on the end of both the left and right get wider, so some of them don’t look like they’re converging very much.

**These are similar problems I and many others have had so don’t beat yourself up over it. You actually did a decent job on this, very impressed.

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Organic Perspective This one is also pretty hard, but this may be a bit longer(?)

• I’m gonna start with the biggest problem I see, the line thickness seems all over the place. I understand making the lines thicker for the boxes overlapping the ones behind them, but a few of the smaller boxes also have these, so I’m guessing you were trying to fix the lines? Like I said on the rough perspectives, you don’t need to go over messed up lines, just move on.

• A few box sizes don’t make sense in a perspective sense, like the second panel of the first page, smaller boxes in the first panel of page two, most of the second panel of page two, and the bigger boxes on the last panel of page two. Make sure to think about the distance in space you make these boxes the further and closer you get in space.

• The last and most simple thing, the boxes are distorted in shape, but a pretty normal mistake from what I’ve seen myself. Just make sure you ghost carefully when doing these, the smaller boxes are a little hard to ghost, but you’ll get better with those in time.

This was the roughest one I’ve seen from you, but most of these mistakes will be improved with practice and familiarizing yourself with perspective and ghosting. You should try practicing the ghosting method while warming up to give yourself more confidence, that way you won’t feel the need to try to correct lines you messed up on.

Thank you for the feedback! Seeing someone describe what I struggle with is extremely helpful. I'll remember to keep this stuff in mind for the future. Once again thank you for taking the time to review my work, I really appreciate it.