Shins

Dear Master Elodin,

First of all it's really awesome that such advanced member did review my homework. It's really helpful and detailed. Thank You very much. I'll make sure that those errors and mistakes doesn't appear in the future.

Also i'm trying my best to review lesson one homeworks of other ppl. i'm trying do one each day.

Thanks again for your help, and see you around.

Szymon

Hi ok this is much better then last one. I hope that Ur lines will be more confident and smoother. Don't worry, this comes through doing more and more exercises and drawings. also remember about composition, try to use whole area of page to do the task. Now U can move on, as you want, but before lesson 2 try to do 250 box challenge.

hi,

Congrats on finishing lesson 1. First of all U did well some of those homework, but i think u hurry to much in late ones. Lines, Ellipses on planes, and even funnels goes pretty good. Ur 1 and 2 point perspective exercises also are acceptable. Unfortunately rotated box and organic boxes are not so good. Pls don't hurry so much, examine ur lines. Always try to use ghosting method, us will see where your line will end before U put mark on page. On organic boxes u could try simple form of that first line u need to draw. u shouldn't crossed itself and consider more like a line flow through space. Although those errors are acceptable on start, u should avoid them in later exercises. Unfortunately the rotated box are far too off what's needed to be done. Pls consider redraw this exercise. Read instructions again. Don't be hasty. the boxes should lay near each other and the lines of nearest box should be close to parallel. Good job and don't try hard. u don't need to do everything in one shot.

Good work.

Try to focus on lines, and ghosting method, and always start from same point. You got that, but be more confident with Ur hand, because u try hard and that makes lines wobbly. Try to always prioritize confidence over accuracy. On your ellipse tables u should do more variety of different angles size and degree of ellipses keeping in mind that they need to stick to each other. Good job with one and two point perspective exercises. On the rotated boxes exercise You need to rotate every box, the far ones looks alot like the middle ones, try to rotate them more. And the last thing is in the organic boxes exercise. U were overcomplicating it for yourself, that basic line shouldn't pass through itself, it can but it's more complicated to put boxes on that line in good perspective order. I think those are Ur major problems to solve. Although you did well, and don't feel like U fail something, errors are acceptable, just be aware of them and try to improve.

cheers

This is only first page of your challenge, we sneed more to review, but if u are seeking advice, here ot is. Try to not outline Ur boxes, also try to make Ur boxes in less dramatic perspective. To help yourself with understanding which plane is were, U can put some extra weight to lines which are closest to U. If U will use Y- technique that Y will be those extra weighted lines. Good luck, and try to seek Ur problems, when u will aware of them, destroy them with confident clean lines.

Hi,

You did well. In my opinion U should focus more on ghosting skill, because Your lines look inconvenient, but don't worry U will have plenty time to perfect it. Good job with 2 point perspective exercise. Although I would recommend that you focus on cleaner lines, as i said before. Rest of exercise seems fine especially the "ball from boxes" one. It went well. U can move on . Lesson 2 awaits.

thanks for advice, For now i do about 20boxes/day. i also do some doodling ...

Thanks for fast response, I'll do my best.