ShortJamesBronze

No problem

Hey, I’ll be grading your homework today.

Organic Arrows:

First off, you did a good job adding line weight at the cross over areas. And the way your lines crossover one another look great too. Really makes the arrows look like 3D ribbons. But I will say your lines are rough. As if you’ve gone over them again in places to make them go in the right direction. I know the temptation to fix them, but Uncomfortable said we shouldn’t do it because it just makes them look messy. Also, your perspective is a bit off. Remember, the arrows are supposed to scrunch and overlap with distance and expand with proximity.

I’d recommend doing these again.

Organic Forms:

Contour Ellipses: Your sausage forms look good. For the most part, they’re the right shape and your lines look smooth and confident too. Your ellipses are drawn through like we’re supposed to though, though some are drawn through too much. Once or twice will do. Also, they’re not fitting snugly into the sausage shapes the way they’re supposed to be. A few are too small, but many are too big for the sausage forms. Really ghost those first to make sure they’re the right size. Barring a few mistakes, your ellipses are turning well through space though. I recommend trying these again too.

Contour Curves: Your contour curves look awesome though. They arc and hook around the sausage form like they’re supposed to. Nice.

Texture Analysis:

These look good. I wish I’d done that well with the paper. My only criticism is that the transition to fully black should’ve been a bit more gradual.

Dissections: These look really good too. You kept the lighting down the middle in line and it looks good. Looks very 3D. You made the textures wrap around the sausage form as they should in 3D and you broke away from the silhouette to help sell it as well too. The ice cream, bumblebee hair, and octopus suckers were my favorites.

Form Intersections: Your forms aren’t stretched, so they all look like they occupy the same space, which is great. They’re not small floating groups either and you used like weight to properly show the intersections between forms, which are both good. Overall, not bad at all.

Organic Intersections: Your sausage forms look nice. Nice shape. Properly droopy with the contour lines and curves. My criticisms are the shadows. The middle on the second page doesn’t quite follow the forms as it should. They’re a bit more narrow than the forms casting them too. Besides that though, these look great.

And we’re done here just about. I recommend trying another page of Organic Arrows and Organic Forms with ellipses with the changes I mentioned in mind. Good luck

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Never mind, you're right about that. I can see it now. I'm sorry I held you up with my misunderstanding. You pass. probably should've passed a while ago actually. Again, I'm sorry about that

https://imgur.com/a/mPZgcr2

It should look like that

Ohhhh, I understand now! I should have looked at how the lines were converging. I'm sorry I wasn't getting it at first. You should shade the side that faces the viewer; that's how to easily tell how we're supposed to see it. That said, even looking from a top view, the lines are still extended in the wrong direction

https://imgur.com/a/UNuRhYy

3 and 8 are still coming towards the viewer. You said before that you weren’t sure how to make the shading look like it’s on the side of the box instead of the back, and I think that’s making you still extend the lines in the wrong direction.

Up there, I colored in the part you should be shading to make it look like it’s the side of the box instead of the back. I think you’ve been shading between the wrong lines

None of these look like the back corners of the boxes. They all look like front corners closest to the viewer. I think this might be because your lines are still off from one another. Slow down and really look at the direction a line is going in before trying to match it with another. And really ghost that line before drawing it

I think adding line weight would help with this. Lightly applying it to the outline of the box will show what’s in front and what isn’t

You have more good boxes than bad for sure. I can’t really understand the orientation of boxes 3, 6, 7, and 10 though. It looks like for all but 7, you shaded the bottom. And for 7, you shaded the back of the box. Was that your intention?