ShortJamesBronze

Hi Carror, Congratulations on finishing lesson 2. I'll be giving you feedback, pointing out mistakes you've made as well as things you did good.

Organic arrows

• Your arrows look very expressive. There is good perspective going on. The arrows clearly get smaller toward the back and the folds get closer to each other. I also like how the arrows overlap/take in the same space.

• You make good use of increased lineweight but it looks like you do chicken scratching to achieve this. See this example. When adding lineweight use the ghosting technique and place a single confident line.

• The shadows make a nice gradient from dark to light but the lines look rushed. Here again use the ghosting method and take your time.

Organic intersections

• The sausage shapes have a constant form and are drawn confidently. The ellipses are also drawn properly going through each twice.

• There is some variation in the degree of your ellipses but you can definitely exaggerate this some more. This is especially true for the contours. When drawing the contours imagine the ellipse it's supposed to be. Use the ghosting method as if you are drawing an ellipse as well but only put you pen on the paper for the front section of the ellipse.

Texture analysis

• There is a nice transition from light to dark. You also blend the black bar on the left an white bar on the right into the texture properly.

• There are still some lines going on at the darker side of the textures whereas they should be shapes like this.

Dissections

• The textures wrap around the shapes nicely. The textures also get darker towards the edges.

• You occasionally draw contours like on the turtle shell, lizard scale and lemon.

Form intersections

• The linework looks confident. The spheres look fairly round which is pretty hard to get right the first time.

• Perspective/foreshortening is also pretty consistent across the pages. Making it look like the shapes exist in the same space.

• Two of the pyramids have incorrect perspective with the back being larger than the front.

Organic intersections

• Both pages look like solid piles of shapes stacked on top of each other. The only inconsistency is the two shapes at the bottom on the first page that lean against the big one at an angle. If this is an actual mass they would probably fall down. They should be drawn more perpendicular to the big shape so they can actually lean on it or flat on the ground.

• The shadows wrap around the round shapes nicely.

Overall very good work. You are ready for lesson 3. As advice moving forward I'd say take your time for things like lineweight/hatching, don't let them be an afterthought and you'll be fine.

Congratulations on completing the lesson!

Your superimposed lines looks fine, there are no wobbles and just few are arching.

You started well in ghoted lines, you didn't fray on starting points. Lines are consistent as well as confident though should improve connecting the endpoint in time.

The planes tend to connect at the center that's good. Ellipses are wobbly but we can solve this by ghosting first before putting the nib down. In table of ellipses, they are neat in sizing and well adjusted in spacing.

In your funnels, you need to prioritize confident lines than precision. Keep in mind that the minor axis (line in the middle) should cut the ellipses in symmetrical halves.

Plotted perspective is fine

The lines are bit wobbly in your rough perspective though the estimates are good. Examine if your height lines are perpendicular to the horizon and width lines are parallel to the horizon.

Your boxes aren't rotating but this assingment is really a struggle and you got through it so well done.

Organic perspective, the work on gradual sizing of each boxes are good. Your boxes are shallow and have diverging lines, instead of receding in perspective.

Hello and congrats on completing lesson one. My name is Rob and I'm a teaching assistant for Drawabox who will be handling your lesson one critique. Starting with your superimposed lines these are off to a fine start. You are keeping a clearly defined starting point with all of your wavering at the opposite end. Your ghosted lines and planes turned out well. You are using the ghosting method to good effect to get confident linework with a pretty decent deal of accuracy that will get better and better with practice.

Your tables of ellipses are coming along pretty good. You are doing a good job drawing through your ellipses and focusing on consistent smooth ellipse shapes. This is carried over nicely into your ellipses in planes. It's great that you aren't overly concerned with accuracy and are instead focused on getting smooth ellipse shapes. Although accuracy is our end goal it can't really be forced and tends to come with mileage and consistent practice more than anything else. Some of your ellipses in funnels are having some issues with tilting off the minor axis. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/14/notaligned This is something you should always start considering when drawing your ellipses. Your ellipses are off to a great start but there's still room for improvement so keep practicing them during your warmups.

