Stengon

Hey, thanks one again for critiquing my lesson, and one extra ty for going into such detail as allways, I have done the revision you asked me, here it is, many times the legs dont seem to have much more evident mass, so i indeed overlooked most of the times, and even some unconfy demos dont that much detail in the legs, so ty for pointing it out, in this one the back legs, where there is most of the extra mass get a little too clumped up, but i did my best to try and clarify it, i also added the reference i used for this one, and some sausages with more decent contour lines that i did a while ago as warmups while waiting for critique (i felt like i should ad them, since is the second time that you point this out, and i dont want to look like i'm not listening haha)

Once again, thank you so much for everything

https://imgur.com/gallery/f5S4wwu

Line solidity looks fine, a times shaky but mostly good, ellipses are kind of uneven, remember to ghost them as well, just like you would ghost your straight lines. Your rough perspective boxes look odd, the lines are quite shaky, so you should take more time, but also the perspective is too perfect, i dont know if you did the exercise as intended, but the point of it should be to try and eyeball it, and after the boxes are done see if you were accurate or not, since this is different from the plotted perspective boxes, to me its seem clear that you did something wrong, either you first make the perspective lines and then the boxes, or something. Your rotated boxes are fine, but you lack some, the boxes should be 5x5, take more time reading the instructions.

Hey, thanks for the critique, here are the revisions https://imgur.com/gallery/uUX6TYD i tried to apply what you told me, also i use a fine liner .5 for every single line in all of my drawings, both in these and in the original lesson

Glad you found my critique usefull, don't worry, you are making a great job, is normal to get frustrated the lessons are REALLY hard sometimes, so don't worry if they won't come as great as you thought and move on to keep having fun, good luck with the 250 box challenge, keep on it :)

Its nice that your excited about new lessons thats always nice and the good attitude.

Now into the critique.

Your lines are mostly good, but i notice that some of them in your ghosted planes and ellipses in planes are way too tick, and seem that you have traced them several times, remember that you should only do one clean pass.

Your ellipses are mostly fine, but again you sometimes make too many passes, there are some of your ellipses that have 5+, you should only make 2 ellipses, other than that, good job.

Into the boxes you are good, but i would suggest you to be more carefull with your pressure, also, in the rotated boxes i think that shadowing the faces of the boxes would help with making them more clear, also in the rotated boxes, you missed one in each corner, there should be 2 boxes en each side of the center ones.

As a general critique, please avoid putting notes, arrows, circles and etc in your drawing, it makes them harder to look and spot problems in this lesson this was not a real problem, but into the next ones this may be really problematic. Also try to avoid any non black color pen, if you can get a fine liner, but if you are going to use a ballpoint pen use a black one.

Hey, congratulations for completing this lesson, lets start with the feedback.

For your lines i think you did a good job, you imposed lines and ghosted lines, even if not perfectly accurate have a nice flow and smoothness, precision will come with practice, your ghosted planes also look nice with line quality, but i would recommend you to vary them more in size and angles to have a more challenging time.

Onto ellipses the same applies, the will eventually get better with practice and close the gap between the two, so here we are fine too.

But about your boxes i have some problems, your plotted perspective is good, except the fact that you used uniform strength all across the boxes, making it hard to distinguish between the front and back, i can see that latter you put more line weight into the front lines, but this could be solved by using less initial force, because everything looks a little bit too crowded and dark. With your rough perspective boxes this issue is solved, but i can see that your line quality is lower compared to the one you was able to make at the start of the lesson, remember to take your time with each line, ghost them until you feel it. Rotated boxes are really hard, so i understand most of your trouble with them, but something easy that would help you is to put shading in the faces of the boxes, this is not an simple matter of taste, it helps to make everything more clear and clean. And your rotated boxes are fine as they are, i would only recommend you to put more line weight in closer boxes and faces of those boxes.

In general good, but i think you should take more time, if you feel burned out apply the 50/50 rule and then tackle it with more energy.

Hey, first of all, congratulations for ending lesson 1, now into the feedback

Lines

Its clear that you have been using the ghosting method and taking some time with them, this is good, the only thing i would suggest is to make a downwards force to contrarest the slight curvature that some of your lines has. But the thing that is more important, the flow of the line are quite good, so you are in the right path

Ellipses

Here we have a little bit of trouble, some of your ellipses look solid and smooth, while others have trembly lines, remember that you should apply the ghosting method here as well, making 2 ellipses without touching the page, stopping, repeating and so on until you feel confident, don't just draw circles in the air and then put the pen down. In general, your funnel ellipses look good, try to make your ellipses in a plane the same way.

Boxes

Plotted perspective are good, but in the rough perspective your line quality goes down, remember to firs put the points, then rotate the page until you find a confortable angle, then ghost your lines, and after all of that make the line, this problem is also present in both rotated boxes, and organic perspective. The boxes by themselves are mostly good, but the lines that makes them are not as good as the ones in your ghosted planes, so you have already showed that you can make good lines, apply them in everything you draw

Conclusion

The fundamentals are fine, i think what you should do is take more time working in your lines, don't try to change the trajectory of the line while you draw it, instead ghost it until you feel secure about it. For this, i would recommend you to move on the 250 box challenge

Hey, thanks you a lot for your time, i really appreciate it, i'll keep all the criticism in mind, i kinda forgot about line weight, this lesson took quite some time to get rewieved so i just assumed that for challenges people were not actually giving critique haha.

I had made a couple of critiques myself, but i was not sure if i were qualified at all seeing how some of the people i was critiquing made a better job at the lesson than me (and also because English ain't my main language), but now that i see how important is i'll make the extra effort and go trough some lesson 1 submissions to help the community, again thanks you a lot for taking the time to cheek some 3+ months old work, it means a lot

Your line quality is great, in most exercises your lines are smooth, hit both points and end nearly perfect, all that i can criticize is that you tend to arch them slightly upwards, this can be addressed consciously making a downwards arch to straight them.

To me, your ellipses looks great, they are pretty symmetrical and smooth, the second ellipse is almost the same as the first, some look a little odd but that will be addressed with practice and more confidence, good job.

Now, on the boxes, I can see that in the rough perspective your lines become much more shaky, almost like if you stopped using the ghosting method, remember to ghost your lines until you feel confident, and then and only then make them, also be sure to make them with your shoulder.

The rotated boxes are a bit odd, the ones in the Y and X axis looks pretty good, but the ones in the corners should look much more compacted and almost triangular like, remember to pay close attention to both the video and explanation for each exercise.

The organic boxes otherwise look pretty good, your line quality got better again but not as good as in the first exercises, also some of your boxes are not rotated at all, you can see this in the last page, the first 5 boxes are, in my opinion a little too similar between them, try to rotate your page to see more points of view.

In general it all looks pretty good to me, just remember to take your time with each line you make, always use the ghosting method and draw with your shoulder.

Thx, i'll keep in mind about line quality, specially with a fineliner im finding a little hard to make fast smooth lines, so i tend to work slower, i'll try my best to fix it, last lesson they already recommend me 250 box challenge, so i already did it, should i move to lesson 3, retry lesson 2 or some challenge?