The plotted perspective looks great, nothing to mention here. Your rough perspective exercises turned out pretty good. It's great that you are keeping up with the confident linework on these. You are also doing a good job extending the lines back on your boxes to check your work. As you can see some of your perspective estimations were quite off but that will become more intuitive with practice. One thing that can help you a bit when doing a one point perspective exercise like this is to realize that all of your horizontal lines should be parallel to the horizon line and all of your verticals should be perpendicular(straight up and down in this case) to the horizon line. This will help you avoid some of the slanting lines you have in your constructions.

Your rotated box exercise turned out pretty well. I like that you drew this nice and big as that really helps when dealing with complex spatial problems. You also did a good job drawing through your boxes and keeping your gaps narrow and consistent. While the rotations here aren't perfect this was a good effort overall. The more you draw and develop your spatial thinking ability the easier these rotations are to handle. I do have some notes regarding added line weight I'd like to share. If you want to add line weight make sure you don't revert back to using your wrist and are drawing from your shoulder with confidence. Also added line weight should be subtle so try and only go over a line one additional time instead of multiple times. This is a great exercise to come back to after a few lessons to see how much your spatial thinking ability has improved. Your organic perspective exercises are looking pretty good. You seem to be getting comfortable using the ghosting method and drawing from your shoulder for confident linework which is great. Your box constructions are fairly solid for the most part and I can see you are developing a sense for how box lines converge to vps. There are still some wonky convergences here and there so the 250 box challenge will be a great next step for you.

Overall this was a really solid submission that showed a nice deal of growth. Your line confidence and ellipses are both coming along nicely. I think you are understanding most of the concepts these lessons are trying to convey quite well. I'm going to mark this as complete and good luck with the 250 box challenge. Keep up the good work!

Hello! Yaksir, I am Doctormein and i'll be critiquing your homework for this challenge.

(I've taken a little peek at your profile and saw that you haven't got your lesson 1 critique yet, It will probably be a good idea to get it critique first before moving on to my critique, Just to make sure that you're not missing any important information)

• Extension lines , Line quality , Hatching and Similar Orientation with boxes.

Your line quality overall is nicely done, Most of the outer part of the boxes are being drawn confidently and hesitation-free, However

your boxes inner lines (sometimes outer lines too) felt a bit wobbly and hesitant at time. there's quite a few boxes where your line felt a bit wobbly (188,199,205) and a portions of the lines are also Undershooting. (205,178,233,238) and some misses their marks a bit too. (250,245,241)

You might wanna try to focus your warm-up practice a little bit more toward Ghosted planes since you seem to be having trouble with ghosting a bit. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/ghostedplanes

For your Extension lines you've done pretty good so far,You've extended the line correctly from the intial y outward, There's only 1 boxes (248) that is wrongly extended, But i think its just one out of the pile and you're doing pretty well in this area.

Your Hatching is very well done with hesitant free execution and not overshooting and undershooting your lines, Same goes with your Box orientation Which is quite varied in both shapes,proportion and sizes, With that said i'll be moving on toward

• Convergence related points (Diverging lines,Parallel and inner corner)

The biggest takeaway here that i wanted to mention is about the Boxes inner lines, quite a handful of them are having clear divergence and early convergence (203,209,207,210,208,220) https://i.imgur.com/8PqQLE0.png (This is a diagram showing relation between each line in a set, Make sure to check it out it really helped me a lot while doing this challenge.) , Don't forget to compare your lines angles with others lines especially your Inner lines with the one that is infront of it, Since this will help you out with estimating your line angle

There's also quite a few lines that are Converging in pair instead of going to one vanishing point (212,214,207), Although this is very common and normal for student, It would still be beneficial for you to took note of it.

Finally parallel lines It might also be a good idea to try your best to iron them out, Because some of the boxes show quite a clear parallel line (215 Red lines , 224 red lines , 226 red lines , 240 red lines) Since a box in 3 point perspective will never have parallel lines, The only exception is when perspective is not applied to them (Orthographic view.)

I'll be moving on to conclusion

Hey hey, I will be looking over your homework today! Congrats on making it through the first lesson ~

All in all I think you did a good job. It seems like you understood the assignments at the core. Your lines still wobble a bit but you will learn to control them the more often you do it. For the Superimposed Lines, be careful not to let them fray too much. In addition, the assignment states to draw one line with a ruler first and then add your lines freehand. I feel like you skipped that part over all and went straight to drawing the lines freehand. Don't skip that part, it helps you to get your line from point A to point B.

In this assignment your lines tend to arch a lot as well, but I think this is also something you'll learn to improve over time.

Your ellipses look good overall. Sometimes they stray, just keep in mind to ghost as many times as you need before placing your line. For the table of ellipses I noticed your ellipses tend to overlap or not quiet reach each other. Don't forget that the ellipses are supposed to sit snugly next to each other!

Most of this is just something you have to continue practising so I wouldn't worry much. You'll get to it! Before heading to the 250 Box Challenge, I'd like to ask from you to do one page of the Superimposed Lines and one of the Table of Ellipses.

Good work overall and again congrats on making it through the first lesson!

hello there,

welcome to drawabox.

it seems you had to wait quite a while to get your work critiqued, i'll be viewing your work , lets see what we have here.

lines : woah! you did a fantastic job. The lines look confident. I see alot of fraying in second page of your superimposed lines , but its okay . With time i'm very sure that you will master it. You nailed the ghosted lines and planes . Though in ghosted lines, some lines have come short, since its very minimal i can overlook it . Very great with lines!

Ellipses : Nothing less from here too. You've drawn your ellipses confidently and that is the primary focus in drawabox . Dont worry about not being able to snuggly fit your ellipses in the table or plane , with time and consistent practise , i'm very sure that you can make it. You've followed the guidelines very well . Confident lines, drawing through circle 2 or 3 times, clear intent of trying to snuggly fit in your ellipses, drawing from shoulder and ghosting before making mark, minor axis symmetrically cutting your ellipses in halves, though not perfect but very close and thats a good point kudos !

Boxes : Very good with Plotted perspective. you've done well in rough perspective as well . dont sweat about not getting some perspective correct, you'll experiment with them more in 250 box challenge. Your rotated box is fine as well, Boxes are rotating and the lines are good which is the focus of the lesson. Very well with organic perspectives as well, i can feel the depth in it. Though i'll mention you about line weight, it helps you to exacuate depth and makes it easy to convey the information about which line lies closer to the viewer. It helps to solidify our forms as well . https://drawabox.com/lesson/250boxes/1/lineweight

Well, I can see that you've very much understood the gist of this lesson, so yeah feel free to elevate to 250 box challenge. Best of luck with it. This is all i can say , if you have any questions or doubts , feel free to ask them. Also dont forget to do a warmup exercise of a page consisting of these exercises periodically. It helps tremendously in a long run.

Sincerely,

-TryingtoDrawaBox

Hey TempoRogue

So far the boxes are really coming together, but I'm only seeing about the first 50, are you still working on this assignment? If so I'll give notes for this so far, and I'll try and follow up when you are complete complete.

• Your lines are drawn with confidence, and you can see just how well thought out the ghosting was.

• The extended lines part seems to be an issue, as they don't extend in all directions, some advice for future boxes would be look at the original "Y" you made and extend the lines from the central point of the "Y" so they fan out in all directions.

• good amount of box rotation, and perspective.

• some converging issues, but for the most part you are getting close to parallel. Keep an eye on that as you continue the lesson.

As noted above, I cannot mark the challenge as complete since all boxes aren't drawn yet, but if you keep up the progress, you will no doubt have made some vast improvements by the end of it all. Keep going and best of luck!

Cheers,

OSTR1CH